Entity - 1 year ago

Thanks ;)

Nalzindar - 1 year ago

Great story, I loved the various encounters Erica had with people on the beach (some of which were quite funny), too bad Erica went for a swim afterwards. But the mermaid was a wonderful pred, she knew what she was after and determined to get yet another lifeguard^^

Entity - 1 year ago

Thanks ;)

Bright - 1 year ago

Very nice buildup and sudden sceneshift :p

Entity - 2 years ago

Well i'm happy to inspire ^^

Entity - 4 years ago

Thanks ^^

Entity - 4 years ago

Maybe things will be answered in the future ^^

TW - 4 years ago

Nicely done. Good to see something new from you. :)

Gdaeb - 4 years ago

Oooh so what happened to the jogger why didn't she become a ghost also great story loved it (and part of me woulf love to see nancy and her ghost roomate become a thing lol)

Entity - 4 years ago

Thanks ;)

Entity - 4 years ago

Exactly!

Whereaminow27 - 4 years ago

Curiosity Killed the Cat !

Entity - 6 years ago

Thanks ^^

Bright - 6 years ago

A very enjoyable story.
I like the metaphor of that of a cat and a canary.

Entity - 6 years ago

;)

Bright - 6 years ago

A very enjoyable story.

Sneaky predators would explain the source of randomly scattered clothes one sometimes find alongside the road or in the middle of the woods.

walkingbyself - 6 years ago

A well fed snek is a happy snek.

Entity - 6 years ago

Gotta keep the snek well fed after all ;)
Glad you liked it ^^

walkingbyself - 6 years ago

Seems Anyta got quite the meal this time! Two curvaceous joggers in one day? My oh my that's quite the feat!

I really liked this. ^^

stormhawk0 - 6 years ago

Really liked this story, meant to ask a while ago but if it's not to much trouble could you tell me where the thumbnail is from?

Entity - 7 years ago

Well i had to find a way to make the Bust joke somehow XD

Bright - 7 years ago

Very well written devourment scene.

Not sure why they would for the net day when they could catch the criminal full-bellied.

Entity - 7 years ago

Thanks for the compliment, as for a sequel...well you never know ^^

Godeater - 7 years ago

So good the characters are perfect i just there wss a bit more around the blond DEA fate then implied but it still great.

Will there be a sequel as it a perfect set up for a vore stripper criminal master mind?

Entity - 7 years ago

Exactly ;)

Bright - 7 years ago

Nicely written story.
Never bathe alone in the lake.

karn - 7 years ago

tag "writing" on every story you wrote, that will make it easier to find.

Entity - 7 years ago

Just something short and sweet ^^

Entity - 7 years ago

Not bad for something i wrote years ago and only just found ;)

karn - 7 years ago

I wish there are some conversations in the story, but this is already great anyway. I wish I can know more about Mary or have more episode for this story.

walkingbyself - 7 years ago

Definitely quick, but very much a worth while read!

Bright - 7 years ago

Lovely story.

Entity - 7 years ago

Thanks ^^

chaos12 - 7 years ago

Great job. :3

Bright - 7 years ago

Really lovely description of fighting against the predator.

Entity - 7 years ago

Why thank you, i'm glad you enjoyed it so much to give a great comment. It's really appreciated ;)

torontofan - 7 years ago

Wwoooooowwww. Loved it. I can honestly say not once have I ever felt suspense and dread in a vore story before. The way you described the change of scenery underwater, the blackness of deep, open water to the desperate struggles being written off by onlookers as part of her act. Wow. I was completely sucked into it, my heart is still beating a little fast. Easily the best short story I have ever had the pleasure to read. And my soft spot for belching up clothes also was adressed in a polite manner. 13/10

Entity - 7 years ago

Not at this stage, no.

Bobrocks - 7 years ago

A person that was eaten?

Entity - 7 years ago

Who's point of view?

Bobrocks - 7 years ago

By any chance could you do a different view point of this?

