Wonderbolt Academy
By Vidofinir (Vabzir)
The sound of shuffling hooves filled the air as a clamor of ponies filed into the mess hall of the Wonderbolt Academy. A turquoise pegasus hung toward the back of the crowd. "Can't even get a good meal at the end of a hard day..." she muttered to herself with an exasperated sigh. Not that she was feeling very social, having been completely shown-up by Rainbow Dash once again. What started as a healthy rivalry was quickly started to grate on Lightning Dust's nerves.
"Grr, that-" she paused at a tap on the shoulder, snapping to attention, turning to lay eyes upon the last pegasus she'd hoped to see. "-Rainbow Dash!" Lightning greeted, her voice dripping with thinly veiled resentment.
"Still upset I got a better time on today's course, huh?" the rainbow-mare replied, laying a wing over her partner in sympathy, which she begrudgingly allowed, folding her own to her sides.
"It's not like that!" she retorted, slumping down on the ground as Dash looked on with concern. She was right, of course. Lightning Dust wasn't used to coming in second. She was leagues above everypony in the academy! Everypony except Rainbow, at least...
"Well, hey, not just any pony can fly as well as me y'know," Dash chuckles, less than modest as usual. "But I'm sure I can give you a few pointers! We're a team, after all."
"S-Sure," Lightning Dust mutters. There was no point in hanging around here. Hungry as she was, she was the last to arrive for dinner, and likely wouldn't be served for a good ten minutes yet - plenty of time for a quick diversion. She picked herself up off the ground and dusted herself off with her wings, shaking her golden mane from her eyes and following the mare outside.
High above the clouds, the two pegasi were alone on the training grounds as the sun began to set over the vast plateau. Rainbow Dash zoomed ahead with a blur of color. Lightning lagged behind slightly, her mind plenty occupied, kept away from her best efforts. Eventually the two perched on a small cloud together, staring out at a series of flags and cloud rings, making up one of the academy's training courses, meant to test a pony's agility.
Dash had only beaten her time by three seconds. Anypony else likely could've shrugged it off, but Lightning was mired in an all-consuming jealousy, watching bitterly as Rainbow Dash showed off a few simple maneuvers. "Patronizing", Lightning muttered under her breath. She was holding off dinner for this?
"...Now I notice you had a teensy problem with this cloud here," Dash prattles on, her reluctant student tuning her back in, rolling her amber eyes in annoyance. "Uh, is there a problem?" Dash tilts her head in confusion, flapping over from the distant cloud, standing tall before her troubled rival. "I'm just trying to help you out y'know, since being the best is so important to you. Or, second best," Dash giggles, assuming a prideful stance, looking quite smug in her Wonderbolts uniform, the blues and yellows complimenting her colorful mane.
Lightning Dust had heard enough. "You think you're so good, do you?" she snaps, rising from her slump and pointing hoof in Dash's face, whose eyes widen with curious alarm. "Think you're the best flyer the Wonderbolts have ever seen? Well I am supposed to be the best! Me!" Lightning shouts, her eyes narrowing with anger.
"What's gotten into you?" Dash retorts, glaring fiercely back at her aggressor, albeit rather confused.
"There's only room for one star flier in the academy!" Lightning declares threateningly, taking a few steps toward the stunned pegasus, her tongue subtly poking out to moisten her lips as she rears back on her hind legs, and pounces!
"Oomph!" Dash grunts as she's splayed out beneath the pegasus's weight. Struggling to regain her hoofing, she twists and writhes against Lightning's hoof, which is planted firmly on her spine, responding with a little more weight whenever she moves. "What are you doing?!" the pinned pegasus demands to know, giving a mighty heave of her wings and knocking Lightning Dust aside, the turquoise pony landing on her butt with a thud. Dash glares at her before shaking her head in disapproval. "I don't think Spitfire is gonna like this. The Wonderbolts are a team!" she explains, dusting herself off and testing her bruised limbs. "Whatever. I think my wings are alright," Rainbow sighs, satisfied for the moment. She'd figure out what to do with her partner later, turning and spreading her wings, preparing to head back for dinner.
"Gah!" Lightning Dust rages, leaping forward and clamping her jaws shut around Dash's extended wing, wrenching back and causing her to yelp in alarm, ripping out a few feathers as the pegasus crumples to the ground. "We're going to settle this, here and now," she insists, batting Dash in the face with a powerful wingstroke, knocking her back. Her attacker is all too ready to follow up with a hoof on her chest, pinning Rainbow to the ground, hindlegs pinning hers and rendering her mostly helpless.
Not one to give up without a fight, Dash flaps her wings, trying to beat back the maddened pegasus. "You've lost it!" she cries out. "I wasn't gonna tell the captain, but--"
"Quiet!" Lightning interrupts, planting her other forehoof over Dash's muzzle, smothering her words. She pulls back before the restrained pegasus's teeth attempt to clamp shut on her hoof, giving a firm stomp on her gut, causing her to double over in pain.
"Unh..." Dash groans, coughing and trying to catch her breath, gazing up at her attacker, tears beginning to cloud her vision. "J-Just go," the rainbow mare pleads. "If being the best matters that much to you... I'll quit," she sobs.
"And what's to stop Spitfire from asking questions if her best flyer suddenly up and quits, huh?" Lightning Dust shouts. "No, I'll need a much more permanent solution," she grins deviously, a dominant smirk as her only rival lays begging beneath her hoof.
Dash gulps nervously, meeting to cold gaze of her attacker. "P-Permanent?!" she gasps between harsh breaths, digging deep within to find any strength to turn the tables.
