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The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

PostPosted: Sat Sep 19, 2015 1:11 am
by NeyNey
Hi!

I have been a long time lurker, but I have started a story I thought I'd share. It's currently in a film script format, as I have been imagining it as more of a comic. Although, I think it's still readable and should be easy enough to read.

If any artist would like to work with me on creating some artwork for this story let me know. I wouldn't mind looking into getting some commissions done for bits of this story too.

The story currently contains: Digestion, Pre-Vore M/F and F/M, Burping/Farting, Full F/M and M/F vore, Light Sexual elements.

Update 7/5/17 - Ok the story is completed now. I will possibly go back through the whole thing in awhile and tidying some things up and I'll do more bio's and maybe even have some reference pictures for how I was imagining some of the characters. Those would just be existing photos and stuff though as I can't draw.

Update 7/2/17 - It's probably heading towards finishing soon. I never meant this story to go on this long, it was initially meant to be a short sequence/story. I'm unsure of how exactly to wrap it up, but have a few ideas for a conclusion. So yeah, if you have liked this story, thanks for reading and I'll hopefully update again soon which may be the final end.

Thanks.

Matt

Age: 26
Build: Fit/Average
Looks/Style: Nothing too distinctive, slightly scruffy hair, dirty blonde.
Occupation: Nurse at hospital.
Other: Slightly a loner.

Samantha

Age: 27
Build: Slender/Average
Looks/Style: Not a girly girl, blonde, hair done but a bit messy usually, pretty but ever so slightly boyish.
Occupation: Electronic store clerk
Other: Smoker

Esther

Age: 29
Build: Average
Looks/Style: Professional news presenter, casual wear outside, brunette faint blonde streaks.
Occupation: News Reader/News person
Other: Enjoys swallowing people regularly, fun person, nice.

Amanda

Age: 30
Build: Petite
Looks/Style: Brunette, jeans, company shirt.
Occupation: Recruiter for a meal company

Katie

Age: 25
Build: Slender, but slightly fuller overall than Sam.
Looks/Style: Girly, wearing dress, soft material headband, 1960's inspired possibly, chestnut hair.

Dave

Age: 28
Build: Strong, heavier and more muscly than Matt
Looks/Style: Dark hair, handsome.

Mel

Age: 29
Build: Slender
Looks/Style: Naked, being digested
Other: Sister of Matt

Paul

Age: 30
Build: Average, a little thicker
Looks: Jacket, white shirt, popped collar, black spiked hair.
Other: Cocky/A bit annoying personality

Milly

Age: 28
Build: Average
Looks: Asian, creamy dress with only one shoulder covered.
Other: Caring, friendly, joker.

Re: News Girl

PostPosted: Mon Sep 21, 2015 2:24 am
by NeyNey
Probably wasn't the best OP, anyway, if someone does have any comments though. This is basically a first draft as I mentioned..

Re: News Girl

PostPosted: Mon Sep 21, 2015 12:08 pm
by Fidel2323
Great Worldbuilding there. I want this to be contiued :D

Re: News Girl

PostPosted: Tue Sep 22, 2015 10:35 pm
by NeyNey
Thanks, I'll hopefully add to it soonish!

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Tue Sep 29, 2015 4:38 am
by Geomiror
Your thoughts affect my studies very seriously.

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Tue Jan 05, 2016 6:56 pm
by NeyNey
I started doing an update on this story. Heres some more, I should be adding more to it soon. Download in the first post!

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 7:09 am
by californasun
Seems interesting hopefully a female is eaten with some painful digestion. I like the world building but how does vore work? Is their reformation, or does society not care about people being digested to death. Sam says shes eaten 6, but then that girl in the hospital could of been charged if she digested all the way.
Good so far

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 7:46 am
by NeyNey
Hi thanks for reading it.

It is established that there are laws that deal with the age of people engaging in vore, along with having to have consent. Some people want to be digested and people like Sam are willing to oblige. There was also the recruiter trying to find meals for people who want to vore someone. There are people who don't like vore in the world too!

I'll refine the earlier sections as I go too probably. I have imagined it from a comic perspective as well, so it's maybe not as descriptive in the text and I have gone with a film style script for the format.

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 7:50 am
by californasun
Oh its good, I probably just missed it. Do people reform, and is digestion painful? Thats generally how my stories go so I was just wondering

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 7:59 am
by NeyNey
They don't reform, it's a semi realistic world!

Re: The News Girl

PostPosted: Wed Jan 06, 2016 8:08 am
by californasun
Very well. Hope to see a latina on the menu

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress)

PostPosted: Mon Jan 11, 2016 6:48 pm
by NeyNey
Updated. File in first post!

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/11/16

PostPosted: Sun Jan 24, 2016 8:24 pm
by NeyNey
Added some descriptions in OP.

An update to the PDF will be coming soon, it'll include the first major vore scene.

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/11/16

PostPosted: Mon Jan 25, 2016 7:01 am
by Emperor_Palpatine
I like Milly. Can't wait to see what happens with her.

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/27/16

PostPosted: Tue Jan 26, 2016 6:40 pm
by NeyNey
Okay, the PDF has now been updated. It includes the first major vore scene like I mentioned before. Hope people like it.

Thanks Emperor! I'll come back to those characters at some point for sure!

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/27/16

PostPosted: Tue Feb 09, 2016 2:23 pm
by GameOfPickles
I think this is great so far! The world you have created is interesting. It is a little odd to think about the relatives of someone who chooses to be eaten and the aftermath. It's basically like letting someone murder someone else and letting them get away with it. How would you like to meet the guy who ate your sister? It's weird to think about, but I suppose that's the nature of vore. Anyways, great work! Hope it continues.

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/27/16

PostPosted: Wed Feb 10, 2016 3:26 am
by NeyNey
Glad you liked it so far. Yeah, the whole thing with some people wanting to be eaten and the impacts it could have is fun to imagine and play with. How'd you like the scenes with Esther?

EDIT: PDF has been re-uploaded, I have made some small fixes!

Also, if any artist would like to work with me on creating some artwork for this story let me know. I may also look into doing some commissions for bits of this story as well, but probably not for awhile.

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/27/16

PostPosted: Thu Feb 11, 2016 4:19 pm
by GameOfPickles
I really liked the scene with Esther! Specifically, I liked the detail you gave where She likes to hold in the air for her meals until she can't help but burp it out.

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 01/27/16

PostPosted: Wed Mar 23, 2016 2:43 am
by NeyNey
Updated the file. Not a ton of new stuff, I've been thinking about where to take it lately and its been a bit slow.

I think I have some ideas now though! ;)

Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 03/23/16

PostPosted: Sat Mar 26, 2016 11:17 am
by GameOfPickles
I still like the world you have built here. I'm interested in seeing what your ideas are. :D