While no stranger to vore at this point (shh) I'm definitely very new to the whole porn art thing and was hoping to get some pointers and tips. I've received absolutely no formal teaching (yet) but am very much looking to improve.
Balls to it, here's my first piece ever. Lots of firsts really...
First NSFW piece, first furry piece, first real digital art piece I've actually tried, first hentai piece, first background, first attempt at fluids, and first real time drawing a vagina. (The other time doesn't count. I had to censor it and it was on a eldritch horror "pussy Willow"...)
Done for a friend. Not even my fetish.
Criticism? Thoughts? I'm looking to see where I can improve.
Also, could do with a vore request. I've no practice for it and would like to get started.
New blood looking for criticism.
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
The anatomy is great, the fur is well drawn, and the colors seem to compliment each other quite well. Although, the shading seems a bit too dark in some spots, and some of the edges seem somewhat messy/blurry.
But overall, I'd say this is really great for your first digital art piece. Keep up the good work!
But overall, I'd say this is really great for your first digital art piece. Keep up the good work!
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CalinBeast - Somewhat familiar
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
hmm... the nipples should be more defined, and the line for the eyelid should go all the way across the eye. the background would probably allow the foreground pop a bit more if it were a contrasting color like a darker shade of blue or green instead of purple for this particular image. anatomy is solid though and while some bits could be more well defined (the breasts, eyelids and hair in particular) it's great for your fist attempt. overall I do like this piece and it is a very good first attempt at NSFW art. just keep at it and your technique will improve with the more you create.
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Celestia - Somewhat familiar
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
Wow. Wasn't expecting this positive of a response. Thank you! I'll be sure to consider these all when I make my next piece!
Though just to clarify, I only say it's my first "real" digital piece because of how much time I spent on it as opposed to only an hour or two. I like to think I'm well rehearsed at this point, though I would like to get more into digital painting.
Though just to clarify, I only say it's my first "real" digital piece because of how much time I spent on it as opposed to only an hour or two. I like to think I'm well rehearsed at this point, though I would like to get more into digital painting.
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Jareix - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
The hair looks very strange. There are no shadows on the hair, so it looks as if it's not even part of the image, and has just been pasted on top - especially when its colour is so similar to the background. The shading on the abdominal muscles also looks slightly too dark, and some of the shadows around edges looks inconsistent (for example compare the elbow and shoulder of her right arm - the shading is much darker at the elbow, and there doesn't seem to be any reason why).
The lighting angle also looks inconsistent: Each tentacle's light and dark parts don't match up.
But other than shading, the picture looks good.
The lighting angle also looks inconsistent: Each tentacle's light and dark parts don't match up.
But other than shading, the picture looks good.
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
I know it will be more work, but try to add a bit more background. The girl having nipples would be nice too.
The light is a bit omnipotent, try making the parts closer to the light brighter than those that aren't. In this case make the head brighter than the tops of the knees. The tentacles could do with some slime and the suckers could use a bit more depth. Her face looks a little lifeless like a mask.
Roast edition: You use fog to cover up your lazy ass on the background and the girl has no fucking nipples. Even dudes have nipples and you were so retarded that you left out that massive detail. Your lighting sucks ass and the tentacles look fake as if dirt pretended to be diamonds. That girl's face is a mask that peers into your soul and ruins every thing that's supposed to be hot about this pic.
Note:I don't mean anything I said In the roast edition. Like I could do better. I try to be supportive to those around me. Just practicing just in case. I have very little experience so my roasting probably sucks. You did a very good job on this art piece.
For a vore suggestion: Perhaps you could make a sequel where the octopus/squid/whatever that is stretches her open and pushes its way in.
I look forward to more of your art.
The light is a bit omnipotent, try making the parts closer to the light brighter than those that aren't. In this case make the head brighter than the tops of the knees. The tentacles could do with some slime and the suckers could use a bit more depth. Her face looks a little lifeless like a mask.
Roast edition: You use fog to cover up your lazy ass on the background and the girl has no fucking nipples. Even dudes have nipples and you were so retarded that you left out that massive detail. Your lighting sucks ass and the tentacles look fake as if dirt pretended to be diamonds. That girl's face is a mask that peers into your soul and ruins every thing that's supposed to be hot about this pic.
Note:I don't mean anything I said In the roast edition. Like I could do better. I try to be supportive to those around me. Just practicing just in case. I have very little experience so my roasting probably sucks. You did a very good job on this art piece.
For a vore suggestion: Perhaps you could make a sequel where the octopus/squid/whatever that is stretches her open and pushes its way in.
I look forward to more of your art.
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Way2Weird4Some - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
Way2Weird4Some wrote:I know it will be more work, but try to add a bit more background. The girl having nipples would be nice too.
The light is a bit omnipotent, try making the parts closer to the light brighter than those that aren't. In this case make the head brighter than the tops of the knees. The tentacles could do with some slime and the suckers could use a bit more depth. Her face looks a little lifeless like a mask.
