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My first/second (Technically second since I'm still working on one I started before this one) attempt at writing vore. It's a bit rushed because I really wanted to get my Gallery started, so I wrote this in like 10 minutes.
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Posted by nysmnyd 10 years ago Report
your perspectives are all fucked at the end, I can't really tell who is talking, this also appears very rushed in most areas, which ruins the pacing
Posted by shadowviper1229 10 years ago Report
Something I meant to add at the end of the description, this took me 10 minutes to write and I was rushing it to get my gallery started. The one I will be uploading once I get around to finish it, is much less rushed.
Posted by nysmnyd 10 years ago Report
you should never rush your work, it just turns out sloppy, might I g=suggest that if you must rush, keep it to yourself so that you can flesh it out properly at a later date, I know from experience that rushing only gives a poor product that is less likely to be received in positive light whether it's updated or not.
Posted by zelphi 10 years ago Report
wow viper only 10 Minutes it's a pretty good rough draft looking forward to see what happens if you put more time into it.