Entity - 7 years ago

Why thank you ^^

Entity - 8 years ago

Why thank you, i was going for suspense so i'm glad it was obvious ^^

Entity - 8 years ago

Thanks so much for the comment, i'll try and add more burps in next story ;)

Also, that profile icon. Awesome XD

Bright - 8 years ago

Really nice build up. Could really feel the suspense in this story.

torontofan - 8 years ago

Amazing written artistry as always! Love the details. (Personal preference: more burps!) Haha

Entity - 8 years ago

Why thank you, hopefully this will be the boost i need to write some more. No promises though ;)

Entity - 10 years ago

Here's hoping i can write more :)

Svartvinge - 10 years ago

A very well done story indeed, and greet descripton of the charracters.Nice to have you posting again ^^

Entity - 10 years ago

Thanks ^^

banzai - 10 years ago

This was a nice read, i do enjoy centaurs as prey ;)

Entity - 11 years ago

Thanks for the comment ^^

Bright - 11 years ago

Describe the fairies and their actions*

Bright - 11 years ago

A very well written story.

I like how you describe the story.

Zond - 11 years ago

Everything goes best way possible) for cow girl also for Taba)

Entity - 11 years ago

I never actually saw it as a reference until you said but yeah i guess it is XD

Bright - 11 years ago

Heh, is that a Judge Dredd reference?

I like how she handles the situation. Silence is compliance after all, and if you can't hear them when they're in the stomach, that's just too bad.

Entity - 12 years ago

Thanks :)

letmeinn0w - 12 years ago

The story seems to be coming along well. Nice cliffhanger.

Entity - 12 years ago

I might just hold you to that :)

Toadba - 12 years ago

If you ever need someone to take a look at it, I can perhaps Do something along those lines! Just PM me if your interested lol

Entity - 12 years ago

Thanks for the feedback,i agree with you 100% as well. I should probably get a proof reader before i post XD

I'll try to keep the pace in posting.

Entity - 12 years ago

And more is coming :)

Bright - 12 years ago

A very nice story.
Definitely leaves me wanting more of this story.

Zond - 12 years ago

))

Entity - 12 years ago

Second part in the works currently.

Zond - 12 years ago

waiting continuation

Bright - 12 years ago

I like the description of the scene, how she uses her weight to force the prey inside.

Entity - 12 years ago

Thanks ^^

Groblek - 12 years ago

Nicely done. I'd forgotten the original, so I went back to look it over - this version is definitely a major improvement. I liked the way you ended this version.

Entity - 12 years ago

Thanks :)

DresdenQ - 12 years ago

excellent!

Entity - 12 years ago

thanks :)

TW - 12 years ago

Nice revamp. Well done.

Entity - 12 years ago

Hmm, i'll have to keep that in mind. when i get a chance i'll change it.

Bright - 12 years ago

It seems like you are missing some words in there.

Entity - 12 years ago

The last sentence is about the bra, i thought it read ok, does it need changing?

Entity - 11 years ago

what's a windigo?

Superblah - 11 years ago

windigos, windigos everywhere

Entity - 12 years ago

Probably not XD

Bright - 12 years ago

Very nice story I say.

I like how there's several smaller scenes building up to a nice ending.

I kinda liked Amanda for taking her job rather seriously. I doubt there will much left of the town if this kind of behaviour continues though.

Entity - 12 years ago

Thank you ^^

TootCore - 12 years ago

You're welcome. ^.^

Entity - 12 years ago

;) Thank you very much.

TootCore - 12 years ago

Watched earned. ;p

Entity - 12 years ago

Well most of my stories are about mythical beasties like mermaids and nagas and much of the work is F/F soft vore :)

TootCore - 12 years ago

Pretty incrdible pair of stories (Trio and Duo).

I'm considering another watch...
What do your other works have for content ?

Entity - 12 years ago

thank you :)

Junogray - 12 years ago

Well that was lots of fun, Personally loved it

Entity - 13 years ago

thanks :)

Thanatos2k - 13 years ago

Good stuff

Svartvinge - 13 years ago

nope! going to get aronud to post yours x3

Entity - 13 years ago

Just a patrolling naga, the true battle begins in the next chapter, you might just see a nymph take down a naga ;)

Morphy - 13 years ago

A pity, would have liked to see a Nymphs take down a far larger Naga. But... just one Naga defending the beach? (Maybe I missed something)

Aickavon12 - 13 years ago

*emperor voice* Goooooood

Entity - 13 years ago

good ;)

Entity - 13 years ago

good ;)

Aickavon12 - 13 years ago

<3

Entity - 13 years ago

good, i'll try and keep them at this level then :)

Aickavon12 - 13 years ago

I do not like it, I looooove it!

