Something I wrote on the back of my current bee-girl fetish. Had quite a lot of fun writing this one up...a bit too much at one point.
Contains: F/F only, unbirthing, transformation, non-con to willing, sex, breastfeeding, masturbation.
A New Drone (bee-girl, F/F)
Forum rules
1) Try to upload related material to the correct subform please. They are Soft vore, Hardvore, Unbirth, Analvore, Cockvore, Mawshot, Other/combination, Extra soft and Photo edit.
2) Acceptable files: Drawing, stories, video clips (Flash, Gif or other movie format), roleplaying logs, vore games.
3) Please do not upload material that are specified "Do not Distribute ".
4) Any photo with real life human requires full permission from the subject in question, and posted in Photo edit forum only. All individual must be 18+ only. We do not allow photograph of anyone who are not unquestionably 18+ of age anywhere on this domain. All uploaded files must comply with United States law.
5) Label your material. If it have sexual, scat, gore, or other possibly offensive content, please give warning!
6) Any non-sexual fantasy vore illustration involving questionable age of fantasy character, must be placed in the Underage (Fictional character) forum. To access the underage forum, please follow these instructions. No photograph are allowed, period. Drawing and fantasy character only. Material supporting child abuse is prohibited regardless of media format or other content. Sexual illustrations involving questionable age characters are not allowed anywhere.
Read the rules in detail here
1) Try to upload related material to the correct subform please. They are Soft vore, Hardvore, Unbirth, Analvore, Cockvore, Mawshot, Other/combination, Extra soft and Photo edit.
2) Acceptable files: Drawing, stories, video clips (Flash, Gif or other movie format), roleplaying logs, vore games.
3) Please do not upload material that are specified "Do not Distribute ".
4) Any photo with real life human requires full permission from the subject in question, and posted in Photo edit forum only. All individual must be 18+ only. We do not allow photograph of anyone who are not unquestionably 18+ of age anywhere on this domain. All uploaded files must comply with United States law.
5) Label your material. If it have sexual, scat, gore, or other possibly offensive content, please give warning!
6) Any non-sexual fantasy vore illustration involving questionable age of fantasy character, must be placed in the Underage (Fictional character) forum. To access the underage forum, please follow these instructions. No photograph are allowed, period. Drawing and fantasy character only. Material supporting child abuse is prohibited regardless of media format or other content. Sexual illustrations involving questionable age characters are not allowed anywhere.
Read the rules in detail here
4 posts
• Page 1 of 1
Re: A New Drone (bee-girl, F/F)
Though I can definitely tell how much you took from Milia Wars to bring into your story, you did a very good job that I can tell of conveying that in your story. Kudos to you.
http://profile.aryion.com/profile/Nicci_Mierin <-----------Main RP character
-
vore2412 - Advanced Vorarephile
- Posts: 825
- Joined: Sun Jan 31, 2010 11:38 pm
Re: A New Drone (bee-girl, F/F)
That was nice! I like transformation stories, and that point in a story where a human has to face up to a much stronger female.
It shouldn't be possible to have "too much" fun writing a story. You should enjoy that process-- if you aren't intrigued by your own story, your readers probably won't be, either. When that inspiration hits you should just write without restraint-- don't censor yourself and just let the ideas flow. The trick, however, is to sit on the story (or chapter) for a while and re-read it. You'll catch inconsistencies, repeated elements or phrases, and things that happen in the wrong sequence or that defy explanation. You'll have some series of events A->B->C and realize that the characters in situation A have no reason to detour to B on their way to C. You didn't have many of those issues here; the story is pretty clean. As constructive criticism I'll offer a few optional pointers...
Thanks for sharing your work!
dw
How does Clara feel during her
It shouldn't be possible to have "too much" fun writing a story. You should enjoy that process-- if you aren't intrigued by your own story, your readers probably won't be, either. When that inspiration hits you should just write without restraint-- don't censor yourself and just let the ideas flow. The trick, however, is to sit on the story (or chapter) for a while and re-read it. You'll catch inconsistencies, repeated elements or phrases, and things that happen in the wrong sequence or that defy explanation. You'll have some series of events A->B->C and realize that the characters in situation A have no reason to detour to B on their way to C. You didn't have many of those issues here; the story is pretty clean. As constructive criticism I'll offer a few optional pointers...
Spoiler: show
Thanks for sharing your work!
dw
-
dreamweevil - Participator
- Posts: 270
- Joined: Fri Mar 21, 2008 11:00 pm
Re: A New Drone (bee-girl, F/F)
Ooh, fun! Thanks for sharing this one, and I hope you keep writing!
-
Groblek - Intermediate Vorarephile
- Posts: 536
- Joined: Fri Dec 23, 2005 12:00 am
- Location: California
4 posts
• Page 1 of 1