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Vore Stories.

Postby ZopTopBlog » Wed May 15, 2013 2:41 pm

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^A link to my blog on this site. I have three short stories up there. I would love to know what people think. I'm always up for getting better.

I'm aware that they're a tad rough, I'm going to be editing them heavily shortly. I just thought I'd share along the way.

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Postby SREDISKRAD » Thu May 16, 2013 4:27 pm

I wouldn't exactly call them small, and it's 2nd. I haven't read them but that just outlines my criticism, if i'm being to pedantic please stop me.
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Re: Vore Stories.

Postby ZopTopBlog » Sun May 19, 2013 11:55 am

Ha thanks, yeah the 1st paragraph was supposed to have a warning, but I changed it to the 2nd and edited that. Let me know what you think when you get the chance to read them. Also, I'm willing if anyone enjoys my writing style, to write any pred/prey combo or any type of over arching idea(s).
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Postby SREDISKRAD » Mon May 20, 2013 10:14 am

written in a very...unique style. I don't think I've ever read a story in future tense, kudos - it does however make it very odd, maybe a alight re-edit into present tense (or past)? the characters are good but in the first part of the story the gray paragraph is difficult to read on the purple background, a colourblind person might not be able to read that passage. the second one ended slightly confusingly, I may have to re-read it but I didn't actually get what was happening, maybe a slight clarification is in order but that's up to you.
edit: I've only read your summer night/afternoon series. I haven't yet read the last one (presently though I am trying to right a story at least 5000 words, or maybe longer.)
PS, would you mind giving mine criticism? I kinda want to improve but don't seem to get much criticism, be as picky as you want and feel free to request a combo :)
edit 2:could you do an anthro-gecko as a prey, I find your style interesting and was wondering if you would want a challenge, maybe with a feral squirrel pred (as you can see i'm random-i'll write one as well if you want :) )
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