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A hermaphroditic athlete has her eye on a fellow student who moonlights as a handyman for the campus athletics program.
Hijinks ensue. Contains cockvore.
Posted by AegisOfRoses 7 years ago Report
*Shudders* so good! Be more confident in yourself, this is really nice! I suggest going into more detail with his entrapment, and try to shy away from leaving him in one place for too long. This definitely deserves a redo, mainly because permanent entrapment is legit my favorite thing, and there is not enough cock vore like that. Very nice, more detail on each scenario, and more scenarios!
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Posted by OERN 7 years ago Report
Unfortunately for this story in regards to it being *permanent* that won't be the case. I've had the next part in my head for a while and that would go against what I planned. *Frequent* entrapment would be a good descriptor though.
That said, I really appreciate the feedback and you've encouraged me to actually write out the next part now. When I get the time I'll see to that. In regards to redoing this part though, what more detail would you want to be added? Sure it's a little short but I didn't think it needed to be any more detailed.
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Posted by AegisOfRoses 7 years ago Report
So, all the time spent in her jockstrap, how that was a very long segment? That level of detail, for every different thing she does to him. It's a hard thing to do, and I only just recently figured out how to get so much detail, but just try to really describe what you're seeing in your own head as you play it out.
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Posted by OERN 7 years ago Report
Well yeah. Truth be told I think I wrote this at like six in the morning before passing out, and I was just trying to wrap it up. When I write the second part I'll look into redoing the first part.
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Posted by AegisOfRoses 7 years ago Report
Looking forward to it XP
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