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Postby Monadora » Mon Oct 31, 2022 6:25 am

Another story featuring a set of amazon twins eating a friend.

Linda and the Twins

Linda knocked on her friend’s door maybe she would know what to do. Tears streamed down her face when her mother told her that she was planning to feed her to a neighborhood anthro as punishment for her bad grades. It didn’t seem real. She stood on the front porch and the door opened. A tall athletic amazon girl her age answered. She throws herself into the amazon's arms. Linda only came up to the other girl’s breasts. “Dory it’s awful my mom she...” Linda said pressing into the other girl.
“Slow down.” The amazon said her arms out to the sides, “I’m Dora, Dory is upstairs.”
Linda stepped back embarrassed she’s mistaken the twins. In their uniforms, they couldn’t be distinguished. The blushing girl walked upstairs to the twin's room. Inside Dory was stretching after practice down to her underwear. The view of the bulge of her cock only distracted Linda for a moment.
“Dory, my mom. She said, my grades were too low. And now I’m just-food. She going to stripe and feed me to the first pred she finds. What am I going to do?” Linda said going up to Dory who stopped her stretching to embrace her friend.
“It’ll be okay. We just need to think about it, okay? I’m not going to just let you get fed to some random pred. I promise.” Dory said
Dora chimed in leaning against the door frame, “Easier said than done, once a guardian decides on disciplinary vore your food. It’s just a matter of when.”
Linda started balling getting Dory’s sweaty tank top wet with tears. “Dory if I’m already food I want you to eat me.”
Dory said, “What! You're my friend I can’t just eat you like some random gut slut at a festival.”
Linda looked up hopelessly, she could feel Dory starting to go a little hard at the idea. The amazon blushed.
“If you won’t, I will,” Dora said already hard and eyeing Linda predatorily as her twin shot her a hard look. “Don’t give me that look. I’m not stealing a girlfriend of yours, She’s prey now and if you were her friend you’d give her a proper send-off.
Dora looked her sister in the eyes. “You’ll regret it if just some stranger takes her. If you let me have her we can make it the most pleasurable experience of her life.”
Linda felt confused, “What do you mean?”
Dory put her hands on her friend's shoulder, “It’s the prey's sympathetic pleasure response. If a predator experiences pleasure the prey can be affected by it too. Supposedly it’s evolved to keep prey docile and compliant. But if the predator experiences climax then it will dramatically increase the speed of digestion.”
Linda said, “Dory, I don’t want to be displayed in some shop. Please.” her hand went to amazon’s leggings as she slide them down enough to free her cock. Gently she moved her hands up her amazon friend’s well-defined abs before she looked up into Dory’s eyes. “Can you give me one last fuck. You were always so gentle with me. Make me a part of you. I’m just food now.”
Dory’s eyes got a hungry glint to them as her prey rubbed her cock. Her prey turned and started to walk to her twin sister. Her accomplice in so many things and eternal rival. She couldn’t take watching another have her prey. “Prey doesn’t wear clothes.” With one step she seized the human. Striking with a possessive kiss staring her rival down. Her twin nodded her support. Peeling her clothes off not moving too fast. Until her hands started massaging the human's breasts. The prey let out a gasp as her shirt and bra were torn. Dory bit her neck marking her prey claiming dominance and her sister tore her skirt as she started to speak.
“You’ve never really seen us working together. When it comes to amazon the biggest tend to dominate in a contest of who breeds who. There are upsets and exceptions. Our father is shorter than our mother but she’s just more dominant it’s what makes her an amazon breeding stud. If Dory and I work together we can subdue just about anyone who’s challenged us. Linda could feel herself growing wet even as Dora pulled her pants down to her ankles. Dory had her strong hands around her prey’s breasts. Teasing her nipples making her moan. Dora put her hands on Linda’s ass and without a need to say anything she lifted their plaything enough for her sister to get her cock in before dropping her down to the hilt.
Linda let out a guttural moan she would never have guessed she could make. “It’s too much.”
“Food is meant to be used,” Dory said as she started slowly pumping into her friend-turned-plaything. After spending her life trying to not live the stereotype that amazons start to get rough if they lose themselves to their passions it was too much to hold back.
