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What happens when a girl who was a vore rock star in college graduates and comes home? If you're her younger sister, nothing good.
Oh my God, this story. This is the longest thing I've written ever. Started over a year-and-a-half ago, but it was freakin' flowing tonight. And after so many little ones that had minimal characterization or story, this one is full to the gills of it. Enjoy.
God, I am going to be so tired at work tomorrow.
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Posted by Onewingedangel 9 years ago Report
Some of your finest
Posted by kagaminetim 9 years ago Report
I wouldn't believe it.
I'm actually crying from a story on this site
from where Mackenzie.... till Kerry...
This was an amazing story Twrch your finest yet.
Keep it up...
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Thanks. It's remarkable the feedback this story is getting and the way it's affected people.
Posted by futavorelover 9 years ago Report
Stories like this always give me those sad feels, I wish I could say I enjoyed it but my mind prevents me from doing so but it is an amazing story nonetheless
Keep up the great work
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Good without being enjoyable? Y'know what, I'll take that.
Posted by futavorelover 9 years ago Report
Dont get me wrong It was a very enjoyable story but the way my mind thinks about stories like this (with all that emotion and dark side to the story) it kinda just kills my enjoyment
Posted by Beheader205 9 years ago Report
That was long, heart breaking, moving and exciting all at once xD
Posted by Scion 9 years ago Report
I hope you do another story like add-ons, your writing is awesome!
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Well, I've actually written about three pages in an Add-Ons sequel in which we meet another one of the girls who was mutated in the same accident with Chelsea. I just haven't gotten back to it since around Christmas of 2012. I may have to revisit that universe soon.
Posted by algog8 9 years ago Report
She should have like 3 a day, maybe more.
Posted by zigzwag1243 9 years ago Report
That was a good story I really enjoyed it it was well written with great characters and emotion :)
Posted by walkingbyself 9 years ago Report
This was golden, from begging to the end. Every minute spent reading was worth it. I loved the characters and the story, I loved the predator as much as I hated her. Thanks a lot for putting the time into this!
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Glad you liked it!
Posted by JuneMooshiji 9 years ago Report
One of, if not the, best stories I have ever read on here!
Posted by jgzman 9 years ago Report
Amazing work. I'd love to hear some of Savannah's college stories.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Maybe something charting Savannah's growth from an A cup to a J+ cup ... hmmm ... well, that's something to add to my list of ideas. Up to 48 now. I gotta stop posting, people keep suggesting.
Posted by jgzman 9 years ago Report
That would be awesome. Keep posting, though. It's a wonderful feedback cycle, like the growth of boobs after eating someone.
Posted by Znonymous 9 years ago Report
Wtf man? Why can't any of these story's have it be fun and enjoyable?
I really wanted to like this. it's an Awesome set up, sisters and friends helping grow some epic cleavage.
But no it was all angst and dark crap. :(
I mean your writing is great but how you had it play out.. just isn't fun to read.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
I will admit, this story ended up darker than I set off for. The tone is decidedly lighter in the first two chapters and begins to get darker as Payton falls in love with Savannah. That wasn't a conscious decision, but once I realized that it was happening, it had enough emotional cachet (and seems to have resonated with some people -- this is the most favorites I've ever gotten in a single day) that I wasn't comfortable changing it.
Besides, it's a teenage girl. How could it not be full of angst?
But I may have to do something light to detox from this. It was pretty heavy.
Posted by rugli 9 years ago Report
The style was too dark far as I'm concerned, if the tone is going to be lightend. I don' know how that is best done, but one premise need to change then and Kerry needs to have admiration for Savannah rather than fear her and not get upset with her everymove on her friends, grilfriends and boyfriend, more about being turned on. and always none-fatal in to of that I think.
Posted by Dudeox05 9 years ago Report
Although I generally prefer lighter-hearted stories and fully willing vore, this was an interesting read for certain. Albeit dark, it made me think for a whole day about what the emotional ramifications of real (and fatal) vore would be. How would a society continue functioning if this were real? What grey area of law would it fall under?
And under that blanket of darkness and dread, there's the sensual and sexual aspect of anything so utterly biological as vore.