Entity - 13 years ago

you like then ? ;)

Aickavon12 - 13 years ago

so... awesome...

Entity - 13 years ago

i'm hoping it's going to be really good ;)

Svartvinge - 13 years ago

aaah, this story^^ i remember reading the old ones before, and i say that it's a frsh wind of style in this^^

Entity - 13 years ago

I might try and remake it :)

Thanatos2k - 13 years ago

When you're done, maybe you'll remake "Maria Dines Tonight"? That's still my favorite story of yours.

Thanatos2k - 13 years ago

Ah, I remember this story from a while ago.

SerBunnicus - 13 years ago

Well then, at least there was this. Great job!

Entity - 13 years ago

I didn't really know much about the character, had to do some reseach to get it relativly right.

It was done as a trade so i don't know the chances of seeing another batman story, very very slim i would think.

SerBunnicus - 13 years ago

Inque is one of my favorite villains of all time. I've been longing to see her in more vorish scenarios ever since I saw her in action in Batman Beyond. The way she would trap Terry inside her body...why would she do that more often?

Ehm, excuse me. Anyway, this is a wonderful story. I look forward to reading much, much more. :3

massvore - 13 years ago

makes you wonder if you're going to be a part 2 to this, nice story btw ;)

veender - 13 years ago

Well, just let me know when you have the time!

Entity - 13 years ago

Thank you :)

Thanatos2k - 13 years ago

Well, I liked it.

Entity - 13 years ago

indeed it is :)

Bright - 13 years ago

Very nice story.

Winter sure is harsh, for everyone.

SkyLark - 13 years ago

But I really did want to rush in with a warm blanket. Such irresponsible owners! D:

yanghualong456 - 2 years ago

After all these years, this work is still great, but the Skylark's gallery no longer has its story. Are you interested in republishing it?

Entity - 13 years ago

The story is in Skylarks gallery, just go to his page and look through his work. You'll stumble across it :)

miner249er - 13 years ago

can't find the story

Entity - 13 years ago

if i can convince him to do another trade then it's possible

Lawrence Craft - 13 years ago

This would be nice, so let us hope that he will get the desire to make more for us in the near feature. ^^" :D

Entity - 12 years ago

I'm afraid so :(

Wolfsage - 12 years ago

Nooo!!!

Entity - 12 years ago

Hopefully there will be another but i'm afraid the collaboration seems to have failed and considering i don't own the rights to the main character i'm afraid the chances are rather slim

Wolfsage - 12 years ago

Awesome story, can't wait for the next ones.

Entity - 13 years ago

Yes the third part is in the works, just need the feedback from the other writer.

Entity - 9 years ago

Thanks :)

Komodorazor - 9 years ago

Excellent story :)

Entity - 13 years ago

Thank you for saying so, perhaps in the future there will be a sequel of sorts but who knows. XD

It is a bit of a funny conversation isn't it :)

KR75 - 13 years ago

lol just read that convo below...I think it was a great story and I would love to see more. Love the fact you had some diversity in the story. Got to love those black women!!!

delet0h2b69 - 14 years ago

Oh have I posted that on someone's story? If I have I probably didn't intentionally mean it, but that would be nice if you could post tags in the future. :(

Entity - 14 years ago

I doubt you'll be disappointed :)

IGA - 14 years ago

very nice! Ill go check those out for sure!

Entity - 14 years ago

Glad you think so. it made a nice change i must admit .:)

Slash - 14 years ago

The teasing, the vore itself. Just great all around. :3

SkyLark - 14 years ago

No problem. I've read every story in your library at least twice I think, but unfortunately my memory is terrible, and those were the only ones I could remember clearly. I should have faved them (and many other things) long ago, but well.. I forget to. :[

Entity - 14 years ago

Many thanks.

thanks for all the favs by the way XD

SkyLark - 14 years ago

D'awww, she caught her first human.

