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Story previews

Posted by BunnyWrites 9 months ago

 

Hi folks!

I'm taking a bit more time with future stories, letting them sit for a little bit so I can come back to them fresh and see where things need to be improved. New dialogue added, new depraved actions performed, parts the don't work cut etc. I thought it might be fun to share the previews though, to get any feedback or suggestions so I can tweak them a bit.

Each of these stories will be marked in the header with 3 states:


  • Prototype draft: this is just me scribbling down the initial rough version. There will be tons of typos, the flow and pace of the writing will be a mess as I change my mind on where I'm going midway through a paragraph. The story is likely still unfinished and has more scenes to write. Feedback would most be in regards to the overall plot arc, are there additional things the character might want to do? Any other conversations that'd add to the theme?
  • Full draft: this is where all the scenes are written, but I still need to fine tune to writing. Adding new lines, thoughts, descriptions, making sure the flow of the story works well. Feedback would most be in regards to the pace, descriptions, and dialogue. Some additional scenes and actions may be added still.
  • Final draft: The story is finished and I just need to tidy up a few loose ends. Typos, grammatical errors, slight rewording and rephrasing, cutting out a few sentences that might not add anything to the story. Feedback would be mostly on any mistakes you notice.

    Any kind of feedback is welcome, from just saying how much you enjoyed it to more detailed suggestions. You can either comment here or send me a PM if you want to get in touch. <3

    So the stories currently in the process of being written (beware it may be a long time before some of these are finished, or they may never be finished):


    • Meatgirl Processing 2: Twin Roast. To apologise to for the mishap involving the spitting of the female inspector, Camille must roast up two of her coworkers, twin girls. https://docs.google.com/document/d/19_N ... sp=sharing
    • ISwallowThings Livestream 3: With Isabel and Sophia still inside her, Chloe takes the livestream on the road and walks around campus with a selfie stick recording. She picks up several tiny women and one tiny man (a fan of the show), who she takes back to her room to then swallow on screen.
      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1snF ... sp=sharing
    • Froggy Treats: A girl gets a pet frog and indulges her predatory instincts by feeding it various animals. It grows bigger and bigger until she starts looking prey sized too.
      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dTB ... sp=sharing
    • Intern Turnover: A new 6" tall male intern goes to work at an office full of voracious women. It might be a while before I finish this story, I love the concept, but I got distracted with all these other series.
      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nJQ ... sp=sharing

      We'll see how this goes, it may be absolute chaos managing the various bits of feedback on different stories, each person wanting different things. But as an experiment it'll be fun to try~
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21Olya21

Posted by 21Olya21 9 months ago Report

You leave a link to my page in Meatgirl Processing 2: Twin Roast.

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 9 months ago Report

"21Olya21" wrote:
You leave a link to my page in Meatgirl Processing 2: Twin Roast.

Oh yep I was planning to link your DA account in the story description rather than the story text itself. I'll add a little bit to the end of the document to remind me.

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 9 months ago Report

Oh, the draft for ISwallowThings Livestream 3 looks really cool – especially the last lines with a lot of donations streaming in and not a real way to back out and an endo-cam filming what happens to them in great detail :D

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 9 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
Oh, the draft for ISwallowThings Livestream 3 looks really cool – especially the last lines with a lot of donations streaming in and not a real way to back out and an endo-cam filming what happens to them in great detail :D

Thanks! I stalled a little on that story as there's so many swallowing scenes involved, it got a bit repetitive sketching out the plan for that. So I've been trying to think up how each tiny could be swallowed in a different fashion. The Swedish twins get eaten together for example.

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 9 months ago Report

Maybe it’s not even necessary to put so much focus on the swallowing scenes – I mean, tinies getting eaten isn’t the real attraction during this livestream; it’s the endo-cam, the orgy that might take a cruel turn (while we are watching :gulp: ) and some sex with her tiny roommate, right?

However I can’t wait until this story gets finished (insert drooling here :D)

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 9 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
Maybe it’s not even necessary to put so much focus on the swallowing scenes – I mean, tinies getting eaten isn’t the real attraction during this livestream; it’s the endo-cam, the orgy that might take a cruel turn (while we are watching :gulp: ) and some sex with her tiny roommate, right?

However I can’t wait until this story gets finished (insert drooling here :D)

Yeah that's a good point with the endo-cam focus. I forgot not every story had to cover so much of the swallowing itself. I'll try to keep them to around a paragraph for each tiny then.

As for the "cruel turn," what sort of thing were you thinking of? I suppose she might push Isabell back inside if she tries to come out, saying the stream isn't over yet. But I'm not sure of what might happen with her belly?