Dora loved the hard-edge look in her sister's eyes. She wanted to give her a good head start while having a little fun. Dora lowered Linda Campbell into a spit roast position, “Any last words before we break you piggy?”
Linda wished she could think more clearly. Dora tilted her head back cock at her mouth. Her whole world was the cock that filled her. “Dory, thank you.” Dora didn’t give her any more time as he pushed her cock deep into their playthings throat. Together they used the girl between them like a sex toy. Working in sync they pushed and pulled. Linda couldn’t think with was too much she was going to pass out. Without skipping a beat Dory pulled up back giving her air. Pulled her upright. Biting her neck. Dora stepped forward pushing the girl between them as her questing cock pushed into Linda’s already full pussy. She screamed with pleasure.
Dora hadn’t shared a girl like this with her sister in too long. It wasn’t a time for words. She looked her sister in the eye then bit Linda on the neck staking her claim on their sub. Dory just have a snarl and doubled her pace.
Linda tried to say something anything. Ask them to hold up. She’d learned in sex ed that amazons had a talent to stretch their lovers and have them spring back tighter. But this was far too real for her. She felt like her brain was draining away from the force of the fucking. There was always a thought in her mind wondering what it would feel like to be broken completely by an amazon and this was it. Her vision felt like it was blearing her last conscious act was to reach up to touch her friend's face she was glad that she would go to feed her friend. Dory gave a grown and Linda felt the twitching cock start to spurt gobs of sticky amazon cum into her. A shudder ran through Linda’s body as her belly distended slightly as she was filled. Her mind was gone from any want but more pleasure.
Dora pulled out having lost the contest. She came back to herself first. Watching her sister lift Linda. The mind-broken human prey got bent at the hips and she started to swallow her ass first. Dora sat cross-legged gently stroking her wet cock watching as her sister ate one of her friends in a frenzy. Dory lifted and Linda slid down first her ass then her torso up to her breasts. One big gulp and Linda started to bulge Dory’s belly. Dora looked into Linda’s pleasure-glazed eyes as she shuddered from her first belly orgasm. One last mighty swallow and Linda's arms and legs disappeared as she shifted into to final resting place.
Dory was coming back to herself. Her cock and belly were satisfied. She could feel her friend's orgasms as reverberated sympathetic pleasure coursed through her. She could see her twin still unsatisfied looking up at her. Dory could feel herself blushing as she saw her mother in the doorway recording on her phone.
“Mom, what are you doing? This is private.” Dory said as she covered her breasts but was not able to reach over her belly she’s have to hope that her girth saved her from embarrassment.
“I wanted to record this for posterity. I don’t get to see my daughters getting along anymore. Besides, it's the first time I’ve recorded one for your meals. Plus it was hard to ignore you two. I could hear you from downstairs. It’s sweet that you shared a meal. I’m going to send this to your Aunt Cynthia she’s going to love it.” their Mother Aretha said proudly. “Honestly I don’t know why you're so shy. In fact, Dora since you’ve let your sister ruin her appetite on family meal night you're going to be punished.”
“Why me?” Dora asked not covering herself at all.
“Because every time your sister feels embarrassed about something it’s always you who’s put her up to it. Here why don’t you take one of my quick digestion potions? Your father goes through a lot of work to bring home a good meal. Dory where do you want to dispose of your meal.” Aretha asked.
Dory couldn’t keep her blush off her face, “She would want to go to the community garden.”
“That’s sweet. Dora go to the medicine cabinet. Get the potion. Then take your sister to the Compost drop-off point. That’s step one of your punishment.” Aretha said as she hit send on the video.
As Dora walked out of the door past her taller mother she wined, “Why am I the only one getting punished?”
Aretha gave her daughter a commanding smack on the ass as she passed, “She will but not until she takes care of her friend. Learn some empathy for your sister. Goddesses know I don’t know how you two didn’t get eaten poaching other girls this far.”
