4ofSwords - 3 months ago

I wish I'd made more of a point to read stories from excellent authors earlier on. It was a delight to read your alien eschaton.

Sehnsucht - 6 years ago

Gorgeous story. Perfused with a kind of long, slow severing of ties, and the sadness that comes with it. Nice contrast with the vore flirting and kudos on making those ties seem real enough to matter to the reader in such a short time.

Loved the concept, world and characters. Loved the ending, with its change of tense. Just a wonderful conceptual vore story!

letmeinn0w - 7 years ago

I always look forward to reading your stories, and this one did not disappoint. I really like the way you are really descriptive while still maintaining a good flow.

wolfSnack - 7 years ago

Super well-written story! I love this kind of societal exploration, where humans have grown up believing that they're food.

I write a lot of stuff in a similar-feeling setting, though with furries instead of aliens -- this has given me a lot of ideas and inspiration :)

Thanatos2k - 7 years ago

Option B. Double team it

Toadba - 7 years ago

C!

Toadba - 7 years ago

C!

Forstand - 7 years ago

I vote for Option C. Hopefully Vasha's fast enough to lead it away and then meet back up. Gotta protect the ducal heirs!

As for Galya, I'd say play with him for a bit then eat him. He's done for either way, and besides, a girl needs a little fun once in a while.

Razgriz - 7 years ago

For Galya; can she identify if he's under some kind of spell? Talk to him to meet the person before deciding anything. Maybe use your emotional power to try and discern these things. Then, well. Whatever? It'd be far more cruel to let him walk into a succubus.

For the main vote: I imagine you'd have to use water or fire against this thing if you went option A, but we don't know how strong it is against an individual opponent - we could stay up the tree and blast it from above.

With it being so fast, B would be the safest...? But then how would Vasha catch up to the others? She'd have to attack it when it caught up to the others. Which would make it 2v1 at least, but they'd get little warning about it unless you shouted it all out when it got near enough. Though if she can just stealth by it to rejoin the others - that would work, too. Maybe our hunky lycan can make a quick trap for it.

Leading it in the wrong direction is risky. Do we know it has Stamina? It could simply run faster and longer than us.. I don't really like C.

So, if it were my vote. I'd go B. We did promise not to take unnessicary risks, afterall.

Lerkur - 7 years ago

Pretty sure our champion vows are to the country and it's people, not our own organization. Plus, the other champions made the same vow. Placing priority on our own group instead of the people our group is supposed to protect seems contradictory.

Also, guaranteeing the safety of the heirs and reporting what's happening in Ashlar can help mobilize the army and let the non-captured champions move in force. Valguuz said she sent 20 demons out just to capture 7 champions with below average results, even with surprise and planned ambushes. So a united front of a few dozen, backed up by military, could be devastating for the demon's plans.

So while it does suck for our fellow champions(and potentially Galya if she get's a reputation as merely an assassin/murderer) I'm going to vote for Option 1.

Lerkur - 7 years ago

Pretty sure our champion vows are to the country and it's people, not our own organization. Plus, the other champions made the same vow. Placing priority on our own group instead of the people our group is supposed to protect seems contradictory.

Also, guaranteeing the safety of the heirs and reporting what's happening in Ashlar can help mobilize the army and let the non-captured champions move in force. Valguuz said she sent 20 demons out just to capture 7 champions with below average results, even with surprise and planned ambushes. So a united front of a few dozen, backed up by military, could be devastating for the demon's plans.

So while it does suck for our fellow champions(and potentially Galya if she get's a reputation as merely an assassin/murderer) I'm going to vote for Option 1.

Forstand - 7 years ago

hmm, I'd say 3A

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

Arik is quite level headed about all this. I agree with his judgement. Option 1. If we find other champions we can share our info while escorting our VIP's.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

1 or 3B, tbh!
Tough one.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

A might fit story wise, though...hmm. A twist is always a good thing, and so I think I'll write in a vote here. Have the goat priestess and werewolf run into what appear to be the daughters, but they're actually demons in disguise. So option E or F or whatever you want to call this.

Forstand - 8 years ago

I vote for B.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

While part of me wants to lean toward getting added backup in the form of another champion, I feel like rescuing the daughters would fit a bit better story-wise, and help get Vasha and Arik up to date. So, I'm voting for option A.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

ooooo. All of the options are good.

I'd be happy with A, B or C just to sew some chaos in the votes. XP

Razgriz - 8 years ago

ooooo. All of the options are good.

I'd be happy with A, B or C just to sew some chaos in the votes. XP

Forstand - 8 years ago

1a)ACCEPT
1b) Offensive mind powers, maybe charm or mind-control

2)shift focus to the captured champions. Also I'd vote for some lewd scenes about how the local populace suffers at the hands of the demon occupation.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Alright then. Thanks for the info. I'll switch my vote around to changing focus to another character. Either another champion, or the Ducal daughters, just to avoid them joining the "killed off-camera" club.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Vote for Accept, if begrudgingly, the training. Focus on uncovering the secrets of our touch empath, and learning to discern our emotions from other people's without being overcome by them.

As for the second;

I vote for following the captured champions and revisiting the circumstance, with perhaps a flip to the Ducal daughters!

sansuki - 8 years ago

There's nothing wrong with overthinking. There are risks and benefits to both of those options. Galya's going to be rolling against corruption at a pretty set rate IC, and it's a pretty easy roll to make- whether or not we keep focus on her only really matters inasmuch as it gives this thread more chances to shove her down a demonic path and start racking up penalties to those easy rolls.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

I'd say Refuse. We're unlikely to be taught anything offensive that could be used against Valguuz. And while a defensive technique sounds handy after that one time we had a critical failure against a harpy's song, we might only be taught a defensive technique that can be easily countered(Although I'm basing this off of a story where a character was taught a defensive spell, only to learn that the one who taught/created it had a way to cancel the effect to keep it from being used against them, and the character was promptly killed for their trust). Add in that this might just be another way to corrupt us/oblige us to their cause, and the pros are out weighed by the cons.

Or am I really overthinking this, and this is just an option to learn a new ability at the risk of corruption?

As for the second choice, I'm leaning towards the timeskip. Only because I have a sinking suspicion that if we shift focus away from Galya, the next time we see her, she'll be almost to completely corrupted. Am I overthinking this as well?

Kaoru - 8 years ago

See, I kind of love this. Usually, Sansa, "what-if" stories are kind of hit or miss (not from you - just in general) - and kind of fall flat, because you know that's 'not the way things went', and ultimately you don't gain much except one of your favorite authors descriptively ending an important character, from them.

But the portion of this story after Mayonne had finished off Galya - the portion with the Duchess - made this story so much more to me than a 'what if Mayonne was on the other side secretly and didn't let Galya out', which was, by the by, LOVELY in your words.

It made it a character study. It was fascinating to see the Duchess' genuine reactions. It was fascinating to see Mayonne show a different side of herself. And it honestly enriches the main story, for me. Even if it's a cheeky peek behind the curtain (possibly!) as to how much Galya's supposed grandmother cares about her life or death. (Which, of course, assumes it'd be the same between our Prime Storyline and this offshoot, which is hardly guaranteed.)

