snake vore [soft, sex, unwilling]

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snake vore [soft, sex, unwilling]

Postby wolfishsmile » Mon Feb 25, 2008 6:46 pm

This is my first attempt at writing vore, and I would really like input. I am concerned about the length of the story- if there is too much in it or whatever. I would love any comments.







Ana was... something else. She didn't particularly want to get up that morning and go to work, but her alarm was still going off. She groggily flipped it off. It was go to work or lose her job, and she couldn't afford the latter just now. She rolled out of bed and strode sleepily across the room where her yesterday's work clothes were sprawled on a chair by the computer.

She slept naked, so the first thing she put on where her socks and underwear. Her underwear was silky black, and covered her lovely booty by barely. She was of the hourglass shape, tapered waist with large booty and large breasts. She pulled on her 42H bra and used her hands to properly settle the beautiful orbs in properly. Then she put on the nice, tight button-up shirt- showing off her curves shamelessly. She then slid into her very form-fitting black slacks.

She liked to show it off. She liked to watch the guys stare. She liked to watch their futile attempts to get her to be interested in them. It was something she laughed about later when she was alone at home. She was abnormally solitary and unsocial, and appreciated being alone more than she ever did being with people. As far as she cared, she had no friends and wanted none. This had come about because of a bad boyfriend she had once had- when he'd had his way with her in the back of a car and made her lose her virginity. Since then, she had really closed herself off from everyone.

The biggest problem she thought she faced was that the little business she worked for was about to fold. It seemed more and more inevitable everyday. She wouldn't have cared, but it was a job she got paid for doing almost nothing and she didn't want to part with it now. Little did she know that today- the business was going to be saved from its downward spiral.

The store owner received a rather large sum to turn a blind eye to the disappearance of one his employees. Since she had not been pleasant to him or exceptionally pleasant to anyone- no matter how well she did her job- for that sum of money he was inclined to let her go and fish for a nicer employee.

When Ana walked in that day, she noted the business to be unusually empty and was very surprised to be grabbed from behind with a white cloth pressed into her face. She gagged on the fumes, and the last thing she consciously remembered was someone gripping her left breast enthusiastically.

She blinked blearily awake. She was confused at first, because the ceiling seemed to be made of glass and there was a room above it. She tried to sit up, to find that she tied up. Her arms were tied together and tied to the bed. She kicked her legs to find they were tied together. She wasn't afraid yet; just a little nervous. Nothing serious had happened other than the fact that somebody had evidently kidnapped her. There was movement in the corner of the room above her head, and she looked that way.

If she had cared about such things, she would have called this man handsome. He was six feet tall, putting him six inches taller than herself, and very well muscled through his clothes. He had neat black hair, icy green eyes, and clever smile. He turned that smile on her, all full of things he knew and she didn't. "What-" she broke off, her voice was raspy. She cleared her throat. "What is the meaning of this?" she demanded coldly.

He smirked. "I have been watching you for some time, Ana." He moved forward, catching the rope on her ankles. She expected him to take it off, but was indignant as her looped the end around the bedpost and secured it. Now she was really feeling bewildered. She glared at him, her blue eyes all full of fury. "You are not the nicest person," he said lightly. "You don't even have one friend in the world." He stood, looking down at her. Did his eyes look hungry?

"Why should that matter to you?" she demanded icily.

He chuckled, leaning forward, his fingers moving to the bottom of her shirt. She tensed. "Why, because there will be no one to miss you, Ana."

He started unbuttoning her shirt. "Stop it!" she shouted. She bucked her body trying to stop him, only to find that it made no difference. Button by button her shirt was undone, revealing her black bra underneath. He reached into his pocket and brought out a knife.

She wasn't a screaming sort of girl, but she did whimper at the sight of that. He smiled. "No worries, I won't draw even one drop of your blood." He leaned forward as she cringed, and slice it went through the front of her bra. It snapped off to the side as her beautiful breasts were exposed with a bit of jiggling for being freed. He stared at them for a moment, and smiled again. He used the knife to cut through her sleeves and take away the shirt entirely. She flushed. "What are you doing?!" she demanded almost as angrily as she was nervous.

"Why, undressing you, of course," he said. "But perhaps you need a distraction?" He reached to the side of the bed and pushed a light red button. Something grated, and she saw in the room above that a part of the wall had been removed. The largest snake she had ever seen slithered out. He was at least sixty feet long, and about two thirds as thick as this muscular invader she contended with.