"A wingpony like you has no business questioning her superior!" Lightning Dust snaps, pulling rank over Rainbow Dash. "You know what I think of you, pitifully begging from down there?" she snarls, meeting Dash's eyes with a sharp, toothy grin. "I think a sobbing weakling like you has no place in The Wonderbolts!" she taunts, taking a step forwards, crunching Dash's wings beneath her hooves.
"Aaa--" Dash cries in pain, ending in a high pitched squeal. The fragile frame of her feathery wings snapped underhoof. Flying would be night impossible now, her world narrowing down to the small cloud where she lay beneath her homicidal rival. "J-Just let me go back to Ponyville... I won't talk to Spitfire again! I-I'll do anything..." she whines, tears welling up in her eyes from pain and helplessness.
The restraining hooves twist, grinding Dash's feathers into the cloud, eliciting a painful squeak through clenched teeth. The pain becomes too much to bear and the next part of Dash's dignity is lost to her, groaning in pain as she loses control of herself, the warmth from her bladder flowing freely and wetting her flight suit as a puddle forms. She can manage nothing more than a low whine as she's unable to stem the tide, soaking into her fur before it's lost to the cloud.
Lightning Dust chuckles in amusement, patting down the dampness with her tail, feeling the warmth of Dash's defeat for herself. "Pathetic," she mocks, the fluid soaking through the tight uniform and wetting the strands of golden hair, her tail brushing teasingly across Dash's chest before drying itself on her muzzle with a thorough wipe.
"Blech!" Dash spits in disgust, trembling with fear as she hesitates to test her crumpled wings, afraid of bursting into tears again if the mangled limb failed her. Instead, she lays caught in a hypnotized daze, watching the dangling tail before tracing it up to Lightning Dust's plot, hanging overhead.
"I'll be the best flyer in Equestria!" Lightning Dust insists. "Once you fail to show up for practice tomorrow, the Wonderbolts will consider ME top of the class! I'll join their ranks and surpass them all, while you," she snarls, "you will be forgotten as the worthless pile of horseapples that you are!"
"My friends... they'll..." Dash chokes out between sobs, unable to finish the thought as her mind swims with pain. Thankfully, Lightning Dust is all too eager to finish it for her.
"Your friends will never know what happened to you - a training exercise gone awry, perhaps - while The Wonderbolts will assume you cracked under the pressure and went home!" Her tail passively bats at Dash's face, scarcely an insult at all compared to what was in store for her. "But you know what the truth is? You want to know what will become of the great Rainbow Dash?" the crazed pegasus laughs tauntingly, her tail going still before bolting upright.
"This--!" Lightning grunts, a barely audible crackling heard as her plothole puckers open and begins to squeeze out a moist length of pungent mare filth. Dash's eyes widen in disgust as the pegasus clamps her neck between her hooves, rending her feeble wiggling obsolete, leaving her to gaze up in horror as the clump of pegasus manure dangles lewdly from Lightning Dust's rump, the reeking stench assaulting her nose.
Ohgodohgodohgod, Dash's mind races with desperation, keeping her mouth clenched firmly shut as the warm, mushy log squishes against her muzzle, smearing across her face beneath its own weight and the modest pressure of excretion. Lightning Dust ignores her disgust, tilting her head to the clouds and letting loose as though it were the most casual of things, breathing a long sigh of relief as the first lengthy clump of waste breaks off and slaps down on Dash's face, splatting down her neck and burying her senses in the overwhelming stink of the pegasus's shit.
Wordlessly, Lightning Dust continues her disgusting work, eased by the effort of the first squeeze, the next few, smaller clumps coming with ease, the occasional bit of moistness amidst the filth smearing through Dash's fur as it spreads out in a mound. Lightning shuffles her hooves clear of the pile, allowing the dirtied pegasus below to roll onto her side, breaking free with a disgusted wail, coughing and shaking the muck from her face as it falls around her.
Dash has no words herself, breathing heavily as the smug Lightning Dust circles around her, visibly licking her lips. Surely nothing about her looked flavorful, as Dash breathed an exasperated sigh, slumping down on her side, the pile squishing out beneath her head as it sullied her rainbow mane. "Unn..." she groans, bile rising in her throat, her body threatening to vomit in disgust.
Lightning Dust simply kicks the remnants of the mess aside, tumbling off the clouds and down the mountainside to splatter in some nameless expanse of the Everfree below. "Face it, Dash., I'll go down in history as the best of the best. You've lost!" she taunts, tightening her circles as she hovers over the filthy pegasus.
"Y-You're crazy..." Dash squeaks, cradling her aching, nauseated stomach in her hoof, wings twitching slightly as she tries to drag herself toward the edge of the cloud. Plummeting a few hundred feet was likely better than what Lightning had in store for her.
"As if you can fly on those wings of yours!" Lightning Dust mocks, biting down on Dash's tail and wrenching her backwards. "May as well just lay back and accept it, Dash. You're in for the ride of a lifetime."
Rainbow Dash's ears flop in defeat, wiping her face against the cloud, crying wholeheartedly as the predatory pegasus chomps lightly down on her hooves. "D-Don't..." she pleads as Lightning grips around her flank and pulls her back, immersing her legs in the stifling heat of the pegasus's drooling maw. The slick, intrusive tongue knows no bounds, slathering every inch of her furry legs in warm goop. She was to be savored, much to Dash's horror as she fights for her life, kicking weakly into the pulsating warmth of the ravenous gullet as it wraps around her hooves.