Bravo and thank you!

Forstand - 8 years ago

aww yiss!

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Really good what-if story here! Looks like Mayonne still managed to come out on top despite thoroughly getting on Valguuz's bad side. It's nice to see things go her way in at least one timeline. Either way, as a well padded elf or as padding on a demon, Mayonne's likely still looking pretty good. :p And welcome back, Sansuki!

sansuki - 8 years ago

No vote this time! Just a fun little chapter to try to get me back in the habit of writing this. Prior vote is still technically open!

Kaoru - 8 years ago

Goodness. I thought I'd voted on this. I had a whole write-up and everything. Oh, well.

Poor Mayonne. Out of respect for her, I'm putting all cringe-inducing mayonnaise jokes aside.

Let's think about this in terms of story-added-value. Galya's adventure has entered the sincere stage. The first real, great threat has materialized, and it's her grandmother.

Galya's having too much of a good time to be easily-rescued right now, which the Moles (the underground, catacomb-dwelling Resistance) most certainly will have heard from the kitchen staff. There's a few dead Champions out there, a few more captured, a few more at large, and a dangerous lack of knowledge of what's going on in the Duchy.

So, sincerely, my vote is for 4 - ESCAPE, and 6 - LINK UP with the captured champions on their way to the castle, and rescue THEM if possible, because we're likely talking about a small handful of guards against a castle full of full-blooded demons, and that's some awful odds. A small handful of guards against 5 demons, exhausted and likely wounded from fighting Champions, two of them likely crippled, with two Champions as captives... now we're talking.

Succeed or fail, denying the Duchess living Champions to brainwash is likely more important in the bigger picture than being a thorn in her side underneath the castle, or sabotaging her defenses for an army that may not be coming, or rescuing Galya, who probably won't leave anyway if she thinks Li was captured. Getting the knowledge of what's being done, to safety, is likewise of crucial importance.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Remain, and ????. Ie: Remain, and surrender!

I mean, its better to be a slave then an appetizer, right? :P

vore2412 - 8 years ago

6. For Guerilla warfare, killing any possible food supplies the demonic forces can get their hooves on, burning their comforts, basically make it so inhospitable that they're forced to retreat. And I suppose, since 3. sort of goes with it, Sabotage would be good as well, though 5 works in that too...probably 6 and 3, have the guards be a very large nuisance at the least.

Chronicle - 8 years ago

Looks like I came back to an exciting few updates. Just going to say, I suppose I called her other half.

As for options 3-Sabatage would be the best offensive option. As for a more long term plan, that's a castle full of hungry demons, so 6-depriving them of their food source by evacuating the entire town overnight. It's a wild card, but if there aren't many actual demons guarding the surrounding town, getting as many people into wagons and riding off into the sunset can seriously cripple them.

Looking forwards to the update

Act4 - 8 years ago

Ah.. Mayonne's death was unfortunate, I had hoped we could do something to ensure her survival, but alas we were unlucky. Here death however, did allow us to kill the Duke and throw the Duchesses plan into chaos, especially since now Conzi is now technically the true heir, making her escape now a paramount concern to the Duchess.

For the guards, I'd say we should go for Option 3 as they can still pose as a thorn in the Duchesses side and cause her to slow her plans down as well as how many she can send to go find Conzi and Katena as she has to divert some of her forces to dealing with this pest instead, especially when she is already down on manpower as it is. She'll be forced to spread her forces thin, and she can't be everywhere right now.

I would then make a suggestion for Option 6. Have the guards recruit the local townspeople to their cause. These guards were likely from the town and should have many friends within it. And now that the Duke is dead, they can blame the Duchesses and the demons. Who would believe that a champion would have killed him, especially when a demons tells them that she did? Or that the same champion was supposedly killed the day prior? The guards can use his death as a banner to rally the town behind. Which would they rather side with, the demons who forcefully took over their home and slew their Duke? Or their friends who valiantly fought to protect him and by extension, them? This will give the guards more a boon to their numbers and might raise their moral and help with any other future operations they decide to carry out. I'm not suggesting the townsfolk fight, merely that they give their support to the guards and help with the continued resistance against the demons.

Granted the Duke was now revealed to be colluding with the demon and the guards probably aren't as courageous as I make them out to be. But somethings might be better off untold, we can make the Duke out to be a tragic figure for now, and then let the truth out when things settle.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Disbelieve, be that little rebel we always wanted to be :P

Kaoru - 8 years ago

Ask for proof.

We've known something was up for a while. The anecdotal evidence is strong that it's sincere. After all, even pure Belief would not in any way guarantee we'd assist this demonic takeover of the kingdoms of humankind. So then, the only point to telling the truth is to prepare for something... else.

So I'm all for getting some evidence while we can.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Believe

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Hmm. Believing might make us easier to control, since we aren't denying/defying her. And Disbelieving might just lead to us getting added to the demonic GMILFs hips. So while I do believe that Galya's part demon and even that she's Lady Valguuz's granddaughter, I say we ask for evidence. Besides, we might not be getting the whole story. Lies might be mixed in with truth, and getting some more testimony/evidence might give us something to contradict her on. And even if it's all true, it just means we have to erase any evidence of our true heritage.

Also, quick roundup of the Duchy's cast. Duchess Mara, the eldest son Venosa and the merchant leader/spymaster Vicaria are all reported dead. Carafa was taken care of personally, and is now dutifully providing fuel to our hero's fight. Gesualdo is missing but reported to have escaped. Conzi and Katena are safe with the unnamed Thaumaturge. The Duke is alive, but might not survive the impending honeymoon. Lastly, Mayonne is collared and caged with the other slaves. Still no signs of the captured Champions.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

Galya. I am your fath- Grandmother.

Disbelieve, but ask for proof anyway.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Angle for a meeting alone! To be specific, use "Conzi" as the lubricant~

Coin cant mean toooo much to a demoness... I say barter with the demon, and use that silvertongue and social prowess. Offer to transfer Conzi's ownership in exchange for an intimate evening between the three of them in the royal chambers... and perhaps a position in whatever plans the demoness has next.

After that evening of sharing, we would agree to hand over Conzi completely. Plan to do the deed then.

Kaoru - 8 years ago

Oh dear.

You know, Galya is barely holding it together when so much as brushed by these lesser demons.

And if the Demoness-Duchess is as powerful as she seems, I don’t think the “showy” assassination will work in Galya’s favor. If she’s dead-set on disrupting the wedding, she’s going to need privacy. Galya’s strongest skills are still her silver tongue and touch-empathy.

I’ve got to vote for Option C. She needs to lure the Ducheness (can I do that? Contract that? Oh gosh...) - away from the party, using all of her guile and wit and her innate ability to feel out social situations. Parties are her place. It shouldn’t be hard to create a feasible reason to see the Ducheness in private.

I’m still not convinced this will go well for her. An untrained demon was an open book - until Cara realized what Galya was doing - but this foe seems to be a different caliber. Yet the demons all seem somewhat relatable. If Galya can subtly use her empathic skills to get the Ducheness to trust her, she has an opening to kill her in private. Or devour her. Which is likely more reliable than a poisoned dagger.

