The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 04/19/16

Postby NeyNey » Mon Apr 18, 2016 8:30 pm

Hey all. PDF has been updated with new content..
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 08/17/16

Postby NeyNey » Tue Aug 16, 2016 6:44 pm

Hey

I have just updated the PDF again. It likely needs a little tidying up, but should mostly be fine.

I will try and wrap this one up soon, it actually wasn't meant to go on for this long, but I kept coming back to it. Once I finish I will tidy up the original post as well.

Hope you like where it goes in the new stuff!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 08/17/16

Postby GameOfPickles » Sun Aug 28, 2016 1:34 pm

Just chiming in here to say great update! But wow! I didn't see the story taking a turn for getting this dark. Still enjoying it! Can't wait for more. :D
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/7/16

Postby NeyNey » Mon Mar 06, 2017 11:26 pm

Bump time.

Started getting back into this, here's a small update to get the ball rolling again.

PDF is in the first post!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/7/17

Postby Greg » Tue Mar 07, 2017 7:29 pm

Excited! This story is super underrated.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/7/17

Postby NeyNey » Tue Mar 07, 2017 8:54 pm

Greg wrote:Excited! This story is super underrated.


Hey thanks!!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17

Postby NeyNey » Wed Mar 08, 2017 6:23 pm

Ok another update, I think its fun. Let me know what you all think :)

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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17

Postby GameOfPickles » Wed Mar 08, 2017 8:37 pm

Excellent addition! Really enjoying this story overall. :)
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17

Postby no one » Sat Mar 11, 2017 11:20 am

Love this story! Keep it up!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17

Postby NeyNey » Tue Mar 14, 2017 5:48 pm

Thanks!

If anyone has any critiques or anything, let me know. I'm going to try and wrap it up soon and will go back and polish a bit if necessary.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17

Postby NeyNey » Sun Jul 02, 2017 11:52 pm

Updated!!

It's probably heading towards finishing soon. I never meant this story to go on this long, it was initially meant to be a short sequence/story. I'm unsure of how exactly to wrap it up, but have a few ideas for a conclusion. So yeah, if you have liked this story, thanks for reading and I'll hopefully update again soon which may be the final end.
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

Postby NeyNey » Tue Jul 04, 2017 8:49 pm

I didn't think I'd update and finish it so soon. But here it is..

I will possibly go back through the whole thing in awhile and tidying some things up and I'll do more bio's and maybe even have some reference pictures for how I was imagining some of the characters. Those would just be existing photos and stuff though as I can't draw.
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

Postby Greg » Thu Jul 06, 2017 5:16 pm

Speaking personally, I would rather have had the story end with Matt slowly coming around to being prey, that seemed to natural projection of the story, and not this
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"and it was all a dream"
thing. That said, I still love what you did here, a collection of everyday small moments in a world where vore is just this casual thing. So thank you for that! Can't wait to see what you do next. :)
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

Postby NeyNey » Thu Jul 06, 2017 6:47 pm

Greg wrote:Speaking personally, I would rather have had the story end with Matt slowly coming around to being prey, that seemed to natural projection of the story, and not this
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"and it was all a dream"
thing. That said, I still love what you did here, a collection of everyday small moments in a world where vore is just this casual thing. So thank you for that! Can't wait to see what you do next. :)


Yeah I get that, I also considered that but didn't see the end in sight really, I suppose I could have given it some more thought. The main reason I went in this direction was because I felt like the vore sequences and occurrences had been ramping up and getting more unrealistic. I thought it might be an interesting way to have the story escalate and then loop back around on itself to a degree. Maybe I could also do another version and try another way. The ramping up was Matt mentally coping and dealing with it all, finally getting to the point it did.

But anyway, glad you liked it mostly. I started feeling a bit lost in what to do as I have mentioned before and originally it was never meant to go on so long..
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

Postby no one » Sun Jul 23, 2017 12:25 am

I've just got to say, I really love your work! I've been following the updates since day 1. Keep up the good work! :D
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17

Postby MarkBryan » Thu Jan 03, 2019 6:52 am

WOW!! I love your voice. I listened to your audio posts and found them to be wonderful. I would love to be swallowed alive by you (same size) after a few last requests. Would you be willing to give last requests? Anyway I am a writer and would be happy to write a story for you. Let me know. I hope to be in your belly soon. :gulp:
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