Cyberpunk'ish Brief novel length work

[ryanshowseason3]

Any thoughts positive, negative appreciated, just trying to hone the craft.

It is a long one though, hopefully enjoyable.

https://aryion.com/g4/view/695883

[willofwii]

Mm, I like the story! The writing and dialogue kinda remind me a bit of neuromancer if a bit cheesier which is great and the vore surprisingly melded well into the setting with some nice techno babbling and nifty ideas here and there.

[doomed]

it reads kinda like cyberpunk zootopia. that said the female domination stuff went a little far for my tastes . but objectively its a great story

[knt27]

I'll definitely have to check this out when I have some down time to read. Plus with those tags, I'm guessing there's a very homicidal brand of femdom at play here, which I LOVE in fiction! The opening few paragraphs are super intriguing, and I second the opinion that it's evocative of Neuromancer (one of my favorite novels- I actually got to meet William Gibson once!).

[ryanshowseason3]

There is also an accompanying image on my photomanip thread FYI.

Here's what no one asked for:

I don't want a lot for Christmas
There is just one prey I need
I don't care about the prey-sents 
Squirming neath the Christmas tree
I just want you on my folds
More than you will live to know
Make my stomach full 
All I want for Christmas is you


I don't want a lot for Christmas
There is just one prey I need (and I)
Don't care about the prey-sents 
Squirming neath the Christmas tree
I don't need to cook you hubby there inside the fireplace
Santa Claus won't make me happy with micros on Christmas Day
I just want you on my folds 
More than you will live to know
Make my stomach full
All I want for Christmas is you
You, in my belly

Oh, I won't ask for much this Christmas
I will only wish for vore (and I)
I'm just gonna keep salivating underneath the mistletoe
I don't have a list o'prey to send to the North Pole for Saint Nick
I will even stay awake to hear your bones snap and click
'Cause I just want you here tonight
Trapped in me and held so tight
What more can I do?
Oh, baby, all I want for Christmas is you
You, in my belly
Oh-oh, all the bellies are grinding so brutally everywhere (so brutally, baby)
And the sound of prey's slaughter fills the air (oh, oh, yeah)
And every pred is singing (oh, yeah)
I hear those sloshes ringing
Santa, won't you bring me the prey I really need? (Yeah, oh)
Won't you please bring my baby to me?
Oh, I don't want a lot for Christmas
This is all I'm asking for
I just wanna see my belly hanging right down to the floor
Oh, I just want you for my own
More than you will live to know
Make my stomach full
Oh, baby, all I want for Christmas is you
You, in my belly
All I want for Christmas is you, in my belly
All I want for Christmas is you, in my belly
All I want for Christmas is you, in my belly
All I want for Christmas (all I really want) is you, in my belly
All I want (I want) for Christmas (all I really want) is you, in my belly