"Ish futile, Dash," Lightning Dust mutters full-mouthed. She takes her first swallow, the slick, giving walls suddenly clenching hard around Dash's legs, clamping them together and dragging her in. The cloud offers no friction nor grip, nothing to slow her inevitable devouring as the ravenous pegasus takes a few more gulps, easily working her way up the rainbow mare's legs without hesitation.
Desperate for whatever fight she can muster, Dash's tail swats Lightning's face for all its worth, proving little more than a mere annoyance until its curled upwards by the pegasus's lips as they crawl over Rainbow's rump. Her tongue offers not a hint of pleasure, Lightning Dust giving only a few dull nibbles as she fights to get around Dash's hips. A brief licking and a few more gulps seals the deal, as the predatory pony's hooves shift upwards towards her meal's mangled wings. Without a care, she presses them to Dash's sides, crushing the awkwardly-frayed appendages into a feathery mess before sliding her maw over them and licking. Every pained twitch of Rainbow's wings brings the taste of victory to Lightning's mind, as she raises herself to her hooves, leaving Dash to reach frantically for the cloud as she dangles from her jaws.
It seemed there was no way out of this one with any semblance of dignity. As if the ship hadn't sailed on that one already, Dash groans, mustering a deep breath despite the stench that caked her muzzle and crying for help. "S-Soarin! Spitfire!" she shouts into the darkened skies. "Hel--" she manages to shout before a hoof wraps around her jaws, rendering her speechless, her efforts earning a surge of pain as the pegasus bites down, putting an unbearable weight on her chest as Lightning's dull teeth grind against her fur. She whines through the muffling hoof, hot tears streaming down her face, dribbling down to be absorbed by the clouds below.
Finally easing up with her teeth, Lightning Dust takes a few more swallows. Dash's hooves are hugged tightly to the sides of her head as her shoulders are dragged inside. The warmth of Lightning's breath caresses her ears, causing her to twitch and groan with discomfort, rainbow mane drooping over her eyes as her head slides into the pegasus's maw. The prying tongue slurps around Dash's neck, greeting Lightning Dust with the taste of her own scat smeared through her meal's fur. Had she been more lucid, it may have been a cue for the ravenous pegasus to come to her senses. Instead, it merely prompted her to finish her meal in haste.
The foul scent of pony breath assaults Dash's nose as her muzzle is enveloped in Lightning's maw. She lets out a final whimper before the predator's wings wrap around her hooves and give a firm shove accompanied by a heavy swallow, sealing the deal. The slick, pulsating gullet overtakes Dash entirely, prodding and squeezing, dragging her down inexorably. "Ohgod--!" the pegasus whines, the surrounding muscles overpowering her feeble squirming. Rainbow feels her hooves slipping into an intense warmth below, thrashing wildly about, only accelerating her descent.
Lightning Dust tilts her head back, allowing gravity to finish the job. Her belly expands bulgingly beneath her fur-tight suit as Dash slips into the embrace of her warm, goopy interior. "Ahh," she sighs with delight, gazing down at her sagging gut. A vague, lumpy outline of Dash's wriggling form can be seen adjusting to her new accommodations within, bringing a smirk to the victorious pony's muzzle moments before she opens her mouth to let out a loud, resonating belch, squeezing the air from her stomach.
Dash struggles her way upright, scooting away from a puddle of steamy slime at the base of the pony's gut, leaning back against the wall with her head practically between her legs. "W-W-What the heck?!" the rainbow mare stammers, kicking at the wall, bouncing off and splashing herself with hot goop. "Let me out!!" she demands, her shouting met with a ominous gurgle from the walls around her.
"Sorry Dash, but I got you right where I want you," Lightning Dust chuckles, licking her lips and settling into the comfort of the remote cloud, gazing down at the academy barracks. "Nopony's looking for you. Nopony will find us up here," she assures her captive. "Consider your dream of being a Wonderbolt over!" she laughs, laying on her side and patting her wobbling belly with a wing.
"You can't do this!" Dash cries in protest, choking on a lungful of acrid air, coughing and sputtering as she peels her drool-soaked mane from her eyes. Another deafening groan signals the beginning of the end, as the walls begin to secrete a thick, gel-like goop, picking up in motion and slathering it across the pegasus's body. "E-Eww..." she complains, frantically trying to shake the slime from her mane as it dribbles in around her.
"I suppose a small part of you might stay with me, future star of The Wonderbolts," Lightning Dust brags, pressing in on Dash with her wings. "Most of you, well... you've seen how that'll end," the pegasus chuckles, swishing her tail excitedly across the cloud.
Dash's heart sinks, her tongue tied as her mind processes the inevitable. 'Ew' wouldn't even begin to express what was going through her head. The horror she was enduring sloshing about in this rank, slimy pit was put a prelude to her eventual fate. "Y-You won't get away with this. They'll find--" she pauses, struggling to catch her breath as panic sets in, chest heaving as she chokes down a lungful of hot air, burning her lungs and triggering another coughing fit.
"They'll find what, a larger than usual pile of manure in the bushes?" Lightning Dust teases. "An overworked toilet in the barracks, perhaps?" Face it, Dash, you're not getting out of there the way you went in, and there isn't a darn thing you can do about it!"
"We'll see... about that..." Dash breathes, wiping a glob of mucus from her muzzle, her fur beginning to tingle and warm as the thick slime works its way through her suit and relentlessly coats her body. She rears back, letting loose a powerful kick, and another, and another, the walls absorbing the impact before squeezing in tighter, as if aware of her struggle and fighting back. "No second rate flyer is... gonna keep me down..." Dash pants, instinctively trying to unfurl her wings and hold back the contracting walls, met with a surge of pain instead. "A-Aagh!" she cries out, Lightning Dust meeting force with force, kneading the softening lump in her gut. "S-Stop it..." Rainbow cries, her body on the verse of collapsing under the strain of digestion.
