new stuff

by **Squall** » Mon Mar 27, 2006 5:50 pm

new stuff plus wondering if i can get my forum and post stuff back:)

by **BradRepko** » Mon Mar 27, 2006 5:56 pm

Like, where's the vore? What's the point? I'd hardly even call that smut, and it's definately not vore. I thought the skirt would eat him or something.

by **Anime-chan** » Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:18 am

no offence but that just seemed wierd. you'd expect some vore (espeically in this place of all places) but thats just strange. If you edited it I bet it would make a good vore though, it sounded like a good build up.

by **Ottsel** » Tue Mar 28, 2006 7:06 pm

Ignoring the lack of vore (this is a vore forum after all, so the above blunt posts are indeed correct) this story does have a bit to work on.

My main suggestion is to try to refrain from using technical or slang terms for anything sexual. The trick of writing is in the language, and writing something that is supposed to be sexy requires a lot of careful word choice. Metaphors, innuendos and imagery are all good tools when dealing with this subject. People will know what you mean without you having to spell it out for them, and it will make the read a lot better in structure.

by **Squall** » Thu Mar 30, 2006 8:19 am

This story is not vore, nor will it ever be. I wrote this about a girl I was interested in awhile back and let her read it. Things didn't go farther then that. I hate (most) women and I have reason to do it. That is just my personal opinion, but most of the stories I will be writing might have bad things happening to them. As for this one, I was blinded by her and the fact that I might have been able to get with her.

This one also contains multiple endings, plus you can add your own.