The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 04/19/16
Hey all. PDF has been updated with new content..
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 08/17/16
Hey
I have just updated the PDF again. It likely needs a little tidying up, but should mostly be fine.
I will try and wrap this one up soon, it actually wasn't meant to go on for this long, but I kept coming back to it. Once I finish I will tidy up the original post as well.
Hope you like where it goes in the new stuff!
I have just updated the PDF again. It likely needs a little tidying up, but should mostly be fine.
I will try and wrap this one up soon, it actually wasn't meant to go on for this long, but I kept coming back to it. Once I finish I will tidy up the original post as well.
Hope you like where it goes in the new stuff!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 08/17/16
Just chiming in here to say great update! But wow! I didn't see the story taking a turn for getting this dark. Still enjoying it! Can't wait for more.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/7/16
Bump time.
Started getting back into this, here's a small update to get the ball rolling again.
PDF is in the first post!
Started getting back into this, here's a small update to get the ball rolling again.
PDF is in the first post!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/7/17
Excited! This story is super underrated.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/7/17
Greg wrote:Excited! This story is super underrated.
Hey thanks!!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17
Ok another update, I think its fun. Let me know what you all think
PDF in first post.
PDF in first post.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17
Excellent addition! Really enjoying this story overall.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17
Love this story! Keep it up!
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17
Thanks!
If anyone has any critiques or anything, let me know. I'm going to try and wrap it up soon and will go back and polish a bit if necessary.
If anyone has any critiques or anything, let me know. I'm going to try and wrap it up soon and will go back and polish a bit if necessary.
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Re: The News Girl (Story in Progress) Updated 3/9/17
Updated!!
It's probably heading towards finishing soon. I never meant this story to go on this long, it was initially meant to be a short sequence/story. I'm unsure of how exactly to wrap it up, but have a few ideas for a conclusion. So yeah, if you have liked this story, thanks for reading and I'll hopefully update again soon which may be the final end.
It's probably heading towards finishing soon. I never meant this story to go on this long, it was initially meant to be a short sequence/story. I'm unsure of how exactly to wrap it up, but have a few ideas for a conclusion. So yeah, if you have liked this story, thanks for reading and I'll hopefully update again soon which may be the final end.
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17
I didn't think I'd update and finish it so soon. But here it is..
I will possibly go back through the whole thing in awhile and tidying some things up and I'll do more bio's and maybe even have some reference pictures for how I was imagining some of the characters. Those would just be existing photos and stuff though as I can't draw.
I will possibly go back through the whole thing in awhile and tidying some things up and I'll do more bio's and maybe even have some reference pictures for how I was imagining some of the characters. Those would just be existing photos and stuff though as I can't draw.
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17
Speaking personally, I would rather have had the story end with Matt slowly coming around to being prey, that seemed to natural projection of the story, and not this thing. That said, I still love what you did here, a collection of everyday small moments in a world where vore is just this casual thing. So thank you for that! Can't wait to see what you do next.
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17
Greg wrote:Speaking personally, I would rather have had the story end with Matt slowly coming around to being prey, that seemed to natural projection of the story, and not thisthing. That said, I still love what you did here, a collection of everyday small moments in a world where vore is just this casual thing. So thank you for that! Can't wait to see what you do next.Spoiler: show
Yeah I get that, I also considered that but didn't see the end in sight really, I suppose I could have given it some more thought. The main reason I went in this direction was because I felt like the vore sequences and occurrences had been ramping up and getting more unrealistic. I thought it might be an interesting way to have the story escalate and then loop back around on itself to a degree. Maybe I could also do another version and try another way. The ramping up was Matt mentally coping and dealing with it all, finally getting to the point it did.
But anyway, glad you liked it mostly. I started feeling a bit lost in what to do as I have mentioned before and originally it was never meant to go on so long..
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17
I've just got to say, I really love your work! I've been following the updates since day 1. Keep up the good work!
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Re: The News Girl (Main Story Finished) Updated 7/5/17
WOW!! I love your voice. I listened to your audio posts and found them to be wonderful. I would love to be swallowed alive by you (same size) after a few last requests. Would you be willing to give last requests? Anyway I am a writer and would be happy to write a story for you. Let me know. I hope to be in your belly soon.
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