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Well here it is. Sorry for the delay, but I hope anyone who has had the patience to sit through this long-winded series will not be disappointed by the conclusion. (Weighing in at a hefty 10350 words, may I add!)
Like previous instalments, it includes themes of vore, female domination, fat admiration and body worship with a hungry bbw predator and her scrawny slave boy. It also features some much more explicit sexual content.
P. S. If you enjoy my work, please take a second of your time to leave a comment and let me know just a little about why you liked it. Vore is such a diverse fetish, and although I write primarily from my own interests, I want to know what are the elements that "do it" for the people find something of interest in my writing.
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Posted by Scion 9 years ago Report
this is awesome!
I really hope you do something where Gabrielle somehow eats a woman her size :D
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
Thanks for reading, I'm glad you enjoyed the finale. I don't know if I'd write such a story though, as I prefer a more realistic contrast in size between predator and prey.
Posted by Mad51 9 years ago Report
I don't even know where to begin. I had to spend like 20 minutes just mentally preparing myself for this I was so excited. Then 8 times I had to take a break cause clearly I was getting too exited. It was amazing. Bravo and thank you so much for sharing! I can't wait to see Gab again someday or another character from you!
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
Hopefully you found it worth the wait, your input with previous instalments was very helpful. I wanted there to be enough "meat" to the story that it would be one that people could come back to time after time. I think some people might be disappointed with the ending, but ultimately it's the story I wanted to tell from the beginning, and you can't please everybody.
Posted by Mad51 9 years ago Report
I'll confess - its really hard for me to read the ending - I think in the end - despite my preference being cold preds who are monstrous - you wrote Allan so well that I felt like I just went through a breakup haha. But this is definitely going to be one that I come back to again and again. Do you know what your next project will be?
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
At the moment there are a few main options. The first is a kind of "origin story" for Gabrielle, but I think I'll probably give the character a little bit of a rest before writing that. The other options are completely new scenarios. An incredibly brief summary of those would be:
A) A guy working for a mysterious company meets his boss. She has some interesting plans for him.
B) A kind of medieval setting, where a servant falls asleep while making his (mini-giantess) queen's bed, she finds him still there when she retires for the night.
C) Some kind of sci-fi setting where humans where humanity had been created as a slave-species to terraform the planet. Some kind of space anomaly however kept the master species, a strict matriarchy, out of the solar system for thousands of years. The story would take place after the master species returned to the planet in the modern-ish day, and fairly effortlessly retook it using advanced technology, but made an effort to keep the human culture etc. largely preserved as a kind of tourist attraction. Territory and positions of great power would have been divided up amongst the say... 200ish females of the other species who live in luxurious mansions attended by human slaves. I'm toying with the idea of a new global currency where all humans belong to one of the aliens or another and are living coinage, their value measured by how useful or favoured they are by their lords.
Posted by Mad51 9 years ago Report
I confess the first 2 sound incredible. The last one would be amazing if you were planning on doing a long running series - since your so good at world building. But it is a commitment.
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
Yeah, I was thinking I'd probably do a one-off or two before getting into another big project. I'd want to flesh out the setting a bit more before starting on it anyway. I'm just worried the first two ideas might be retreading the same ground too much though.
Posted by Mad51 9 years ago Report
Don't worry about cover the same ground - usually in these communities people want a lot of the same thing just in different packaging. Haha.
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
That's true, I'd just hate to become too formulaic.
Posted by Mad51 9 years ago Report
At least you have a winning formula to fall back on.
Posted by Argh 9 years ago Report
Absolutely love it. She's so cruel and teasing. Wish there was an epilogue of her the next day, taking stock of how much fat she gained, but besides that, it's perfect!
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
Since publishing, I've definitely considered writing a short epilogue. But at the time of writing, I thought that as this particular story has always been told from Allan's perspective, the series should end with him. That's not to say there won't be more to Gabrielle's story though.
Posted by straightup2006 9 years ago Report
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"Allan realized the ultimate truth of the situation: 'A Girl's Gotta Eat,'" How cheeky of you, to end it with that line! I knew that's how you were going to end it--I just did! But, at any rate, I had been anticipating this final chapter for a little while now.
I don't often comment on vore stories, but you seem to seek an honest critique from your audience for improvement, and I can't help but oblige. I tend to enjoy stories with length, because I like to build excitement within myself, and don't want to feel "rushed" to get my mental nookie.
So the first half of my critique is about length. And, since you mention that vore is a diverse fetish, the second half is about your use of themes, and my interests, which I consider to be fairly "mainstream" from the perspective of your typical soft vore fan.
What I often look for is something not "too long" but not so short, that I can finish it in five minutes. Stories like these are ones that I consider my perfect "middle ground" erotica. I find that I can usually finish a chapter from "A Girl's Gotta Eat" in one session, feeling sufficiently fulfilled. And I don't mean this negatively, or positively. I get a good mental picture of the characters, of the world they're in, and a fair amount of plot without having to invest a lot of time to complete the story.
