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Another quicky story, about 6800 words. I hope the folks in the EPWG aren't cursing me for posting the 21k chapter of Samish instead of things like this.
This is kind of a delayed reaction to blog entries by both Jacquelope and Miranda Dragon about willing prey from a few weeks back. I hope neither mind the none-to-subtle allusions to them embedded in the story.
EDIT: Some typos fixed
Edit 2: Updated 07/2011
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Posted by miranda_dragon 14 years ago Report
You know I don't mind. :) That was simply incredible.
Posted by VixieMoondew 14 years ago Report
Couple of typos, you switched from Loreane to Lorraine when they realize the narrator is going to Marandara's, but a good story. :3 Though you do kinda see the end coming, it's decent foreshadowing.
So much cow vore lately! <3
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
Thanks! I'll fix that second Lorraine!
Posted by EveAra 14 years ago Report
You set up Sully's desperation very well, a gripping read!
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
Thank you! I appreciate that comment quite a bit, since you're something of the master of describing believable emotional compulsion in prey. :)
Posted by delet359hs56h2 14 years ago Report
MMm lovely cow story!
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
<grin> Thanks!
Posted by Sarus 14 years ago Report
I find my vocabulary lacking in superlatives to describe this story.
I loved the pred (curvaceous cow? sexy!), loved the soothing gentle atmosphere, loved the attention to details.
Thank you so much for writing this piece :)
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
<grin> Thank you! And thank you for enjoying it!
Posted by Sehnsucht 14 years ago Report
That's it---soothing. The intro is exactly the right length to invoke the numbing, interminable despair, and it segued easily into comfort and release. I felt the weight drop off his shoulders when he was told about the car accident---nice work, and an excellent interpretation of willing vore. I bet whiling away an evening at that place is a thrilling experience. Tess could eye me as much as she wanted!
FYI, two typos that I noticed: "I left my card idling" and "my my".
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
Thank you, sir!
I'll get on correcting those two typos!
Posted by Pippy1989 14 years ago Report
I'm not usually one for animals, but this.
Oh, god. Hm. I don't even know what to say, it was that good. Okok, um. Amazing flow, to begin, like Andrew said. Intro leads into main story fluidly. I don't even really like digestion, but with this story, I'd definitely enjoy reading it. You're super talented, Swords. Don't ever stop.
-K-
Posted by 4ofSwords 14 years ago Report
Thank you very much! That's quite a compliment! Furry stuff can often be polarizing, so I'm really flattered that you enjoyed it anyway! :)
Posted by Indighost 11 years ago Report
Here's my thoughts: Wow, there's some tough realism in the first few paragraphs. Very sobering stuff. // Some of it seems so realistic that it makes me wonder if some of it isn't slightly autobiographical. // I wasn't sure this was furry or not until I saw 'fangs' :3 // This guy is very pathetic // Overall: Extremely, extremely well written. Very well told story, too. For me personally, i found the main character and pov orientation a little too depressing to be erotic, but I loved the story as a story. Not sure if this is praise or not, but I was nearly crying myself at the end of it.
Posted by 4ofSwords 11 years ago Report
<grin> Well, I'm glad it was effective! I can't believe you read all those stories so quickly!
Posted by 4ofSwords 11 years ago Report
Oh, also, I think I've topped this story for tearjerker if you like that kind of thing. It's not furry, though, and there aren't any cows. :)
Posted by Indighost 11 years ago Report
I think I'll pass...althought I believe making the reader sad is the sig of a good writter, i do not like being sad :3