Here they are.
Anything to be fixed? Tweaked? The main criticism I've heard of my work is that it's too detached, not pornographic enough. Any comments?[/url]
Well, go for it.
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It's pretty good, I would go in to more detail. An important key to writing (and all the more so if you are trying to arouse your reader) is to bring them in to it using senses, esspecially touch, for this kind of story.
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