Story: Unexpected Turn Around

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Story: Unexpected Turn Around

Postby NeyNey » Wed Apr 19, 2017 6:47 pm

Hey heres a quick one off story I wrote..

It features F/F vore, light digestion talk, unwilling, micro/macro and some burps. It's attached as a PDF below, hope you enjoy. Feedback appreciated.
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around

Postby sweetladyamy » Wed Apr 19, 2017 10:45 pm

It's well-written, I can say that for sure.
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around

Postby Marked » Wed Apr 19, 2017 11:07 pm

It's pretty nice for such a short story. I liked that used the two characters' banter to give exposition. I wonder where they got the leaf people in the first place? Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around

Postby Ryan-Drakel » Thu Apr 20, 2017 12:08 am

You forgot unwilling and macro/micro.
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around

Postby NeyNey » Thu Apr 20, 2017 12:10 am

Thanks for the comments.

Sorry, I've added those extra descriptors to the OP now!
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around

Postby letmeinn0w » Thu May 18, 2017 1:25 am

Thanks for using a decent sized and readable font.
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