SirScotty - 8 years ago

I vote for Option B. If she *is* onto you, getting in private is going to go poorly very fast, where she's prepared for trickery.

Additionally, if Galya remains in her disguise as a demon, she could potentially attempt to seize control of the gathering, forestalling a chaotic battle to escape from.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Rest in Pudge, random serving girl. Your sacrifice is for an attractive cause. :p I'm guessing our illusion would have been compromised if she had spilled the champagne and our clothes didn't stain, right?

Anyways, it's probably for the best if we keep playing to our strengths, and and negotiate ourselves closer to Valguuz. So, I'm going to vote for Option C as well.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

The Demoness seems to have quite a bit of ability over Galya; so do some of the others here. Fighting or assassinations are not going to go well. It might be time to get our collared friend out of here.

Thinking; distract/seduce guard while this thing goes on. Get our collared friend to drop her spell on herself subtly, get her out as part of your 'reward' or slit the guards throat and take his key. And simply walk on out.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Option D: Seduce the other demons and the duchess. Might receive many invitations to bed, but of course, one from the duchess is paramount to all the others.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Option A. Talking and Flirting are our strengths. Maybe we can bullshit our way through till we get a chance.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Option D, Write in!

Proceed with the pleasantries. We're a good talker, so keep the surrounding demons on a leash of our own, seducing and talking our way out of any touching to hopefully control the situation around us. Maybe, if we put on enough of a show, we can tempt the duchess into wanting us for herself! Inviting us to her chambers where we can properly do the deed~.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

I have my doubt for Option B. I could easily see the dice turning against us, leading to Galya being killed, or at least injured again, which would cost us down the road. Option C seems bad in that, it sounds like Mayonne will be killed and/or compromised as part of the festivities or if Valguuz get's her hands on her. A seasoned predator might be able to tell the difference in taste between elf skin and human skin, or she might take the collar off to hear what she thinks might be Conzi's screams. Though we could possibly hand a vial of poison off to Mayonne and have the poison get swallowed with her. If it's fast acting enough, she might not get digested before the poison takes hold(though that's wishful thinknig at this point). We could also go down with the poison ourselves if we think we going to be eaten by Valguuz.

While Option A get's us closer to whatever Valguuz hinted at having in store for Conzi/Mayonne, we can't do much now anyway. So, let's sit, eat, flirt, and ask about the demons plans for the champions. We might find out where they're hidden, and we might even find out what the demons had in mind for Galya, and why her faked death changed their plans so drastically. So, my vote is a cross between Option A and an Option D write-in of ask about the champions.

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

Well, since I've already written off Galya for dead lets go with option C. And be as vulgar as possible.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Option B: Champions are only so tough, and even though Galya's gotten lucky, they've almost gotten her already a few times. And of course, Li should be there.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Option A. Champions are too tough

Forstand - 8 years ago

Option A. The demons shall never triumph!

Act4 - 8 years ago

Ah, I got you. That's an interesting way to tell the story, I can dig it.

sansuki - 8 years ago

There are a few ways to look at it. Yeah, Galya's new at all this, and had unpromising training, and has still been beating up demons. So, either she's actually blossomed once she got to really fight and is way, way better than expected, or the demons aren't that good if they're not executing one of their own schemes, or they have some secret weapon. Which vote wins this kind of calibrates the magnitude of the mystery of why things are going on the way they are, but I'll still be figuring out/writing/revealing the exact reasons, if that makes sense!

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

The wedding is in a day, you think that invite is for anyone other than us? No. It's a victory announcement. Bragging. And definitely a trap.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Abandoning our post would cement our failure and give the demons enough time to properly entrench ourselves. Another thing to consider is that Valguuz has already bedded the injured Duke and is already pregnant. Arranging the wedding can be enough for whatever bastard child that's born to have a claim, especially if they kill off thee rest of the kids. Also, this whole wedding is a good sign that the son isn't involved, as he would be claiming the Duchy at this point, and he'd have to be eliminated for any child of Valguuz to be considered an heir. Though he might have been killed in the fighting already, and with the other two heirs missing, they need to make a new one.

My vote is mostly for Option 2, though we might want to try and infiltrate the wedding. The wedding might just be a trap, but a trap for the two daughters and Mayonne, seeing as none of the demons have seen Galya yet and lived. They may have put two and two together from all the butchered demons in random rooms, but that leads to my idea.

Carafa mentioned that the captured champions might be used as castle guards. And if they're using mind-controlled champions as guards, perhaps they're going to be brought in for the wedding. Perhaps we could infiltrate the castle during the wedding, find one of them and try to break whatever control has been placed on them. If they're collared like Conzi, we'll have to see if we can remove the collar safely(Maybe just pick the lock?). Stopping the wedding might be impossible or pointless, but if we can free a champion or two, we can start a serious resistance! Barring that, use the wedding as a cover to sneak in and rescue any allies that might be tied up and about to become part of the catering for the wedding reception

sansuki - 8 years ago

In re the questions about disrespected:
¯\_(ツ)_/¯

:D

Act4 - 8 years ago

Yeah...just a wee bit, maybe a little more.

Also I noticed that we lost the trait disrespected last chapter and this chapter. Is that intentional? I thought that trait meant people would approach us differently as a result, or was it only Gaylas perception that she was disrespected?

Act4 - 8 years ago

Monsters seem to be regarding as a threat by the general populace. By recruiting monsters we would then push away most of the potential castle towns recruits, and unless fandangle some way to convince the populace that both monster and humans could work together, we will only be able to work with one or the other.

If you meant my plan regarding the wedding. Problem is, we don't exactly know where they are, let alone who they are. We really only have one clue and that being the mention during the hunting party but not much else. While they could be listed as a potential advantage, I fear there may not be enough time to pursue their aid.

Forstand - 8 years ago

By the way, I just wanted to say that I love the story and I'm totally hooked on it!

Lerkur - 8 years ago

I'm guessing we didn't fare too well with the combat roll this time, or maybe the enemy was meant to be that dangerous? Either way, good to see we pulled through. I'm going to go with Option #2. The sooner we can rest and recuperate, the sooner we can try to come up with some sort of strategy.

Toadba - 8 years ago

I changed my mind a third time!

Option 3, last stand of the Champions!

Toadba - 8 years ago

Realized i meant 2! Vote for option 2 x3

Act4 - 8 years ago

I believe it best to pursue self preservation, a noble sacrifice would allow those we've saved to escape the castle, true. But what then? a young girl and a wounded arcanist, and a dazed girl wont get too far on their without protection. No, it would be best to accompany them to ensure they survive and should be a primary concern.

Depending on how many horses are still in the stable we may be able to lead them all out and cause a distraction that could buy us enough time in the confusion to escape and hide. Since it is dark it could take awhile for the demons to hunt the trail. The wounds we have and the blood dropping from Conzi should be cleaned and dressed, to ensure we won't be followed as quickly. Conzi particularly, our blood is typical and could be seen as just someone escaping, so they may not pursue us that hard, after all, the champion Galya is still suppose to be dead remember? But demon blood would be a dead give away and would point any pursuers to our location, we should use the hay on the ground to wipe the blood off of Conzi before we ride off. We could even cut one of the horses to mask our own blood if we really wanted to.

