Birichino wrote:Well, you're off to a cute start, but your text could use more legibility.
ryanshowseason3 wrote:I like it, the captioning pulls it together. It was marginally hard to read but I managed.
Yes and thank you! Writing on tablet is still pretty difficult for me, but I thought doing bubbles would take too much space from the background and since text is the last layer I do I went rather fast because I just wanted the piece over. I tried a bit slower this time and increased the contrast with a second darker line of text underneath (and using more desaturated colors for the backdrop). That hopefully helps it pop a bit more, but it might be something that I need to just practice with more for the sake of legibility.
Now that I'm typing this though I realize I made a mistake by writing it out twice when I could have just made a copy of the text, recolored it and scaled it up to save time and probably look neater, whoops!
Anyways, here's another two parter:
- Sam never expected her summer swim would end like this. When she reached the far shore of the lake she found a rather forward nudist waiting for her on the other side. Although she was a bit taken back, it didn't take much coaxing before the naturalist woman had relieved Sam of her own offending swimsuit and the sweaty fun that followed after was the most exciting and pleasurable time Sam felt she'd had her whole life. She was so exhausted that she couldn't resist as the woman started sucked on her toes... and then sucking even further. She thought she might try to struggle as the woman enveloped her rear end but the teasing tongue put an end to that notion. By the time her lips were wrapping around Sam's breasts she was actively helping the nude woman gulp her down, sacrificing one of her arms to help press her rather perky tits down the throat. The warm and tight confines were so comfortable that Sam no longer even dreamed of escape, she relaxed as the powerful gulps pulled her neck, and then her head, down into the gullet. Now only her other arm remained free and clear on the outside, but even that was not to last long.
- June was ecstatic. It wasn't everyday you got such an eager meal. This one hardly needed any prodding at all! June had forgotten to pack anything to eat and didn't realize it until she was already almost at the park, She was even thinking about turning back when the blonde in the sweet blue bikini locked eyes with her. The rest of the moment became a blur of sultry whispers and kisses and skin against skin before she could ignore her hunger no more. She did feel a pang of annoyance that she never even got the swimmer girls name though, but it didn't seem to matter much now to her. All that was left was to lie back and enjoy the sun and the breeze and the continuing squirms of her cute swimmer lunch.