This was a very interesting story and I enjoyed reading it immensely (despite it not being simple fap material). I look forward to seeing more of your work when you have time to put it together!
Posted by BardicLasher 9 years ago Report
I liked this story very much, even as dark as some are complaining about. That said, I'd have liked a bit more description on some of the vore scenes. Too many of them were very quick or off-screen.
Posted by IGA 9 years ago Report
Great story. That was deep bro. I couldn't put it down. All the feels.
Posted by Ridwanwolf 9 years ago Report
This story made me cry, made me think, and most importantly remind me of the darker side of vore, I will forever love this story, as well as support kerry in her new endevors, I honestly can say I wish to see more, although Im not quite sure what that would entrail. I will be a bit honest though I had hoped for makenzi to eat her sister
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Thank you. Whatever Kerry's new endeavors will be, I'm sure she'll be balancing her experience as prey with her desires as predator. She knows better than anybody that even if the prey is willing (Payton, Anh), their digestion and subsequent absence has real world consequences for everyone else.
Posted by Ridwanwolf 9 years ago Report
I understood that, I need to look at vore with a new light now, considering I hadnt ever thought of this before, thank you for sharing this story with us as well, I'll look forward to reading more from you
Posted by genericness123 9 years ago Report
Well. Augh. I attempt to avoid the whole fatal side of vore entirely. In this case, however, I didn't notice that there was a "Fatal" tag in addition to the "Non-Fatal" one until after I had read it. Foolish me. The feels... The feels in this one HURT. I am not easily moved by any work of fiction, but this caused me to curl up in a ball for an hour, then read children's books for a day until I was able to allow memory to function again. You... are a very, very powerful writer when you have a mind to be. (You also caused me to break my vow of lurking, so there's that too.) In the end, the only way for me to make peace with this story is to adopt the fanciful headcanon that Kerry later figured out how to reform people she had eaten and the people THOSE people had eaten, etc. Yeah, I know, pretty pathetic. Still, I didn't even bat an eye at the nightmare of a novel that is 1984, whereas this was the emotional equivalent of a sledgehammer. So kudos on that.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Maybe Kerry will just figure out how to be non-fatal and never digest anyone again. I always figured that refraining from digestion has to not be an automatic process and that there must be a learning curve, but once she has it figured out she's almost certainly not going to end up like her sister ... right?
Still, fatal or not, the next few stories I'm working on are nowhere near as dark. Thank you for the comment, but it should be a long time before I get anywhere near as sledgehammer-y again.
Posted by Dagre 9 years ago Report
This is one of the best stories on this website. I will add to the chorus of people saying it made me feel many emotions. Yet it still stayed sexy and alluring. The world had depth despite only seeing this one girl's POV. The characters had struggles (inside and outside various bellies.)
I've enjoyed your writing since Cabaret and look forward to your stories everytime they pop up. Do you have a donation site or patreon like Aesir? I think I and many more people would love to you support you and your work.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
I'm happy to keep providing vore stories as time and creativity permit. I greatly appreciate your offer of support, but I'll defer on that now, in part because I don't think it'd be healthy to have to justify the appearance of funds to my vore-opposed wife.
Posted by Bright 9 years ago Report
You misspelled the title.
That out of the way, I must say this is one of the better stories I have read on this site. The way you portray the relationship (an abusive one at that) between the two sisters are very well written.
It was satisfying to finally see Kerry snap and get back at her sister. It was either that or a shotgun I believe.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
To be fair, it was very late when I uploaded it and already fixed a separate typo in the title thirty seconds after I uploaded it (Boomerange). Surprised no one else has mentioned it in the past two weeks, so good catch.
Posted by Bright 9 years ago Report
I also liked how Kerry snapped at Antonio. Turns out he wasn't a keeper after all.
Posted by Trivu 9 years ago Report
Okay, I'm late by a month, but I couldn't walk away from this one without commenting. (might be the first time I've ever used the comment section actually)
Just, holy shit dude.