When it comes to just how far we should go, I'd say the safe bet would be option 1, but that would put us in a precarious position and give us little chance to recover. Instead I would suggest option 2. By masking our trail in the stables and by having all the horses in the stable run, we could create enough time for us to get into the town and hide. I would advise the small village instead of running as it would allow us time to recover and catch our bearings. It would also allow us time to determine the situation and the results of what is and currently happening and perhaps save more people. We also have the woods nearby that we could flee to if the need arises. The risks would largely be that we are in demon territory and could be found at any time.

But in the long run I believe option 2 to be our best bet.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Huh...I still haven't voted. Hmm...well, fighting probably is the main option. Fuck up some demons or become demon(ess) fat. Either or sounds good, with Mayonne and the heiress joining them!

Chronicle - 8 years ago

Fight! For the Emperor and all that is just!

SurvivorX - 8 years ago

Fight!

Lerkur - 8 years ago

While part of wants to write in "Parlay, then fight" to stall for an opening and give Katena time to reload, it would more likely give the demons the opportunity to emply more hypnosis to subdue Galya or make Katena shoot them in the back.

I vote for Fight, targeting the armored one first. The other one might be slowed down by dragging Lady Conzi around. The armored one might respond with more lethal force to one of our two allies.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Fight! Eliminate the already weakened Male first, then target the Female

bleach33 - 8 years ago

Option 3, with getting any other royalty out if the Baron is unreachable a prority.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Modified #3: Getting the Duke would be nice. Getting out alive is vital. So snatch and grab if it would be feasible, otherwise settle for any of the royal family she can get her hands on, younger sister, older sister, or princes, and get out of there in order to be able to regroup and allow Mayonne time to get her spells ready for combat and Galya time to heal her leg.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Option 1, but before escaping find the youngest daughter. She's the lowest in succession but likely the lowest priority for the demons out of the family. If the Duke and Duchess are dead we need to at least find one member of the royal line, if nothing else.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Hmm. If evasive maneuvers are more dangerous the offensive ones, perhaps Option #4 is the best choice after all.

Heck with it. We've been evasive enough. Plus, if we flaunt the fact that the one they wanted alive wasn't elf pudge, the demons might change their tactics.

SirScotty - 8 years ago

Voting for option 4. Galya is a Champion, gods dammit. This is literally in the job description. First thing's first though, she needs healing. Mayonne has to have some more healing potions.

After that, she needs backup. I get the distinct impression that Galya functions better as an ambush predator than a line combatant. Getting guards to act as bait and decoys is high on the list of things that would help with that.

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

Damnit, that's a really good idea! Dice! I've never asked for luck before! But please! Favor this stroke of brilliance!

Act4 - 8 years ago

I'll vote for this option as well, lets narrow some choices down.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Li is with her~ ;3

Asani - 8 years ago

Option 3 :p

bleach33 - 8 years ago

Option 1. Perhaps the princess takes after the duchess in appetite and might have a senpai moment to make sure the champion is all hers...if she isn't working for the demons in the first place, that is.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Some inspiration for further What if's!~

- What if Drosi had been the one to attend the predator party? ;3
- What if Galya had not paced her drinking at the predator party?
- What if Drosi had b(eaten) Li in the final trial?

sansuki - 8 years ago

Yeah, that's one trigger. I've got a few more I could do- "What if Mayonne actually was in on the conspiracy when Galya fed herself to her" is an obvious one that has a strong chance of being next up, I just didn't want to do it immediately after the real one.

I'm happy to listen to suggestions/desires for more what-ifs, though! I'm going to try to have a few for when I can't do a regularly scheduled chapter, or a regular chapter's beefy enough that I want to give some more time for people to read and vote.

Forstand - 8 years ago

These side episodes are so good! Awesome!

Lerkur - 8 years ago

"Mistress" could mean the Duchess, either of her daughters, Vicaria, or even Mayonne(if serious trickery was afoot, though it's unlike). Or it could just be Carafa, serving as "middle management" for dark forces. We can't say for sure since the male demon is MIA, and the female demon is decorating Galya's hips amd thighs.

Still, fun read! Nice application of pseudo-willing prey here. I'm guessing this was meant to be revealed whenever we found out about Gesualdo's predator fetish. Kinda curious what other what-if stories might be in the works, but we'll all just have to be patient.

Chronicle - 8 years ago

Awesome! You hit my three favorite things with this story. Almost wish this was the main story, but I still have a snack for Galya there as well hopefully :P

Also Mistress? Not sure if you dropped that intentionally, or if I should be honorable about that.

SirScotty - 8 years ago

I'll go with 2. At least the part where Galya and Mayonne keep up the ruse while Galya interrogates Carafa. No need to blow the cover until they're sure all of the conspirators are exposed.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

Option 4 sounds fun!

bleach33 - 8 years ago

Option 2, with Galya eating Carafa with the antacids in order to try out her new trick.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Option #4, and Galya eats Carafa

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Option one will probably garner some angry reactions to those that thought that Mayonne digested Galya but will at least save her from censure. Option two might have Mayonne in more trouble with the court, but will give Galya time to interrogate her captive. If Carafa feeds anyone, I think it should be Mayonne since the poor elf was deprived of a meal. But first, interrogation to see even how deeply involved in this the quarter elf is. I disagree with the having Galya impersonate Carafa, if solely for the reason that it seems likely that it would end badly with the demons easily piercing the illusions themselves if Carafa is working for them.

So with all that said, my choice is a modified option two. I agree that Galya should interrogate Carafa, and possibly devour her with the antacid that Mayonne used on her to see if her empathy is a two-way thing. The reactins from the council that Mayonne garners on having digested their Champion fully will prove more insightful I think, especially if any of them had been collaborating with Carafa. It's possible that they'll be upset with her, but that couldn't last forever and Galya will eventually be revealed to be alive sans demonic intervention to free Carafa or Carafa somehow escaping and ingesting Galya herself.

bleach33 - 8 years ago

3. Crazy plan just might work.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Option 3 without a doubt! At worst, champion becomes elf fat, never a bad thing. At best, we find out more through putting enough people in a pressured situation.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

Could tell her to ingest the guard. Since.. Technically we don't know she's not 'in' the enemy side. This could be an excuse to off us; she even admits as much and some geniuses would go as far as to play it off as a joke.

We should investigate the castle, see if we can't find who the messenger is and make them talk. Option 3 would be too difficult to come back from.

Act4 - 8 years ago

I'd say option 3 would give us a more direct depth into who might have a hand to play in all this. Granted, there is a great deal of trust that has to be placed in Mayonne, someone we barely know.

I would make a small amendment to option 3 before accepting it however. I'd suggest bring a third party into this plan,namely the only other person we've discussed things with, being Vicaria. Not only would this provide another pair of eyes for the spectacle and provide much more information, but she would be able to ensure our safety and survival, if but a little bit more.

If this can't be accomplished then I would take option 1 instead, as all roads seem to point there.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

The trick with Mayonne's plan is that, even if she doesn't add our hero to her elven curves(Not that I would mind that), it might only defame Galya. The one we're trying to lure out might not be too worried about the fate of one Champion, especially if they're capturing more than one champion, and just wants as many as possible.

