A Crinkly Meal

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A Crinkly Meal

Postby DeepLuck37 » Sun Nov 19, 2017 12:39 pm

This contains diaper vore, and I’m making this because I feel like there isn’t a lot of diaper vore stories to go around, so here ya’ go!
Note: None of the following story is real!
Sorry it’s short!

I was up in my room playing video games, when suddenly my little sister came in, and said “I want to play!”, so I turned off my console and said “Sure, but how about we play something else!” I said slowly revealing my diaper, “Okie what are we gonna play?” She asked eagerly. “It’s called, I wanna feel you squirm in my diaper!” I said before picking her up! She whimpered, and said “W-Wait what?”. “Oh you’ll see!” I replied, slowly opening up my diaper.

I then shoved her into my diaper head first, as she started screaming, and struggling. “Mmm, yes struggle for me!” I said with a moan, shoving her even deeper into my crinkly diaper. *CRINKLE* *CRINKLE* Is all I heard as I continued shoving her in my diaper, aside from a few screams, and cries! “Mmm, little sis I’ve been waiting for this day for a while!” I said finally shoving her feet into my diaper!

I now had her entire delicious body inside my diaper, and I moaned as she squirmed around, and she kept screaming, and crying for help. “Ahh yes little sis now to get to the fun part!” I said with a grin! I then started to pee all over her with my long hard cock, my cock was already hard from her squirming from before against my crotch! After I was done peeing all I could hear was bubbles! “Yes little sis! I’m going to kill you now!” I said before forcing her to the back of my diaper!

“Eat up!” I said as I started to poop in her mouth! All I could hear my sister say was “MMMPPPHHH!”! I then moved her back to the front rubbing my diaper some more before cumming, I then mixed all the pee, poop, and cum together, and started sloshing her around in my diaper witch was about ready to break! Then my sister dies of suffocation, and right after that! *RIIIIIIIP* My diaper breaks open and falls to the floor right below me, And when I look down I see my little sis laying in pee, poop, and cum! I then go back to playing video games once again!
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Re: A Crinkly Meal

Postby Hanzo » Mon Nov 20, 2017 4:22 am

dude wtf
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Re: A Crinkly Meal

Postby Hereforvore » Mon Nov 20, 2017 9:02 am

While the scat and such isn't my thing, I felt I should give you a bit of advice. Description is key, expand on every sensation and detail, not only will it fill up space, giving you a longer story, but it will make the story better and more engrossing. Just saying 'my sister dies of suffocation' doesn't say or tell much. Describe everything she is experiencing as she suffocates, the pain burning her lungs as her air slowly runs out, her feeble struggles and twitches as she begins to lose consciousness.

You could easily triple the length of this story just by describing everything, rather than stating it as a simple fact and moving on.
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