"Second rate, huh?" Lightning scoffs. "If you're so 'first rate', then how'd you wind up in there?" she taunts, grinning and squeezing the lump between her hooves, Dash feebly flailing as the walls threaten to crush the life from her. "It's over, Dash."
"I-Its..." Dash gasps, inhaling a mouthful of stinging slime, spurting and coughing uncontrollably. "...not," she grumbles, knowing in her heart she had lost. "Ga-ahh!" she cries as the walls convulse, clenching around her chest and with a brutal -CRACK-. Unspeakable pain radiated from her core, her senses growing dim in the churning pit of the pegasus's stomach. The slime had peeled most of the fur from her battered body, beginning to fizz away painfully at her bare flesh. She hadn't enough air in her lungs to make a sound, legs twitching weakly as she gives her dying breaths, before the walls squeeze the last traces of life from her body.
"Ahh... sleep tight, number-two," Lightning Dust smirks, hearing an audible crunch from her gut as it folds and compresses the lifeless chunk of meat within, acids churning and penetrating what remained. Gazing lazily at the barracks below, the pegasus saw the lights flicker out inside, a few stragglers trotting inside for the night. She'd have to follow their example soon enough, it would be far too suspicious otherwise, she knew.
"Hmph..." Lightning snorts, having waited another half hour, just to be safe. The lump in her gut had begun to soften and round as Dash's remains were churned into oblivion. "Here goes nothing," the pegasus grins, rising to her quaking hooves, almost buckling under Rainbow's added weight. Spreading her wings, she trots to the edge of the cloud, taking a deep breath to brace herself, before leaping over the side.
"Woah--!" she wobbles and flails, plummeting down a few dozen feet before catching a decent rhythm with her wingbeats, sailing gracelessly down to the plateau, gazing about anxiously, hoping nopony was scanning the skies. "So far, so good," Lightning mutters to herself as she lands in the bushes behind the barracks, gazing into the silent darkness through an open window. Sleep and salvation was only a bound away. She tensed up a moment, holding her breath and creeping towards the building, rearing back on her hindlegs and giving one solid leap, catching herself on her wings with a few hard flaps, landing inside with but a momentary clacking of hooves. A few ponies seemed to stir in the darkness, but none could see the blatant bulge in the pegasus's gut, something she was counting on as she hoisted herself into bed, pulling the blankets over herself and nestling in comfortably. "Ahh... mission accomplished," Lightning mutters under her breath, reaching beneath the covers to poke the lump with a hoof, pleased with how she seemed to be coming along.
Inside Lightning's gurgling gut, the promising young flyer had been reduced to a slurry of bones and feathers in a gruesome sludge, the whole grisly concoction swirling and churning about.
The thick bedding muffles the condemning gurgles and glorps from within, allowing the pegasus to sleep peacefully, certain her stomach would take care of what remained by morning.
As Lightning enjoys a comfortable snooze, the remains of her rival are left as little more than a formless mush, sucked greedily into her intestines. The peristaltic motions urge her meal onwards, the walls leeching what they can from the feathery sludge. Of course, eating Dash wasn't about nutrition - the digested mare had little to offer the herbivore's body - it was a matter of pride. What better way to secure her place at the top than obliterating Dash's form and ego in one swoop?
By Celestia, it felt so good! Lightning hadn't had such a peaceful rest at the academy yet. It was little surprise that she overslept, jolted awake not by Dash's remains firming up in her bowels, but by a stern voice...
"Lightning Dust!" Spitfire shouted accusingly, ripping the blankets away from the weary pegasus. She awakens with a start, golden eyes fixing upon the Wonderbolt's captain, tracing her gaze to her own belly with a mortified gulp. A wave of relief coursed through her at the sight - flat and innocent. All was well.
"Slept in your uniform, too," the captain shakes her head in disappointment, "what is wrong with you two?" Spitfire muses. "I don't suppose you've got Dash in there with you," she sighs, poking the sheets with a hoof. Lightning Dust blushes, swinging her hooves over the side of the bed, watching the other ponies shuffle in, finished with their morning routine.
"Uunh," Lightning groans, feeling the weight in her bowels as she sits upright. "I'm sorry, captain. If you'll just let me-"
"A good thing you're dressed and ready," Spitfire interrupts, "you'll be flying laps to make up for your laziness this morning." Lightning opens her muzzle in protest, but doesn't manage a word of explanation. "Laps. 20 of them," the captain smirks. "Now."
Lightning glances past the captain to the bathrooms on the far end of the barracks. Salvation was so close, and yet beyond reach. "Yes ma'am..." she concedes, tucking her tail between her hindlegs and grumbling as she makes for the door, wincing as Dash's remains try to fight their way out.
"Unnn... what did I do to deserve--" Lightning Dust trails off with a snicker, shaking loose the weariness of her late sleep as she steps into the mid-morning sun. Spitfire follows behind with a dissatisfied 'Hmph', urging the pegasus to spread her wings and take to the sky, flapping shakily at first before her natural skill overcame the distraction in her bowels and allowed her to focus. "Just 20 laps," she sighs, glancing back at the captain, who watched her like a hawk. There'd be no hope of diverting to the bushes for a few moments to do her business. Still, it felt good to soar without the ego-driven Dash by her side. Truly there was no doubt who the best flyer in the academy was now; With Lightning's only rival churned away in her belly, she had little to worry about.
