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STORY 39



The early morning sun shone bright through a thin layer of clouds drifting idly in the skies of Felarya. Herded by a gentle wind towards the distant moutains, they sprinkled a light drizzle of rain over the lush, verdant forest. Droplets splattered on the ground, and were soaked into the earth, moistening it. That moisture was then sucked in thirtstily by plants and trees of unimaginably varied sizes. Trickling into cupped leaves close to ground level, the rain also quenched the

Story 39

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: French_snack

Tags: Oral Vore Micro Soft Vore F/F F/M Giantess Naga Felarya Jade Non-Consensual Milly Jissy Jora

A continuation of Milly's story.

Jade and Jora belong to Ravana3k, and are used with his permission.

My thanks also go to timing2, who, in a comment, provided the initial inspiration for this story arc.
 

French_snack - 7 years ago

Thanks. I enjoyed writing about this pair. She does see it all in a very different way to what he would like. To her, it's simply about making an effort, for a while, for *his* sake.

oishi1 - 8 years ago

great story. I like the way she fudged on the rules. she still doesn't understand the purpose behind his request. I really like the way you write these characters.

naruto7568426 - 10 years ago

>3< Noooo! No waiting! XD

French_snack - 10 years ago

They won't lose touch. I think Milly will visit Isham at Safe Harbour. But as to getting back together... You'll have to wait and see. ;)

naruto7568426 - 10 years ago

Ohh...I hope they'll get back together...

“The Apple- Smut, Vore, and Gore”


My name is “X”. Just “X”. But I'll try not to bore you with boring monologue or explanation. Suffice it to say that while this is my story, it is not my story alone, and so I am not the only teller. Now, let us begin.



I am a Masque. If you have lived in modern society, or read the transcripts of the others, then you should know full what both what that term means and the carnage that follows in our wake. If you have

"X" in Felayra

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: LordVengeance

Tags: Masque, Smut, Gore, Vore

You decide... 

French_snack - 10 years ago

You're welcome. Regarding dryads: Some can move, but most are rooted to the spot; I've never heard of any that could teleport. That just sounds odd.

No need to apologise for X's point of view; he's quite entitled to it, and it's understandable too, in his situation. It'll be interesting to see more of Annae's perspective as a predator. Although she can't eat humans, she can eat tinies - including tomthumbs, who are essentially miniature humans (http://www.felarya.com/wiki/index.php?title=Tinies).

LordVengeance - 10 years ago

Rats. You are correct, my friend, it is impossible for either species to eat same size prey (much less a same size meal that had previously engorged two OTHER same size meals). I'll leave it as it is for now simply because I can think of no way to rewrite the section as eloquently, but I WILL bear that closely in mind in all future stories. As for the axe... I can explain. Eventually, through my other Tales. For now though- he needed it? Not in this case, I mean, but he WAS part of a group of twenty four people that basicly kept their entire world in order. That includes Vampires, Wraiths, Trolls, Zombies, Fairies, Humans, and all manner of powerful magical or cursed or demonic creatures. To be quite frank, twenty four people couldn't run a CITY. It takes more than four hundred simply in the United States Congress, excluding the other two branches and all the sublevels of power. To run ONE country. I had to come up with some rather unique weapons to even make their survival possible, much less provide them with the power and diplomatic skills it would take for the Masques to be able to do what they do. I quite likely stepped out too far. I'm willing to accept that. But please keep that in mind. You are right, however, in that it should have been more of a stuggle, that I desperately need to learn more about Felarya, and that I used a common topic. I will fix all of those things eventually, and I thank you for your courteous and beautiful citique. The Dryad CAN'T teleport?? A plauge on that DevArt story that that mislead me. What was it called?... Ah, well. You are also correct about Annae Maria, who will reappear in another tale very, very soon. I apologize for "X" and his rather harsh view, but he IS a monster killer, and he is definitely pro-human in the debate of "Food or Person". Annae, however, is a pred that actually enjoys being a predator. She can't eat full sized humans (now, anyways ^_^), but she may just find a way to feast. Next time I may tell it almost entirely from a predator's perspective, having established a firm anti-predator one. I may also do some from the willing prey perspective, since with "L" I already did unwilling prey- and he killed his predator. But I get off topic so easily! What I meant to do was thank you for caring enough to write THAT in depth to correct me. Thanks!