Great as always.

keyblademark - 14 years ago

wow and that was a very good begining friend, aghh same we can not enjoy the entire story

Entity - 14 years ago

Well i've always liked your taur pictures and your mermaid pics for that matter so at least one person would be happy if you drew more XD

Svartvinge - 14 years ago

quite indeed! should try drawing more of them aswell x3

Entity - 14 years ago

Well it was going to be about more than centaur's this story but agreed,there isn't enough.

We need to change that ;)

Svartvinge - 14 years ago

aw that really sucks ._. there is to little awesome centaur stuff about x3

Entity - 14 years ago

Pretty good for a two hour request i think.

TW - 14 years ago

That was an interesting take on the story and I approve of it!

keyblademark - 14 years ago

as i say on deviant, pretty good done :)

Entity - 15 years ago

If you had problems seeing it you can always increase the size of the page on your toolbar,works a treat for me.

BardicLasher - 15 years ago

Good story. A larger font size would be appreciated in the future (12 instead of 10), but as that's my only complaint, you're doing plenty right.

Entity - 15 years ago

thank you XD

SkyLark - 15 years ago

Will those elfs ever learn? *shakes head* Those dark woods are always hungry.

A good read, as always.

Entity - 15 years ago

The first likely is "Nuts"

Entity - 15 years ago

Oh i'm not going to rush this one.

Maexam2 - 15 years ago

Why, thank you!
I only said wHat I believe.
I just can't wait for the whole storie.
But, no hurries. Just take your time, O.K.?

Entity - 15 years ago

you speak a lot of sense ;)

Maexam2 - 15 years ago

I agree with Monopolus. Stories that are made quickly, usually are bad ones.
I believe that, to do something good and well done, one must have:

1-Calmness;
2-Paciense;
3-Culture;
and
4-Must not think too much on what he/she wants to write, because that makes one nervous and ends mussing up the work.
You just need to relax and to let the ideas come to you naturally.

Monopolus - 15 years ago

Take however much time you need; I'd rather read an amazing story that took a while than a shorter one that was made up quickly.

Entity - 15 years ago

Well it was the one you requested for your halloween series,thought it was time to post it.

Bright - 15 years ago

THis one seems familiar.

Entity - 15 years ago

It was a requested ending :)

Liz - 15 years ago

Interesting way to end it.

Entity - 15 years ago

cliffhangers always seem to work XD

deoxys123 - 15 years ago

Good start to the story. It kinda leaves you in suspense you know?

Entity - 15 years ago

When i've got steam to write I tend to be pretty good.

Bright - 15 years ago

I can't help but think that must be bad for business.

It was an enjoyable read. It must have been one inspiring hour.

Entity - 15 years ago

most welcome

Entity - 15 years ago

I had a bad English teacher at school and once you learn something it's hard to forget it...

VoraciousArtistry - 15 years ago

Very nice, one question though, why are all the letters 'a' capitalised as if they were the start of a new sentence?

Entity - 15 years ago

Cheers for thinking so

Entity - 15 years ago

It's good to know i've fulfilled someones wishes

Entity - 15 years ago

Cheers

Entity - 16 years ago

Many Thanks

TW - 16 years ago

Very cute and well written. :)

Entity - 16 years ago

Gues i'm just in a mermaid mood XD

SkyLark - 16 years ago

Another Mermaid? Hmm, I think i'm starting to detect a pattern here.

A fitting end for a 'vore star' I suppose.

Entity - 16 years ago

It's a possibility XD

Redpod - 16 years ago

Very nice icture :D

Entity - 16 years ago

At least I had lots of ideas a couple of years ago and no distractions. Now I'm lucky if I can work on my latest stories XD

Anonymous - 16 years ago

It's fine how it is, but I was trying to think of a possible fault in your early work, since you said you hate it.

Entity - 16 years ago

Maybe i'll go over everything in the future and rewrite but at the moment i'm too busy.

Anonymous - 16 years ago

Your early work was good, it just had a few "conventions errors." Namely grammar.

MichaelGrey - 16 years ago

Three words. Night. Vision. Goggles. XD

Entity - 16 years ago

Hmm,the darkness can hold many a wonder but also many a horror. Fine territory for a story.

Entity - 16 years ago

Well i'm glad to have created something rare.

max123 - 16 years ago

great story.i like it cause its something new and you don`t see this kind of story here this often.