Still, Dash got what petty revenge she could. By the fifth lap around the track, Lightning felt strain in more than just her wings, hunching forward slightly as her gut groaned and contracted, her plothole clenching shut, struggling to hold back the pegasus's remains. "Ugh, Have a little patience, Dash," the pegasus groaned, grinning widely despite her discomfort.
By the tenth lap, other pegasi were milling about once more, filing out of the barracks for the usual pre-lunch break. A few hung around the ground below in small groups, chatting amongst themselves and occasionally glancing up at Lightning. She chuckled at the thought of letting out Dash's remains, picturing the pile of mess splattering down upon them. "Hehe, focus, Lightning... just nine more to go," she breathed, folding her tail between her legs, quaking from exertion.
Spitfire seemed distracted below, lecturing a few ponies for goofing off. An isolated island below held a small cluster of bushes that looked heavenly right now, but it was too early for the pegasus to quit. She fought back the pressure in her bowels, hastening her wings to make short work of a next few laps. Though her dedication soon proved unnecessary, as she spotted the captain retiring to the mess hall for lunch. A quick glance around revealed most everypony had filed off to fill their bellies - perhaps it was time for Lightning to empty hers.
"Made you wait long enough," the pegasus teased, angling her wings to a swift dive toward her makeshift bathroom, landing in the shrubs with a heavy rustling, her tail swishing behind her, as if to tease the pile resting in her plot. "Hope you're as fast as ever," Lightning chuckled, "gotta get lunch before it's all gone." With the ground beneath her hooves, the pressure in her bowels returned tenfold, as if aware it was finally time to be released.
"Unf..." Lightning Dust groans, her golden tail lifting clear of the imminent mess, tailhole puckering open as a thick clump of waste revealed itself. She tenses up, grunting lightly as she works through the start of what would doubtlessly be a lengthy ordeal, and a large pile. The first of Dash's remains plop heavily in the bushes, steaming behind Lightning's hooves as she lets her plothole tense shut for a moment, taking a deep breath and preparing herself for the work ahead.
"N-Not gonna make this easy on me, a-are ya Dash?" Lightning gasps, a momentary pain surging through her as a few bits of crushed, filth-smeared bones worked free from her rump. It was all downhill from there, as a thick log of manure squeezed forth with a moist shlurk, plopping messily atop the pile below. Still, she felt no less burdened than she had during her flight. "Geez... was ANY of you fit to be absorbed?" the pegasus teases, her tail swishing above the remains of her defeated rival. She felt the warmth rising off with a satisfied snicker, pausing to satisfy her ego for a moment before redoubling her efforts, squeezing hard. The next waste to come from her puckered hole seemed well-processed, the meaty bulk of her rival reduced to a 'clean', uniform sludge, creamy and lengthy as it coiled high upon the rest, continuing in a near-endless flow.
Eventually, Lightning stops for a breath, cutting off the waste as her tailhole clenches, her nose greeted with the stench of her rival's remains. "Gosh, you're--" the pegasus groans, covering her muzzle with a wing. "I almost feel bad for you, Dash. Almost," she emphasized with a smug grin. With the weight in her bowels all but subsided, she emptied the rest of the filth with minimal effort, a few feathery clumps proudly topping the towering mound of horse-muck. she glanced up at the sky, the main island of the academy just above, nopony to be seen - more importantly, nopony had seen her - she'd really, truly won!
Lightning saw no better way to seal her victory than a final insult to the digested pegasus. She lowered her rear slightly, tail bolting up once more as she surrendered to her final urge, showering Dash's foul remains with a musky torrent of mare piss. It splashed out behind her, drenching the semisolid pile, slowly turning it into a sopping mess, the pegasus too caught up in her own relief to care, tilting her head back and breathing a long, euphoric sigh. The stream would continue for a time, almost to become boring by the end of it. The wet sputtering turning to a noisy splash as the waste puddled behind her.
As she turned to gaze upon the soggy pile, her smugness faded as she saw the mound flecked with blue feathers, and hints of once-colorful hair lost amid the sludge. "Umm..." the pegasus stared for a moment, blushing, tensing. If anypony saw this, surely they could put the clues together and guess what she'd done. "Gotta bury the evidence," Lightning decided, turning to kick a few hooves of dirt atop her mess, the ground largely solid and unyielding, her plan resulting in little more than pebbles of dirt mixing with her own reeking mud, her hoof swishing through the filth on a particularly gross misstep. "Ugh, bad idea," she groans in disgust, wiping her hoof on the grass.
"Plan B!" Lightning declares, almost too loudly, gazing around warily, praying to Celestia that nopony stumbled upon her now. She sighted a few fallen twigs from the island's only tree, trotting over and seizing a sturdy one her her teeth, sighing as she turned back to face her filth. "I shuppose thish is the prishe for being the besht," she mutters around the stick, digging it beneath the moist ground beneath her waste, using whatever leverage she could to shift the pile a few feet toward the edge of the island. At best, a few solid clumps rolled and plummeted to the woods below. "Gah, this isn't working!" the pegasus whined with increasing frustration. She simply couldn't get enough precision.
Lightning tossed the sullied twig aside, gazing upon Dash's remains. They were noticeably her, at least to the informed eye. The rainbow strands and sky-blue feathers, even as filthy as they were wove a tale of betrayal most foul, in every sense of the phrase. She gulped nervously, disgusted by the only option that came to her stress-addled mind. She reached forward with a shaking hoof, pausing to consider - It was just too gross!
She had no other choice.
