my very first story (plant/vore/bad end/ no gore/tentacle)

[thyladras]

hello, this is my very first story.
english is not my native language^^
this is the story of a young girl who have a carnivorous plant, she use the plant as a sex toys when the plant is correctly fed but.... i let you discover the end by yourself ^^
the girl is surely major (18+)
there is a bad end but nothing gore
tell me what you think, i'll surely make 3 or 4 more story

[hunter2045]

Not bad.
You could have been more descriptive of the daughter's struggling, making it a little longer, showing more of the daughter's thoughts as she's further enveloped by the plant, showing more of the mother's thoughts while watching her daughter being wrapped up and consumed, etc.

Still... Nice work.

[thyladras]

hello, thx you for your comment.

Your are right and i have an idea, i'll rework this story and post a new version soon ^^ i'll complettly change the end

[thyladras]

here's the new version, the mother is more active in this version ^^

tell me what you think about it