She had always, secretly feared snakes. Her eyes widened and she found herself instantly afraid that the beast that slithered and investigated the room above her.

"Dessert?" a voice she did not know of the origin of asked.

"Of course," answered the man below. He was sliding the knife neatly along the seam of her pants, and she was afraid to move or he would stab her. Afraid to move because of the snake above. "After I am finished with her, of course."

"Naturally. I get my fun during."

"What is this?!" she squeeked, afraid to know that voice she was hearing in her mind was the snake above.

He chuckled, sliding her tattered pants off her. "All you humans think that there is no such thing as magic. No such thing as magical creatures." She started shivering. He blandly continued, as he neatly cut away her silken black underwear. "He came to me, promising me whatever I wanted as long as I kept him fed. And so, I am rich and I enjoy myself; all in exchange for keeping him nice and sleek."

The snakes tongue was flicking in and out above her. She was horrified to hear what she thought the man might say next. She felt two more silky ropes sliding over her ankles. He cut the rope. She lashed out, trying to kick him, but to no avail. He merely tightened the two separate ropes. Her legs were now splayed on the bed. "He very much enjoys the women I find for him," the man continued mercilessly. "It used to only take one to fill him up, but recently it has become three."

She was aghast. "They'll find you out!" she yelled, as if hoping that would somehow stop him.

He shook his head with a smile. "Not when none of them would be missed anyway." Now the whole horribleness of the situation sunk in. The man slipped out of his shirt and clothes. She shook her head violently, but knew there was really nothing she could do to stop this. Even if someone did try to find her, it'd probably be all over before they could.

He slipped onto the bed. She bucked and writhed as he laid over her. She tried to bite him, but he merely smiled and grabbed the bottom of her jaw with a strong hand. He flipped a switch. The walls in the room they were in shifted slightly to reveal that they were all mirrors. All around them, the snake was reflected as if he was right there. She would have screamed, but it didn't quite come out between her teeth that were forced shut. She soon mastered that, knowing the snake was still in the room above her and these were only mirrors.

He flipped something else, and she saw another room open in the room above. It revealed a small, slender woman. She was elegant with all her slender smallness. "An appetizer," the man said, watching this hungrily as he let go of her jaw and moved his head down. Ana was distracted by many things at once.

First, she saw, but did not hear the girl scream and attempt to climb up the wall. The manhood pressed against her legs that had only been firm was starting to harden at the predicament of this woman. Then felt the man's tongue touching her at the base of her ribs. She tried to squirm away, but couldn't over power him.

The snake slithered toward the woman upstairs. His tongue flicking in and out as he was licking his chops.

The tongue of the man slipped up to the base of her round orb, and slid up along it until it touched the nipple. She bucked involuntarily at this, as he savagely pounced upon it. He sucked hard, pulling on it like he was trying to pull the whole thing in his mouth. His tongue swirled and swiped, grinding her nipple into the roof of his mouth and back into the breast. He tugged and pulled, and despite herself, she knew it was a pleasurable sensation.

The woman fled the little closet and ran, the snake seemed to chuckle. The woman was as naked as Ana herself was. The snake lunged, coiling around the woman.

Ana tried to close her eyes, not wanting to see the woman constricted to death, but the man on her dropped her nipple and moved his tongue traced back down that breast across her chest and up the other. It distracted her, and she stared transfixed as the coils swirled over the woman above. The snake had moved the coil down around his tail and was lifting a living, kicking woman up into the air. It shifted, so that her head pointed downward. Ana could still see that she was screaming.

The man's attention became more aggressive as he became more turned on. He was starting to hump her groin area, almost as if he was trying to impale her flesh on his rocky length. He licked hard, pushing her nipple into her breast, and the swirled the tongue. She clenched her teeth so that she would not moan in from the pleasure.

The snake seemed to smirk and lowered the writhing form to his mouth. He opened wide and clamped over her whole head, neck, and part of her shoulders. He is going to eat her alive?! Ana thought in utter horror. "You wiggle ever so nicely on the way down," the snake said. Ana didn't know if it was to her or the woman above. He took a luxurious swallow, drawing the head into his throat and sliding the delicate breasts into his mouth.

The man on top her seemed to become charged at this as he seemed to gasp her nipple into his mouth. He sucked greedily, as if he could get something out of it. "Wish granted," the snake above said. She felt her breasts tingle and then start to hurt. She ripped her gaze down to see that her breasts had swollen still a little bigger and the man was eagerly sucking milk out of the one he was working on. Her neglected breast itched, then hurt as it bulged to bursting with fluid.