Shutting her eyes and turning away, Lighting Dust whined as she plunged her hoof into the steaming muck, feeling it seep into her fur. "Ew, eww!" she cried immaturely, scraping across the ground and flinging the filth aside. What didn't cling to her fur slid across the grass, slickened by itself, nearing the edge of the small island. "It's worth it," Lightning reminded herself, stepping forward and using her gross hoof to give a little push, sending the remnants of her rival on one last flight, falling through the skies to splatter somewhere in the forest below. All that remained was a smudge of brown across the leaves - not TOO conspicuous, she chuckled, glancing at her dirty hoof with a dismayed expression.
Her appetite largely slain by the sickening measures she'd taken to secure her secrecy, Lightning set about on cleaning up, wiping her hooves off in the grass, though a thin layer still stained her fur, smelling none too pleasant, and looking far from pretty. Wanting to avoid the barrack's showers for obvious reasons, the pegasus set sail to a perimeter island below a constant cluster of clouds, a small pond accumulated on its surface. It would do well for a quick soak, she decided, leaving the lingering scent of manure behind as she made good time toward the other island, flying easily without the added weight.
Splashing down in the cool water, Lightning finally had time to absorb her victory. She scrubbed her hooves firmly beneath the surface, wanting any trace of her misdeeds erased so she could emerge squeaky clean. "Ah, it's all gonna be a cakewalk from here," she giggles, feeling outright giddy as she considers the possibilities - Nobody could outshine her. Spitfire would see the extent of her talent, and she'd be made a Wonderbolt in no time! She'd be famous across Equestria, while Dash would be forgotten, dumped by ponykind like she'd been from Lightning's rump.
"Time to reap the benefits of being awesome," Lightning chuckles, flapping her way back to the barracks in time to assemble for afternoon exercises. She shakes the moisture from her fur as she lands, walking in with her head held high, tail waving behind her proudly as she struts past the others toward the captain. "20 laps complete, ma'am," Lightning Dust reports to the captain with a formal salute.
"Good!" Spitfire replies. "At least one of my star fliers is working hard this afternoon," she sighs, glancing at Dash's still-vacant, untouched bed. "We'll have to find you a new Wingpony, but... you have what it takes, Lightning Dust," she admits, "as long as you don't miss morning flight again." the captain glares. "Just don't crack under the pressure, alright?"
"Heh, don't worry ma'am, you can count on me!" Lightning nods, forming up among the others to take her rightful place at the top, her stomach gurgling loudly, missing lunch. Nopony would stand between her and her dream of being the best.
Posted by Reiku 9 years ago Report
Oh, I very much liked this!
I'm normally iffy on post-vore scat, and very off put by the pre-vore kind...but even so, this was great, I do love an author who's willing to make their vore nice and unpleasant for the prey. Definitely need more of that. I'll have to poke through your other works~
Posted by DethXev 9 years ago Report
I'm normally not into fanfics but Vidofinir makes them quite interesting and enjoyable...the cruelty to the prey is quite satisfying...I'm sure you will appreciate the other stories as well ;)
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Hehe, thanks to both of you! -Most- of my stories aren't big on the pre-vore scat and stuffs, but it IS there in a case or two. Apparently I can write it in a way that isn't totally disturbing, though x.x
Thanks for likin' the story though! Hope you enjoy some of the other stuffs c:
Posted by Eolwin 9 years ago Report
That was a very cute and kinky story mister pony ^,,^
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Hehe, thanks! It certainly was :3
Posted by YourGenericBrony 9 years ago Report
I loved this story! I'm going to upload my own lightning dust and rainbow dash story soon, I guess we both thought lightning makes a great pred, which she does! Pretty sure your story is better though, I loved the way it was written I liked the cruelty to the prey and the scat, and I normally don't like scat. Good works as always, keep it up!
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Thanks! I do apparently have a way with scat that doesn't offend people, so that's good >.>
Lightning Dust IS an awesome pred! Shame I can't think of anything else to write with her. I'd love to see your story when it's uploaded though ^^
Posted by silverspec 9 years ago Report
Great story. A little cruel for my tastes, but definitely still good.
Although I would've liked to see some resistance from Dash instead of, like none. lol.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Eh, she was injured! ^^'
That's my excuse, anyway. Glad ya liked it, though~
Posted by Aponymous 9 years ago Report
Good story. Rainbow Dash is best prey.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Agreed! It's such a blow to her ego to slosh away in somepony's stomach :3
Posted by Aponymous 9 years ago Report
Exactly. Good job Lightning Dust. B)
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Hehe, definitely! Though in all fairness, she'd make a darn good prey for the same reason >.>
Posted by Nikkidafox 9 years ago Report
Seeing my favorite pony being treated so terribly was... uncomfortable and I think that one of the strongest ponies on the show was way too weak here. But... it turned out well, personal preferences of the ponies aside. Excuse me while I cry for rainbow dash while masturbating to your story.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Heh, well Lightning got the drop on her, but I suppose she could've fought back more in hindsight x.x
But as for the fate of poor Dash, isn't part of the fun of vore seeing awful things happen to your favorite characters? >.>
Posted by silverspec 9 years ago Report
...yes !
Posted by Nikkidafox 9 years ago Report
No... the fun of vore is seeing the bitchy characters get violently killed.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Eh, that too!
For what it's worth, I have a story in the works that involves Dash eating a pony or two, as well as a certain gryphon >.> If I'm ever able to get off my butt and make that happen, you can look forward to it! c:
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
I'm gonna have to say that this story while doing what it sets out to do... makes no sense when apparently Twilight can literally SEE magical signatures and that would prevent Lightning Dust from getting away with this. Especially seeing as Rainbow Dash is pretty much one of the Most Valuable Ponies in Equestria even if it's downplayed. And as the Wonderbolts are MILITARY I don't think her being so violently murdered would ever go unpunished.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Well, thanks for the criticism, at least. Though I'll have to retort by saying Twi didn't see anything, nor did anypony else. Sure, it's a little dim of them to let this slip by, but less logical things happen in vore stories all the time, and nothing says Equestria didn't suffer from this, or that Dust wouldn't be found out and punished in the future.
