Schoolgirl vore

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Schoolgirl vore

Postby Lucky » Sat Mar 18, 2006 2:32 am

BEWARE: F/m vore, anal insertion, brief scat, vaginal insertion, dominance, Second-person point of view (Edit credit Naman. Thankies!).

This was the first thing I produced that was vore related. Just thought I'd share. I'd appreciate your reaction to this dealy-o! Meow! ^ ^

Girls and Dolls

You awake with a splitting head-ache. By instinct, you try to rub your forehead with your right hand, only to find that it’s pinned down by something. As you reach up with your left hand, your grogginess subsides slightly and you realize that it’s dark. Your left hand comes into contact with a shoe, which is lodged neatly into your forehead. As you push it away, the pain in your temples subsides significantly. As your mind clears up you become aware that you’re laying stomach-down. You turn your head to see what it is that covers your right arm and see a boy, about the age of 17. “What in the hell…?â€
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Postby Naman » Sat Mar 18, 2006 3:14 am

Second person view, actually. :P

First person = I got eaten, second person = you got eaten, third person = he got eaten.
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Postby Lucky » Sat Mar 18, 2006 4:53 am

Naman wrote:Second person view, actually. :P

First person = I got eaten, second person = you got eaten, third person = he got eaten.


Whoops! :oops: Boy is my face red, meow!
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Postby Chrisis » Sat Mar 18, 2006 1:54 pm

actually second person refers to the POV of the story, first is the main character is "I", second person is "you" as the main character, third person main character is "he, she, or it" Then there is the semi omnicient trait where thoughts from a third person character are included etc.
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Postby Guest » Sat Mar 18, 2006 6:42 pm

I don't know bout this correction mumbo jumbo but this was definately a geat story, I'm sure my girl would like it too. Can't wait to show her
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