Chocolate Bunny Story
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Chocolate Bunny Story
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Last edited by MollyC on Wed Aug 17, 2016 4:37 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Chocolate Bunny Story
for those who haven't read yet:
story is 99% transformation
woman -> chocolate
and I would classify as a soft-medium Vore ha ha.
no gore but not swallowed whole
multiple f/f
oral Vore.
to writer:
well done
id personally add a couple more tag lines on top
to let people know the who and whats
my personal preferences:
add more detail to the Vore I skip a lot of fluff but that's just me.
also get some advice from the transformation people because its not really my area.
story is 99% transformation
woman -> chocolate
and I would classify as a soft-medium Vore ha ha.
no gore but not swallowed whole
multiple f/f
oral Vore.
to writer:
well done
id personally add a couple more tag lines on top
to let people know the who and whats
my personal preferences:
add more detail to the Vore I skip a lot of fluff but that's just me.
also get some advice from the transformation people because its not really my area.
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kylelot - Been posting for a bit
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Re: Chocolate Bunny Story
also welcome to the site!
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kylelot - Been posting for a bit
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