Heya Zombie, glad to see you are still writing awesomeness. I just spent 8 months at a place where Eka's wasn't allowed and man did I miss a lot of stories from you. I haven't quite caught up with everything yet, but the stories are still just fantastic. "Eat Me Please" is probably my new favorite from you (wow am I behind the times here); it has such a great length to it, the characterization was great, I loved the character progression of the roomate, The psychologist was a really cool idea, and the ending was just so great. The progression with terumi's disgust, exasperation, and finally acceptance whilst taking control of things after The description of Miranda's dejected depression felt natural with the flow of the story and really helped the characters feel more believable. The fact that you made it a longer story than usual helped with that a lot too. I have said before that I love the Idea of willing prey, since they can be really hard to pin down right because of the inherent conflicts, but man you got it spot on. There are so many awesome things I want to say about this story, but I guess I should quit rambling about it since it is kind of old news now
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although it is also old news, I seriously have to compliment you on "Soup". That was another one of your twilight zone-y ones that just worked really well. I still don't know what it is about the ending that gets me, but every time I get to the reveal of the skeletons--and the way you lead into what happened to the missing students--it sends shivers up my spine. The whole story you kinda know what happened to them, you expect them to have met the same fate, but when she actually sees what became of them, it just hits hard. That is what I love about your writing the most, as good as the vore is, as much as you set up unique and interesting situations, it is always the characters that suck me in. I care about the characters because you describe them in ways that make them feel real, and it just works.
"The Tiny Clones" was a really cool and unique set up, not because of the tiny clones, but because of the twist you added. I can see how it would have been a tricky story to write, but you pulled it off nicely and I really liked how you chose to refer to each of the karens. using twin Karen, Giant Karen and Karen helped keep perspective consistent on who was referred to in each line, but more importantly it foreshadowed and punctuated the twist about who was really who. I really didn't know who to root for when she was getting eaten since I wanted the vore, but I also really wanted to see the real karen find a way out. see, this is what your writing does. There were a few parts as the story progressed where things felt awkward or confusing, but they were always fixed a couple paragraphs later, and it was fun to keep stopping partway through reading to just have an "Oh, that's why" moment, so that actually worked really well in this story. I did feel that the ending was a bit weak though. normally, your endings are extremely satisfying (one particular ending that comes to mind is the one for "Tanya's Breakfast"), but this one just left me wanting for something more. of course, I could just feel that way because I wanted the real Karen to find a way out.
Ok, Last one and I promise to stop rambling on. "Awakening Her Oral Fetish" woohoo for willingness. So much awesome here. I can see why you liked writing this one so much since it does have some fantastic mouth moments--and she even got swallowed, yay. the ending was really amusing and I liked the way everyone treated Dawn throughout the story. I really can't say enough how much I loved how much see enjoyed the mouthplay. The only problem I really had with this story was how short it was. It almost felt rushed at a few points, like when she confessed how she felt about being in someone's mouth and it leading straight into Monica licking and sucking on her like it did. You explained it well enough that there weren't any real problems with pacing in that scene, but I had kind of hoped that you would have had more to the story than you did--especially since it focused on something you are so fond of. Once again though, the descriptions of emotions and thoughts were fantastic, and even the background characters--Lisa and her boyfriend--were fun to read.
I think I will be skipping "The Audition" so you won't have to worry about a wall of text from me on that one ;P, but keep up the good work. Also, I can't believe I am actually asking for a continuation of an AV story, but theheadsn is totally right that "The Bet" deserves an awesome finale from you
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