So if we fake Galya's death and digestion, and nothing comes from it, how do we explain ourselves when she's proven to be alive? Or do we just continue the Farce, and try to flee our post? If we do go with Option 3, live and yet learn nothing, we might want to go make an emergency report, since no one will be looking for a dead elf.

Anyway, that's just the What-If scenario. I vote for Option #1. Hearing the other side's story might reveal some lies from the Duchy side.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Tell her the truth and add along the lines of that she should be glad she's not digested, feeding herself to Galya like that. After all, a predator's going to do what reflex tells them to do!

Chronicle - 8 years ago

Yes, Galya has thought multiple times about her first prey, before she was a champion, but we haven't gotten any details really. If it related to this at all, I'd love to hear it, and I think it would quell the hungrier commenters here as well.

Act4 - 8 years ago

I'd say it was an honest mistake and was against
your own intentions, as was it was an actual biological reaction. I'd then say we should promise to make it up to her somehow and then sweep the event under the rug for now.

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

Agreed on all counts. Our new friend should be able to help find out what's happening in and around Galya. And as a side, she seems to hold little love to the people around the castle beyond what the job requires so there's little chance she'll rat us out if it turns out we're part demon or some shit. :3

Also, I remember vividly Galya's spider snack and the demon lunchable... but who was the first again? I don't really think that was mentioned. Am I missing something or was that just foreshadowing?

Lerkur - 8 years ago

As tempting as it is to try and make a meal of Mayonne (and/or fail and become a meal ourselves), they're a strong ally and can help us learn things that we couldn't otherwise. Plus, our strengths are in dialogue, not grappling.

I vote for full disclosure, answering questions as they come up. Explain why you started swallowing, go into other concerns about your previous assailants, how one seemed to digest too fast, etc. If we're lucky, they might know an object mending spell to help fix the broken glass.

Chronicle - 8 years ago

I think chatting with her to gain her trust is our best option, hopefully also getting to know her as well. She seems to be very likely to discover Galya's vorish ability, given how the infection is in her throat and cutting out the slime is the cure, so building trust before that's discovered would be beneficial.

Ps. I'm really curious as to the implications of Galya's quick digestion!

Toadba - 8 years ago

Hmm hmm hmm~

Well honestly I'm going to cast my vote for aggressive! Well we're locked in a room, and need some manner of treatment, she's not the most friendly of people! Perhaps trading a few insults and digs will bring us closer together :P haha

Though keeping a slightly flirtatious tone as well would be best! Probing, but hedonistic... as is tradition! ;3

Lerkur - 8 years ago

If she wanted to kill us on the operating table, she wouldn't have said we were clean and tried to shoo us out. Plus, we're barricaded in and infected. Since we kind of need her to cure us anyway, I think that we should trust her. Plus, threatening her might actually encourage her to double cross us when we're at risk of infection.

Since flirting at this pointing would probably make us look that much dumber to her, idle chat seems better. If we can't just chat, I vote we ask her about herself. It's not like we can just eat the elf girl while she working in our throats, and blame it on the infected guard..... Right? :3

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

I doubt asking her opinion of the other people in the castle would result in anything less than scathing insults. Might as well ask her about herself than, nothing pointless like hobbies or "why'd you decide to be a wizard lady?" or other such questions as they'd likely just annoy her. Asking her for magic lessons could be interesting.... unless we're instantly shot down. :/


Kinda hard to deal with people like Mayonne. Bah, fuck it. I talked myself out of everything I wanted to know so I'll just go with; Ask her about herself.

Act4 - 8 years ago

If anything we may as well ask her a few questions, given that we are going to be stuck here for several hours, we could find out what could have happened if we delayed our return, as well as ask her about the drooler itself, find out more about it and maybe learn something new in the process. Also we might try and find out what her opinion was about the previous champion Joanna. Along with this we should ask about herself and get to know her personality better.

I'd say we should be watching Mayonne's actions and stay on guard as best we can. After all, whose to say there isn't going to be some "accident" tonight, and even though she tried her best she just couldn't save us.

Since there won't be anyone coming down to help us until morning or unless she says so, we probably need to be very alert and careful with our words. In short, we wont be getting a good nights sleep tonight.

SirScotty - 8 years ago

Definitely vote for getting back to the castle *now*. Galya's not in a good position here yet in the first place, let alone if there's suddenly a succession - *especially* since she's new here.

The number one priority should be getting back to the castle, getting treated, and warning the marshal that there was a dangerous, non-native magic beast roaming the hunting grounds so that they can be cleared in more thorough fashion before someone gets killed.

Act4 - 8 years ago

I'd say we should examine the droolers body, see who the host was. And if possible could we store some of the ooze in a flask for future research or to sell it?

I'm in the boat as the others in that we should continuing the hunt, it seems as though someone wants us to turn around, this drooler isn't suppose to be here and was meant for us to find it and not progress on and turn around. I'd suggest we continue to watch the time though, and take a way back home and not the same path we took.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Risks for either choice, it seems. I'm not sure if the animals were already scared off by the drooler, but we'd still have to fight our way through the harpies if we retreated now, and all it takes is a song from one of them to put everyone at risk, and there's always a chance that the Duke or Duchess might get carried off. I vote we patch up the group, and continue to hunt while we recuperate. Hopefully the drooler wasn't sent by someone.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Normally I'm for the go for it vote, but with the possibility of becoming fully possessed inside and out, as sexy as I find it in role play, I say go back to the castle and get treated, then continue the hunt. Or have the duchess summon Mayonne to get her elfin butt out there and fix them on the spot so their hunt is uninterrupted. Which could lead to other problems with Galya still digesting the demoness :D

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

The odds of being attacked again should be kinda low. A predator like the drooler would have scared off most other threats. But we should check the Duchess' arm for the severity of the injury, maybe joke with her about just wanted to feel her muscles. Y'know, playful joke/flirting. However if we do stay, we should make the stipulation of leaving should another encounter arise.

Actually now that I think about it, the drooler would have chased off any game in the area too... so maybe there's that to consider as well. But I'll stick to my guns with toughing it out for now.

Forstand - 8 years ago

>conceal and act normal

Imrhys - 8 years ago

Second this on all counts.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

I don't think we can really keep this hidden. Aside from the fact that we can't fix the window(I'm guessing that the cleaning staff has a spare key), it's likely that whoever sent the demons already knows that we dealt with the attackers. And due to the lack of the demoness' body, likely knows that we're predatory.

I'd say, unless it cancels the plans for the hunt, we report to the Marshall, Gesualdo. Leaving the local law enforcement out of the loop might make them less helpful in the future. Vicaria might be able to help fix the window, but they may have tried to booze us up in anticipation for the attempted kidnapping. If talk of the attack would cancel the hunt, I say, keep it hidden for now. Maybe we can talk about it during the hunt.

Ome - 8 years ago

Hmmm, conceal and go about her day. There is no telling who set the demons on her, or helped them get into Galya's room. Whoever sent them undoubtedly knows they failed, but setting hounds on their trail could cause them to act with much more lethality and rashness before Galya is ready. They failed once, they'll likely be watching now to get a measure on their quarry before acting again, that gives her time.