An example of what I personally consider a long story, is something like what Indighost writes. Scratchel's work can sometimes be quite hefty in length (though Scratchel's work is considerably more varied in its vore-themes) but Indighosts' have been by far the longest I've read and enjoyed (plus, his themes tend to be more closely aligned with my own: BBWs, huge tits, size play, object swallowing, etc). With his stories, I end up spent before I've even finished 1/4th of the chapter, so I have to return to the same one multiple times before I actually complete it. In my mind, I refer to stories like that "erotica epics," haha. The drawback to some of the "EEs," however, is I can lose my arousal in the presence of the sheer quality of the writing, and I'm left standing in the fog of my admiration, instead of what I started reading it for, hahaha. There are more stories out there by other skilled authors I am not mentioning--who rightfully deserve my attention--but for the sake of us all, I have left out. (Okay, here's some because I feel bad, and not all fall in the EE category I described: Bitter, Vir, 4ofSwords, sometimes Sibon13, SkitchCougar, 13Master13, etc.) IM me if you'd like to know more. I'm not super public about this kind of stuff.
To comment on the themes of "A Girl's Gotta Eat,"
The pegging.
I kinda glossed over the pegging part, since that doesn't really get my goat, but I also understand that in the subtext of BSDM and domination, it really does it for other people. Since the story was all ABOUT domination, it fit well with the narrative, even if it didn't press my buttons.
I really liked the size play.
There's a scene where Allan rubs Gabe's back that I enjoyed a lot, because of the way you contrast the size difference between the two. The way you described her poking, and prodding herself while Allan was covering her vast expanse was fantastic; I loved every bit of that.
When Gaberielle consumes him...
I enjoyed the struggle, and all, but I was sorely disappointed by that Allan's consumption was treated as "end game," when what I enjoy the most about soft vore is the experience inside. With so much emotion, I was surprised by lack of dialogue from within her, and description of what it felt like to have him trapped in her stomach. For me, I tend to enjoy stories where the prey ends up inside the predator and describes the surroundings of the stomach, and what's going on inside her, for both parties involved. I find doubly titillating when the predator and prey have some way to communicate with each other during this phase where the prey is entombed from within. I'm not particular about HOW they communicate with each other, because I like to see how creatively the author handles that; that's practically my favorite part besides the description of the woman (since I'm hetero). For example, in Scratchel's 'The Game' Abigail swallows one of the smaller women by mistake, and the other one has to practically shove her face into Abigail's gut to hear her, so that she can instruct Abigail on how to handle the situation. Soft vore, for me, has been about what the prey is doing inside the predator, and how the predator/prey is coping with it (whether either party is afraid, enjoying it, intrigued, startled, etc). I'm not big on the obvious fact of what it would actually BE like inside somebody else--which would obviously be fucking excruciating, painful, and possibly gorey. I actually don't read anything that has even the slightest amount of gore in it. The furthest I'll go is a slight amount of blood, and that's a real test of my fortitude. On that side of soft vore, I honestly prefer a subtlety; where the whole painful part of it is, and the writer just uses euphemisms like, "the hard features of her belly softened," and things like that.
At any rate, Glargicus, I did thoroughly enjoy the final chapter, as well as the story as a whole. I'm most critical on the things I enjoy, so I hope I haven't offended you in any way, because I'm definitely looking forward to your next work. Thanks for writing; the community could use an additional writer that's receptive to his audience--and not just in the erotic scene, but in all art forms.
Posted by Mad51 9 years ago Report
It seems everyone wants an epilogue from gabes perspective.
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
I'll definitely get around to that soon. I'm just a little burned out from writing most of this story in one night. Also I need to be in the right environment to write erotica, I find it hard to do it with my housemate around as I get really nervous of being "walked in on". There'll definitely be some fondling and measuring of her new curves and probably some hints as to where her story is headed next. Is there any other content you'd really like to see in a short epilogue?
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
Thanks for taking the time to write such detailed feedback, I really, really appreciate it. I'm sorry you found the ending less than satisfying, I tried to make the digestion a not so gruesome experience, more of a kind of direct absorption that happened to take place inside Gabrielle. I think with a fetish like this you can't really please everyone, but I tried to keep the stuff that isn't everybody's cup of tea, such as the pegging or digestion confined to single paragraphs to make it easier to skip over, like I skip over scat content in other stories. Something Im not quite sure about in your feedback though, is you said you enjoy descriptions of the surroundings etc when the prey is inside the pred, but also you don't enjoy descriptions of what it's like, could you please clarify that?
Posted by gzilla 9 years ago Report
The ending was awesome.
I thought the build up to the vore bit was kinda long. Especially given it is part of a 5 part series.
Posted by glargicus 9 years ago Report
Well, I didn't initially intend for it to be as long as it turned out to be, but as I was writing it there was just one other little thing or another.