MichaelGrey - 16 years ago

Ah well, as the saying goes, "Do not go gently into that dark night"...though those are hardly brave last words.

Rhewin - 16 years ago

I guess so ;)

Entity - 16 years ago

i guess i best get started on the next section then.

Rhewin - 16 years ago

I don't think it's doomed to fail at all. I'm looking forward to the other parts!

keyblademark - 16 years ago

i like it, is a good prologue for the next chapters :)

Draegonx - 16 years ago

ah i see i see that is understandable

Entity - 15 years ago

Well as long as you like it i'm happy.

Bright - 15 years ago

It is either that, or that the clothes hide the preys appearance. Making chances even slimmer to escape or to get noticed.

Entity - 15 years ago

Like tight clothing huh?

Bright - 15 years ago

Yeah, and my first thought was like:
"Damn, I must remember to favourite this one."

I think I came up with another reason why I like this one. Clothes (this case jumpsuit) that restrains the belly.

Entity - 15 years ago

really?

Darkwarrior676 - 8 years ago

Awwww.....really wanted to see what was going to happen next.

Entity - 8 years ago

It's unlikely i'm afraid. I haven't really touched this series in a long time ^^:

Darkwarrior676 - 8 years ago

Will there be a chapter 3? Please??

Entity - 12 years ago

Thank you :)

Wolfsage - 12 years ago

Really like it!

Bobrocks - 7 years ago

That or any land not next to water.

Entity - 11 years ago

Yep ^^

Apostolos - 11 years ago

Ah well then that explains it nicely, only deserts and mountainous areas were spared then.

Entity - 11 years ago

Well it's meant to imply that the mermaids get a taste for humans and go on a nomming spree.

Apostolos - 11 years ago

It's just quite a gap in explanation since I couldn't find any reason for the near apocalypse scenario

Entity - 9 years ago

Thanks ^^

Darkwarrior676 - 9 years ago

This is a very good read.

keyblademark - 16 years ago

really good begining with this naga, now to the second :)

Entity - 16 years ago

Hopefully you wont be waiting to long...

fatbutt1689 - 16 years ago

Fantastic story, can't wait to see more!

Entity - 15 years ago

Well i'm revamping some of my older stories so i'll cut down on the detail and add more useful information instead. XD

Russkaya - 15 years ago

That's the spirit! I realize this is a bit of an old work, but your newer stuff has the same problem. Just tone down all the extra detail. Writing needs to flow naturally. Remember, detail is good. Too much detail is murder!

Entity - 15 years ago

In all honesty i'd prefer a comment which criticises my work rather than one which simply says nice job. How else am i supposed to prove?,thanks for the comment and yes when I was in school my teacher did say the more detail the better ;)

No one's perfect but with practice perhaps.....

Russkaya - 15 years ago

To start, I don't normally comment on things because I can't be bothered, but I felt that I should here. I like your writing and I can see that you definitely have a potential to write well, right now you have one big, glaring problem aside from little grammatical errors.

I call it unnecessary description, because that's what it is (see what I did there?). It's a common mistake in young writers that are still in or out of little boy school. Teachers like to nail it home that 'lots and lots of description is good!', but that's wrong. While you certainly want to describe the scene, show and not tell, you don't have to give every single person, place, or thing (nouns) an adjective. We don't need to know that the oars are identical, because we assume they are. We don't need to know that the sun is orange because we assume that is the color it is. If something can be fairly assumed, it is repetitive to describe it to us. For instance, you described the fishing pole, which is a bit superfluous but gives us insight into our elven protagonist. That's good. You tell us that she's there to fish. But to go back and say that because she wants to fish she has this pole that's 'in her hands', that's all extra. We all know that fishing requires a rod. We also know, from earlier, that the rod is grasped in her hands. Reading over those type of things again makes us feel like we're hitting a speed bump. In the future, you don't need to preface everything by a color or material unless it's truly a sensory detail that puts us there. And even then, if you've painted the image enough, you can stop coloring it! Especially in a vore story, the readers are not interested in lots and lots of extra detail in mundane things like poles and boats.

Again, I normally don't post criticism, be it constructive or short, but I felt that you could benefit from this direction because I can see the glimmer of talent here.

Svartvinge - 16 years ago

heh, awesome ^^