French_snack - 10 years ago

The basic idea (with its smashing of the fourth wall) is surprising, but interesting. And your writing is good, of course.

A few points regarding Felarya, though. The vore you described was same-size. Nekos are human-sized, and if she ate a naga who was her own size and who had eaten two humans... Well, she and that naga did something that no-one else from their two species can do. Some nagas can swallow big prey, but not as big as they are, and nekos simply can't swallow anything bigger than a tiny. I've never seen teleporting dryads, either.

A weapon capable of slicing up a dryad or a dridder with ease may also raise a few eyebrows. It's a general rule in the 'Felaryan community' that, although giant predators may be killed, it should not be achieved easily. It's a bit of a touchy subject, because a number of writers make their entry in Felarya in this exact way - an avenger who labels all predators as evil and slaughters them with ease. Although in general those who start off that way lack your writing skill.

It's not a bad story. I like the way you handle the narrative style, for instance. But if you want to write about Felarya, I would advise checking a few basics. You can look through the wiki (http://www.felarya.com/wiki/index.php?title=Main_Page), and/or ask questions on the forum (http://felarya.forumotion.com/index.htm).

Since you've introduced Annae Maria but she hasn't encountered X, I take it there'll be a continuation? The contrast between their perspectives is an interesting one. So far, we've heard mainly X's view, and he's content to dismiss Felaryans as "monsters". So I'll be curious to see what happens if and when he meets Annae Maria, and we see more of her perspective as a predator. (Having said that, though, Felaryan nekos aren't capable of eating humans, so that would need amending.)

Jacquelope - 10 years ago

I'm working on an indepth critique but right away, one thing I must say is that you should very much look out for...

"X", armed with an axe like that, runs a very high risk of an unfriendly encounter with Subeta... the Collector Fairy. She's a Canopy Fairy, indeed one of the most dangerous types.

http://felarya.com/wiki/index.php?title=Subeta

About canopy fairies:
http://felarya.com/wiki/index.php?title=Fairies#Canopy_Fairies

Dan MudKips: Saying hello even if you're not there ^_^

Billy: Happy Sunday, my cute French Canadian geek, heh heh!

Dan MudKips: ^_^

Dan MudKips: Hello to you too!

Billy: You know, I had a great birthday.

Billy: All the folks online have been a great help, and my phone and email inbox were busy all day.

Billy: I feel very happy and looked after.\

Dan MudKips: I'm glad to hear it.

Dan MudKips: I'm sad though I wasn't able to give you your present

Billy: Well, it just di

Happy Birthday, Bill!

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: ouroborous

Tags: Oral Vore Soft Vore Human M/M Same Size Sex Gay Cum Fatal Bondage Unwilling

I love it when a guy knows just what I want.

Dan, you're the greatest. BURRRP!

Warning: Gay Oral Sex. Oh and someone gets eaten alive. I figured if a gay blowjob is an issue for ya, ya might want to stop right now -- you know, before the implied snuff scene. *facepalm* 

ouroborous - 10 years ago

Uhh. Too late?

goodnightfolks - 10 years ago

That was fun to RP. No one here better be fapping to images of me being manhandled and eaten and digested >_<

Bannor - 10 years ago

Happy birthday! You sure get cool presents! heh

[Another Auriwen log. Auriwen was formerly known as Ferana. The name change comes since I never liked the name Ferana which I made up for the first log I posted.