She looked with even greater fear at the snake, who also seemed to be playing with breasts of his own, the woman remaining out of him bucked and objected to it. All the same, she could see him sucking on them, they pressed against his flexible lower mouth and the tongue moved over them. He took another sedate swallow. The woman's shoulders and breasts moved into the throat. The snake was thick enough, you could only barely see the outline of the head.
At that swallow, the man reached and fervently grabbed her other breast, milk shot out onto her chest and face. His mouth soon followed, and it was sweet relief as the pressure eased. Plus, as he sucked milk out, his whole mouth and tongue worked that nipple and breast. It was turning her on, whether she liked to admit it or not.

The snake swallowed again, moving the pussy and but into it's mouth. It released the rest of the girl and seemed to enjoy the kicking legs sticking out of his mouth. The slender fingers gripped helplessly at the mouth, as if trying to halt her progress to doom. The kicking became even more vigorous, and she had no idea what was going on, and didn't care as the man lunged, having finished with her breasts for a moment and cleaned the milk he had spattered every where.

The snake leisurely tipped its head back and and swallowed a third time. With gravity aiding him, the girl slid into her knees. The man shuttered, adjusting his position and she heard another switch go click.

A second woman, this one fairly heavy and flabby was revealed. She had somewhat of a figure, and pretty good breasts and ass. This woman arrived just in time to see the snake take one admiring look at the legs sticking out of his mouth and gulp the last kicking part of the girl down.

Now nothing was visible of the woman except various body parts that strained against the flesh as she struggled against the confines of the throat she was in. The snake wasted no time, but struck immediately getting the next woman's head in his mouth.


The man violating her wasted no time either. He positioned himself and thrust his cock deep into her, moaning and shaking as he did so. She looked at him with wide eyes, but he was not looking at her, but the mirrors. She realized that all of the timing of his- enthusiasm, was because he had never once taken his eyes off the snake consuming the women. This was what really turned him on.


The woman's body rised and her hands beat against the snake. It seemed very immune to this as it took a powerful swallow, the head moving into the esophagus and the shoulders moved in. The woman managed to grip the snake by the sides of it's mouth and tried to push back out. In response, the snake casually swallowed again, and her round breasts slipped into the mouth, her hands lost thier grip. She was facing the opposite direction of the last woman, so the breasts pointed to the top of the mouth. There was still mirrors, and she could still see the breasts bulging. She kicked awkwardly as the snake played- thrashing for all she was worth for her life.

The man shivered violently as he watched this, as if he was almost overloaded with pleasing sexual images. He thust deep and lingered, thrust deep and wiggled. He leaned forward and started sucking on a breast again as he rythmically worked his way in and out. The tongue swirled over her nipple and she found herself shivering with pleasure. Slide, swirl, thrust of the groin, sucking in of her nipple, slide back in the groin. She was enjoying it herself.

The snake swallowed again, the breasts slide down ward into the throat. She was big enough the outline could be clearly seen against the flesh. The man became more excited, kicking up the pace. He dropped her nipple and gripped her breasts tightly in his hands and pumped hard, working it. The snake swallowed twice more, the somewhat flabby midsection taking two bites before he got the wide pussy and booty in his mouth. She noticed each time he swallowed, the previous writhing lump moved ever further down the long serpentine body.

The snake seemed to do something with his tongue that the woman objected to, or, maybe liked? Either way the ass in the snakes mouth started rocking violently and the legs that stuck out kicked violently.

The sex became rapid, the man was moaning and getting closer and closer. He shuddered in his first climax as the snake took a small swallow of the piece of ass, and she saw in the mirror he opened wide to observe the bottom view of the niceness just about on its way down his esophagus. She watched as the long serpentine tongue arched backward and buried itself deeply into the cunt, and the man all but screamed in pleasure as the legs bucked and kicked some more.

He lay the limp on top of her watching the pussy in the mirror spatter a bit, then the snake swallowed again. And- he got up, starting again. Rapid pumps brought him close to agian, as the snake causally swallowed the ass the rest of the way down and started leisurely on the thighs. He bucked and shivered, and now she herself was getting close. She couldn't help it, she rocked against him as well, watching now- almost with fascination as the snake swallowed the other half of the thighs, leaving the calves poking out, still kicking limply. The snake took another look in the mirror, and watched himself swallow half those calves down.

