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Three ponies decide to take a midnight walk through the park for various reasons. The results happen to all be the same.
So... I've been umm-ing and ahh-ing about what to write a fic about for Skyheart's next escapade. Tried out a few ideas, sort of didn't go places... So, yeah, enjoy this non-Skyheart related fic while I still work on what to do next. At least I hope you enjoy it. This one was as much oral vore practice as a fic to be honest.
Now I've started this quick tag thing I might as well keep it up as the most relevant tags: Oral Vore, Digestion, Disposal. Yep, bit more straightforward. Disposal is after the final line break as usual, so don't read that far if you don't like that stuff.
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Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
And, this is the point where I unfollow you.
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
Is this really that low quality? Damn. Okay, please elaborate... because that is a very grave comment that needs qualifying...
Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 9 years ago Report
It isn't low quality at all! I for one happened to like the mtiple scenarios! Don't listen to them! It was fine!
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
If this is lowering my standard already, then maybe I should remove it. I appreciate the kind words, Smax, but I stand by honesty being the best policy. If it's terrible, I should axe it... Can you tell me for sure that this isn't atrocious?
Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 9 years ago Report
It's not! This is fine. Is it Pulitzer-level stuff? No, of course not. But it is a good story. And you shouldn't let one idiot's inconsiderate comment spoil your work.
Posted by Camlio420 9 years ago Report
Honestly I feel as if your stories are just becoming repetitive and follow the same pattern of the prey is always holding the idiot ball because if the Guard wasn't then there wouldn't have been a story.
If the Griffon in the second Skyheart story wasn't then she would be DEAD and I'm sorry but, when stories rely on characters litterally being retarded to get the main character by then I'm afraid I cannot in good conscious follow the writer of said story.
This is because with the way these comment systems work it doesn't matter how constructive an opinion or review I could make a bunch of people who don't give two shits about writer integrity as long as they can have a quick wank to fetish porn and will harass me and tell you it doesn't suck when if you look at it from a narrative perspective, yes it truly does.
Which I will admit would work if you haven't established a storyline for your characters and as such cannot fall back on the it's just porn go with it excuse.
But, as I've said I'm likely wasting my time with this comment as I'm going to be spammed by people who give false positives just because they cannot get their hands out of their pants for ten minutes.
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
I've replied in a PM.
Posted by 48th agent 9 years ago Report
I've not read any of Cain's other stories, so I can't speak for those.
That said, this one didn't seem to rely on the stupid ball too much, the first part is, while a bit silly, at least a little bit believable. People ask for stupid things all the time, and if you're in his position, you can't really just say 'do it yourself.' I mean, it's not like he had a reason to suspect her anyway.
While it could have been more interesting from a narritive perspective, I think it's fine enough for its purpose; you can't pretend this was really anything besides a wank story. ( Which, I'll admit, I had a lovely wank to despite its lack of interesting and smart moments. )
Posted by Base54 5 years ago Report
Okay, so I know this is super god-damn late, but I will still reply.
Your point is a bit moot and doesn't have much of a leg to stand on because you fail to understand the circumstances of some of the stories. In the first story, Count did not hold the idiot ball in Skyheart's first story because he simply was not expecting to have his face smeared in an ass because in a setting like that, quite literally no-one would expect such a thing to happen, it's just too bizarre. And by the time Cane did realize some shit was about to happen, it was far too late.
Now for the second story, I will give you a point for that one because Grymwald should have killed her on the spot because she was a pirate, but lust is a powerful emotion so you can't really blame him for it.
Posted by SmaxTheDestroyer 9 years ago Report
So was that just a generic changeling? Or does she have a name?
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
She isn't exactly a generic Changeling, but I don't know if I'll reuse the character, so I haven't actually named her. For the story I felt it made sense to keep her as "The Changeling" given that she was also "The mare" and "The guardspony".
Posted by Negator 9 years ago Report
There is absolutely nothing wrong with the story at all. It's a rather interesting idea too, and I did enjoy it. :)
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
I'm really glad to hear that, Negator. Thanks for the kind words.
Posted by Mariofanboy64 9 years ago Report
Don't you dare delete this. I love it! It's very nice to see pony vore that's not skyheart for a change. I'd love to see some more oc vore storys. You're vore sequences are amazing.
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
Thanks, Mario. I'll leave it up for sure. That first comment just shook me. I'm glad that you like vore without Skyheart, I'll definitely be doing some more little one-off vore fics with different OCs. And there will definitely be more vore sequences for sure. Thanks very much for the comment!
Posted by Mariofanboy64 9 years ago Report
Could I maybe get my oc in there somehow. Even if he is backgroud I'd die to have him in one of my favorite authors storys! If not I understand
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
Well... since you're the first person to ask me to... I'll definitely think about it! Especially with you buttering me up like that. Heh. Give me all the details on your OC that I need to know, preferably by PM, and if I make a story he'll fit in, then I'll definitely consider using him. Best I can promise, as if your OC is some super alicorn from outer space then that'd be a bit of a tough one to work anywhere.
Posted by Mariofanboy64 9 years ago Report
Hahah he's simple. I made him like a Background pony. Basicly an anti alicorn oc. I'll pm you. Omg thanks so much.
Posted by donutbrittle 9 years ago Report
I wish you'd tag "unwilling". It's the most important tag in my book.
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
Oh! Sorry about that. I tagged Unwilling in the last two, but I must of forgotten here. I know the importance of that for some people and I apologise. I'll be sure to remember to do so in future.
Posted by donutbrittle 9 years ago Report
Thanks so much!
Posted by TheGreatSako 9 years ago Report
"Now I've started this quick tag thing I might as well keep it up as the most relevant tags: Oral Vore, Digestion, Disposal."
Oh man, if you're gonna keep churning these out that's gonna be awesome.
This was really nice, I'm seriously loving your stuff. I'm a little disappointed that the Changeling didn't interact with her meals like Skyheart does though. Like, when she taunts the creature she just turned into shit as she's disposing of them, that's really tasty stuff. You write good dialogue, I'd say you should keep that up!
Posted by Cainiam 9 years ago Report
Heh, digestion joke. Thanks! I do have a thing for cruel preds, so you can expect more taunting down the line for sure, and not just from Skyheart. I'm glad to hear you like my dialogue! Thank you very much for the lovely comment.
Posted by SilverHornedDeer 9 years ago Report
I really enjoyed how it's been a changeling all along but it's not totally clear until the very end. Really clever. A bit predictable thanks to the hints, but it's probably not supposed to be a mindblowing plot twist.