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Author: 100154
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I'm looking at finishing this story soon so that I may do others that I've come up with or have be requested. But I'm not sure where to take it so I would like to hear your thoughts on it. I've got two ideas from Groblek, right now both of which I think would be an awesome way to rap up this story but I can't decide which I should do. They are:
1) Sarah's obsessed with being massively pregnant and takes all six, knowing that this will make the couples unable to resume their old relationships for the next lifetime, possibly making that another punishment. Along with making the pregnancy longer than normal.
2) Sarah doesn't want to be quite as pregnant as the last time, and gets to help from Kelly. One of them takes the men, and the other the women, ending up with two sets of identical triplets, and expecting that their families will become very close indeed when they grow up - possibly with Sarah and Kelly joking about planning the re-weddings already.
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Posted by DresdenQ 9 years ago Report
excellent!
Posted by DresdenQ 9 years ago Report
I think both would be an awesome way to rap up the story, but my gut reaction leans slightly toward option #2
Posted by Groblek 9 years ago Report
I'm once again glad to have helped with this project. I like the way you've taken this.
While I sent my suggestions as to where to go next privately, I may as well start off the conversation here. I'd suggest option 2 (by the way, I think you mean two sets of triplets, I had a typo when I sent you my suggestions, and I think that carried over)
My reasons for that are that I really like the friendship you've got going between Kelly and Sarah, and I think scenes with them compairing how the changes in each of their babies as the parents regress could be a lot of fun. I also think that this would allow a fun and different perspective of the "inside the womb" portion of the story, showing one set of triplets growing from friends/acquaintances into very close siblings. If I were writing it, I'd have Sarah unbirth the women and make one of them the POV character for that part. Since they're starting out at more than twice their former children's ages, she could remember their lives a bit longer than Kailyn, long enough to really understand what was happening to them - especially if they start out looking very different and steadily become more alike even before they regress far enough to start forgetting.
So, there are my thoughts, hopefully others will share their own.
Posted by 100154 9 years ago Report
Thanks for your thought's. With regard's to the unbirthing in either case do you think the story would alone for a willing unbirth? Though with the current setup I guess it would be unadvised, but interesting if it could be made to work.
Posted by Groblek 9 years ago Report
Hmm, with the setup you've given, I think it would be difficult to have the parents go willingly, and certainly not all of them. That said, you haven't fleshed them out much, I could possibly see one or two of them willingly going to join their children, but I think they'd need a demonstration even to believe what happened. Though if Sarah had detailed enough ultrasound photos showing the teens regress and change into her babies, she might be able to convince the parents of what had happened. But even if you set it up so that she offers them a chance to rejoin their children as her babies, I can't see all of them agreeing, which leaves you having to either let them go or taking some of them unwillingly. At that point, I'm not sure it would work very well. I think a willing scene would be better as another story in the same universe. The hard part is coming up with a good motivation for someone becoming a baby again willingly and losing their memories for years if they haven't had it happen before and can be sure they'll get them back.
Posted by Thatvikingguy 9 years ago Report
i would like option 1
Posted by 100154 9 years ago Report
Ok is there anything special you'd like to see if I write option 1?
Posted by Thatvikingguy 9 years ago Report
No not really ,I like how you and Groblek do it so I'm just curious how you would write it.