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Looking to improve

Postby furrster090 » Wed Jan 13, 2021 11:59 am

Heya!

I've started writing vore stories to share on here, but I'm hoping to get some critique/advice.

You can find my latest work here:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/661223

I've written a couple of stories so far and I feel I've already improved at least a bit with simply self reflecting, but I'm curious what people actually think about what I write. Any form of advice or feedback is appreciated!
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Re: Looking to improve

Postby InDepthLook » Wed Jan 13, 2021 7:22 pm

It's not bad at all, especially for a beginner! Let me dredge up some tricks I've learned over the years,

I recommend letting the text sit on the left! It can be distracting and easy to lose your place when the text is centered. Some people prefer more backstory before the vore scene, but it's more a personal choice when writing. A more creative title will help your story stand out! The title and description are the first things someone will see when casually browsing, so it's important to fit a few attention grabbers in there that really sell your story. "A quick bite" is a good title, but a casual viewer may look over it if they see something more interesting. Then, if the title catches their eye, they'll look at the description below it. So definitely add more to the description! That's the part people will use to determine whether or not to click on the story, lol

If I think of anything else I'll stop by again, but so far you're doing great! Just keep writing, keep practicing, and you'll find your niche soon enough ^-^
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Re: Looking to improve

Postby furrster090 » Thu Jan 14, 2021 6:15 pm

InDepthLook wrote:It's not bad at all, especially for a beginner! Let me dredge up some tricks I've learned over the years,

I recommend letting the text sit on the left! It can be distracting and easy to lose your place when the text is centered. Some people prefer more backstory before the vore scene, but it's more a personal choice when writing. A more creative title will help your story stand out! The title and description are the first things someone will see when casually browsing, so it's important to fit a few attention grabbers in there that really sell your story. "A quick bite" is a good title, but a casual viewer may look over it if they see something more interesting. Then, if the title catches their eye, they'll look at the description below it. So definitely add more to the description! That's the part people will use to determine whether or not to click on the story, lol

If I think of anything else I'll stop by again, but so far you're doing great! Just keep writing, keep practicing, and you'll find your niche soon enough ^-^



Thank you for your advice, I'll try to keep it in mind with my future stories. I've already made a note of that I should work on my titles; although I personally never look at the description before clicking on something, so I'll definitely be looking at those in the future. Besides that, well, this story was written to be less plot heavy for multiple reasons. To give you an idea of a more plot driven story, you can read this https://aryion.com/g4/view/660613.

Thanks a million if you decide to give it a read, and thank you for your kind words and support!
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