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Spare room

by Gresh Parika



Bridget stood out in the pouring rain. How was he to know that his boss wasn’t interested in him? He

didn’t seem that bothered

when he started playing with his breasts in front of him. It definitely wasn’t worth it to try and get a raise, and now he was completely jobless. Being a femboy could

spare room

Uploaded: 4 months ago

Owner: doomed

Tags: Breasts Scat Digestion M/M Weight Gain Consensual Gay Toilet Fatal Yaoi Anal Vore Willing Male Prey Femboy Facesitting Butt Expansion Male Pred ass expansion moobs Femboy prey Femboy Pred bones in scat Busty Boy

This is the first story I've ever written, so please don't judge me too harshly on it 

doomed - 4 months ago

You most definitely will, we’ve got much more planned

doomed - 4 months ago

Bruh the fact that you of all people commented made my day

MarkusFreeman320 - 4 months ago

This was a really enjoyable read, there isn't enough good willing vore with disposal out there, I hope to see a lot more like this! :3

soline - 4 months ago

Welcome to the portal! It's great to see some new content and I look forward to seeing what else you create!

If you're looking for a little feedback though, my initial thoughts are mechanical. Increase the letter-size (I think 11 is standard? Yours seems to be around 9) just because the writing is very tiny, and it's an [i]easy[/i] way to accidentally put people off. Also practice formatting your story. Along the same lines, a single block of text is [i]really[/i] hard to read and I know from experience puts people off even trying. Just make line-breaks to outline paragraphs (good example of paragraph is right at the end "When mike woke up" should be a new paragraph, since it's a change of 'scene/camera'). Finally, try to use caps-lock [b]super[/b] sparingly; like for single-word uses at most. I get the idea, but again it's super jarring for the user, no one outside Naruto yells every word with the exact same volume really. Make use of [i]italics[/i], [b]bold[/b] and exclamation points to 'colour' peoples words and it goes a whole lot further; and it's just nicer to read.

soline - 4 months ago

Welcome to the portal! It's great to see some new content and I look forward to seeing what else you create!

If you're looking for a little feedback though, my initial thoughts are mechanical. Increase the letter-size (I think 11 is standard? Yours seems to be around 9) just because the writing is very tiny, and it's an [i]easy[/i] way to accidentally put people off. Also practice formatting your story. Along the same lines, a single block of text is [i]really[/i] hard to read and I know from experience puts people off even trying. Just make line-breaks to outline paragraphs (good example of paragraph is right at the end "When mike woke up" should be a new paragraph, since it's a change of 'scene/camera'). Finally, try to use caps-lock [b]super[/b] sparingly; like for single-word uses at most. I get the idea, but again it's super jarring for the user, no one outside Naruto yells every word with the exact same volume really. Make use of [i]italics[/i], [b]bold[/b] and exclamation points to 'colour' peoples words and it goes a whole lot further; and it's just nicer to read.