Supernova's GIANTESS VORE STORIES (NEW STORY APRIL 20)

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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby supernova » Mon Jun 01, 2015 12:05 am

Hey guys, I have another story completely written and edited, but I'm withholding posting it until I get more feedback on "Little Pink Ring" (viewtopic.php?f=38&t=39248&start=140#p2279860). I know this might seem like a dick move on my part, but out of the three sites I posted it on, I only got one comment on it.

I don't know if it's liked by anyone or even if it's being read. I want to continue posting stories, I really do, but I value your comments and when I get none, it implies that no one liked what I wrote. Why should I continue posting stories that no one likes? :|

When I post something I worked hard on and the response is just silence, even after an entire weekend, it's honestly pretty disheartening. I know it was a long time between stories, but does that mean that people stopped watching the topic? I love the community here at Eka's, but you guys/gals are just so shy sometimes! I hope this post didn't offend anyone, I just want to know how you guys feel and I always get really excited to read what you have to say! Honest! :)

Hope to hear from you soon, I'm itching to show off this new story!
-Supernova

PS: If you want to contact me privately, my email is [email protected]. I'm always interested in what my readers have to say, don't be afraid to contact me if you have any requests, questions, concerns, or just want to chat!
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby Tsubasa17 » Mon Jun 01, 2015 2:50 pm

Sorry for no feedback from me, though i don't do much since I'm new. just started some classes today, so been busy.
Here's my feedback/opinion: Wow. Loved it, especially that slight surprise/not surprise ending you gave. More like a twist, since I thought the little sister would eat her instead of the other way around. You really should do more stories like this, though maybe start connecting your stories a wee bit, since I see you like using that "pink ring" as a shrinking device in almost all of your stories. Maybe something like a vore club with some of your characters, like Maggie and Aubrey and a few others with two shrunk people as the playthings for a meeting.
Only issue I had with this one is the big sister around the end. She was just a bit too emotionless, cold in my opinion. At least with your other stories, the preds showed happiness or anger or sexual delight/pleasure when they were enjoying the taste and feel of the little people, but Aubrey just showed machine-like calm, jut a blank face. It just weirded me out a bit too much. Maybe no more of that, please? Or at least not during the vore and post-vore, please?
Other than that, it was superb. I would super, even, hehe. And you should do more Second Person POV, you did splendidly the last few times you did that.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby supernova » Mon Jun 01, 2015 4:29 pm

Ahh, thank you for the awesome post! I do use the pink ring motif in most of my stories, as I secretly consider them to all take place in the same universe. I've been considering doing more crossover elements in future stories (like the reappearance of Jennifer in "Party Game" after "The Candy Box"), but with much more characterization involved. And thank you for the constructive criticism! I've been trying to flesh my characters out more, so I'll definitely keep that part about Aubrey in mind. I try to put realism above all (ironically) so that I can deliver as visceral an experience as possible, allowing the reader to picture themselves in the shoes of the characters themselves. Making it crystal clear what they feel through every sense they have.

And as for the second-person POV, I do agree that I should use it more often. It doesn't appear in my next story (that I already have 100% done), but it's definitely something I'll consider for a future tale.

I'm also thinking of making a second-person POV interactive story, though that seems like it'd be a decent amount of work and I wouldn't really know where the best place to create it would be. Writing.com is not as popular as it used to be and the general level of writing there is pretty low in quality. Most of the stories end with "and then she eats you the end," which I HAAAAAAAAAAAAATE. Why write an interactive story at all if one of the chains leads to such a dismal payoff? You'll never get that with me, I'll always put as much detail into it as possible.

And thank you again for the kind words! Posts like that are why I do this, haha.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby Tsubasa17 » Mon Jun 01, 2015 5:44 pm

Yeah, I definitely agree about that last part. I used to love Writing.com, that was where I got my giantess vore stuff from for the past decadeish (i'm 20), but its just a bit annoying every single time when either an option I like is not done/unfinished or it leads to a one sentence option and so on. Detail is what I want. I won't read it otherwise. Or I'll at least hate it. Realism is the best. More of it! Moar!
Anyway, I didn't know you have a interactive story! I tend to avoid them nowadays because of what I stated above. Gonna find yours now! Sounded so wrong, but I don't care.
As for a crossover story, you could try something like Aubrey, Maggie and a older female teacher from their school (they could go to the same school) (and no, the older woman is not their mom or a mother at all, just a teacher or some older woman who taught them about the ring) share the ring between themselves as "club activities". Maybe you can do an initiation story, someone who wants to be part of the group has to eat or unbirth someone, get shrunk down and get unbirthed by one of the current members of the group or, if you like non-fatal oral vore, get eaten. Maybe there's a setting on the ring that can cause a victim to survive the trip more-or-less intact. Maybe the teacher/older woman knows all of the settings of the ring and just tells the younger girls the grow/shrink functions of it.
Or it could be a punishment story for one of your pred characters. Like one of the people who were shrunk and eaten in one of your stories could have almost led to the discovery of the group or something and the pred has to be punished in some.. delicious way that involves the entire group.
Or maybe it could be a story dealing with a nosy school reporter or student who saw too much or some such. Who knows? There's a whole series of ideas around this Pink Ring Club thing.
Sorry, I just have alot of ideas, but I'm bad with writing vore stories. Not stories in general, just vore ones. If you like them, take them! If you want more, milk my brain, it's free until I die! Or until I no longer have the ability to love words and books.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby bradlax16 » Mon Jun 01, 2015 6:29 pm

new story = WOW

the vore scenes were amazing, and I loved how horrible of a fate you portrayed being swallowed alive in this story. Also the girl eating her sister at the end was awesome, I love twists like that where the pred is so interested in swallowing someone that she'll do it to her own sister without a second thought. The swallowing/stomach scenes were off the charts as well

awesome story, pure giantess f/f vore which is all anybody on this forum can ask for...I don't care for stories that try to dive into a deeper plot or beat around the bush. Just get right to the vore :D which is what you are good at

keep it up!
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby supernova » Mon Jun 01, 2015 7:01 pm