Vicaria is an unlikely culprit given that a spymaster could of probably found less obvious ways then hiring abducters to break a window and abscond with her, but having the ratling snooping about when things are allegedly rather delicate could raise suspicions even from those not involved. If worst comes to worst, Galya can go to her after the hunt and report things.

Act4 - 8 years ago

Conceal, still need more information before we play our cards.

Ome - 8 years ago

I'm torn between Gesualdo, who clearly seems to be dropping more hints then he needs to be to be subtle, and Mayonne, who probably seems as the one most likely to give a straight and honest answer to any questions.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

I'm going to go on a limb and say... Mayonne, the elven High Arcanist. She might be a bit dangerous, but she's blunt and brutally honest, not giving any cover story on Joanna's death (if she won against the dragon, they wouldn't have found her bitten in half and difficult to recognize without a dragon's corpse to go with her own). We have a chance to get a no-bullshit account on things going on here. Second place would probably be the Marshal, but sticking with the first choice.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

Oh oh! Ratling!

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

Ugh... I'm torn between Councilor Vicaria and Lady Conzi. On one side, the ratling lass may be a good source of all around information for the champion to utilize in her investigations. But on the other... we got a royal who appears less than pleased with her arranged marriage (who'd a thunk it) and was giving Galya the googlie eyes for most of the dinner. I'ma just punk out and put my vote in with whichever gets the most votes after they're all tallied up.

Hot lesbian action > valid information source. <3

SirScotty - 8 years ago

Gesualdo! Not only is he dropping more hints than are socially necessary, he's also the lynchpin to at least one of the discrepancies in the books.

SirScotty - 8 years ago

I'm also going to chime in for both events.

sansuki - 8 years ago

Oh my goodness, are we going to have our first unanimous choice for going to as many events as possible? :D

Thanatos2k - 8 years ago

-Both events

Should meet plenty of suspects there

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Duke Carlo seems annoyed at the idea of a party, and getting on Mara's good side might not be the same as getting on her husband's good side. Still, The hunt was happening before we came here, and meeting the rest of the bigwigs will likely help later on. I vote for Both Events.

Though we probably need to get to work after this. If there really is trouble brewing and the guards aren't paying much attention to the villagers, then we might have some basic work to catch up on.

Apostolos - 8 years ago

Hmm we should probably mention the worries about a possible larger predator taking up residence in the mountains early on before the character can forget, lots of towns or even countries fall because what seems like a small change in behavior, is actually a massive building threat. Better to be over cautious and wrong than neglecting an actual threat

bleach33 - 8 years ago

I vote D) for duh. Have her take a shower first, because she can't sneak around with a heavy harpy scent. Then she can sneak around and look for information, and if someone does catch her, she shouldn't pass up a free meal, should she?

Thanatos2k - 8 years ago

Hit the inn

Lerkur - 8 years ago

It's probably hard to sneak around when you smell like harpy. Plus, it's likely the middle of the day still, so no cover to sneak around in. And getting caught at this point will likely screw us over in the long run.

So, I'm going with Option B. And I'd like to second Apostalos' suggestion of notifying the guard about their arrival in town. It's probably best to get on their good side now, so we can capitalize on our Silvertongue bonus when dealing with them later.

Insanity7 - 8 years ago

I vote B.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Option C, lets gather some intel

Ome - 8 years ago

Hmmm I'm gonna go with exile the harpies and delay the miners

bleach33 - 8 years ago

Squirm into the harpy's sex and become one of her eggs.

SurvivorX - 8 years ago

Talk down the miners.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Several reasons. One) Galya is a champion, not just a straight-up killer/murderhobo, and the miners did kinda bring it on themselves. Two) These two represent more in the mountains that Galya couldn't hope to fight by herself. Three) The harpies in this region could be persuaded to be informants for Galya, and may have already provided some useful information. Four) Harpies are sexy and it would be nice to see them from time to time in Galya's story.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

From just the listed options, options 2 and 4 seem as fatal as 1, since the town won't take kindly to theft and murder from "monsters", and exiling them will likely just send them straight into whatever they were running from. That being said, they have been robbing and eating townspeople, and we did take a job to protect them. Besides, failing on whatever roll determines her getting away with it will turn the entire city against Galya, even if her badge keeps her from becoming a criminal.

I'd say, try to talk the miners down, and have the harpies try to work off the cost of the cows. More harpies will be coming in before long, so maybe having someone who can relay the laws to them, or at least have the others know that there are consequences for stealing cows. If this doesn't work though, either have the wax ready, or be prepared to K.O./kill/eat the female harpy before they can sing, because I doubt they'll go peacefully when they find out what the miners want. Sorry if this is overly complicated.

Insanity7 - 8 years ago

Parlay.

KinoTheCat - 8 years ago

I think a combination of Parlay and Brawl are what needs to be done.

The first thing that has to happen is that we need to stop the harpy's song. Either cracking the bird's beak or shoving something down her throat to stop the singing is the first way to turn the tables on them. If we can stop the singing permanently then parlaying would be the best option.

Forstand - 8 years ago

Parlay

Forstand - 8 years ago

Brawl!

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Brawl! Get her hand down the harpy throat and force the harpy into her (or the male wakes up and shoves Galya into the female...something like that :P).

Graywolf18 - 8 years ago

Not sure if voting is still on but I'd suggest the sneaky sneaky route and follow after them. Then after the alcohol wears off and they all puss out we find out where they were going and take care of the problem.

Imrhys - 8 years ago

Toss me into this voting column. The former gamer in me is screaming this is a perfect chance to pick up a side quest from the DM/GM that leads to something more later.

sansuki - 8 years ago

Tease? I'm not sure I'm teasing at all. :D

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Well, she's supposed to be a champion. What is her job if not fighting to protect people (besides devouring said people alive). Still, she's not really well-known and these guys are going to follow their alcohol fortified senses and chase down whatever monsters they're tracking (likely harpies). Might be a good time to follow them or explore the old logging camp herself, maybe make inquiries about how to get there.

Kaoru - 8 years ago

On another note. WHY ARE YOU SUCH A TEASE WITH THE METAREALITY SHENANIGANS. :C
(<3)

Forstand - 8 years ago

This was great!

vore2412 - 8 years ago

I know she knows how you feel about it. Lovely, time for my chapter 6 vote now.

Imrhys - 8 years ago

You and your love of amphibians *chuckles* Well and long, retractable tongues >_>

BTW, you are still an evil tease. You know how I feel about Betrayal fatalities v.v

*goes for a long, cold shower*

sansuki - 8 years ago

Voting is very much still open, and after an early dominant lead by Option #1, Option #3 is surging; it's currently 6 to 4 in favor of option 1, with... nobody voting for #2. XD

Kaoru - 8 years ago

If the voting has not closed, I’d like to stump for Option #3. I agree with those who have said that it will be good to travel with the other predator-Champions, to be near Li and ask where she is bound, and to recover her strength far from her Instructors and before she heads to her new post.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Option 1 is safe, sensible. Somewhat boring. And if Galya was like that, she'd likely have a different assignment rather than be stuck in as a babysitter in a small kingdom. Option 2 would fit her fairly well as the orphaned, sorta loner, outcast she projects most of the time. But option 3 now, gives her a chance to experience something rather novel for her: the comraderie of fellow predators, acceptance, and approval, which is frankly in short supply for her. And it gives her a chance to travel in numbers while she recovers her size and feel like she is of some use while having chances to indulge that predatory nature some more.