This log is a brief return to the beast theme of some of our early logs. As always, special thanks to her player for letting me post this. Contains: M/F, Bestiality, Horse, CV, oral]



~*~


[17:35] Auriwen: Deep in the middle of a deeply forested area, a rather low-leveled adventurer is trying her luck. In truth she hasn'

Terris Log - Auriwen and the Horsey

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Terris

Tags: Human Horse M/F Cock Vore Mind Control Cum Digestion bestiality Kelpie kelpie/human

A young adventuress tangles with a mythical water horse 

Terris - 1 year ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's flattering that you like it so much. I love the mindplay in it and the enticement. The Kelpy was really a memorable character that I never got to play much. I would love to revisit the character some time, but I am afraid that I don't have many partners these days.

Terris - 1 year ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it. The Kelpy was really a memorable character that I never got to play much. I would love to revisit the character some time, but I am afraid that I don't have many partners these days.

TheSkarrd - 1 year ago

This is one of my favourite stories on this site. It was actually one of the first things I viewed on this site, way back when. Thank you for taking part in such an amazing and thrilling RP!

Terris - 8 years ago

Not aware of the cum thing, but makes sense. As for the sex bit, well, he was a bit big to fit. :P She'd have been rather full.

Julia - 8 years ago

Fun fact: The salty cum? A fair warning that he's a carnivore. People who eat large ammounts of meat have saltier semen than vegetarians. A normal horse's cum wouldn't be salty because they're herbivores.

Beyond that, nicely done and very erotic. kinda wondering what'd have gone down if they wound up having sex instead, though.

Auriwen X Horsey OTP

I have heard some stories about the swamp behind my house and I decide to go and investigate. From the claims there are voices emanating from deep into the swamp, being inquisitive I decided to investigate. If it is people or something else I wanted to know. I left around 5:00pm as it would give me time to look around before dark, but anyone visiting the swamp would probably be gone.

As I walk through the swamp the only that seems out of the ordinary was the lack of insects. There are a f

Samantha's Treat

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: mrme181

Tags: Scat Frog Human Digestion F/M Fatal Willing Painless Head First Confused Pred Prey POV

Guy finds giant talking frog in swamp and quickly becomes friend and food. 

DR Mabuse - 7 months ago

One of the best vore stories of all time.

x9comega - 4 years ago

When I first found this website, it was on an old sprint flip-phone foreeever ago...at LEAST 5 years ago, if not more! I specifically remember, that phone couldn't show any pages right! Everything was all screwed up, there was text over art, or no art at all, stories wouldn't load, everything crashed...but THIS one...this one never failed, it always loaded, and I read it again and again, this story got me into this site and kept me here. I am so happy to see it's still here too.

eatmeplease - 5 years ago

Hey, you should do more of these!

DR Mabuse - 6 years ago

Fantastic Story

Tuskarr - 9 years ago

First time I've come across this story and I loved it :D If your ever in the mood to do another with Samantha in I'd love to read it.

Teasing



Ten years after having seen the Humans being defeated in the 3rd Tinies World War against Nekos, neeras had decided to show themselves a bit more. After all, Humans had used their tunnels network to gain an advantage on Nekos. But it hadn't prevented Nekos to win this war again. Some months after this bitter defeat, the neera chancellor, Neerases II, had met the leaders of Mankind to consolidate their relationships. It has been a success. Humans had accepted to unite their force to

Teasing

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Krisexy

Tags: Micro Macro Soft Vore Male Predator F/M Giantess Sex Prey Neko Oral Invalid Tag teasing

another amazing story from my amazing self ^^ ehm...you guys might be uncertain about what is "Huneemanra" dont worry, my next story is all about it :D! well...it will not really be a story....:o you will see ^^


please comment :D




F/M Giantess Macro Male Micro Oral Predator Prey Sex Sexy Soft Vore Neko 

Krisexy - 10 years ago

ah ouin? XD moi je trouve que jai un gros manque de vocabulaire et que jutilise toujours les mêmes mots...:/ mais bon si cest si bon que sa tant mieux! XD :D

merci tes fin :) xxooxox

rjw14 - 10 years ago

........ I'm as much in the dark as F_S is on this one o.O
Explainez-vous?