Tsubasa17 wrote:Yeah, I definitely agree about that last part. I used to love Writing.com, that was where I got my giantess vore stuff from for the past decadeish (i'm 20), but its just a bit annoying every single time when either an option I like is not done/unfinished or it leads to a one sentence option and so on. Detail is what I want. I won't read it otherwise. Or I'll at least hate it. Realism is the best. More of it! Moar!
Anyway, I didn't know you have a interactive story! I tend to avoid them nowadays because of what I stated above. Gonna find yours now! Sounded so wrong, but I don't care.
As for a crossover story, you could try something like Aubrey, Maggie and a older female teacher from their school (they could go to the same school) (and no, the older woman is not their mom or a mother at all, just a teacher or some older woman who taught them about the ring) share the ring between themselves as "club activities". Maybe you can do an initiation story, someone who wants to be part of the group has to eat or unbirth someone, get shrunk down and get unbirthed by one of the current members of the group or, if you like non-fatal oral vore, get eaten. Maybe there's a setting on the ring that can cause a victim to survive the trip more-or-less intact. Maybe the teacher/older woman knows all of the settings of the ring and just tells the younger girls the grow/shrink functions of it.
Or it could be a punishment story for one of your pred characters. Like one of the people who were shrunk and eaten in one of your stories could have almost led to the discovery of the group or something and the pred has to be punished in some.. delicious way that involves the entire group.
Or maybe it could be a story dealing with a nosy school reporter or student who saw too much or some such. Who knows? There's a whole series of ideas around this Pink Ring Club thing.
Sorry, I just have alot of ideas, but I'm bad with writing vore stories. Not stories in general, just vore ones. If you like them, take them! If you want more, milk my brain, it's free until I die! Or until I no longer have the ability to love words and books.


I really wish writing.com was as good as it used to be, I've been going there for around as long as you have and, yeah, the layout and writing has just gotten worse over time. I, unfortunately, don't have an interactive story out just yet! I'm definitely thinking about it for a future option, though. Also, these are all great ideas! I think I'm going to incorporate parts of them into the second-person POV story I'm writing right now, the one I'm going to post after my next one.

And you seem like a well-written person, I think you'd do well writing vore if you put your mind to it. My tastes are VERY specific so I had to carve a niche in the community and fill in what I thought was somewhat lacking and our tastes seem to align rather well. The more the merrier, I say! I encourage you to pick it up. Sometimes I even go read my own stories for my own pleasure, I know that sounds narcissistic, but I love getting sucked into the strange universe I've created.

bradlax16 wrote:new story = WOW

the vore scenes were amazing, and I loved how horrible of a fate you portrayed being swallowed alive in this story. Also the girl eating her sister at the end was awesome, I love twists like that where the pred is so interested in swallowing someone that she'll do it to her own sister without a second thought. The swallowing/stomach scenes were off the charts as well

awesome story, pure giantess f/f vore which is all anybody on this forum can ask for...I don't care for stories that try to dive into a deeper plot or beat around the bush. Just get right to the vore :D which is what you are good at

keep it up!


Thank you so much for the kind words! You've always been one of my biggest supporters and I really appreciate it when you give me encouraging posts. And I do agree with you about convoluted plots in vore stories. Though I do appreciate the artistry that goes into worldbuilding and characterization in some of the longer fetish stories, I simply don't WANT to read a vore novel. It's just my style, If I wanted to read something impossibly long, I'd pick up Game of Thrones again. I like my stories short, sweet, and to-the-point. I hope that the length of my stories is acceptable.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby Tsubasa17 » Mon Jun 01, 2015 7:16 pm

Please, do take my ideas! I'll give ye all of them! And I do need to get some practice in with writing. I already have a very imaginative mind, as every teacher since kindergarten has told me while they were giving me detention for reading in class/reading the stuff before everyone.
Alright, I think I shall write something. Apologies beforehand if it sounds like one of yours. Then again, mimicking is one of the greatest forms of flattery. It'll take a bit for me to get the story out, started classes this week, but I can have something done soon, me thinks. I'll send it to you for editing/reviewing/dissing/etc. Forewarning: it may or may not have mother vore. Maybe, maybe not, I don't know. Just don't know what kind of pred I should have. Have any suggestions for that part? All I would need is the pred and I can make the story. Maybe I should have PM'd this.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby voreguy » Mon Jun 01, 2015 7:48 pm

That was utterly fantastic, every aspect of it. You're truly a master of this genre, Supernova! :D
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby Zombie_Slave » Mon Jun 01, 2015 8:02 pm

Hey Supernova,

I read your latest story. It was really excellent. So cruel and had some great F/f vore moments. I really like how disturbing you make the digestion scenes.

Sorry I haven't been around to comment lately. I haven't been able to spend as much time on this forum as I'd like lately so I have missed a lot of your stories. I have some catching up to do. Keep up the good work.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby supernova » Mon Jun 01, 2015 8:22 pm

Tsubasa17 wrote:Please, do take my ideas! I'll give ye all of them! And I do need to get some practice in with writing. I already have a very imaginative mind, as every teacher since kindergarten has told me while they were giving me detention for reading in class/reading the stuff before everyone.
Alright, I think I shall write something. Apologies beforehand if it sounds like one of yours. Then again, mimicking is one of the greatest forms of flattery. It'll take a bit for me to get the story out, started classes this week, but I can have something done soon, me thinks. I'll send it to you for editing/reviewing/dissing/etc. Forewarning: it may or may not have mother vore. Maybe, maybe not, I don't know. Just don't know what kind of pred I should have. Have any suggestions for that part? All I would need is the pred and I can make the story. Maybe I should have PM'd this.


If it sounds like mine, that's perfectly okay! I don't mind mother vore! I can enjoy it if it's in someone else's story, it's just that it's not a topic I'd personally write about. If you want me to look over your story any time, just drop me a PM here or email me at [email protected]. I'll be more than happy to look it over it for you, edit it, and give some tips!

voreguy wrote:That was utterly fantastic, every aspect of it. You're truly a master of this genre, Supernova! :D

Many thanks! I really do try to get better with every story!

Zombie_Slave wrote:Hey Supernova,

I read your latest story. It was really excellent. So cruel and had some great F/f vore moments. I really like how disturbing you make the digestion scenes.

Sorry I haven't been around to comment lately. I haven't been able to spend as much time on this forum as I'd like lately so I have missed a lot of your stories. I have some catching up to do. Keep up the good work.


High praise! Thank you very much. I'll be sure to continue depicting my preds as cruel and my digestion scenes as disturbing as possible. I draw a lot of inspiration from your stories, most notably one called "On the Plate" that you wrote in 2009 (viewtopic.php?f=38&t=13754&start=20#p455021). I had never seen a vore story quite like that one before then and I really admire your imagination when it comes to the genre.

And it's all good! Everyone gets busy sometimes. I hope you enjoy my other stories! I'm going to be posting another one here in just a few minutes.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

Postby supernova » Mon Jun 01, 2015 8:30 pm

As promised, here's the NEW STORY!

I'm trying to incorporate reader suggestions in these more often. This story also has an element rarely seen in Supernova stories: F/m! (With plenty of F/f added in for good measure, of course)

Anyway, the genres are: F/m, F/f, Shrinking, Vaginal Insertion, Soft Vore, digestion, Sibling, and an OPTIONAL scat ending under spoiler tags.