In any case, I made the choice of silly vore over logical some time ago, since my attempt to stick to logic and reason led to a whole lot of boring, feral, 'hungry pred eats prey because hunger' scenarios. I'd much rather twist logic in favor of a fun story than stick to that.
In any case, I hope you enjoyed the read for what it was - a silly vorish scenario.
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
Sadly I really can't do that and apparently from a few discussions I've seen on other vore stories in similar veins not a lot of people can do that either. So, I'm afraid I cannot enjoy it for what it is due to the logical fallacy.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Well, if you can think of a logical way to have ponies eating each other, or any logical vore other than realistic pred/prey scenarios, I'm all ears. Sorry you didn't like it.
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
The logic fails in that nobody noticed her in all the time she would need to digest Dash, there's no chance in hell that nobody would go looking for them especially when if the beginning was to be believed Dash and Dust had already been fighting not to mention that somebody HAD To have seen them start fighting at the beginning. The entire thing makes no sense. SOMEBODY would have stopped her even if it took them eating her to do it.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
She snuck in after hours and digested her overnight. If we're getting into the technicalities of how long it would ACTUALLY take for a pony to digest another, then this story suffers the flaw of nearly all vore, in that it wasn't prolonged for days on end. But nobody wants to read that.
Yes, perhaps they'd have reason to suspect her. As I said, maybe she doesn't get away with it in the end. Perhaps it's discovered what she's done sometime after the writing was concluded, but again, nobody wants to read somepony going on trial for murder at the end of a vore story.
Addressing the point from earlier, Dust digesting such an important pony to Equestria isn't a fault either. If she dooms the world, so to speak, doesn't that only succeed in making her jealousy that much more dark, and her actions more evil?
Also, I don't understand how Dust eating Dash is wrong, but somepony stumbling across the two and eating Dust to rescue Dash would've been alright. That seems FAR less logical for me, especially in this militaristic setting where it seems she'd be put under arrest, not crammed down somepony's throat.
If you can tell me how you'd have seen this written, then I'd be interested to hear it. But I doubt any alternative would be nearly as much fun for all the others that DID enjoy reading the story.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Actually, scratch that. I like my story the way it is, and apparently so do others. I've said my piece, and so have you. Sorry you didn't like the story, but it's best to move on, at this point.
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
I'm going to accept your points and make logical counters now point by numbered point.
1: Actually I've seen several stories that are highly praised that do exactly that, I forget the author but, each of their stories is actually a multi chaptered thing where the pred only adds onto their currently digesting prey.
2: Again some people would actually enjoy this because as of this point this feels unfinished.
3: The problem with this is that Lightning Dust isn't Evil, or at least she isn't STUPID enough to not realize that dooming the world because of jealously isn't exactly worth it. How would she be a wonderbolt if their is no wonderbolts?
4: I never said they would have spared Dash I'm just saying they wouldn't have let it go ignored. I mean apparently there's quite a few griffons in Equestria there has to be at least one cadet there that'd take a crack at a plump pony filled pony. Honestly the Griffon thing would have made more sense as because of the fact that no matter how you dress it up I cannot let it slide due to the fact that my family has been Military since the early 1500s I cannot believe that NOBODY saw a damn thing and just let it happen no matter how lucky Lighting was or how careful you cannot do a FUCKING THING on a MILITARY INSTALLATION WITHOUT SOMEONE KNOWING. There's no FUCKING WAY.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Well, this story didn't set out to be a long, multi-chapter piece. I have plenty of other ideas I'd rather get to. Posting here on Eka's, it should seem obvious I'm here to write lewd things with a decent justification at best They aren't TRYING to be literary masterpieces. They're little more than above average fapping material, written and shared because it's my hobby. If you think this story is unfinished, write your own sequel. This is as far as I intend to take it.
Regarding your other point, this takes place in Equestria, not a modern military installation. I saw no cameras, no abundance of guards, and no security measures in the academy that would stop some pegasus from being eaten on a remote cloud. Meanwhile, you continue to elude the point that some other pony or gryphon snacking on the second-best candidate in the academy would make even less sense than what transpired in the story, yet you seem to think it would've made for a better ending.
At this point, I'm just baffled that this means so much to you that you'd argue about it so passionately. This story isn't an affront to your family's five-centuries of military background. It's a story about a colorful cartoon horse taking a dump on her rival before swallowing her whole. I think the illogical nature of the story goes FAR deeper than the academy's lax security.
In any case, my patience for arguing over the cartoon horses engaged in the illogical fetish is wearing thin at this point. If you can explain why Dash being eaten is a travesty, but gryphons doing the same thing is somehow just and logical, be my guest.
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
Allow me to clarify as I'm likely not coming across correctly, my main grievance isn't with Dash being the Prey it's the choice of Predator. With how fragile Dust ego seems as when in the show her badge is literally ripped from her because she's such an ego case she just looks to have died inside, it wouldn't make sense for her to do something that would villanise her in the eyes of everyone, seen or not. You cannot be the Most Awesome if everyone hates you, it's a simple fact.
I do think I'll be taking you up on your offer of allowing me to write a sequel and I will credit you and this conversation when I eventually get around to doing it.
