Hey heres a quick one off story I wrote..
It features F/F vore, light digestion talk, unwilling, micro/macro and some burps. It's attached as a PDF below, hope you enjoy. Feedback appreciated.
Story: Unexpected Turn Around
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Story: Unexpected Turn Around
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
It's well-written, I can say that for sure.
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
It's pretty nice for such a short story. I liked that used the two characters' banter to give exposition. I wonder where they got the leaf people in the first place? Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
You forgot unwilling and macro/micro.
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Thanks for the comments.
Sorry, I've added those extra descriptors to the OP now!
Sorry, I've added those extra descriptors to the OP now!
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Re: Story: Unexpected Turn Around
Thanks for using a decent sized and readable font.
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