The PDF for the NON-SCAT version is in this post. The next post has the PDF for the SCAT version.

Enjoy!

A Jealous Sister
By Supernova

“Really? You ate all the chocolates?” Gina asked, the disappointment apparent in her voice as she opened the shiny, heart-shaped box revealing dozens of empty spaces. “What kind of gift is this?”

Nick's face turned a bright shade of pink as he looked right into his girlfriend's eyes, sitting next to her on his bed. “What! I... uh... I didn't know!” His eyes widened as he looked around frantically. “My little sister must have taken them without asking! Oh my God, I'm so, so sorry, babe!”

“Oh, honey.” Gina responded softly, nodding her head with a grin. “I'm not mad. It's just...” She slumped “I was hoping to enjoy these with you.”

Nick saw her puppydog eyes and slight smile. “I know, I know. I seriously should have kept this away from her, though. You know how she is.”

“Oh, I know all too well” Gina noted, raising her eyebrows almost mockingly. “Every time I see her, she's just, like, a huge bitch to me.”

Unable to hide the sting from that sentence, Nick winced for a second. “Yeah, but like it or not, she's my sister and we have to share a house with her. I promised mom that I'd look after her and, ugh.” Nick leaned forward and put his hands on his face. “It's such a nightmare.”

Gina started rubbing Nick's back, her long, curly light brown hair moving as she did so. “Look, I know that it's tough raising her on your own, but she's almost out of high school now, she's eighteen. She should at least know some basic respect by now, like 'Don't eat other people's things'”

“Yeah, but... it's more than that.” Nick sighed. “She barely has any friends at school and... ugh. The only one she ever really talks to is me. Well, other than God knows who else on the Internet.” He ran his fingers through his short, ginger hair. “I just can't wait for her to go off to college soon so I can be here with you.”

Nick jumped as he saw an eye through the slightly open door, then a rush of motion. “Ugh, she was listening to us.” He said as he immediately got up to follow his sister. “Wish me luck!”

Following the sounds of thumping footsteps, Nick followed Holly at a brisk pace. “Holly? Holly! Come on.” He walked to her room and was greeted with a door slammed in his face. Knocking, he yelled through the door “Holly. Open the door so we can talk.”

A shrill, crying voice came from the other side. “No! You don't want to talk to me, anyway! You want me to go away as soon as possible! You love your stupid fucking girlfriend more than me! Fuck you!”

“Holly, it's not about that. Come on out so we can talk. I... I'm sorry for what I said. Now can you open up?” Nick looked down and rubbed the back of his head. He heard a loud knock at the other side of the door, probably Holly throwing something.

“I said FUCK YOU! And fuck that bitch girlfriend of yours! She's trying to turn you against me! GO AWAY!” Holly screamed at the top of her lungs.

“Turn me against you? What are you talki--”

“I FUCKING SAID GO AWAY!” Holly shrieked as loud as she could, right before she cranked up her music to maximum volume, drowning out all other noise.

Nick sighed, turned away, and went back to his room. “She's not talking to me.”

“Yeah, I could hear her from all the way over here. I honestly feel sorry for her, she must be really anxious and confused. Graduation is a confusing time for a lot of teenagers.” Gina said, the bass from Holly's music penetrating the walls from all the way across the house.

“One thing she said was pretty weird, though.” Nick said with an ache in his voice.

“Weird, Holly? Nooooo” Gina responded with a wry grin.

Nick chuckled. “But seriously, she said that you're turning me against her?”

Gina raised one eyebrow up. “What kind of fantasy is that? I've been nothing but nice to her!”

“I know, that's the whole thing. Once she calms down I really want to have a talk with her.” Nick said, calmly.

“Well, before then, can you get me some more chocolates?” Gina said as she fluttered her eyelids.

“You got it, love! And you can even pick them out this time because, well, the surprise was ruined and I'll make doubly sure my sister won't eat them.”

After coming back with not one, but two boxes of chocolates, Nick and Gina came back to see Holly sitting at the kitchen table looking glum as she ate a big plate of fries completely slathered in ketchup, reading from her tablet. Her bright red hair reached down to her shoulders, where she was wearing a white babydoll tee shirt with a pink symbol over her B-cup breasts and jean shorts so short that they almost showed off her ass. Her milk white legs hung from the chair so her bare toes barely scraped the ground. Even for an eighteen year old, she was rather short and thin. Her face was long and extremely pale, but she was still cute, with small hazel eyes and a wide mouth with thin lips. She wasn't exceptionally beautiful, but she was still pretty in a very simple way.

“Hey Holly-Rancher! Hollywood! Jolly Holly!” Nick said, cheerfully, trying his best to make her happy. “Think you got enough ketchup for those fries?”

Holly didn't react, she just kept eating her fries one at a time, extremely slowly, while keeping her eyes on the screen in front of her. She licked some excess ketchup from her lips and kept scrolling down on whatever she was reading.

“Ooooh kay. I'm gonna be up in my room if you need me. You know I'll always be there for you, right?” Nick said in a light tone. Holly stopped chewing for a second, licked her lips, and swallowed hard.

Heading upstairs, Gina asked “What the Hell was that about?”

“I guess she's still mad, but I've honestly never seen her act like that.” Nick responded as he closed the door behind him and locked it. “Anyway, time for chocolate, finally.” They both plopped down on Nick's bed and took the boxes out of the shopping bag.

“Finally!” Gina responded, ripping open the plastic and popping the box open immediately, tossing a small, brown cube into her mouth without hesitation. “Mmmm, coconut” she said with her mouth still full.

Nick picked up a milk chocolate piece and dropped it into Gina's mouth as she opened wide overhead. “Ahh, strawberry cream! No weird flavors so far. All delish.” She said.

CRACK! Gina and Nick both jumped in shock and turned their heads; the door was completely gone! The hinges were swinging, holding on to nothing. In the door frame was Holly, furrowing her brow and contorting her eyebrows to look absolutely enraged with her hands on her hips.

“Excluding me again? Pushing me away again? I'm sick of this! I'm sick of your bitch girlfriend stealing you away from me!” Holly screamed. “I'm tired of it I'm tired!”

Gina meekly hid behind her boyfriend.

“Holly, what did you do? What happened to the door?” Nick yelled, partly in shock and partly in anger. Standing up, Nick shouted “Holly! Come on! Let's talk about thi--” Holly held up a tiny, pink ring and a bright flash blinded him. Closing his eyes, he felt his stomach lurch like he was falling a great distance.