Dory looked away. Her mother narrowed her eyes in suspicion. “Anything you’d like to say, young lady?”
“If someone came around angry then the other would get them,” Dory said feeling sheepish even as her friend twitched and writhed inside her gut.
“Well, at least I’m not the only one depopulating the city. Relax. Don’t be so serious your leaving for college at the end of summer. You’re already more advanced a pred and breeder than most of your peers.” She gave her daughter a hug from the side as her predator’s belly was getting in the way. “I’m going to miss punishing you two.”
Dora came back. Aretha said,
“Dora I want you to record your sister as part of her punishment, and If your not home by the time your father gets home with dinner she’s going to have a field day with you two.” The twins made their way to the door each pulled on a long outside coat and sandals but nothing else. “Also hold hands on the way, it’s precious.”
Dory felt the former friend turned food into her stomach shift and writhe. The sympathetic pleasure feedback loop makes dory feel her prey’s orgasm. She was sure that a human would have been weak-kneed but all she could feel was the liquid from her pussy slowly making its way down her leg. Dora offered her hand and Dory took it. “You look really pregnant.” Dora jests.
Dory just sighed. Walking around the house was one thing. But her belly wasn’t exactly helping balance. I didn’t know how the full pred walking videos on porn signs could be real. Maybe it’s just practice. The potion didn’t really taste good or bad. But she was forced to clutch her belly as best she could one hand around her sisters. Her stomach felt like it was vibrating. Her orgasms went from low grade to an internal build-up of pressure until she squirted from her vagina onto the sidewalk.
“Whoa, having fun there Sis,” Dora asked with a grin on her face.
Dory eyed her back, “The next chance I get I'm going to rape your ass raw.”
“Like you could even,” Dora said confidently that she wasn’t in danger at this moment.
Dory could feel that her friend was gone now having shifted from her stomach to her bowels. It felt great but she wished she could have interacted more with her prey. The feral feeling of power did feel great. And then there were the orgasms. Dory had never really experimented with walking around with sex toys in but if it felt half as good she’d consider trying it.
Together they reached the walk to the neighborhood composting site. There was a container for kitchen scraps, a little shed filled with all sorts of free things people had donated, and then there was the “Pred tower” an open-air outhouse elevated so more than one pred could drop off their donations.
Stepping up the stairs Dory mounted the Seat. Her twin looked up watching the donation about to be made and started stroking her own cock.
“This thing is way too high up,” Dory complained trying to breathe deeply so she could release her friend's remains.
Dora chimed in. “I think it’s perfect for putting on a show very educational.” Her masturbation picked up pace.
“Your such a pervert,” Dory said as she started releasing. As her friend started coiling out the stimulation from the increased sensitivity made her bite her lip.
“What’s wrong? Having a little too much fun up there? We’re going to be in trouble. Do you want to watch me be punished? Your such a naughty sister.” Dora couldn’t help dirty talking her sister as she masturbated in the middle of her neighborhood watcher her sister releasing a girl they were both fucking 20 minutes ago.
Dory’s shrinking gut was bringing her more pleasure than she thought. She was a moaning mess her pussy dripping, her asshole twitching as more and more slid out of her.
Dora watched the pile growing her sister got more and more excited. “I’m so close. This is so hot. I’m going to cum over the friend you just shit out. If you don’t cum on her first.”
It was too much. Dory squirted as she felt the skull pass out onto the pile as her twin's cock twitched and squirted over the pile.
After they both came to their senses. Dory slowly started wiping herself being gentle while her twin took a provided reach clamp grabber and picked up the skull. After the skull was retrieved she started adding woodchips on top to create a barrier to keep flies down in the neighborhood. A minute or two and there was just a nice pile of wood chips. Humans that didn’t live with amazon really couldn’t appreciate the importance of keeping post-human waste from making a mess. Sanitatoin was improtant after all. Dora also scratched a mark next to the countless others over the structure a growing testament to the amazon’s appetites.