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 9 months ago Report

But I'm not sure of what might happen with her belly?


Well, it depends... what we can assume is that a lot of donations will be coming in. Currently you just need 30 donations for 5h – and I think she'll certainly get a lot more than 30 donations...

So I think this leaves us with basically three possibilities:
- She backs out (which is sth. you can't really do in this situation and would be out of character IMHO)
- She continues to stream everything (either with some active performance or even while sleeping)
- She stops the stream after some time but promises that she'll keep them in nonetheless (which would require some sort proof like a record or some snapshots from time to time – in the next livestream, people will want to know what happened)

From "Drunken Deepthroat Dares" and "Digesting Amy"/"A schoolgirl for each erogenous zone" we know that for an average female it doesn't take longer than 18h to fully digest a tiny – which also implies that the stomach time can't be much longer than 4h. Of course this may lengthen a bit with 4 people in the stomach, but not much (the beginning is slower because it takes some time to produce enough stomach juice, but after some time everything is coated in digestive juices and an equilibrium is reached – at this point the amount of food doesn't really matter anymore).

Provided that she doesn't back out, it leaves us with three scenarios:
- She digests them willingly (since she's pretty chilled, I think this wouldn't be out of character – as long as Isabel is safe)
- She doesn't really want to digest them and feels a but guilty about it but is relaxed enough so that in the end it does not burden her seriously (this is quite interesting, because it puts her in an ambiguous situation: on one side, shes the dominating person – she ate the tinies, digests them and probably even secretly enjoys it a bit. On the other side has she been pressured into doing this by her promise and the chat)
- She sets a timer to e.g. 6 hours and goes to sleep while the camera is still in her stomach and recording/broadcasting. When she wakes up, she notices that her stomach is empty (except for a some slimy goop, not even really gross anymore) – this surprises/shocks her so much, she decides to watch the recording immediately to see what happened.

This are the thoughts I had based on your prototype and your previous stories – of course I'm not the author (just a digestion nerd), so please don't feel pressured in any way :)

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 9 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
This are the thoughts I had based on your prototype and your previous stories – of course I'm not the author (just a digestion nerd), so please don't feel pressured in any way :)

Ah thanks for your ideas! It's always really motivating to hear other's thoughts on what could happen, and you've certainly given me some ideas. I'm a bit torn on what to do as while I personally really enjoy the idea of prey being digested, I got quite a few comments saying they were glad the earlier stories were non-fatal so I've generally been splitting them up so the fatal content goes in Elly's story arc and non-fatal in Chloe's.

If I were just choosing myself, I think it'd likely be the second outcome where Chloe might feel a tiny hint of guilty, but reasons it away as the tinies volunteered to be swallowed, so she reasons that means they're ok with being digested and after all, it's not her deciding this, it's the stream! So she goes ahead feeling utterly free of responsibility for their tiny digested bodies. I'll see how it goes once I write the content up to that point.

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 9 months ago Report

I'm a bit torn on what to do as while I personally really enjoy the idea of prey being digested, I got quite a few comments saying they were glad the earlier stories were non-fatal so I've generally been splitting them up so the fatal content goes in Elly's story arc and non-fatal in Chloe's


Hm, well... for me, stories like this only become really interesting when digestion is a real possibility. If you know for certain that nothing can happen it kills the tension.
However IMHO it would be a mistake to limit fatal stories only to Elly arc because it's too easy – a sadistic pred surrounded by other sadistic preds – I mean, it can be cool, but it usually gets a bit monotonous. I think Chloes setting offers much more possibilities...

I'm a bit torn on what to do as while I personally really enjoy the idea of prey being digested

I'd say: if you enjoy it, do it. There are a lot of non-fatal storylines out there and you're always free to write more non-fatal stories – but limiting an entire (good!) setting to non-fatal is probably not a good idea if you like to write fatal stories... :)

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 9 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
However IMHO it would be a mistake to limit fatal stories only to Elly arc because it's too easy – a sadistic pred surrounded by other sadistic preds – I mean, it can be cool, but it usually gets a bit monotonous. I think Chloes setting offers much more possibilities...

Yeah I get that monotony vibe sometimes, which is why I've taken a little break from the Elly and Chloe stories. As much as I love them both, I didn't want it to feel like a chore to write them. So I delved into some Dolcett stuff and recently some fantasy same-size things, but I'm about ready to come back around to Chloe & Elly now~ I just need to finish up one story request and a story trade. Although there's always the risk of getting waylaid with some fun new scenario someone suggests.

