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Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Posted:
Wed Apr 19, 2017 6:47 pm
by NeyNey
Hey heres a quick one off story I wrote..
It features F/F vore, light digestion talk, unwilling, micro/macro and some burps. It's attached as a PDF below, hope you enjoy. Feedback appreciated.
Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Posted:
Wed Apr 19, 2017 10:45 pm
by sweetladyamy
It's well-written, I can say that for sure.
Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Posted:
Wed Apr 19, 2017 11:07 pm
by Marked
It's pretty nice for such a short story. I liked that used the two characters' banter to give exposition. I wonder where they got the leaf people in the first place? Thanks for sharing!
Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Posted:
Thu Apr 20, 2017 12:08 am
by Ryan-Drakel
You forgot unwilling and macro/micro.
Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Posted:
Thu Apr 20, 2017 12:10 am
by NeyNey
Thanks for the comments.
Sorry, I've added those extra descriptors to the OP now!
Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Posted:
Thu May 18, 2017 1:25 am
by letmeinn0w
Thanks for using a decent sized and readable font.