French_snack - 10 years ago

"Yes but no"? Si ta prochaine histoire nous en révèle plus sur Huneemanra, je serai curieux de voir ça, en tout cas. :)

J'aime beaucoup tes prédatrices -surtout Amayelle et Valiana. Ces deux là sont voraces, joueuses, mais elles ont un vrai fond de gentillesse en même temps.

Et puis bravo sur la manière dont tu écris les réactions des proies! Tu arrives très bien à imaginer leur point de vue, et pour moi c'est très convainquant. :D

Krisexy - 10 years ago

yeah...my mom has italian and russian origins so i think its why they called me kristine with a k :/ XD

Krisexy - 10 years ago

^^

no vore in next one though :o well...yes but no :/

        
Ebon, A world that has seen many times. War and peace have rained over it many of times. Till the World war broke out in 500B (1914AD) The Haradrum kingdoms was still small and new. The world was in a rogue state, Almost every country was on it's own. Others tried to take the kingdoms over, But in the end fell to them.
        
This small rule was now growing into and empire, Anyland that bordered them would

The Gnoll King: The journey starts

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Lord_Mitchell

Tags: Belly Soft Vore Stomach M/M Gnoll

Well, A while ago I was trying to think of another character for my story. I wanted something that loves to plunger in nature, Then last year a read The Raid by Strega. Then I dawned on me, Gnoll is a great race to go with. I the story some much that it has an influence. As you read the first part of this story is is to kinda give you were the world stands at in this point and time, If you don't really care then rush a head abit, The stuff is just extra anyways. Oh, And the gnoll does have a...
[ Continued ...

Lord_Mitchell - 10 years ago

That's great to hear, Oh and some of that history at the start pays a good part later in this story as well as some of the others. :)

Slash - 10 years ago

A well done story there. Luved the vore to it.^^

Escape
By Jag
Contains: Escaping a dragons' stomach! That's...un-vore!
Jag (c) myself
Aqua (c) his player

As both Aqua and Jag slept, time passed on as normal. Minutes ticked by and it wasn't long until a good five hours had passed. Jag had quickly fallen asleep within Aqua. The warm slickness of the dragon's gut acted as the best bed the feline had ever had and the guttural noises within made for a soothing lullaby. Even in his peaceful state Jag's mind was racing about with things that he ha

Escape

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Jag

Tags: writing

After gulping down Jag the two quickly slept for a few hours, one inside the other. Jag wakes himself up as he remembers about having to do something in a little while. Trying to get Aqua's attention the feline is forced to work himself up the way he had previously come down.

Contains: M/M un-vore  

Nezumi - 10 years ago

First comment on such a great story!

Wow, so this is the continuation of that other story.

I really liked this, especially the note at the end~

STORY 33 - part 3



Vuni was woken at dawn by a gentle shaking of her shoulder. Her eyes opened instantly, and in the half-light she looked up into Bajen's face. For a brief moment, she was disoriented, unfamiliar sights and scents flooding her senses, then she remembered where she was. The comfort of sleep fled her, the harsh reality of her situation reimposing itself on her conscious mind.


“Good morning,” Bajen greeted her in a whisper. “If you still want to help in

Story 33 - part 3

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: French_snack

Tags: Felarya Slug Girl Vuni

The continuation of Vuni's story.

Part 1 is here:
http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=175952
Part 2 is here: http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=177779
Part 4 (final part) is here: http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=181790
 

French_snack - 10 years ago

Merci! (Et non, il n'y aura pas 12 parties. :p)

French_snack - 10 years ago

Thanks. Well, unlike Rin, Vuni is too small to eat humans, so she was merely indifferent to them in Felarya. But yes, if she ever does get home, she would probably take more of a friendly interest in them now.

Krisexy - 10 years ago

super booooooooooooooon :D!!!

mais fais en pas comme une suite de 12 parties sil te plait O-o (lattente serait légerement trop longue ^^;) mais ton histoire est interessant! :D jsuis impatiente de voir ta prochaine histoire ^^

xoxoxo

Jacquelope - 10 years ago

This doesn't feel rushed. It feels properly paced. Vuni sounds like she's going to grow up to be human friendly, like Rin, right?