They walked home hand in hand. “Disposal never gets any easier,” Dory said leaning into her twin.
“You always put on a good show though. I know that Mom and Dad probably have some kind of punishment waiting but I love you. I’m glad we got the share a girl before college. I love you.” Dora said blushing a little.
“Love you too,” Dory said wishing she could walk faster but too sensitive too.
Along the street, they walked naked, holding hands, coats thrown over their shoulders. They saw Linda’s Mother Jogging down the street. Dora waved with a smirk on her face.
“Girls are you out advertising yourselves? I might be in the market for a breeding stud or two to help me get pregnant again. And well you know that a good breeding is the key to youth.” The trim milf said no idea that she was less than a block from her former daughter.
“Our parents have us going on a few family trips but we can find a few days this summer before we head off,” Dora said.
Dory his her blushing as she noticed the skull that Dora was holding behind her back.
“We’re always happy to help populate our neighborhood,” Dora said her sister's hand in hers.
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Re: New Writer First Time Vore Works Seeking Feedback.

Postby EloquentOrc » Mon Nov 07, 2022 11:24 am

For a first time this definitively wasn’t bad, I enjoyed it.
It has nice character dynamics and an interesting hook in this amazon world of yours.

The descriptions of the vore are decent at painting an image in the reader's mind.

Here is a few things that could use work in future stories:

The English is somewhat wonky, perhaps it isn’t your first language.
Maybe there is someone you can ask to proofread it before posting? Improving your english would be the most straightforward way to improve your stories.

The stiry frontloads a relative lot of exposition and a lot of is characters telling each other something they already know. It’s a way to inform the reader, but it feels kinda unnatural.
Maybe spread it out more through the story. We don’t need to know everything from the beginning.

With some practice I think you could write some really good vore stories.
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Re: New Writer First Time Vore Works Seeking Feedback.

Postby Monadora » Mon Nov 14, 2022 8:23 am

Place holder for was was the first draft of my first story now up in my gallery as a work in progress.
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Re: First Time Vore Works Seeking Feedback. Third Draft Post

Postby Monadora » Mon Dec 05, 2022 7:23 am

Found some help with editing from a beta reader. Here's the first edited part. Turns out that editing a story, moving house, and dealing with year-end holidays while your job experiences the busiest time of the year is bad for your writing output.

