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Sharing my writing

Postby SpudWoke » Thu Aug 04, 2022 7:20 pm

I've been writing off and on for a while, and this has been my first semi-consistent foray into sharing my writings publically. I first started uploading my writings to ekas about a year ago, but this is my first time trying out the forum side of things. Let me know what you all think, and what I can improve on!

The Oasis in the Mountains:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/739655

Merry Christmas Zaiha:
https://aryion.com/g4/view/747584

Food (CW: Graphic Digestion):
https://aryion.com/g4/view/763051
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Re: New to sharing my writing

Postby CaliTea » Fri Aug 05, 2022 10:17 pm

Your writing is as lovely as always <3

Hellebore’s ferocious and insatiable appetite gave me chills! I think my favourite aspect of the first story was, unsurprisingly, the implied fatality :3
The second story with Zaiha and Olephia takes a much more sensual tone, though with a nice amount of eroticism as well. It was quite fun to explore Christmas through the eyes of these two enchanting beings.
Last, the digestion story. This one took my breath away. Several times actually. There isn’t much I can say beyond the fact that I so desperately wish I could’ve been in her position ‘^-^ so I’ll let that speak for itself.

Comments on the stories overall: I really enjoy your world building, it can only be described as excellent. And another noteworthy aspect of your writing is the word usage, grammar, and overall readability. Though that might be a minor compliment, it is genuinely something I appreciate about your writing, as the smallest of errors tend to take me out of the setting immediately.
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Re: New to sharing my writing

Postby SpudWoke » Sun Sep 11, 2022 1:47 pm

I've posted two more stories!

Substitute Teacher, Part Two: https://aryion.com/g4/view/819641#item-itself

Night Swim: https://aryion.com/g4/view/820023#item-itself

Any comments, questions, or critiques would be much appreciated!
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