Feeling wind over his bare, naked skin, he heard Gina yell “Nick! What is happening? Nick!” from behind him. Mouth agape, he saw his girlfriend completely naked, covering herself on what appeared to be a big, white sheet. Still trying to regain his sight, he blinked a few times and started running over to her.

“Ah ah ah, not so fast!” Boomed a high-pitched voice from above. “You're my LITTLE brother now!”

Looking upwards, Nick's heart sank as he saw his own sister towering above him, like a petit redheaded Godzilla. He felt a lump in his throat so large he couldn't say anything but “Guh... guhh... whuh...”

Gina looked up and screeched, horror in her eyes. “AIYEEEEEE! AIGGGHHH!” Her voice cracked and she started coughing. “Nick! Cough, cough. What is happening?”

Nick crawled backwards away from his gigantic sister. “Augh... guhh... whuh...” He started sweating profusely, not able to get his eyes off of Holly, instinctively trying to get away. His heart raced, he felt ice-cold fear course through his veins. As he bumped into Gina, he embraced her as hard as she could.

“Nick!” Gina shouted, her naked skin feeling sweaty to the touch. “You... your sister is a monster!”

Cocking her hips to the side, the thin, pale, redheaded Holly opened up her mouth and smiled extremely wide, baring her straight, white teeth. Even at normal size, Holly had a large mouth, but to the people cowering on the bed below, it looked absolutely cavernous.

“Gina... I don't know what's going on... I don't...” Nick's voice was quivering as he held on to Gina tightly.

“I... I... I...” Gina muttered as Holly's massive hands descended upon them.

Both Nick and Gina let out screams as they were lifted extremely fast up to Holly's face.

“You belong to me now!” Holly said with a smile, her hot breath, smelling strongly of ketchup, wafting over them.

“Put us down, Holly! What are you doing?” Nick screamed, trying to hold back tears of fear.

Gina just struggled and screeched as she and Nick were placed on Nick's desk. “What's she gonna do?” Gina screeched at Nick.

“I... I... I don't know. I don't know.” Nick stuttered.

“Oooh, chocolates? For me? Thank you, Nick. Thank you for buying these for me.” Holly said, anger in her voice. “Let's try this one, first.” She said as she popped one in her mouth, chewing it with her large mouth wide open. After swallowing it with a loud gulp, she rubbed her belly and went “Mmmm. That was so sweet. Let me try another one.”

After eating five or six of them, she smiled, showing off her chocolate-stained teeth, and let out a soft burp. “These are excellent chocolates you bought me, Nick. Thank you for treating me like a good sister should be. Thank you for buying me things and being such a good brother.” After each word, Holly seemed to be getting angrier, gritting her teeth by the last sentence.

“Nick... I... I... I'm scared. She looks pissed. What's she gonna do?” Gina cried, shivering in Nick's arms.

“I'm finally being treated like I deserve.” Holly remarked in a devious tone, rolling around in Nick's bedsheets, the blankets looking like tidal waves to the tiny couple on the desk.

Scanning the environment with his eyes, Nick noticed that every possible way off the desk meant an impossible drop; they were stuck there as Holly dropped massive chocolates into her mouth and swallowing them. Watching the bulges travel down Holly's throat caused Nick to shiver. “Those are as big as we are.” He thought, clutching Gina even harder.

Holly covered herself in one of Nicks' blankets and moved around slightly, causing the fabric to ripple a litle bit. “Oh, look, your little girlfriend, she's mine now, too.” Holly boomed, her anger turning into rage.

The massive Holly sat up, her lower body still covered by the blanket, her boobs shook under her tee shirt as she waved her arms sarcastically while saying “Isn't it nice that we share everything, like brothers and sisters are supposed to?” She giggled so high she squeaked. “Isn't it nice that your girlfriend can be my girlfriend, too?”

“Wha? What's she saying, Nick? What's she saying?” Gina squealed frantically while shaking Nick. Nick's heart sank and his stomach churned in disgust as Holly pushed the blankets off of her, revealing that she took her shorts and panties off, exposing her unshaven crotch covered in auburn pubic hair. Putting her finger on her lower lip, she stood up and walked towards the couple on the desk, moving her hips seductively while still wearing her tee shirt.

A shadow loomed over the tiny couple, fingers the thickness of tree trunks heading for them. “I just wanted you to share.”

Gina belted out a blood-curdling screech as she was hoisted up in the air, Nick unable to keep her aground. “HELP ME! AIIYEEE! HELP! PLEEEeeee....” Gina screamed as Holly brought her out of earshot.

“Time for you to play with me like you play with my brother. It's not fair if he keeps you to himself, like he does with everything else.”

Nick could see Gina struggling, waving her arms hysterically as she was carried away between two of Holly's fingers.

Nick leaned so far forward, he almost fell off the desk. “NOOOOO! YOU CAN'T! DON'T! PLEASE! I'LL DO ANYTHING! HOLLY! PLEASE!” He shouted as Holly laid her back flat on his bed and spread her bare white legs.

“My turn!” She giggled as she spread her pussy lips wide open with two of her fingers and plunged Gina face-first inside her wet, pink, glistening vagina. “Oh! Oh, yeah. Yeah.” She moaned as Gina was forced into her body.

Eyes blinded with tears, Nick yelled out “GIIIIIIINNNNNAAAA! NOOO! LET HER GO!” Resisting his natural aversion to seeing his sister's vagina to look for Gina's tiny, kicking legs, Nick screamed “GIVE HER BACK RIGHT NOW! GIVE HER BACK! GIVER HER BAAACK” Sobs taking over the last word.

“Yeah, UNGH, yeah, YEAH, OHHH, yeah, little bitch. UNGH. Up my pussy. Ungh, yeah. Eat my pussy. Keep struggling, yeah.” Holly moaned as she lightly rubbed her clitoris with one hand and spread her labia with another, Gina's soaking wet legs still sticking out, kicking in midair. Holly let go of her pussy lips and dragged Gina out of her wetness, allowing her to breathe. Nick was watching intently as Gina rubbed her body all over, seemingly horrified at what was taking place. “You're mine.” Holly whispered as she shoved Gina into her wet pussy, feet first this time, sticking her finger deep inside, making sure Gina was completely lodged in her womanhood.

As Holly writhed and moaned on the bed, Nick leaned forward, as far as he could, knowing that attempting to get anywhere near Gina was completely futile. The slight scent of pussy filled the air as Holly's vagina leaked wetness, all over Gina and all over his bed. Every time his sister moaned, Nick winced in disgust. “Oh, oh yeah, yeah! You're mine now. All mine. UNGH!” Holly shrieked.

