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Recently, a few people have criticized my stories (not intending any harm) by saying that my fatal vore stories don't make my readers really connect with the prey. The thing is, this is by choice. I know what it's like investing emotion into a character only to see him die. Kyto recently commissioned me and I decided that I'd do this one for the fans. Enjoy.
Warning - Contains underage yiff and fatal vore.
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Posted by MichaelGrey 4 years ago
Well, you definitely succeeded in making us connect, because I almost cried reading this. You definitely know how to make sadistic villains and sympathetic victims.
(Sighs)
Posted by xionzappa 4 years ago
Erk, sorry...didn't really want to upset anyone.
Posted by MichaelGrey 4 years ago
It's alright. When it comes to one-chappie stories like this, it's hard to find the right balance to turn a person into a genuine character, hard to find a way to keep people from becoming too involved or too little involved. All fan-work is a risk.
Posted by xionzappa 4 years ago
I'd always tried to make people distant from all my fatal prey. Some people liked another author's work because they did the opposite and someone mentioned they didn't think I was able to make believable, empathetic prey. This was to prove them otherwise...
Posted by MichaelGrey 4 years ago
You succeeded, my friend. Admirably.
Posted by Readasaur 4 years ago
...You...
...This story...
This story... was very well done.
It did what you intended.
Posted by xionzappa 4 years ago
*Smiles* I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Posted by Readasaur 4 years ago
I must say, I've never seen predators like yours before.
Posted by DJScoots10 3 years ago
Well I hope something good comes to Jacob. It was a well written story.
Posted by spikedyson 3 years ago
... well writen but why would one want to get a kid to suck ones penis.... isnt this classed as pedophillia