Like I've always associated your stuff with this strange, completely casual disregard for human life (I guess the beach story jumps to mind, but it seems to be in most of them) And then here you do a total 180, and produce possibly the most brutal, emotional take on the fetish I've ever read. I actually thought it was going to end in suicide. (like, just begging her sister to eat her for real)
This story's been lodged in my brain all day, and I suspect it might be there for quite a bit longer. I mean, I don't know what else to say, it's incredible.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
I hope it's at least a sexy strange, completely casual disregard for human life, right?
In all seriousness, it's both because the casual nature is part of the appeal for me. But sometimes it's necessary to realize that for these characters, there are real consequences. You'll see that in "Madame Rawe's Vorelesque Cabaret," where a completely willing and consensual digestion is still a little melancholy. Here I tried to take the most unrealistic situation (society as a whole has a casual disregard for the devoured) and show that it does not automatically follow that a person in that setting could still individually have problems with it.
Posted by Trivu 9 years ago Report
Yeah, strange in a good way. Was just trying to compliment the uniqueness of your tone. You're one of the best writers on the site IMO. At least for the _/F audience (don't really watch the rest).
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Thanks!
Posted by crystalbabie 9 years ago Report
Very good! Took forever to read, but totally worth it
Posted by softvore001 9 years ago Report
omg I love this story best one yet I wanted to cry XD
Posted by ironman362 9 years ago Report
wow, pretty emotional. Don't see that too much around here. I really liked it :)
Posted by Archer67 9 years ago Report
Wow. Holy shit. I mean, I don't even know where to begin with this one, and that's saying a lot. I have read a great many things, both vore and non vore, (I have a passionate love for all things literature), and this is one of the most feelsy, amazing, disturbing, hateful and beautiful things I have ever read. Seriously. I've read 400 page novels where I engaged with the characters less. is it weird that I have an urge to print this off and make it into a proper book? Seriously though, this is awesome. Keep up the good work,
~Archer
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
This would be an easy one to turn into a proper book, I think, just by showing the disintegration of the relationship between Penny and Kerry rather than telling it. But I hadn't planned that part when I started writing it and it just sort of happened.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
Thank you for all the positive comments. So much of our community is consequence-free (which is great and I do a lot of it myself), so I thought it would be important to have some consequences. You can't really feel the weight if the characters aren't developed (compare the end of Stephanie with that of Payton or Mackenzie). Thanks again and I'm glad you got so much out of it.
Posted by Shadowgamer 9 years ago Report
I think the thing with this story that really is different is... it's basically told from a 'side characters' viewpoint, compared to perhaps a standard vore story.
Like, I'd see the 'alpha pred' sister as more often being portrayed as the main character, instead of the little sister who often is eaten and coughed back up. So we see the character who is standing at the side and seeing the others get digested.
Also, at least I like the fact the 'total percent vored' is fairly low... I once read an story which mentioned something like 70-80+ percent of a class being vored before their first year ended, and those being fatal (that setting had reformation too, but it seemed ignored). This one having 35% percent of the class being vored by graduation IMO is more immersive because I look at it and don't see a society that is going to collapse from a rapidly dwindling prey base.
Sorry for the rant... but it was a good read!
Posted by TwrchTwryth 9 years ago Report
I'm glad to see that first comment. I'm fascinated, both in vore and in mainstream stories, with the stories of supporting characters. We're familiar with identifying with the main characters, but what if we're the supporting characters in someone else's story? With vore in particular, it really helps sell a world in which vore is a normal thing.
For the second comment -- yeah, the percentage is something that I've always been concerned about. It's a delicate ecosystem; we can't have the predators outstripping the prey. Otherwise, where would we get the next generation of prey?
Posted by VVVx 7 years ago Report
This is the best story I've read on this site. No doubt. You are amazing at making characters that i actually care about. I was ready to cry when we found out about Payton.
Posted by TwrchTwryth 7 years ago Report
Thanks for the feedback! This one was very emotional to write, and it seems like it's elicited a lot of emotion from everyone else.
Posted by SwordkingX5 6 years ago Report
Amazing story.
Just imagine what Savannah would have done to Kerry if she knew how to unbirth someone and used Kerry as a sex toy.
The poor girl would be terrified on being near her naked
Posted by Bizza 6 years ago Report
wow. Just wow. Good stuff, Twitch.