Roast edition: You use fog to cover up your lazy ass on the background and the girl has no fucking nipples. Even dudes have nipples and you were so retarded that you left out that massive detail. Your lighting sucks ass and the tentacles look fake as if dirt pretended to be diamonds. That girl's face is a mask that peers into your soul and ruins every thing that's supposed to be hot about this pic.
Note:I don't mean anything I said In the roast edition. Like I could do better. I try to be supportive to those around me. Just practicing just in case. I have very little experience so my roasting probably sucks. You did a very good job on this art piece.
For a vore suggestion: Perhaps you could make a sequel where the octopus/squid/whatever that is stretches her open and pushes its way in.
I look forward to more of your art.
I lolled a bit too loud... XD (Still living with parents and younger siblings... They don't know I do this stuff, so i do it in the wee hours before anyone else is up)
In other news, thank you all for your wonderful criticism! I'll take it all into consideration for when i do my next piece...
In the meantime, here's my first (No, shut up! That one didn't count!) attempt at doing digital painting i did yesterday morning.
Of course, it's not porn though... But expect some soon if anyone ends up sending me a request... Feel free to criticize this.. I think I find I like this new messier style...
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Jareix - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
I like the shading of that last one, but I feel that the lamp should be somewhere a bit to the right or a bit above.
At the moment it looks like the reptile is carrying the lamp in his maw.
At the moment it looks like the reptile is carrying the lamp in his maw.
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Bright - Heavy user
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
Bright wrote:I like the shading of that last one, but I feel that the lamp should be somewhere a bit to the right or a bit above.
At the moment it looks like the reptile is carrying the lamp in his maw.
I get that a lot... To be fair, it was originally just an arbitrary light source for reference, but then I just wen't f*ck it and made it a lamp...
Is this better?
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Jareix - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
A thing I noticed ( more of a problem in the first picture rather than the second) is that you use a lot of black and white for your shading. Using black for shadows will make things darker, but also more grainy and dull. I would nearly always recommend using colours for shadows. Usually you can use a blue hue for shadows and darker parts, I tend to find it looks a lot more alive and vibrant.
The hair is also pretty bad, I would advice against making it purple but if you desperatly want to keep it the same colour, you should add some bright highlights /shadows at the edges of it to seperate it from the massive block of purple behind it. Anatomy wise I really do like your hands, although the fingers of the right hand seem awfully smaller when compared to the left hand.
The midsection is a bit wierd with how triangular it looks, but that might be just me. You culd do some work on the shins, mainly the back part of them, if you study anatomy you´ll find that they are more curved than the front part.
The toes look a bit wierd, generally they shouldn´t be able to bend that far.
Although I sorta like the tentacles ( especially the ones interacting with his hands) The shading is really jarring. I would advice using a whitish purple instead of straight white. Or atleast make the gradients softer, the rightmost tentacle works a lot better than the bottom ones for example.
The background takes a lot of attention atm, it becomes hard to see both the hair and the tentacles when they are the same colour. You could try lowering the saturation / contrast in the background but I would play around with different colours.
Don´t take this huge wall of text the wrong way, I am just trying to give feedback on what I think could be improved in the first picture you linked. Sorry for rambling
The hair is also pretty bad, I would advice against making it purple but if you desperatly want to keep it the same colour, you should add some bright highlights /shadows at the edges of it to seperate it from the massive block of purple behind it. Anatomy wise I really do like your hands, although the fingers of the right hand seem awfully smaller when compared to the left hand.
The midsection is a bit wierd with how triangular it looks, but that might be just me. You culd do some work on the shins, mainly the back part of them, if you study anatomy you´ll find that they are more curved than the front part.
The toes look a bit wierd, generally they shouldn´t be able to bend that far.
Although I sorta like the tentacles ( especially the ones interacting with his hands) The shading is really jarring. I would advice using a whitish purple instead of straight white. Or atleast make the gradients softer, the rightmost tentacle works a lot better than the bottom ones for example.
The background takes a lot of attention atm, it becomes hard to see both the hair and the tentacles when they are the same colour. You could try lowering the saturation / contrast in the background but I would play around with different colours.
Don´t take this huge wall of text the wrong way, I am just trying to give feedback on what I think could be improved in the first picture you linked. Sorry for rambling
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manty - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
I'd be more concerned if you said it was flawless...
*scribbles down notes*
Anything else I should keep in mind?
*scribbles down notes*
Anything else I should keep in mind?
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Jareix - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
Attempted my first vore art. Uhh...
helf... I'm in need of assistance because I know BUGGER ALL...
helf... I'm in need of assistance because I know BUGGER ALL...
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Jareix - New to the forum
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
Looks pretty good in my opinion. Nice boobsnake. :3
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Re: New blood looking for criticism.
Thanks! Wee hours, got finishing touches done!
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