TL;DR: Option 3.

Imrhys - 8 years ago

I think #3 is most loyal to her traits. Bandit devouring plays to both her "devourer" and "hedonist" traits, while at the same time shows why/how she may have gotten/Earned "disrespected", AND she does need to heal, so why not snack up... I stacked up on "healing potions" with a pack of others to provide back-up if her "injuries" pose a threat to her abilities?

Lerkur - 8 years ago

We've had our fun, now it's time to get ready for work. And with Silvertongue, this position actually suits us very well. Besides, hunting bandits while half our regular size will either lead to being at a sever disadvantage during a fight, or forcing our predatory friends to cover for us, which would likely get on their nerves. Neither one is likely to end well end well. My vote is to recover, study, and head out when we're at our proper size.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Normal or Predator?

Thanatos2k - 8 years ago

Champion Party

Bright - 8 years ago

I can imagine that going to a predator party while being 2 feet tall can be quite a troublesome thing.

Kaoru - 8 years ago

I am a daredevil and a fool.

As such, I'm voting for the Predator's Party. Here's why.

I feel very strongly that the long overland journey will give us ample time to study - both any potential lingering effects from that venom, as well as the local traditions, culture and lay of the land for our new assignment. We can take study materials with us, after all.

However, we can't take friends. And Li is the closest we've got right now.

The other Champions who won in basic combat will not respect us - nor should they, really. We likely aren't close with most of them, and we didn't win through martial skill or even cunning. We won by Predating. We belong at the Predator's party, and it'd be worthwhile to catch up with Li and see where she's assigned.

We may not find a warm welcome there, either - but at the least, we'll find excitement.

Toadba - 8 years ago

Also loving this series so far! Looking forward to seeing and voting on those Friday/Monday updates :D

Bright - 8 years ago

Nicely written combat scene.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Paralysis for the one vote it will likely get :P

Lerkur - 8 years ago

While part of me chuckles at the idea of giving her a useless transformation(like spider eyes and nothing else). I think I'll just add one more vote to Pseudo-Drunkenness.

Bitter - 8 years ago

Transformative: It's contagious! Drosi is apparently the descendant of demon-contracting types, and what's a demon love to do more than make more demons?

SirScotty - 8 years ago

Lack of coordination, but something more specific than mere disorientation: muscular impulse inverter. Suddenly the impulse that used to flex the fingers on her right hand make her left knee bend, a conscious deep sigh turns her head to the left, and trying to bend her right arm at the elbow is a kegel. She has to figure out what new impulses do what - and then *unlearn* again very quickly when it wears off.

Bright - 8 years ago

Ooh, curious of where it will go from here.

sansuki - 8 years ago

Voting closed on this one; BAAAAARELY landed on the most popular vote. It'll be Galya vs. Spidergirl. I'm starting to write it up now, but it'll probably be tomorrow afternoon before I post.

Lerkur - 8 years ago

Hesitating is an invitation to get attacked first, which is bad if Drosi targets, so, NOT going to wait and see. Badger seems like the safe bet, since a vore scene is all too likely and the gnome wrapped in metal is unlikely to be a pred (unless the mound of metal part means hinged plate. But, if success and failure are both up to chance, let's go with the route where either one leads to vore. My vote's for Drosi. Their poison might make them more dangerous, but hopefully, it pays off.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Was originally going to say badger but reading some comments makes me want to say spider woman. So let's go with wait and see.

Razgriz - 8 years ago

Changed my vote to spider-girl :D

Bright - 8 years ago

Love the story so far.

Cougar - 8 years ago

Oops, my mistake!

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Would be vice-versa. Li's the orc that made the offer, Galya's the elf that is being offered a position as an orc's squire~

Cougar - 8 years ago

I think Li has got her pride, and so she politely refuses Gayla's offer, though she may end up regretting that choice on the battlefield.

SmaxTheDestroyer - 8 years ago

Use that silver tongue to make a tempting counter proposal whereby both of them get a meal. And both of them pass.

Bright - 8 years ago

I really like how this is written so far.

vore2412 - 8 years ago

Based on description of the character alone so far, seems like perceptive and unfazeable are out of the question. Since the rest is fairly open, I'd probably go with arcanist (you know I love magic) and self-absorbed (because that makes it easy to be absorbed in other ways and is a fault I attribute to mages. <3)

Cougar - 8 years ago

Positive: Arcanist
Negative: Delicious

Bitter - 8 years ago

Positive: Sharpshooter (as described)
Negative: Self-concerned (as an orphan, her reflex is to save herself first, contrary to the oath)

firefox01 - 8 years ago

Arcanist and hedonist

FreedomPug - 6 years ago

perks of living alone, well, your alone... never looking at my couch the same, 10/10 lol

Randomdude5 - 6 years ago

I finally got around to reading this and I really should have read it sooner :)

nipnaki - 9 years ago

Ambitious, but your descriptions are lush and the payoff is worth it. Great stuff!

sansuki - 9 years ago

Thanks! And consider the tag added

jacquelope - 9 years ago

Implied scat at the end? Perhaps a tag for that? Not a scat fan at all, but still, typical Sansuki story, I couldn't stop reading... wife yelling at me to get off my butt and fix something and I'm all "Just a second!" for like 10 minutes hahahah five stars out of five

sansuki - 9 years ago

She had a few more adventures, none of which she remembers quite clearly. She got Changed, though, even if it took a few months for it to overcome her body's inertia...

Indighost - 9 years ago

Good writing

Apostolos - 9 years ago

Wait what happened after she was cased in an egg?

Draconatedz - 9 years ago

I do love a good twist. A fairy turning the tables on a frog for once is a rather stimulating idea. Great build up, though I felt it ended a bit too early, I would have enjoyed seeing your take on Bakkelika absorbing the poor guy's soul.

Imrhys - 10 years ago

So glad to hear from you again, even if you had to be "forced" with unrelenting proding to make it happen *chuckles* One of your best, if not the best ^^

Imrhys - 10 years ago

You did exceptionally with it too. I hope you properly digested that "unnamed someone" for such a wonderful urging <3

I didn't even notice the first person, inside the pred head "stuff" because my brain just read it as "this is the proper POV for this story" and I just enjoyed myself too much to analyze it, ahahaha >_>

Blahblahbum - 10 years ago

Oh cool, new art!

sansuki - 10 years ago

Thanks! An unnamed someone urged me to show off my pred side, so I decided to write a first-person perspective story from inside the pred's head.

Argh - 10 years ago

Nothing is better than soul vore. Bravo.

rotta287 - 4 days ago

I facepalm at myself for not having thought of vore wrestling until I stumbled onto this. It is such a good concept, and the implied setting clearly shows that there is more depth without getting the pace bogged down. Good work.

sansuki - 11 years ago

Someone got my pun! :D

Thanatos2k - 11 years ago

Fatal Four Way for the number one contender? Better check under the ring to make sure Triple H isn't hiding there with a sledgehammer.