“LET HER GO!” Nick yelled as Holly fished Gina out. Still obviously conscious, Gina continued struggling, trying to get her hand free of Holly's grasp. Holly pushed her deep inside her body and started using Gina as a tiny dildo, sliding her tiny body in and out of her while still lightly rubbing her clit.

“Yeah, yeah, ungh, yeah.” Holly lightly moaned in her high-pitched voice as Gina's glistening body rubbed against the inside of the teenage redhead's vagina. Her breathing became faster, sweat soaking into her tee shirt, her moaning becoming louder as she started sliding Gina faster. “Oh... ungh.” She grunted. “Oh.. Unff.. Oh... Oh.... ooooh! OH! OH! OH! OH YEAH! OH YEAH! YEAH!” She started sliding Gina in and out of her so fast, Nick could barely see her through the motion blur. “YEAH! YEAH! OH YEAH! OH! OH! OH! OH! YES! AH! AH! AH! AHHHHHHHHHHH!” Holly screamed in ecstasy as her entire body tensed up “AHHHHHHHHHHHH” and then deflated at once, causing a sighing “Yeaaaahhh.”

Nick slammed his hand on the desk several times and cried. He tried to suppress his tears, but feeling helpless as his love was tortured like that was too much for him to bear. “FUCK! FUCK!” He shouted, enraged and anxious, hearing the wet, slimy sounds of his sister fishing his girlfriend out of her vagina, sobbing and still completely conscious.

“Thank you, Nick.” Holly breathed, her neck flushed with red. “Here's our girlfriend back.” She said, tired, as she got up from the wet spot on his bed and walked over, dangling Gina by the ankles. Her curly hair now several shades darker and completely soaked through, Gina was shivering and pale. When she landed right in front of him, she vomited what looked like gallons of vaginal fluid on to the desk in front of him. Nick tried to hug her, but she pushed away with oily, slick hands. “DON'T TOUCH ME!” She shrieked, her skin pallid and almost green, tears falling from her reddened eyes. “DON'T TOUCH ME.”

Gina immediately got up, crossed her arms in an “x” across her chest, and ran away to the other side of the desk and curled into a ball, weeping. Nick walked over to Gina, who was still reeking of Holly's vagina, and asked “Gina! Are... are you okay? Are you hurt?” in the most concerned tone he could possibly give. “GET AWAY!” She shouted “GET AWAY FROM ME. DON'T TOUCH ME.” She rolled into a tighter ball and fell sideways, bawling as hard as she could. “GET AWAY, GET AWAY, JUST GET AWAAAY.” She screamed as she put her hands over her face. Nick just stood there and stared at her, not knowing what to do or how to react.

“Well wasn't that just fun?” Boomed Holly's voice above, her hands on her still naked hips. Gina retched and shrieked, putting her hands over her ears as Holly talked. “Now, what should I do with you, little big brother?” Nick just craned his neck up slowly, feeling his tears run down his cheeks.

“Oh! I know! Let's do something we hardly ever do anymore, let's have lunch together!” Holly squealed as her hand descended upon him. He shut his eyes tight as he felt his sister's fingertips lightly press on his torso and force him up in the air. “I still have some fries left, but you told me before 'Got enough ketchup there?' Well, I'll show you how much ketchup I have! We'll share it!”

Thump, thump, thump, went Holly's feet as they marched down the stairs into the kitchen. Looking down, Nick's heart dropped as he saw the plate, still with fries and ketchup on it. Feeling a sharp descent, Nick instinctively screamed until his entire upper body was soaked in cold ketchup, his sister smearing it over his body. A sharp ascent caused Nick's chest to tickly slightly. “Got enough ketchup there?” his sister giggled, Nick unable to see her through the thick liquid that covered his face, arms, and torso. “MMMMMM” He heard from above as his sister's fingers let him go

Without warning, a hot, tight sensation covered his whole upper body as a gigantic, soft tube surrounded him, making extraordinarily loud sucking sounds. He shouted in the darkness as his sister sucked on his body with her lips like a piece of spaghetti, pulling him in. He felt every detail of his sister's lips as they sucked him in starting with his face, then his neck, then his shoulders, then his arms, then his torso, and his belly, stopping there. Then his sister pushed him out slowly, feeling the massive, soft lips slither over his arms, and his chest again. Covered in saliva and ketchup, Nick tried squirming, but his sister pulled him in again, quicker this time. Now, the lips slithered over his belly, then his cock, then his legs, until only his feet were exposed to the air outside Holly's mouth.

Sliding him out by his feet, all Nick could say was “Ugh! Ugh!” as he spit out the mixture of ketchup and his sister's saliva. “AHHH! NOOO! AHHHH-” he screamed as he was, again, submerged in the red pile of ketchup and brought to his sister's face. Wiping the red goo from his eyes, he immediately saw Holly's tongue slither out from her massive mouth and head right for him. Now held in her palm, he felt thousands of taste buds slime across his naked body. Trying to push her tongue off was no use, the giant, wormy muscle was too strong for him to resist. He just laid there as his own sister dragged her tongue across his bare body.

A breeze blew across his wet skin as he sensed motion. Craning his neck upwards, His sister's smiling face loomed over him like a crimson storm cloud. “Isn't eating with your sister fun?” She grinned and opened her wide mouth and tossed him on her tongue. Nick tried crawling on the hot, slick surface, but each time his quivering body tried to place a limb down, he slipped. Looking forward, Nick screamed “NO, NO!” as Holly's lips closed, sealing him in humid darkness. The tongue under him slithering about, he was forced into the roof of his sister's mouth as she licked over every inch of his body. Forcing her into her soft cheek, below her lips, and under her tongue, it was as though she was making sure he slid to each part of her mouth at least once. Nick gagged at the strong mixture of scents: ketchup, chocolate, and saliva, which all hung heavy in the humid environment of Holly's mouth.

The spit covered him easily, making him slick and gripless, he couldn't push on any part of Holly's mouth without slipping. Making every effort to get to the front of her mouth in the chaotic darkness, he was blinded by a sudden burst of light. “Guh! GUH! Nnnn! NNNNOoo!” He shrieked as he saw the nozzle of a ketchup bottle overhead.

Red goo poured all over his slick, spit-covered body in the heat of his sister's mouth. Every attempt he made at spitting out the ketchup just led to more ketchup and more saliva getting into his own mouth. Washed around, feeling slick cheek, soft tongue, and hard palate on different parts of his wet, warm skin, he could do nothing but shut his eyes as hard as he could and breathe air when a bubble came. Other than that, he was completely at his sister's mercy.

