Eka's Portal

https://aryion.com/g4/view/491809
i don’t think it’s anything special, but i want to stop lurking and get my thoughts written down
thoughts or suggestions on what i’m good at and what to improve?

Yeah, I'd fix the formatting too just to make it more easily accessible....

But damn, this is your first go at it?! This is some G shit right here. I was totally pulled in from the begin, remarkably descriptive, and the conflicting emotions between characters, I mean DAMN! I loved it!