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 8 months ago Report

Hey, is there any progress on ISwallowThings Livestream 3? If not, please don’t feel rushed; in just wanted to ask :gulp:

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 8 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
Hey, is there any progress on ISwallowThings Livestream 3? If not, please don’t feel rushed; in just wanted to ask :gulp:

Ah not yet sorry. I've kind of stalled with the meatgirl processing story and been wanting to switch back to macro/micro vore for a little bit, so I think I'll give the livestream story another go sometime this week~

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 8 months ago Report

Ah, nice to hear... honestly I’m pretty excited :)

But seriously, no pressure - your pleasure in writing and a nice story are more important than my hunger for updates :gulp:

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 8 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
Ah, nice to hear... honestly I’m pretty excited :)

But seriously, no pressure - your pleasure in writing and a nice story are more important than my hunger for updates :gulp:

I'm thinking I might rewrite the draft and totally change the plan as the old idea feels so stale at this point. The new plan goes something like this:

After the large donation she got last stream, Chloe agrees to keep Isabel and Sophie inside her for a few hours and keep the livestream on the whole time. But she also has a life to live, she can't spend the whole day touching herself on camera, so she has to take the livestream on the road. As a special promo, she lowers her donation requirement and agrees to do anything any requester asks for $5 each request.

She has to first go to the library, where the Stream pays her to sit on a tiny woman there and anal vore her. She might later poop out that girl, piss on her, then flush the toilet as a final humiliation. Later, when meeting up with Stephanie, a rather annoying tiny woman interrupts their chat and Stephanie offers to flash her tits on camera if someone in the stream pays Chloe to eat the annoying tiny who offers to recite a bible verse to the stream if they don't do it. I think you can guess who wins the audience's preference here.

I might end up splitting the anal vore and oral vore into different stories though, as I don't want to fall into the same trap as last time and have a story that's so long it gets stalled. So I might just focus on one of those two options.

Alternative, I'm tempted to turn it into an AlisaBlueBird type story where Chloe seems how much she can stuff into her ass, first Isabel and Sophie, then a few sex toys, a dildo, a vibrating egg, and maybe a few extra things all crammed in there as that'd be a very different type of tale to what I've done so far.

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MCPB

Posted by MCPB 8 months ago Report

Well, honestly I’m not an anal person – is not that I dislike it, it just doesn’t ring anything in me and it’s not really interesting for me... please don’t get me wrong and put as much anal in there as you like; I just can’t tell if an anal fantasy is the coolest shit ever off if it’s boring as fuck^^

The vore part sounds cool, but since I’m a digestion creep I still think that an endocam livestream filming a few tinies staying to long in there is a really awesome idea.
But experience has shown that I’ll probably like every Chloe plot you’ll create :D

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 8 months ago Report

"MCPB" wrote:
Well, honestly I’m not an anal person – is not that I dislike it, it just doesn’t ring anything in me and it’s not really interesting for me... please don’t get me wrong and put as much anal in there as you like; I just can’t tell if an anal fantasy is the coolest shit ever off if it’s boring as fuck^^

The vore part sounds cool, but since I’m a digestion creep I still think that an endocam livestream filming a few tinies staying to long in there is a really awesome idea.
But experience has shown that I’ll probably like every Chloe plot you’ll create :D

Yeah I'm more of an oral vore fan too, but I've done so much oral vore I'm tempted by a change.

For the digestion stuff, I had been tempted to have one of the male volunteers fucking the bitchy tiny in Chloe's belly, with the girl's head being pushed into the stomach acid as he fucks her, but now that I think about it I realise I did the exact same thing with the second Elly story. So I'm not sure anymore. I'll see how I feel when I come to write it~

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21Olya21

Posted by 21Olya21 5 months ago Report

Have you stopped writing? For a long time there is not a single new story from you. All your stories are interesting. I understand that you may be busy with your personal life. Thank you for your work.

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BunnyWrites

Posted by BunnyWrites 5 months ago Report

"21Olya21" wrote:
Have you stopped writing? For a long time there is not a single new story from you. All your stories are interesting. I understand that you may be busy with your personal life. Thank you for your work.

Thanks for the the kind words, whenever I get a nice comment I'm always so tempted to return to writing stories here. I'm still interested in writing more stories as I love vore and dolcett content as much as ever, but I started work on a rather huge personal project that could help my career in a big way a few months back and that's been sucking up all my creative energy. Typically each story I write tends to be 6-8 hours of work, that's pretty much a whole day, and currently I'd feel a bit guilty taking a whole day of work from my career-minded project to just work on smut, even if it would be a lot of fun <3

But the story writing definitely isn't over yet, I'll write more, they just might be released at a slower pace.

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