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Brittany has grown tired of sharing an apartment with her maneater of a sister and the constant parade of shallow guys that she sees meeting their doom. When her sister brings home a date that breaks the mold, will Brittany be able to save him from her sister?
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Posted by bela 14 years ago Report
I am so glad that Brittany saved Dan from Andrea. After all, Andrea only wanted to envelop Dan and digest him. How thoughtless! Brittany's delicate, caring gaze suggested a far different relationship, and they even had similar interests.
(A+, by the way) -Bela
Posted by MilkChocolate 14 years ago Report
I have been waiting for this for a while.
You Rule.
Posted by Tobedumped 14 years ago Report
Good to hear! Hopefully the wait won't be quite as long for the next one!
Posted by Reaverbot 14 years ago Report
<3
Great story. Never seen you before, but anyone who writes these "disposal" scenes is fantastic in my book.
Posted by ElLoboChingón 14 years ago Report
Brilliant, down to the very end.
Posted by French_snack 14 years ago Report
Very good story. Well written, excellent descriptions and characterisation. And I liked the twist.
The only thing that surprised me a little was Dan's immediate understanding of what a "maneater" meant. Is the existence of literal man-eating public knowledge in this world?
Posted by Tobedumped 14 years ago Report
It is. When I edit (after the Writer's Group gets done with it) I'll make sure I clarify that. My thought was that none of the story's readers will need clarification and we've all read the vore explanation umpteen times, might as well skip the whole thing.
I've already got a good way to work it in, though.
Thanks for the compliments one and all!
Posted by Throku 14 years ago Report
I just finished it and thought the same thing. Very refreshing though, didn't expect to be this entertained by a f/m story. It's clearly not just the language you've got a firm grip on, but the art of storytelling as well.
Posted by ElPortero 14 years ago Report
Wow, that was amazing! I am insanely jealous of your storytelling technique!
Posted by The Dracomancer 13 years ago Report
When a storyteller sits down at a fire, the words become art. The paragraphs, words, and letters become brushstrokes that weave in and out of each other to form a perfect masterpiece.
Perhaps this is high praise for a fetish story, but I truly believe you are a storyteller of the highest degree and that this story is a beautiful work of art. Keep it up!
Posted by Indighost 13 years ago Report
Nice story. I really enjoyed the last part--great detail :)
Posted by huitcinquante 13 years ago Report
Very well done ! I didn't expect this ending, but it's funny...
Posted by Kelly 6 years ago Report
This is really amazimg ^-^