A loud “GULP” sound filled his eardrums as the ketchup washed over him in a torrent. He dug his fingernails into his sister's tongue as the wad of ketchup was swallowed behind him. Holly filled her mouth with air again and Nick could finally breathe. Breathe rank, ketchup-smelling air, but breathe nonetheless. “Augh, ugh!” He shouted as he felt forced forward like a rocket.

Landing on a fleshy pad with a bubbly mass of saliva, he crawled out of the slime ball and wiped his eyes. Looking down, he saw the zebra maze of Holly's handprint, craning his neck upward, he saw Holly's wicked, grinning face.

“Wasn't lunch fun? Isn't it nice to eat with me? Let's go back to see how my little girlfriend is doing.” Nick laid down limp, exhausted, and smelling of ketchup. He didn't even flinch as he was dropped down next to Gina, who was still rolling in a ball in the same spot, the vaginal fluid now dried and crusty. She was humming “Row, Row, Row Your Boat” to herself in a meek, quivering voice. “Oh, Gina.” He said, crawling to her on all fours. “Gina...”

“Ni... Nick... I want to die...” Gina replied in a dry, rough voice. “I can't do this... I can't” She squeezed her eyes and softly sighed, tears flowing from between eyelids with crusted pussy juice on them. “I just want to die.” She seemed exhausted and almost calm.

“Don't say that. Don't say that, please” Nick said as his heart was sinking. His sister watching overhead. He placed his hand on her shoulder and she jumped, standing up immediately. “DON'T! DON'T TOUCH ME!” She screamed as her legs quivered and she collapsed on the floor bawling. “DON'T!” She scratched the crust off her arms, leaving deep, red rakes across her skin.

“Gina... Gina... I'm sorry... Gina...” Nick's jaw was quivering as he watched his girlfriend scratch the skin on her neck and her face.

“I... I need new skin... I need new skin... I'm so dirty... I can't do this. I just can't. I want to die.” Gina kept whispering as she ran her fingers through her crusted curly hair as flakes of dried pussy juice fell out of it like snow.

“Oh God, oh God, oh God, oh God,” Nick kept repeating as he put his hands over his face, looking down as his sister's shadow loomed over them.

“Hey, let's go on a date! My treat!” Holly boomed from above as she gently grabbed Nick and Gina and placed them both right on the wet spot on Nick's bed. Nick dry heaved as the strong scent of his sister's pussy still permeated the air. Gina was still rolling and mumbling to herself.

Holly opened her legs and positioned herself so Nick and Gina were between her massive, pale thighs. Leaning over, she grabbed the box of chocolates from earlier and threw the lid across the room. Picking up one of the milk chocolate cylinders, she lowered it in front of Nick and demanded “Take a bite” He leaned forward and just before his mouth touched the candy, she took it away. “Now you know how I feel.” She boomed as she put it in her mouth, chewed noisily, and swallowed.

Nick just sat shaking, listening to his girlfriend's whimpers as she scratched herself so deep she broke the skin. “So dark... so... so dark... need... new... skin... unclean... so... so... unclean.”

“I can't wait until we're together forever, Nick.” Holly giggled, smiled, and ate another chocolate. “I can't wait until you're a part of me.”

Nick went dizzy, not knowing the implications of that, his mind went into chaos. “What does that mean?” He thought. “What... what's going on?”

Holly broke open one of the chocolates above his head, oozing soft, golden caramel. “My favorite. I hope it's yours too!”

Scooped up in less than a second, Nick and Gina were again in the massive hand of the teenage redhead. “You both are going to be a part of me. Then you can never abandon me, Nick. You can never run away to our girlfriend because she'll be with me, too. You're both going to be with me. Forever.”

Gina shrieked, sounding like nothing human, and put her hands in her crusted hair as she was forced into the caramel pool. Nick retched and tried to push the liquid away, but he knew it was of no use. Both stuck in the caramel waist deep, they both looked up at Holly's massive, brightly smiling face.

Holly slowly raising the two chocolate pieces to her mouth, she whispered breathily “Whereever I go, you'll be with me. I'm gonna eat you up and you're gonna become me. Everywhere I go, everything I do, you'll be with me. In me.” Her hot breath, still smelling strongly of ketchup, wafted over the couple as Holly brought them closer and closer to her mouth, torturously slow. “Now you can never run away, Nick. I can't wait to feel you inside of me.”

Holly's mouth opened wide incredibly fast as Nick and Gina were tossed inside the hot, moist, humid cave. The chocolate immediately melting on contact, Nick felt himself pressed into the soft mass of candy all around him. The caramel, sticking to his hair, was impossible to wipe away. Hearing Gina shriek caused his blood to feel like ice. His heart beating out of his chest and fear overwhelming him, he couldn't do anything but squirm his limbs in random directions. An Earth-shattering “MMMMMMMMM” vibrated his entire body and caused him to develop goosebumps all over his skin, even though he wasn't anywhere close to cold.

The thick mixture was all-encompassing, over every centimeter was his sister's slime and the chocolate piece that she was eating with him. The massive tongue pressed him and Gina into a round, slimy piece of chocolate and caramel, swirling them around in the tornado of saliva.

Firmly in place, neither of them could move in the sticky mass of chocolate in Holly's mouth. Nick grit his teeth as the sound of “GULP” surrounded his entire body, shaking him to his core. Both he and Gina slid into Holly's throat with ease.

Trying to struggle, the caramel held him in place like cement as Holly's esophagus rubbed against the front of his body. The wet, tight tube pulsed rhythmically as he descended further and further into his sister's body. He wanted to back away from the soft, slimy membrane that was slithering past his bare skin, but he couldn't even move a muscle, the caramel-chocolate mixture was far too sticky for him to squirm. Nick tried screaming, but even that proved impossible over his sister's heartbeat.

Nick's brain was fluttering with a cocktail of emotion: disgust, fear, confusion, and the general sense of doom. The deeper he slipped into Holly's body, the more panic took over. Claustrophobic and terrified, he tried calling out to Gina, but all that came out was “MMMMPH!” Not knowing what to do, he just let out tears as the sphincter to his sister's stomach entrance accepted him, Gina, and the chocolate they were embedded in.

“AIYEEEEEEE!” shrieked Gina as the bolus of food slopped down in the hot chyme below. Still unable to move, Nick struggled to get free as the chewed mash of chocolate that he and his girlfriend were stuck in started to sink slowly into the digesting mash of chocolate, ketchup, fries, mucous, and enzymes. “AUUGGGHHHH!” Gina continued to yell as the mass the trapped them continued to sink into Holly's gut. Nick kept squirming, trying to loosen the sticky caramel's grip, but it stuck to him like glue. Gina fared the same. The brown mass was now almost completely submerged in the hot, chunk soup inside Holly's stomach.

