This...could use some work. It's a good first effort but it has it's problems. Noticed a lot of typos and run-on sentences, so you should proofread your next part over and over before posting it.
That was a great first story I really enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to more ^_^ My advice would be to get someone to proof read it, Its hard to edit your own stuff to start off with. Extend the vore and digestion scenes, as they are the real meat of the story so to speak :p And just have fun
That was lovely story, but maybe she was little bit to egar as I think he might have agreed to let her eat him if she had taken things more slowly. :)
But what else are you planning.
Thanks for the comment! Right now I'm about 3/4 of the way done with one story. There was another one that I was working on but lost it. I might work on rewriting that after I finish the one I'm working on right now.
Posted by spion13 9 years ago Report
Great story :-)
Please continue
Posted by PregFan10 9 years ago Report
Thank you! I have a couple of other stories in the works right now. I'm hoping to have them up soon
Posted by Zagine 9 years ago Report
This...could use some work. It's a good first effort but it has it's problems. Noticed a lot of typos and run-on sentences, so you should proofread your next part over and over before posting it.
Posted by PregFan10 9 years ago Report
Alright, thanks for the heads up. I'll attempt to be more diligent about that with my future works
Posted by Straxacore 9 years ago Report
That was a great first story I really enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to more ^_^ My advice would be to get someone to proof read it, Its hard to edit your own stuff to start off with. Extend the vore and digestion scenes, as they are the real meat of the story so to speak :p And just have fun
Posted by rugli 9 years ago Report
That was lovely story, but maybe she was little bit to egar as I think he might have agreed to let her eat him if she had taken things more slowly. :)
But what else are you planning.
Posted by PregFan10 9 years ago Report
Thanks for the comment! Right now I'm about 3/4 of the way done with one story. There was another one that I was working on but lost it. I might work on rewriting that after I finish the one I'm working on right now.
Posted by rugli 7 years ago Report
Are you planning sequel to this one?
Posted by PregFan10 7 years ago Report
I would like to get to it eventually, but college work has eating up most of my time. :\