The entire logical issue could have been completely fixed with a different predator probably some Griffon candidate as then there wouldn't be any issue with nobody seeing it as they couldn't touch said griffon for any reason due to risking an international incident, it would fill everything that could be considered a plot hole quite nicely with tons of international red tape and dietary habit excuses.
Hell from what was shown about the knowledge of Griffon Culture said Griffon could literally have said she did something to insult their honor in such a way they needed to kill her.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
I'll counter that by saying that, thus far, nobody DOES hate her, because she remains undiscovered. Maybe her victorious glee will fade, and she'll begin to feel guilt at some point, but I don't see how inventing gryphon politics would tie up alleged plot holes. As much as I'm a fan of gryphon vore, it just really doesn't work with this.
This is a story about Dust's bruised ego getting the better of her, in a moment of temporary insanity, and her managing to scrape by in getting away with something horrible. By adding on to it, it would seem to detract from everything I've built. Sure, perhaps justice ought to be served at one point, but every story needs an ending. For now, Dust is the predator. Dust wins.
That being said, I DO have an idea for a sequel of my own. Chances are I won't get around to writing it, however, as I feel this storyline is complete-enough, and have far more lengthy projects in the works.
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
At this point all I can really say is if you want to prove it prove it, but don't say this line...
"Chances are I won't get around to writing it, however, as I feel this storyline is complete-enough, and have far more lengthy projects in the works."
As everyone I've seen who has ever said that has been locked up in writer's block hell on their best stories and while I may not like THIS story due to my stated grievances and disappointment with the feeling of lacking. You do write very well and I would hate to see that happen.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Well, I've been stuck in the depths of writer's block for a few years now, only managing a story every few months at best, so I'd say I'm already there. That being said, I do think this was one of my better stories, at least, and I'm sure I put a lot more time and thought into it than there appears to be.
For the sake of argument, my perceived sequel does involve Dust winding up in a stomach, courtesy of Gilda the gryphon. In hindsight, my method of bringing her into the story would've introduced a definite plot hole in the fact that if Dash had time to speak in letters of her jealous flight partner to Gilda, enough that the gryphon would suspect her of Dash's disappearance, there's no way Dash's other friends would've been left without contact as they were in the show. That manner of plot hole, minor as it is, stops me from pursuing the possible sequel.
Posted by Camlio420 8 years ago Report
I've read this story from top to bottom seventy two times in the three months since I discussed this with you and your comment about how you described the plot hole makes me wonder exactly how you missed something like that because, I'm pretty sure Dash would in fact have written to her friends about her time in the academy if only to avoid dealing with Pinkie being crazy stalker pony, which she has been shown with incredible frequency to be.
And on the topic of Dash's other friends, if Pinkie's Senses are to be believed, she would have known something bad happened to Dash, and to not even mention that is a horrible plot hole in and of itself, as it's been shown that Pinkie knows if her friends are in trouble. She might not be able to get there right away cuz plot but, she would know.
Posted by Vidofinir 8 years ago Report
Are you seriously still on this? o.O
Even if Pinkie Sense means that she knew Dash was in danger, I wouldn't have to allude to that at all. She'd never have made it to the academy in time to be anything other than Lightning Dust's second-course.
Speaking of possible sequels, weren't you going to write one that tied up all my 'plot holes'? How's that coming along?
Posted by Camlio420 8 years ago Report
You never gave me express permission to do so, and I also did a lot of thinking in that three months and decided I really, really shouldn't be trying to fix everyone's stories though I should make people aware of the logical issues in the stories.
And you made another one in that if Pinkie brought up that Dash was in trouble I sincerely doubt that ANY of the other mane 5 would be sitting back idly while it went down, and twilight has been shown to be able to teleport with startling accuracy to places she's never even been before since she got her wings.
Posted by Vidofinir 8 years ago Report
I don't know what you have against bending logic to suit an illogical fetish. I doubt anyone wants me to write a sequel to this where Dust is arrested and brought before a military tribunal to pay for her crimes - that wouldn't be fun. If I were to revisit the idea at all, it would be for Gilda to swoop in and get revenge for her devoured friend, but she has no means of knowing what happened, ergo the story is done.
But if you still think you can wrap it up nicely, my exact words were "Write your own sequel." I can't give much clearer permission than that.
Posted by Vidofinir 9 years ago Report
Also, before hopping too far ahead, I just want to clarify what you meant by "if you want to prove it prove it".
If you mean to prove that the story is good as is, I've already tried to do so. If you want proof that I have bigger, better things in the works, I can provide, but would rather not do so here, at the end of a long string of counterarguments.
Posted by Speedyblupi 7 years ago Report
"I made the choice of silly vore over logical some time ago, since my attempt to stick to logic and reason led to a whole lot of boring, feral, 'hungry pred eats prey because hunger' scenarios."
Aw :(
I don't think "hungry pred eats prey because hunger" is boring.
Posted by Vidofinir 7 years ago Report
Naw, not necessarily, but it did lead me to a few too many flat stories and roleplays, compared to just saying 'screw logic' and doing that straightforward stuff AND sillier stuff.
In hindsight I don't think that's boring either, I just used to adhere to logic way too much in writing, when logic and vore really have no place together XP
Posted by Speedyblupi 7 years ago Report
"logic and vore really have no place together"
I think they do...
Most types of vore aren't logical, but I like the stuff that is.
Posted by Vidofinir 7 years ago Report
Well, logic works in that big things could eat little things, or wolves ought to eat deer (even if the inverse works well >.> ) and various other things. But I find myself leaning toward the less logical side of things anyway, like... ponies eating ponies of equal or greater size XD
Pretty much any interpretation of vore has its place though, can't think of a whole lot I wouldn't write and enjoy on some level :P