As it sank further and further, it began to soften through heat and digestion, allowing Nick to free himself. Busting out from below the surface, Nick breathed in the disgusting odor, the strongest vomit smell he has ever experienced in his life. The acrid scent burned his nostrils and caused his eyes to water and yet, even on top of the puke, he could still smell the strong scent of ketchup.

The hot soup was hard to move through, but Nick desperately wanted to reach Gina. In the pitch darkness, the sea of chunky vomit forced him up and down, causing exhaustion in his arms and legs. Digging through the sweltering stomach mixture to find the chocolate mass, he dove down deep, stinging his eyes, poking his arms around to find something, anything in the torrent of puke.

“AIIIEEEEUUGGGGHHHHH!” shrieked from the other side of the stomach, it was the most horrific bone-chattering screech he ever heard from a human being. Nick, despite his exhaustion, fear, and disgust, attempted to swim towards the shrieking, but his sister's stomach started to churn. A wave of chunky soup smacked into his face, forcing the digesting food into his mouth and up his nose. Sneezing and spitting, he still pumped his arms towards the horrific screaming.

As he pushed himself against the relentless current of the thick mash, he touched something for just a moment, a slick, fleshy surface. “GIIINAAA!” He yelled, desperate for a response. He tried to force himself forward towards the soft skin, but when a wave of chyme forced him forward, he just ended up face-first into his sister's stomach wall. “AUGHH! AUGH!” he screamed as his sister's rugae slithered against his naked skin.

“AAGGGGHHHHHHHHHH UGHHHBblbglgblg” Shrieked Gina's voice from behind him, he could tell she screamed through the vomit. Kicking off of his sister's stomach wall, he was immediately forced backwards into them again due to the strong, thick current. Mucous covered him head-to-toe, as the forceful current kept violently smacking him backwards into the wrinkled folds of the stomach. Finally, a helpful churn forced him forward into the darkness, the hot mess that surrounded him seemingly endless.

“GIIIINAAAA!” He shouted. “GINAAAblbblbl” He screamed as a wave of food slapped its way into his mouth mid-yell. Coughing, he continued to swim in any random direction, desperately grabbing around for Gina in the hot, thick soup of his sister's stomach.

Despairing, he began to give up hope of finding her as the adrenaline rush of being swallowed started to wear off and exhaustion began to take over. “Guhhh... Juhhhh... Giiinaaaa...” He whimpered as he flopped around the sweltering slime.

“AIYEEEEEGH!” A shriek right behind him spurred him into action, turning around right away and lunging forward. He felt skin! “GINA!!!” He screamed.

“NIIICK!!! HELP! AAAAGHH!” She replied in a voice of horrified agony. Nick kept swimming towards her, treading the slime as he embraced her, trying to keep her wet body afloat. “NICK! WE'RE GONNA DIE! NIIIICK!”

“GINAA!” he shouted back, Gina in his arms. “GINA I LOV--”

A massive bolus of chewed chocolate came from the darkness above, landing directly on Gina's head, forcing her deep, deep below the surface. The slick surfaces caused Gina to slip right out of his arms, replacing her with a mass of Holly's latest mouthful. “NOOOO!” He shrieked, diving deep into the chyme, feeling around for her body, feeling nothing but hot goo slipping along his bare skin.

Almost suffocating, he resurfaced and took in another breath of acrid, acidic air as another mass of chewed up chocolate landed right next to him, splashing warm slime directly into his eyes. “Augh!” He screamed as yet another bolus of chocolate landed directly on the other side of him. Massive balls of chocolate landed unpredictably all around for several minutes. Trying to keep afloat, he swam as fast as he could to avoid the falling slime balls.

“AUUUGHH!” A stream of warm milk slathered down from the stomach entrance above, landing on Nick in a series of wet slaps, like he was being pelted with a fire hose. Spitting out the milk his sister swallowed, he continued waving his arms in the thick mixture when a warm, soft mass landed directly on top of him. He knew the flavor: ketchup. “MMMPH! MMMMPH!” He screamed, his heart beat extraordinarily fast, he was overcome with fear and anxety as he attempted to push his way out of the mass of ketchup and fries that surrounded him on all sides.

Pushing his hands in a random direction, he felt the soft floor of his sister's stomach slime by his face as the mass of food caused him to sink. Coincidentally, he landed directly on Gina's now unconscious body as the current pushed him backwards, into a tight, wrinkled hole. Trying to shake Gina, he held on to her body tightly as the hole slithered over him and the unconscious body of his girlfriend.

Entering the tight tube of Holly's small intestine, he was pressed so firmly against Gina's naked body that all his remaining air was forced out of his lungs. The fleshy pipe lined with rings slithered over him as they caused him to descend into an air bubble. Breathing as much air as he could, he tried to wake Gina, but he couldn't even move his own arms. Slitding along his own sister's intestine while pressed into the unconscious body of his girlfriend, he started weeping as his skin began to tingle slightly.

Nick just sobbed as the burning became more and more severe as Gina remained unconscious. For all Nick knew, she could be dead. His head still in the gas bubble, he shrieked in agony as the acids kicked in. He grit his teeth, grunted, and kicked his legs as his skin felt like it was on fire. Squirming from side to side, his entire being was vibrated as Holly's body emitted a deafening “GROOOOAAANN”, causing Gina's body to slip below him, along with the large gas bubble that was his lifeline.

His face now completely covered with digestive enzymes, Nick swirled his body from side to side. Exhaustion took him, his eyes felt like they were being branded with hot pokers, and he could feel which parts of his skin were dissolving faster than others. He could do nothing but wave around frantically as the tube brought him deeper and deeper into his sister's body.

Letting out the last of his air, Nick went completely numb and the only thing he could hear was a dull hum. He tried to squirm, but whenever he tried to move, his body didn't respond. His mind began to fade away and Nick was filled with a deeper fear than he could have ever imagined. Complete dread occupying his final thoughts, he continued slipping through his sister's body, never leaving it alive.

Holly ate the rest of the two boxes of chocolates in one complete binge session. Wanting her brother to feel her belly as stuffed as possible, she just jammed a few in her mouth, chewed once or twice, and swallowed them down hard. She muttered to herself “All for me. None for you. All for me. None for you” as she filled her mouth with the candies.

Heading downstairs, still with her pants down, she drank directly from the milk jug, thinking strongly as to what it must be like for her brother swimming around in her stomach. Thinking maybe it was kind of like a warm swimming pool or, at worst, a hot tub, she thought herself as a good person for giving her brother a quick, merciful death. She smiled as she chowed down on the french fries and ketchup she had before, making sure she felt as stuffed as possible. Not even bothering to wipe her mouth, she shoved the fries into her mouth and swallowed as fast as she could. Letting out a belch, she yawned and patted the small bloated lump on her normally flat belly. “Ugh, I'm stuffed!” She shouted. “But at least you're with me...” She smiled, pointing to her stomach. Her belly responded with a “GROOOOAAANN.”