She was so close! She hoped more than anything the man on top of her wouldn't stop! Oh, please don't stop! Please! But he seemed to be obliging her well, thrusting extra deep and getting to those soft pleasure centers. The snake swallowed again, now only feet were poking out of his mouth. He tickled these with his tongue, and they twitched against him.He seemed to chuckle, tipped his head back and opened wide, so the top mirror showed the throat flap and a little of the ankles. He swallowed again and the toes disappeared down.

She screamed- her pleasure finally reached- but still the man pumped, and kept it going- going- GOING! YES! YEEESS!! Then he came a second time, flopped over her and suckled weakly at her right breast, gleaning some more of the liquid out. "Thirsty," he muttered, moving to the other and drinking thirstily.

"More it is," the snake said, and again she felt that painful sensastion of being filled to bursting. She liked the suckling the man did, not only was it relieving that pressure, but when he actually had something to work out of her massive breasts he was much more enthusiastic- and the pull was more urgent- more erotic. He finally rolled off. She went limp, her other breast still full to bursting. He looked above at the snake, and smiled. "Ah, something new. This sounds interesting enough."

She felt all at once a little disconcerted and everything around her blurred. The next instant she realized she was laying on her back on the glass floor above. Her heart sank into her feet as she remembered the comment eariler.

"Yes," the snake crooned. "Dessert!" She hadn't even made it to her feet before the snake was on her. She was coiled in the lower body, since the upper body was still lumpy. The first woman swallowed seemed to be trying to knee and elbow her way out. The other woman- it was too tight of a fit. Her head wiggled a little side to side, the flesh sliding back and forth over it. Her hips and breasts pressed against it, the legs and thighs wiggled a little. She wondered how they could both still be alive. "Oh, it feels so good, I maintain it all the way until the stomach," the snake chuckled. "And sometimes even then! I love the feeling of wiggling prey!"

All at once she was full of energy again! She kicked hard against the snake, watching aghast at the bodies still slowly sliding down the throat to wherever the stomach was. The snake laughed, and she heard the muffled screams of the women within it. "You will look more than lovely," the snake crooned. It's coils were over the top of her shoulers, then over her waist, pinning her hands to her sides. Her breasts were poking out for all to see. Now the snake suckled on the one that hurt from being so full.

The pain eased immediately, as the snake slowly, delicately suckled on her nipple. Then it kept sucking, she watched with some fascination as the whole breast slid delicately into its mouth. Her whole, huge 42H breast! It was amazingly erotic, feeling all the pulling, slurping pressure all around it. The snake chuckled. "You taste completly delicious! I will relish you slowly, so as to enjoy every last little bit of you I can get! Such a lovely desert!"

She shrieked as he shifted her again, laying her down a little. Then she saw the man again, a hungry look in his eyes. He was moving toward her. She was instantly distracted as she felt just the top of her toes slide into the warm, wet mouth. She screamed and curled her toes and tried to get them away, but the snake simply sucked a little more, sliding them and the tops of her feet in. It tickled immensely as the tongue slipped over them and tasted every inch. The man had stepped over her and lowered her head. He forced her mouth open and inserted his dick, clear into the back of her throat. She was surprised she didn't gag on it as he started giving himself his own blow job. The snake sucked again, her feet pushing against the back of his throat as her ankles were pulled in. The man was doing a good job getting himself off again as the snake seemed to chuckle. It took a long drag of her, and she felt the wet warmth slide up her legs and stop at her knees. Her feet were being pulled on by the throat and being pushed on snuggly. The snake swallowed again, sliding half way up her thighs. She saw the other writhing lumps slide down as it swallowed again. Then came the tongue into her private parts.

She writhed involuntarily as it ate her out, and despite herself, she came quickly and the snake chuckled. The man cummed into her mouth and she was forced to gulp the goo down or gag. He withdrew and took a good long drag on each breast, the snake swallowed agian, her waist sinking in. "Even your fluids are sweet to me. I will be sad when this dessert ends. Your flesh is sweeter than any I have ever had!" It's nose pressed up against her boobs, and only then did the man stop. She had been surprised the snake got past her hips. In fact, she could see her own hips and kicking legs formed just behind the snakes head as if she were wearing some snake skin - skin tight dress. She kicked violently, seeing her leg half rise in the flesh before it was repressed. The pressure was immense on her hips and less on her waist. The snakes jaw was completly dislodged, she was sure it could not swallow her all down, her breasts were just too big. She had hope that this would at least save her from death!

