Chocolate Bunny Story

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Chocolate Bunny Story

Postby MollyC » Thu Apr 17, 2014 4:23 pm

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Re: Chocolate Bunny Story

Postby kylelot » Mon Apr 21, 2014 4:04 pm

for those who haven't read yet:
story is 99% transformation
woman -> chocolate
and I would classify as a soft-medium Vore ha ha.
no gore but not swallowed whole
multiple f/f
oral Vore.

to writer:
well done
id personally add a couple more tag lines on top
to let people know the who and whats

my personal preferences:
add more detail to the Vore I skip a lot of fluff but that's just me.
also get some advice from the transformation people because its not really my area.
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Re: Chocolate Bunny Story

Postby kylelot » Mon Apr 21, 2014 4:05 pm

also welcome to the site!
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