French_snack - 10 years ago

Thank you! I was uncertain, actually, whether I was rushing it, or on the contrary stretching it out too much, or whether it was reasonably balanced.

I was tired, I could feel my eyelids trying their hardest to close. The elevator door opened, I exited and walked down the dimly colored hallway. My door was number 323, the door barely hung on its hinges. I unlocked it and walked inside, dumping my suitcase on the ground. I'd been gone for about three days, at a conference. I fumbled around for the light switch, I flipped it on, the dim flickering light struggling to turn on. I felt a cold hand wrap around my mouth from behind, I jumped, the ha

Jelly Secret #1

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: falsename

Tags: Oral Vore M/F jelly M/?

The First episode of 'Jelly' Secret. A man comes home and makes a startling discovery.
Oral Vore 

falsename - 9 years ago

Well, turns out she isn't digested and the main character proceeds to 'eject' them out of their body (non-watersports or scat).
There's lot more to it than that but that really would be telling....

Fidel2323 - 9 years ago

really interesting^^
i wonder what happens in #2, if you write a #2

deleteduser201 - 10 years ago

great i hope you continue

Imrhys - 10 years ago

Interesting, though I wish you had at least hinted at what is to come :3 I only hope he discovers an odd little secret from this digestive process, I have been corrupted by non fatal stories recently.

Paladins and Demons

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Gentle_Grounds

Tags: Fatal Christian Town Paladins Conservative Republican Demonic Secular Robber

A young conservative, Christian male discovers there's more outside of his world when an unfortunate fate takes his cousin's life.  

Crash Chapter 2
Present day...
        
Etrius was awoken by a rythmic movement around him. After a couple of seconds Etrius realized where he was "damn it Adrialica" he says and he hears her snicker "Awake at last I hear" she says laughing slightly to herself. "An alarm clock would be much better than you eating me every morning!" Etrius yells at her "your no fun" Adrialica says with a slight pout right before she lets him out "I swear....i need and alarm

Chapter 2

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: etrius

Tags: Crash Arc blazer xalien free running parkour

the second chapter of crash. please feel free to leave comments constructive criticism is always welcomed 

etrius - 10 years ago

The reason behind the lack of character development is because I'm doing it in a slow progress. Actual personalities and feelings will be brought in later the first 5 to six chapters involve introducing characters and laying down the setting from which point i will expand on character personalities physical features and so on.

codyage - 10 years ago

Once again another entertaining chapter. The punctuation has improved greatly, and also with the detail. What I can suggest though is that you show off some more of the character personalities.

Even though Blake did come around the end his entrance and exit where short. You could have maybe added another paragraph or two telling about the inside of his sword shop where Etrius had gone into, and perhaps the other selection of swords, along with a small bit more of Blakes personality and description. Because when I see Blake all I see is a normal looking guy who might joke around alot or he is kind of greedy, with no interesting physical features that makes him unique.

But in the end the story is still good. Also don't be afraid to make your stories almost two miles long if you have to, since your story isn't completely focused on the main aspect known as vore that some people specifically read stories for, you don't need to make your stories so short. You can have a LONG story with little to no vore in it, and people will still read it.

Puppy Love
By Jag
Contains: Silly story, shrinking, M/M vore
Jag (c) myself
Nik and Punk (c) their owners
"Good evening and welcome to another edition of Happy Time Fun Story Hour! I'm your narrator and tonight's story shall be from The Book of Fuzzy Loving. It's a touching story of two fuzzy aliens that come to Earth in order to marry. Once they arrive they find that most people shun the love that they have for one another while not truly understanding it themselves. The whole story ends with a

Puppy Love

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Jag

Tags: writing

Very silly and random story. Two puppies meeting and falling in love and then taking care of the villain that is Jag! :3

Contains: Silliness! Quick random silly-sex description, shrinking and eating  

Nezumi - 10 years ago

I bet the cameraman airs this later..... or shares it with his buddies.

