Posted by Genowing 10 years ago Report

I loved it!
Every piece was perfect!
Like a good meal.

Posted by DrakeZephyr 10 years ago Report

The perfect finale ^^ satisfying, a good way to finish up a tale of tension of risk and of difficult love. It's good to feel the weight of worry over how you'd end it gone ^^; I can re-read it now without panic, heh. I'd say more, but I wouldn't want to spawn spoilers

Posted by Littledude 10 years ago Report

By all means, let me hear what you have to say. You're pretty far down the list but if you still don't feel comfortable I'd love a pm.

Posted by DrakeZephyr 10 years ago Report

Well, as you offer, just in case some naughty fans read the comments first, I'll send you a pm ^^

Posted by Indighost 10 years ago Report

A very Hollywood ending :) Very sweet. thank you so much for putting out the effort to share this story of yours with us.

Posted by Littledude 10 years ago Report

Thanks for reading and giving feedback. Hope your own writing comes along well.

Posted by nephilim 10 years ago Report

Ha! It has an ending! Oh my God... *squeals* I'm not usually one for happy-Disney fairy-tale movie endings... but.. I found myself desperately hoping that Tuck would live through this adventure. With your power of the pen and tale spinning powers I was finding myself falling in love with the Vanna/Tuck dynamic.

I loved the ending. Your writing is so cute, quirky, tongue-in-cheek, and has great pacing and stage direction.

I want to read more from you (:

Posted by Littledude 10 years ago Report

Thanks, I'll try not to disappoint whenever I write something new.

Posted by ArchTeryx 4 years ago Report

I have to say, this was a fantastic story. I'm usually not one to be impressed by fetish stories but this one was drop dead awesome. You made outstanding use of villain protagonists and made even the most horrifying antagonists sympathetic, even... human, in their own way.

The only criticism I'd muster is that you played the vore fetish tropes a little TOO straight at times. If you think about it, when someone like a mouse is swallowed, *they don't die right away*. There isn't much air down there, but being small, there'd be enough that they'd probably die by drowning or by unavoidable, ever-accelerating chemical burns. I'd have played up the horror aspect more, but then, that's a genre I'm quite comfortable with with a boatload of its own tropes.

My final note is that it's too bad that I couldn't offer them one of my semiphasing fields. That way, they'd get all the pleasure of vore without there being actual danger to either one. But again, that's my biases showing. :-)

My site is www.furaffinity.net/user/archteryx, if you ever want to see my stories. A few are totally originally, many are fan stories of one kind or another. I'd also highly recommend a comic called Down the Hatch, drawn by another dedicated (female!) vorarephile. It's summary is here: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/32537950/

Posted by Littledude 4 years ago Report

Thanks for the critique and the gallery link. I’ll be looking up your work. As for the vore tropes. I left the details of exact death and digestion up to the reader’s imagination. I’ve noticed over the years that everybody has their own image of “right” vore so I wanted to avoid setting too many concrete rules besides the fact that getting eaten is fatal but escapable if you or the predator acts fast enough.

Thanks for the reads and the commentary again, best of luck with your publishing.

Posted by TheDragonBoy 4 years ago Report

Wow... I cannot believe this story has been here for 6 years and I never saw it. If it weren't for iMaw's piece I might never have.

This. Is. Amazing.

As a fellow vore writer, I have to say you can write *very* well. As a vore reader, I'll tell you most stories can't hold my attention for too long, but I started with part one and couldn't stop until I reached the end. And it was the PERFECT end! *SPOILERS* She eats him but then lets him go! Just. Perfect. And everything leading up to it: the tension, Vana's indecision, Eva almost getting baked. Just amazing. Good job dude.

Posted by Littledude 4 years ago Report

Thank you! I’ll try to keep writing stories like this in the future. Neat to see you’re a writer, I’ll definitely be taking a look at your gallery if you have anything up.

Posted by TheDragonBoy 4 years ago Report

I write plenty and post it all here. I think my series "Bite Sized" actually has a lot in common with "These Messages", just without the furries. I'll be taking a look at the rest of your gallery when I get the chance. Looking forward to it :)

Posted by Littledude 4 years ago Report

Oh yeah, I read that story. :D

Posted by TheDragonBoy 4 years ago Report

Cool :)
I hope you liked it.

Posted by TheDragonBoy 4 years ago Report

Having just read everything a second time, the only thing I’m missing is how Vana managed to get to “Paradise” with Eva. I thought Pauline’s house was too heavily guarded by the police?
Still an amazing story the second time through and probably my favorite “long series” on the site.

Posted by Littledude 4 years ago Report

Ah, yeah, that was kind of a plot hole. I think the cops were only there until she left. This series needs a rewrite, it's really just a first draft, lol.

Posted by TheDragonBoy 4 years ago Report

If you ever do try to fix things, just don't rewrite it too much, I really like how it is. There are definitely a few typos littered around, but other than that and this plot hole I wouldn't change much. Pretty good "draft" :)

Posted by Littledude 4 years ago Report

Wouldn’t change the story. Mostly would try to fix the typos and close the gaps.