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Bigger Boobers 2/4

Uploaded: 2 months ago

Owner: maniacalfork

Squall - 2 months ago

You could/should post a link to the followups in the description.

Naughty triangle



By Miss

Crissy






Chapter 1:

Finally

home






Victor parked his

car on a drive

Naughty Triangle ch.1: Finally home

Uploaded: 2 months ago

Owner: MissCrissy

Squall - 2 months ago

Good story. A couple of things though.
1. You got the gaming talk right. Not many writers do that.
2. When describing someone, show, not tell. You could have wrote the descriptors of Em and Vic more concisely.
3. Please make the text larger next time. Size 10 in courier/times new roman is a good base. Your readers aren't ants.
4. Describing everyday activities mixed around the fetish is commendable. But don't let them overtake the main event. We're here to fap, not how to make lasagna.
Final Grade: B

Casual Summer (Commission)

Uploaded: 2 months ago

Owner: SpaceHump

Squall - 2 months ago

So do her balls contain as dangerous a fluid as her stomach?

Raven and Starfire - 1

Uploaded: 3 months ago

Owner: Cheezycake

Squall - 3 months ago

Either one, but by unbirth.

Squall - 3 months ago

Too bad she doesn't just suck chloe up inside her. #chloehate

A Scarlet Roast

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: SuperheroFood

Squall - 1 year ago

This could be the beginning of a series called Scarlet Witch gives the Avengers a Digestive Tour

Washing Away The Family Stain

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: HMDVore

Squall - 1 year ago

You know, there are women in real life who would actually be this crazy. I have a feeling you put some real life into this. I like this story, it's an example of interesting writing. Thanks.

Squall - 1 year ago

other, hair down to the lower part of her buttocks
if not, 4 and double

Mosquitonoid

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: Nitro_Titan

Squall - 1 year ago

How about a clitspike or cockspike that she can drink thru?

Squall - 1 year ago

Bazinga.

Squall - 1 year ago

4 Long, but down to her feet long.

Request #3 - Mei

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: NAC

Squall - 1 year ago

Thanks hibby, but nnn is somewhat right. I should have been more constructive, and as an artist(words) myself, I should have known better.

Squall - 1 year ago

I apologize. I should have been more constructive about it. It just seems you focused on some things more than others.

Squall - 1 year ago

E X T R A T H I C C
Why didn't you draw her nips/aerolas? The apple in her mouth doesn't look like an apple, it looks like a rubber ball. Why is she blushing? She should look more afraid.

Blood Fetish self portrait

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: ResidentRainbows

Squall - 1 year ago

https://discord.gg/FRTJua I hope to hear from you soon.

Squall - 1 year ago

Would this lady who exists be willing to engage in discussion about various topics? I have discord or skype. I also notice the Flintstones reference. I do have to ask whos' blood it is.

Squall - 1 year ago

So this attractive looking girl really exists? I wish I could date her. She looks like the goth girl from venture bros. I also like the details on the boots.

Squall - 1 year ago

Pred:breastvore, unbirth, anal, oralvore(samesize only)
Prey:unbirth, breastvore, anal, oral(samesize only), cockvore(futa only)
3 for capacity, and any above that.
so far it seems shes going to be able to mass devour.

The dream

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: Newtonne

Squall - 1 year ago

I'd fuck the prey girls into her, then fall asleep on top of her, still inside her.

The Kinky Spirit

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: LeQhaBlue

Squall - 1 year ago

Those nipples look hungry. Maybe those are next...

Karen's mom first contract (page 4)

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: manv

Squall - 1 year ago

What engine are you going to use for the game? Renpy or Twine? I would be willing to help you script it out.

Squall - 1 year ago

Food Science, Massage Therapy, Baker

Squall - 1 year ago

1: Student

100000 Views!

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: incendiumursa

Squall - 1 year ago

She's missing a nose and a bellybutton, and the bows on her glasses. Also, would her thighs be soaked with her juices?

Nightmare Troubles

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: TimerSmith

Squall - 1 year ago

I would take her by the shoulder, take her into the bathroom, turn her to face the door, tell her to close her eyes, take my piss, then I would take her into my bed to safely cuddle between me and my waifu. *joke*Then the next morning give her to an orphanage to get adopted.*joke* Also, wasn't she naked when you took her in? Where did she get the little dress?

Monstergirl zoo

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: Leswaet

Squall - 1 year ago

This reminds me of the cages in A House in the Woods.

Squall - 1 year ago

What inspiration allows you to draw the girls with their faces contorted in pain? Also, why are they in pain?

Squall - 1 year ago

How do you make them look that way?

Squall - 1 year ago

I really like that the girls are expressing pain.

Squall - 1 year ago

3+ for both, she needs flotation devices after all.

Make-an-Unbirther

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: Phantelle

Squall - 1 year ago

Infernal 50k
Mad Science
Averse
The Mistress: Dom/Dom
Voluptuous 25k
Transparent Belly 25k
Prehensile Tail 35k
Enslaved 30k
assassin 80k
Maneater 50k
Scholar 60k
Affluence 50k
Misandrist 40k
Fearless 50k
Spell Reagent 50k
Destructive 50k
Vampiric 20k
Save Point 100k
Total: 710k
Background: Lady Ambrosia took over a wealthy house, being enslaved by its owner, the owner transferring ownership of her to you, and also enslaving you to her hunger. You have to go out and lure people to her to satisfy her infinite appetite. Every person she devours, she forces you to watch as she digests them. She sometimes lets you get close to someone, only to devour them at certain events(first kiss, marriage, first sex) and tortures them in front of you. She goes hunting for big prey, letting you die so she can get the jump on them, then spews you out so she can gain the trophy. Once she absorbs enough people, the spell she's casting activates, and every living thing(except you and the house servants) gets sucked into her belly where she can drain or kill them at will.

