hi! im kinda new to the forum and i wanted some feedback on this animated doodle! constructive criticism very welcome
vore animation by xix
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Re: vore animation by xix
Not bad. Perhaps a little slower on the gulp, as well as some slight scaling. From what little we see of the prey, they aren't quite big enough to produce that large of a bulgy belly. Perhaps slightly smaller belly, perhaps tighter with some indication that there's a person in there. As for speed, my PERSONAL PREFERENCE is slow-ish. If she was at the bottom of a slide however, quick is acceptable. Being that she's standing there, a little slower would be perfect, as well as a smaller belly. That's just my constructive criticism. Otherwise, it's very well done in my honest opinion AS A WRITER. Makin' that clear, I am a WRITER, not an artist.
Just a wolf lookin' for some fun. I like all sorts. Just... don't eat me.
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Re: vore animation by xix
CrimsonFangX666 wrote:Not bad. Perhaps a little slower on the gulp, as well as some slight scaling. From what little we see of the prey, they aren't quite big enough to produce that large of a bulgy belly. Perhaps slightly smaller belly, perhaps tighter with some indication that there's a person in there. As for speed, my PERSONAL PREFERENCE is slow-ish. If she was at the bottom of a slide however, quick is acceptable. Being that she's standing there, a little slower would be perfect, as well as a smaller belly. That's just my constructive criticism. Otherwise, it's very well done in my honest opinion AS A WRITER. Makin' that clear, I am a WRITER, not an artist.
Seems fair! I was thinking of a redo where the prey is bigger or there are more prey to justify the stomach. It probably could be slower too, a more defined throat/belly is something I would consider as well. I’m glad you liked it tho!
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Re: vore animation by xix
I think it looks great!
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