Hero looked at herself naked in the mirror. Her eyes admired her athletic build while her hard futa cock strained up against her abdomen. Thinking about her partner and wondering.
“Aretha, do you think I’m Amazon enough?” Hero asked her partner as she examined her breasts. Small by amazon standards. The self-doubt was creeping in, she thought that while her viral cum might be paying the bills as a breeding stud. Experts doubted if she’d be able to bare children.
Her partner answered, “What are you talking about?” Hero turned to look at Aretha's tall and well-endowed frame even by amazon standards. In fact, the only measure that hero bested her on was cock size and virility score. The other amazon took a breath, “You're a breeding stud who’s broken records. At the breeding clinic, you broke the record for most successful manual inseminations in an hour. We both went on a raid into the hill country and brought back untamed humans. And need I remind you that you landed the most indomitable bitch on your college campus.” She said that last as she gestured to herself. “What are you worried about?”
“Should I consider getting pregnant?” Hero asked earnestly.
Aretha scoffed, “You impregnate dozens of humans and amazons each week. Your cum is the cornerstone of my business you’ve cured infertility with it. Humans that get impregnated by amazons not only improve their health but are able to turn back the hands of time at least age-wise. enough can turn back the clock age-wise as the virile magic. that keeps us youthful virile and healthy that every amazon bares can improve the quality of life of humans. in fact it's because of our virile magic that we stay youthful and healthy and why every amazon can improve the quality of human life. Human technology has benefitted amazon kind as well but . And you're a vital link with your freakishly virial sperm.” With the speech, Hero was feeling better but Aretha went on, “If there is something that will make you feel more like an amazon there is a big milestone you haven’t tried.”
“What’s that oh queen of pep talks?” Hero asked as she reached up and pulled her wife down into a kiss.
After a long kiss, Aretha needed a second to catch her breath, “Vore, as far as I know you’ve never succeeded but you’ve never had me to guide you.”
“You sure? I got mixed feelings about it and like you’ve said I’ve never succeeded before.” Hero questioned herself.
“I’ll put in a call to the office, I know you're personally against just taking and gulping down humans on the street. but with my skills in connecting clients with those that can serve their needs, I am sure I can find the right one to wet your appetite. I connect clients with others to serve their needs so it’s not exactly outside my girls’ wheelhouse. we’ll find someone ready and willing. We’ll make it nice and pleasurable for everyone. Does that sound good?”
“Okay sounds reasonable,” Hero said glad she’d married Aretha. Committed marriages were more of a human tradition than amazon.
“Of course, besides I haven’t eaten anyone since we were in wild human territory it will be fun to do it once more.” Aretha said, "Now why don’t you pick a piece of furniture you’d like me to bend over and you can give me a dose of your amazon magic.”
It was almost a week later when Aretha told her that she had found the perfect prey and that they need to prepare for her first predator experience. Hero then began a two-day fast and abstained from sexual relief for a full day. Hero found that for an amazon going without food for two days was much easier than having no sex. hero was both nervous and excited not to mention pent up as she walked to the address that Aretha had given her along with a key. the key belonged to a door that led to a private room that had been rented out for the special occasion. There was well-appointed but non-descript furniture along with cases of camera equipment and the easily cleaned marble floor. it dawned on her that she was in a rentable porn studio and her wife was going to make her star in a vorno.
As hero was examing her surroundings Aretha came up to her dressed in a somewhat cliche outfit of a trench coat with fishnet stalkings. typical to what you would expect a seductress to be wearing in an adult film before it got to the good parts. Her wife gave her a wink as she dropped the coat on the floor revealing a simple lingerie set designed to accommodate a large belly.
“I haven’t seen you in that since you were pregnant.” Hero said getting in the first word.
“Oh, and look at you wearing your tuxedo. You know you're going to have to take that all off.” Aretha said running her hand over the well-tailored jacket before groping her spouse
“Well, I felt it would be fun to force my prey to undress me.” Hero said confidently, “Who’s manning the camera? Someone professional.”
“Don't get shy on me now, I expect you to be a perfect dom for this,” Aretha said.
“OH, your one to talk, I think the first thing I'm doing after I eat is to put you in your place. You're my personal breeding bitch and it’s only taken you two days to forget your place.” Hero was staring hungrily at Aretha as the taller amazon started to squirm and blush.
“I love it when you give me your predator stare,” Aretha said her fingers covering her face. “I can’t wait any longer. Come on out.” Aretha said as she turned around to call in the direction that had been behind her.