Rolling with Dnd dice possiblility
1st: d10
2nd: d7
3rd: d10 by 2s
4: d10 with 10 your choice
5: d10 with 10 your choice
6: there are 56 boxes, so you could roll d7s to decide the row, then d4s to get the box. or you could roll a d100...
7: 15 boxes, d10 and d4?

Squall - 1 year ago

6, softer to give the impression thats shes prey when shes the pred.

Squall - 1 year ago

Otherwise, I think the dragon would find herself in there with the bull.

Squall - 1 year ago

That dragon better give her some good recompense, like someone else to put in there.

Answer #15

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: kattu

Squall - 1 year ago

How long does it take her to digest? And where does all the mass go?

What? I'm P-pregnant! 1/3?

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: BIGBIG

Squall - 1 year ago

The girl keeps messing up out of fear and finally the girl gets fed up, picks her up and shoves her down her throat. She then rampages, clearing the market of people. Her overlarge belly demolishes the front of the store as she leaves.

Galko vs Gyanko

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: hamilton4

Squall - 1 year ago

You could make both versions. One where one wins and one where the other wins. Then everyone wins.

Milk diet
"For God's sake
not again!" screamed Cindy before throwing the chocolate
ice-cream covered spoon across the room. Once again she had failed
her diet. This time she had been living off of raisins and turnips
for the last 4 days. But as soon as she heard the ice-cream man she
bought several lollies from him before running to the corner shop to
buy more. Now she is slumped on her sofa at around 11 at night with 4
empty tubs of ice-cream and an empty bottle of whipped cream. The

Milk Diet

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: crime0edge

Squall - 1 year ago

That was a trick ending. I was hoping for the girl to actually be getting fit, but she ended up just another meal for a woman. I would definitely go on that diet, but I would want to work on my body at the same time. And I would gladly feed her food. And people. I would ask her to force girls to fuck me so that I can impregnate them.*fantasy*

Hilde goes to Disney land
Most children
wake-up on a school holiday with joy in their hearts. The first day
of any period of time away from school is one for celebration. By
right every child should be running around the house and waking up
their still worn out parents in excitement. But James did not like
the holidays. It wasn't that he liked school as he was not exactly
mister popular. But school was one of the few places he could go to
get away from his monster of an adopted sister. Although

Hilde goes to Disney land

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: crime0edge

Squall - 1 year ago

Suggestions? You left the story on a cliffhanger by him saying there were people at school for her to "play" with. Maybe you could use that as a setup, but then fast forward to when she's 18. As an author who has an oc that can also change size at will, how I describe it is different, plus I limit her size based on the situation. You could add some mild incest in there, as she can't seem to control herself. I am glad though that you turned this into a lesson for her. A few future titles for you to think about: "Hilda impregnates the school", "Hilda and the mean girls", "Hilda and the best/worst day ever", "Hilda and her overconsumption", "Hilda becomes a superhero"
I enjoyed this story.

Squall - 1 year ago

that's cersei lannister. no, she's got the pissed look which is applicable to her character. also, this happens before the end of season 6 cause spoilers.

Squall - 1 year ago

Thank you for that. It sucks that you had to go pay to play though. You're working on establishing a cool universe, and myself being a writer, I'm invested in this story.

Squall - 1 year ago

Maybe you could add links to all the content, even the ones you can buy?

In the lockers

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: Paisho

Squall - 1 year ago

"Oh, I just ate your friend who was bullying me. I'm ready for more." This turned out well. Just something i noticed though, the shading on the lower belly could be better/more realistic.

Squall - 1 year ago

I'll relist them again then.
1: controller support
2: custom screen resolutions
3: at the end of a level, the last character swallowed, the screen zooms in really large and slowmo finish
4: a character who can multiple vore with her vagina
5: a way to change the default keys
6: button display at the beginning of level 1
7: enemys hit each other
8: character customization
9: level customization
10: when voring, being able to switch from mouth to vag or vice versa; ex: i accidentally mouth vored when i mean to vag vore
11: the jumping mechanics could use some work
12: a backer funded version that has all the levels unlocked
13: a different sound for the unbirthing
14: backing music
15: when you reach certain point thresholds, it restores a heart
16: ability to vore midair
17: save states or save slots

those are just my ideas for now. if i think of any others, i'll leave them here.

Squall - 1 year ago

Did you look at the ideas i submitted on the discord? When's the next build coming out?

Vore battle! (Niziria vs Nora)

Uploaded: 2 years ago

Owner: kernac

Squall - 1 year ago

Who won? I vote for Nora if I can still cast a vote.

Dominant Psychoflesh 3

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: whiptail

Squall - 1 year ago

so what happens after all the girls are absorbed?

Squall - 1 year ago

isnt hiphugger chimerellas character?

hella

Uploaded: 1 year ago

Owner: slimebo

Squall - 1 year ago

Wouldn't it be better for her to be eating victoria?

A Hell Hog's First

Uploaded: 2 years ago

Owner: glargicus

Squall - 2 years ago

First off, I'm impressed by the worldbuilding you committed to. You established a background while weaving it in and out of the tale. Most writers aren't able to do that on the scale that you did. 2nd: You created memorable characters, not stereotypes or cliches. 3rd: You built up to the act, and a strong build up it was. You could have also had it go any way you wanted it to, such as you could have had the girls unbirth, anal, or even breast vore them, but the way you went fit the characters personalities. Thank you for this example of great writing.

Insta Grat - Opal

Uploaded: 2 years ago

Owner: MaximumImpulse

Squall - 2 years ago

You might want to work on her nipples a bit. Use real life references to correct how they look. Unless they're supposed to look that way.