The snake simply sucked hard, and her breasts squished upward, into her face, but it still sucked harder, and she felt almost painful pressure as it worked its way from underneath them. She could see in the mirror her terror-stricken face smashed by her own breasts, that were dribbling milk on her. The snake sucked again, and the soft flesh slid into its mouth and she saw it framed in the roof of its mouth. So what if it is in his mouth? He still had to swallow!

He didn't play with them, but just swallowed, and she slid in, only the top part of her head and her hair sticking out. The snake tilted, so she got a full view of her breasts poking out of the snakes neck along with her hips outlined and how her legs and hands pressed against its sides. It took another small swallow, she slid about half an inch, until she could only barely see out of it's mouth. She saw herself almost outlined, as the jaw slowly unhinged. The snakes mouth was wet, humid, and it's tongue licked over her face, cleaning the milk off. Then it swallowed, and the light disappeared and she slid in.

She was all encased in the flesh. She pushed hard against it, but didn't find it to be as horrible as she expected. Everything was tight around her, and pulling on her with immense pressure. Her breasts were being squished and rubbed on all sides. She found herself wiggling just to enjoy the feeling of the soft flesh against her. "Let's do it one more time!"

Everything reversed, and she found herself seeing daylight once again. It took the snake a moment to get her luscious breasts back out, but it did spewing her waist out easily and then working hard again on her hips and pussy. Then it managed to successfully drool her legs out. She landed on the floor. The snake kept retching, and a pair of legs came out from the other woman. She started shrieking excitedlty, but the snake stopped as it reached her pussy. "Let me out! PLEASE! I don't want to be eaten like this!" a feminine voice cried muffedly. The snake digorged more of her, catching her tightly in his coils. Then he finally disgorged the first, who looked a little acid burned. He slammed the two together back to back, as if he was making a sandwhich out of them. "I intend to eat you, my pets," he said lightly.

"Please don't eat me! Let me go! I will always be good! Please!" begged the fat woman. The thin one seemed to be too worn out to do anything about it anymore. The fat woman's eyes fell on Ana, "Eat! She's pretty!"

The snake chuckled, dislodged his jaw and turned his coils so the two were now pinioned breast to breast. The skinny one sinking into the flesh of the flabby one. He took both heads in and gulped greedily. He by passed breasts and slurped hard over waists until he got to asses. Then he had fun with his tongue and the two bucked against each other, which the snake seemed to enjoy immensely. He left them both hanging, and as their last act, they ground against each other as he swallowed legs. Now the butts of the two were clearly outlined. The snake lifted Ana up again.

"Plese," Ana whispered weakly. "Please don't! I want to live! I want more than this."

The snake laughed at that, turned her face down lifted her feet into his mouth. She turned her feet trying to plant them at odd directions, but it did not good. He just tasted them thoroughly and swallowed again, her ankles sliding in again. She stared at the mirrors, seeing herself being confused from all angles. The snake swallowed again, half her calves sliding into the wet prison. She was already lubricated from her first trip down. It twisted it's coils, rubbing against her groin and squishing over her breasts. He was keeping her turned on and increasing the pressure. Part of her wished he would keep doing this. He swallowed again, reaching her knees. She let herself go, finally. She was food. That's all. And that was all it was going to amount to.

The snake seemed to relish this finally breaking of her spirt and tasted her thighs thoroughly as it swallowed half of them down. Another gulp and it was violating her cunt again. This time she welcomed it. It was nice feeling all the warm pressure below her. To see her skin outlined in the snakes coils, to see the writhing lump just below her. She was pointing down, onto the snake's tongue. It got an amazing angle and reached deeper into her than she had even been. Her breasts dangled and flapped as she rocked herself on and off. The snake kept her going for what felt like eternity- stopping only to suck hard on her ass and swallow his saliva and her juices. Then she shivered as she was off for the last time in her life. Her breasts a little pink tinged from all the blood rushing to the dangling, gigantic beauties. Then the snake pulled her hips into his throat. He worked inch by inch up her waist, and it maintained her glowy-sexual mood as it reached her breasts. The snake's tongue snaked out bringing first the right one and then the left one into his waiting maw. Then he closed his mouth around her, grinding the breasts over his tongue and sucking on her whole body. She rocked, pressing all three her mounds against his insides, and enjoyed the flicking, dragging, swirling tongue. Then he swallowed again, and she felt her breath consrict as her shoulders and neck slid in. She could see her butt outined on the top, each breast poking out the gullet on the bottom and both outlined from the side views. The snake swallowed again, bringing her face in, sticking the tongue deep into her mouth and throat. It swallowed smally, closing it's mouth over her and sucking on her head- pulling the last little taste it could off her. Then it swallowed and her head slid into his throat.

