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Re: A request for world building criticism (Nomphf)

Postby Peptidase » Thu May 02, 2019 6:56 pm

This seems like a pretty solid world "bible" overall. Lots of well thought out aspects to a world backstory with a lot of interesting flexibility about it. I like the cyberpunky post-human setting. It's one that I've contemplated before but have always had a harder time working on. I especially liked the drugs section of it, with "vore economics" being a concept I like to keep in mind while working on worldbuild-y projects. The idea of prey taking stimulants to stay conscious during digestion is really cool.

The biggest criticism I have is that I'm not sure exactly what this is for. You mention stats being introduced, so is this for something like a tabletop RPG?
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