Two human women then came out from behind a silk screen that sectioned off part of the room. The first was a bit on the curvy side wearing what Hero could only call a pink princess dress with Lots of frills and pleated layers. in one of the Princess's gloved hands was a leash that hero eyes then followed up to a petite neck encased in a leather collar. looking at the woman hero noticed that she was dressed in a revealing bunny girl outfit complete with a tail plug in her round firm bottom.
holding out her arms in presentation Aretha said, “This is Princess and Bunny they will be our prey for this evening.”
Hero felt her heart skip a beat as she stared at Bunny hiding behind Princess in response. Hero started to feel her mouth water and her already half-erect cock sprung up to full mast ready to fuck.
Princess spoke up and said shyly, “We’ve already given our consent and interview, we’re honored to be here and for Bunny to be your prey.” Bunny just nodded in assent still hiding behind Princess.
Hero slid herself onto a leather couch with predatory grace. “Why don’t you get the camera woman out here I don’t think I can control myself any longer.”
“Cynthia please come out it’s dinner time,” Areahta called as she patted the seat next to her. Princess came over and sat politely next to Aretha as Bunny balled herself at Princesses feet. Looking nervously over at Hero.
Hero barely spared a glance at Aretha’s twin sister as she came in already rolling the camera.
“You look very predatory today, followed my sister’s advice did you?" Cynthia said getting into position. “How are both of the happy couples?”
Aretha laughed, “Horney and Famished.”
Princess spoke up, “I’m ready to give up Bunny to feed this magnificent amazon specimen.” Princess stated while rubbing Areatha’s stomach in anticipation. Bunny inched a little closer to Hero but no further than her leash would allow.
Hero looked into the camera, “As you can see my lovely wife and favorite breeding slut brought me dinner like the good girl she is. I’m very eager for my first prey.”
Cynthia smiled behind the camera, “That’s so good to hear, I'm so glad to help save this for posterity. Where would you like to get started?”
it was at this statement that Princess commanded, “Bunny you’ve been such a good girl I command you to be used and eaten by this amazon stud.” Princess then pulled out some toys.
Aretha’s sharp eyes realized what they were first and spoke, “Are those edible toys? Why princess you do come prepared.” Aretha put her arm around the much smaller woman. “Come on stud won't you put on a show for us?”
Princess then took a leather gag and strapped it around Bunny’s mouth. after the gag was put into place Bunny was pulled up over Princess's lap as an anal plug was presented and Princess expertly removed the old plug from Bunny's bum. Bunny’s eyes bulged when she saw that the new plug was twice as big as the plug she just had in her ass. The pet girl whined as it was worked in. “Normally bunny is so eager to accept the little presents I give her. Must be fussy today.” laughed Princess.
Aretha said, “Let me help with that,” as she started using one finger to play with Bunny’s pussy getting it nice and ready. Using the exploring finder she felt the plug pushing against the vaginal wall. Aretha took out her newly wet finger and added some much-needed lubrication to the stubborn toy.
With the lubrication over the widest point for the plug, it finally slid into the stretched anus of the whining Bunny. She let out a sigh of relief. Aretha said, ‘You can feel it inside even through the vaginal wall.” Aretha was loving how bunny writhed at just her squirming finger.
Aretha gave out a sigh, “Your so lucky, normally my stud of a wife charges for that magnificent cock, always working so hard to impregnate breeding bitches but today is special. Because I’m guiding her through her first pred experience using you Bunny. Now, let's start with some foreplay, shall we? Because prey always goes down so much easier when they are racked with orgasms. And without that kind of good publicity how are we going to attract more prey? Okay, Bunny why don't you help your Preditor get undressed? As fun as it would be to see her rip her tux, I do love it on her."
Bunny nodded and moved to slide off Hero's jacket. Caressing Hero's powerful shoulders as she removed the jacket. only to let her fingers trail along to the front of the collard shirt to start unbuttoning it one button at a time . as she finished she then ran her fingers gently up against hero's abdomen to her breasts and then back to her shoulders and down her rippling arms as the dress shirt was left draped over the back of the couch along with the jacket. it was then that bunny sank to her knees before hero removed the belt that kept up the trouser that entrapped the predator's straining cock. as the belt was removed bunny couldn't help but ever so slightly caress Hero's cock causing a hiss of breath to escape Hero's mouth as she gazed hungrily at bunny as bunny gently lay her head in hero's lap.
Bunny relished having her head against the belly she longed to be inside of. Fingers trembling with excitement she undid the button releasing hard abdominals and a transparent bra. Bunny only blinked twice at the sight.
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Re: Amazon Futa Vore Scene Version 3.25 Seeking Feedback.

Postby Monadora » Thu Dec 15, 2022 9:45 am

Latest work in progress version posted on my gallery. Very excited to be gaining faves already.
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Postby Monadora » Thu Mar 02, 2023 9:10 am

Welp my next story is in the top post probably get the WIP version up in my gallery in a few days.
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