French_snack - 11 years ago

A very enjoyable read. I liked the various touches of… realism, for lack of a better word. The elements of blunt reality that a relatively jaded fighter like Diona is used to, behind the screen of glamour, but that the audience (who are just there for the show) don't necessarily see.

Imrhys - 11 years ago

A non-fatal piece from you? Most rare and telling of the type of story this is. Though your technical skills show some rust (this is the first time I've ever caught you at any mistakes or clunky passages), your story making skills are still spot on.

The world building strongly supports this non fatal option story. It even settles most of my issues with human/human vore, and yet your bypassing great detail in the same size ingestion STILL works without kicking me out. And... You made it more about the characters than the vore or the fighting.

Excellent piece. Beautiful return to posting <3

Bright - 13 years ago

I enjoyed reading this story.

Argh - 13 years ago

Love it. You're always so good at taking your time on the digestion and futility of struggle. Matter-of-fact lines like "Yvona fattened the gnoll and held no anger to it" are wonderful. A little more epilogue about the effects of the digestion on the gnoll would have been nice, had this been a story. But with an RP, it seems like the point of surrender is the most natural place to end.

Imrhys - 13 years ago

Knows a deep, dark secret, but shadow demonesses are good at keeping secrets (or at least removing those that learn of them).

Aickavon12 - 13 years ago

MY POOR KITTEN EYES CAN READ THIS :D

sansuki - 13 years ago

FIXED IT. Apparently the portal *really* hates .docx

newenglandee - 14 years ago

Yeah. I can't imagine how awful it must be to have to fight those kinda urges.

FoShiznit - 14 years ago

That sounds a lot like what (I imagine) pedophiles go through.

Bright - 15 years ago

I enjoyed reading this. I like how she uses venom to get her way.

BBulb22 - 15 years ago

Oh my. What a powerful, sexy predator, and equally powerful, sexy prose.

newenglandee - 15 years ago

Truth be told, it actually reminds me of an X-Files episode. This Shark-like human has a nigh-uncontrollable hunger for human brains, he works at a fast food restaurant, takes hunger suppressants and watches motivational TV to try and keep himself from going psychopathic, to insist to himself that he is in control of his appetites. He's even seeing a shrink about it.

In the end though, he does a suicide-by-cop with the X-Files agents because he realizes that that kind of lifestyle is wrong and he can't stop himself in any other way. It was a noble death, but also kind of a sad but true commentary on those who have destructive and amoral lifestyles and who KNOW that and wish it were otherwise, but don't have the strength to stop themselves.

Phear - 15 years ago

This! Too many artists and writers get burned out or disillusioned from the daily complaints of people who for some odd reason feel that they should complain if a story isn't their kink. Create what interests you, and ignore the peanut gallery. Your writing is phenomenal, your creativity wonderful. No matter what you write, you're going to have fans of it.

sansuki - 15 years ago

You're the third person to nag me about that line. Seeing it still makes me wince in shame. Thanks, though!

Seeguy - 15 years ago

Pretty frakking hot. Plus, all my favorite forms of vore in one story and melting and sliminess. I might make a minor criticism, which is that, as Isabel is being cock vored the text reads that "the pain made her cry in pain."

tangent - 15 years ago

faaantastic. <3
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KinoTheCat - 15 years ago

Well, I am of the opinion that you create art (and stories) for yourself first, and then you share it with everyone if you deem you want to share it. =3 Don't worry about indulging in a story, that's what creating it is for. =) It was a wonderful story, and I truly loved the ending where they both merged together because neither wanted to be the master~

Indighost - 15 years ago

A nice entry into the 'furry noir' genre. The story was interesting enough to pull me through the non-vore content. Nice job sansuki

Slash - 15 years ago

Good story with some nice depth.

Bright - 15 years ago

This one was quite interesting. The story makes me want to know more about the things and happenings around it.

ReposaVermelha - 6 years ago

I don't understand why this doesn't have more comments and feedback. This isn't a good vore story, it's a good story PERIOD. It's lovely and just so well written and conceived. I'm not normally a hard vore fan, but I recommend this story to friends. I would happily recommend it to non-vore fans as well. Just... thank you for this.

Pineapple - 14 years ago

It is not often that you find something of this magnitude and beauty on what is primarily a "porn" site. Just... Wow. Thank you for this.

French_snack - 15 years ago

Beautiful story. Very, very moving.

Imrhys - 15 years ago

Ominous? I don't think it was ominous in the least.

This piece actually made me sad, and I knew going in she was doomed. And I like what you did with the ending, nice edit job :D

4ofSwords - 15 years ago

This had echoes of 50's and 70's sci-fi, I thought. It was just a little too short to be fully invested in Elie's character (hangovers of vore as porn, perhaps), but overall it worked really well.

Jack - 15 years ago

It is indeed a shame that he could not wait just a bit longer. I would have liked to see how far Sylvie would have been willing to go.
But on the other hand, it's a good thing not to include a full sex scene in every vore story I think.

The part I especially enjoyed was the moment when Lev threatened to gobble Sylvie down too. I could not take my eyes off the screen until I knew he would let her go or take her all in. Both ends would have been absolutely fine, but I am afraid the one not chosen is slightly preferred. :)

Anyway, another great story from you.
Thank you very much.

4ofSwords - 15 years ago

Lev's species seems like it has some promise.

Houyo - 15 years ago

Good story, though heartbreaking for Garali. XP But I guess that just means it's well written when you feel sorry for the prey.

Slash - 15 years ago

A well done story. Love the descriptions

sansuki - 15 years ago

I often seem to write characters who are sociopathic, evil, or just plain BAD in some way. They are more interesting! What can I say?

Ilksurthysys - 15 years ago

Yeah, I've noticed that in the few I've read. Good variety, but that also means stuff I'm not that interested in. But when you write something closer to my tastes, mmm, stuff like this thing happens.

sansuki - 15 years ago

You may just! I tend to veer all over the place in terms both of type of vore and tone of story, so be sure to check the tags first.

Ilksurthysys - 15 years ago

Hmm. That's quite the ending. I think I need to read through your gallery one of these days.

Indighost - 15 years ago

Good Unbirth/TF story. Wasn't too many surprises, but was very erotic with excellent word choice. You had me going there Sansuki :3

Liz - 15 years ago

A great story indeed with a few twists and a man who didn't want to give as well as recieve.

Until death do they part.

Chameleoman - 15 years ago

This was an awesome story! Great job! :D Your descriptions were subtle and powerful at the same time :)

quirkylilme - 15 years ago

Please? D: I'll be your best friend! D:

dimensione510 - 15 years ago

Awesome. I always love assassins and slightly non-human characters in vore, so both is like a match made in heaven (Hell?)

Great story.

sansuki - 15 years ago

I would think so, but my research for this story did not extend to looking up the shades of various lizard droppings. :D

Xali - 15 years ago

I think after this, a more appropriate name for her might be "Dr. Brown"