Any critisim for my first story? (M/F)

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Any critisim for my first story? (M/F)

Postby RiceBelch » Fri Apr 12, 2019 10:23 pm

https://aryion.com/g4/view/519793
Tips would be appreciated as i'm just starting out on the site. ^^;
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