The next day, Holly was combing her bright red hair in the bathroom mirror. Thinking “My brother is with me, I just know it,” she smiled wide, her big mouth showing off her gleaming white teeth. Walking gleefully into her brother's room, she went through every drawer, every cabinet, and every inch of his closet in order to invade his privacy as much as she possibly could. She even went through his computer and checked all his emails, feeling scorn at the loving notes he'd send back and forth to Gina. In one last act of defiance, she selected every single correspondence he had with Gina and hit “Delete.”

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Nick and Gina's bodies were completely unrecognizable at this point. Only a few skin patches left on Nick and Gina was almost completely gone except for her bones. Slithering in the hunk of feces that entombed their corpses, they were slowly pushed into Holly's descending colon. At almost 100 degrees Farenheit, the corpses were nearly baking in the humid environment of Holly's gut. As the brown log continued through the teenager's large intestine, more and more water was being absorbed, wrinkling what little flesh Nick had left.

Nearly completely digested, Nick and Gina were among the nuggets of shit near the front of the bowel movement. Twisted into unnatural positions, they looked like remains found in a peat bog. Finally deposited in Holly's rectum, they remained still until Nick's jealous sister decided to release them.

Feeling pressure build on her backside, Holly stood up, yawned, and returned to the bathroom. Scratching her ass, she looked in the mirror and smiled again, knowing full well she was going to be letting go of her brother's bones. Pulling down her panties, she sat on the toilet and spread her ass cheeks wide. Letting out a warm stream of piss, her asshole widened as what was left of her brother and his girlfriend slid along the inside of her anus. Dropping with a soft splash, Holly wiped herself and looked down at her own shit with excitement. To her delight, she could see two jumbled skeletons in the piece of shit floating in the yellow water.

Letting out a sigh of relief, she flushed the toilet and washed her hands. She looked down, pointed at her stomach and whispered “Now you'll always be with me. Forever and ever.”
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 5/29]

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This is the PDF for the SCAT version of the above story.
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Postby Tsubasa17 » Mon Jun 01, 2015 8:32 pm

Thank ye kindly, my friend. I bow to the greater wisdom of the masters. I'll be sure to send it to you as soon as its done and I went over it a bit.
Here's to a good story from all!
Which I see you have now posted. I shall now read and come back tomorrow.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby Tsubasa17 » Tue Jun 02, 2015 4:38 pm

Alright, here is my opinion of thine story, mesare.
Another excellent piece, just a couple of sour points, for me anyway. One really, but still. The screaming thing. Just a bit too much of it and it seemed really annoying. And the background at the beginning seemed a bit loose. Her whole reasoning for being mad at her brother and eating them. Saying the girlfriend was just using him, I didn't get that sense at all.
And why would she also want Gina part of her with her brother? I thought she was mad at her. I know the whole slight unbirth (I call using a tiny person as a dildo slight unbirthing) was probably her way at getting back at her, but eating her with her brother seemed counter productive to her anger. Maybe she could have stuck her up her ass forever or until the poop dissolves her. Or condom drowning her, if she has a boyfriend to have sex with, I don't know.
Other than those two things, the whole story was excellent as always. The gina thing is just a small complaint, just thought I'd tell!
Keep it up!
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby supernova » Tue Jun 02, 2015 4:52 pm

Thank you for the fair review! I'll keep those points in mind for future stories. And thank you for the kind words! I'm already like a page into the next story, but I don't think it'll be done until a few more days pass.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby Tsubasa17 » Tue Jun 02, 2015 4:56 pm

Anytime my friend! Anytime! I'll probably start mines for you to look over tomorrow or Thursday, now that I have most of this first week of classes done with and I have all of my textbooks. I'll let you know.
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby supernova » Tue Jun 02, 2015 5:03 pm

I'm looking forward to it! I can't wait to see what you come up with!
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby supernova » Tue Jun 02, 2015 10:35 pm

OK -- I'm like 2 pages into my newest story and I'm just starting to introduce the preds. It's going to be a second-person POV story and I'm going to challenge myself to only use characters from previous stories in the "giant woman" role. I want to start worldbuilding a little bit and get into the backstory of the pink ring that frequently reappears in my work. With plenty of vore, of course.

So far, the only character that's confirmed to appear again is Maggie, from "Nerdy Obsessions" (viewtopic.php?f=38&t=39248&start=20#p2054415) and "Bug Catching" (viewtopic.php?f=38&t=39248&start=40#p2060192). I can really visualize that character well and I think if I had a choice as to any of my characters to be shrunken down and swallowed whole by, it'd probably be her.

But for this one, I want some reader input as I'm actually writing it.

Mostly: What characters you want to reappear in this one? What characters do you find memorable? Do you think any characters could use more development? Do you like the way I describe certain characters visually, if so, how?

Also: How would you like to be eaten within the realm of soft vore? Would you like to be dry dropped with nothing or would you like to be swallowed whole in a drink? What about food, what kinds? What about chewing the food, putting you in the chewed mass, and then swallowing that?

For example, I generally model my characters after someone I'm visualizing very clearly in my head, sometimes fictitious, sometimes real. Like for my last story ("A Jealous Sister") I always had this fantasy of being eaten with ketchup by a redhead who has hair the same color as the ketchup, weird right? Well I'm wondering if any of you have any specific "type" you'd like to be eaten by, y'know?

Thank you for reading! I promise you I'm hearing what you're saying and I'll incorporate what you tell me into my NEXT story!
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby Lupe » Wed Jun 03, 2015 8:11 am

Glad to see you writing again! Great stories so far, and very lengthy :D

As for what you said, I still think the scene where the girl shoves them up her nose and then swallows them from there is such a unique way to go. If you could expand on that it would be awesome. Usually dry dropped are the way to go for me, or transformed into something like gum and swallowed, but I don't think that's your style haha

This last pred saying your going to be a part of me made her memorable because she feels like the first one that acknowledged what she had done and what happened to her food. You haven't really wrote about that in detail and them becoming stuck as butt fat or whatever, maybe even conscious as the fat if that isn't too far from what you like.

Good luck on establishing the universe! Looking forward to more stories!
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Re: Supernova's Giantess Vore Stories [Updated 6/1]

Postby supernova » Wed Jun 03, 2015 12:08 pm

Thank you, Lupe! Your suggestions have been noted! And thank you for the kind words.
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