He took a few more dry swallows and slid them all down. The two shrieked a new and he really started digestion. He stretched out and observed his dessert, so lovely against his flesh and still grinding against him. In some cases he could even see her nipples against his skin as it slid back and forth over her body. He licked his lips and curled up and enjoyed the pleasurable sensation of wiggling prey down his throat.
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby darkmark67 » Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:51 pm

wow...this is pretty good! i expect more!
i think it was a decent length and detail was excellent...
not everyone here likes the same thing...but i give it a 8 out of 10.
grammer and whatnot, what it alittle...
great job!
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby Pachirisu_And_Asmodeus » Mon Feb 25, 2008 7:58 pm

I love it! ^^
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby Gimpy » Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:18 am

reminded me of shang tsung's animality lol
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby nightwolf316 » Tue Feb 26, 2008 3:18 am

very good story i think
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby Tyslan03 » Tue Feb 26, 2008 12:16 pm

wow that was awesome
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby DieChan » Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:58 pm

There were a lot of grammatical errors that threw the story off for me. And it's just my personal little peeve, but I couldn't stand the repeated use of the words "pussy" and "cunt". But it's your story, so I don't expect you to change it just because this one reader.

Other than that, it was entertaining.
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby Athos » Wed Feb 27, 2008 6:56 am

that is a really wicked story one of the best that I have read for awhile
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby cmwalters » Sat Jul 19, 2014 12:26 am

very cool story as i also write reptile vore
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby Ryan-Drakel » Sat Jul 19, 2014 3:14 pm

I didn't bother to read because you forgot a simple common courtesy.
TAGS. I'd like to know what the story's about BEFORE I read it, so I don't get surprise-disgusted by something I don't like.
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby yummyyoungnorski » Sat Jul 19, 2014 4:52 pm

Great story. Love the characters and the concept. You may want to work on your writing style a bit, especially a more specific and varied word choice, slightly more sensual and poetic description and better sentence structure, but the ideas, the images, the characters, the basic concept... what you're writing about and describing is great.

Ryan-Drakel wrote:I didn't bother to read because you forgot a simple common courtesy.
TAGS. I'd like to know what the story's about BEFORE I read it, so I don't get surprise-disgusted by something I don't like.


Honestly when the kinds of vore involved are this basically vanilla, I think it's forgivable. Maybe a tag for fatal and unwilling would be good, but it's not like she forgot to tag hard vore or cock vore here.
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby cmwalters » Sat Jul 19, 2014 9:43 pm

Yes a storyline tag would help and more details and also structuring would also
help and it is a good start though.A little hint as I use realism in all my
stories in facts,information and things that makes the story more of this
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby wolfishsmile » Wed Jul 23, 2014 12:29 am

Haha. Well, thank you for all the comments on my story that is something like six years old. I am very surprised, (and honestly almost embarrassed) that it is still getting read.

I am sure that my writing style has changed since then, and were I to write it again, it would be substantially different because I am not as shy about sensual writing.

Thank you so much!
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby cmwalters » Wed Jul 23, 2014 12:39 am

cool WOLF and yeah people still reading it six years later means it has
to be okay or pretty good!












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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby wolfishsmile » Wed Jul 23, 2014 5:20 pm

Daw. You are definitely making me blush. :oops:
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Re: snake vore... sex involved

Postby cmwalters » Wed Jul 23, 2014 7:29 pm

Ha ha Wolf..well it is good to be read but again a headline on your story
does help and I always put an headline on my short stories and they know
it is MUTT'S SWAMP OF HORRORS, INDONESIAN JUSTICE,MAYAN SORORITY
HOUSE or whatever! You are going to get more readers as they know what
you are writing about and it has worked with me as I got like 40,000 page
hits in one year and 5 months of this page being up. I am now currently on
my second year on that page and you have to advertise what you want your
readers are going to read as it works!








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Re: snake vore [soft, sex, unwilling]

Postby wolfishsmile » Thu Jul 24, 2014 12:39 am

All right, altered the title a bit. Don't know about a good title though. i barely want to own this :oops:
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Re: snake vore [soft, sex, unwilling]

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