*begs you to do a follow-up story*

Nor's first human

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Ka-Atis

Tags: Human Hard Vore M/M Blood Humanoid Rugg

Original title:
The Dark Wine of Cruelty

I got particularly happy with how this private roleplay with Ouroborous turned out, so I decided to post the completed story in the gallery.

Nor, a young rügg meets a Finn, a human while hunting in the woods..

Warning: Contains pretty much gory and violent hardvore


(c) Ouroborous and Ka-Atis 

Ka-Atis - 10 years ago

It was great fun. Not only the vore part, but also the character interaction and dialogues before that.

Ka-Atis - 10 years ago

:))

Yes, I know hardvore is not your thing. ;)

ouroborous - 10 years ago

The honor leaves me speechless. Thanks, Ka-Atis, for your continued excellence as an RP partner.

Bannor - 10 years ago

I had been following this as it was written/updated and enjoyed the writing from both of you, although it really isn't what I'm in to. But, familiarity and respect for both your earlier works made me curious, so I stuck with it. Um.. I enjoyed the writing! hehe

BITTER'S WRITING METHODS, EPISODE 6: PUBLICATION
 
by Bitter
 
 
Greetings, dear readers, and welcome to the sixth and final episode of Bitter's Writing Methods. Your story is now well and truly complete (except for a few bits and bobs, but we'll get to that in a moment) and you're (almost) ready to put it on public display. However, presentation can be a perilous step: there are ways to make your story look worse than it actually is. Imagine having spent all this time and effor

Episode 6: Publication

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Bitter

Tags: writing

It's time to let everyone see your story! 

Indighost - 8 years ago

Well done, Bitter! I really appreciate all the effort you put into this series. And it's good to know that shameless plugs are OK at Eka's :)!

Jacquelope - 10 years ago

Well done. Especially the part about participating in the community and giving others comments and such. Reciprocation is key to one getting exposure for their works here.

I can certainly attest to the fact that this advice works. It's super important that artists participate in the community and mingle with other artists. Don't be afraid to do a little social networking.

Oh and you wouldn't believe how many times I almost plugged my story in someone else's gallery, only to delete the text because I felt uneasy about it. Thank goodness I followed my gut feeling!

New Life


Disclaimer: I always write these disclaimers when I'm about done with the story… I don't know why… Anywho, the usual stuff applies, just as it always has. Must be 18 or older, contains vore and sex. All rights reserved. Yada yada yada.


Zack swallowed hard at the prospect. “We're going to what…? Exactly…?”


Rena smiled and held up an unconscious Gatomon and a struggling Biyomon, one in each hand. “We are going to eat these two.&rdq

New Life

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Razure

Tags: Oral Vore Pokemon Renamon Soft Vore Digimon Gatomon biyomon Mewtwo

Renamon Chronicles Part 12:

How do two Renamon in love celebrate being together? In the best way they know how. 

Razure - 10 years ago

Wow, this is quite a comment. I feel the need to thank you for taking the time to write something so lengthy.

I’m very happy that you and your mate (who sounds amazing by the way) are able to pull joy out of what I’ve written. I will do my best to not disappoint in future chapters.

Mordal - 10 years ago

Aww, that's amazing! It's wonderfull that Zack and rena are going to have a baby...I have to tell you man, I can;t thank you enough for writing these stories. They always seem to brighten my day. My mate enjoys being a renamon herself, and a very voracious one at that xD We both love reading these stories because it remninds us of our love and affection for each other. It seems like my mate is exactly like Rena....She's sexy, seductive, voracious, highly protective over me, and fun to be with. I also want to say how happy I am that you brought Zack back. Without him, the story would've been missing something. Also, it's a big surprise that Mewtwo was brought back. The biggest surprise though is the fact that Zack and Rena are now going to be parents 0_0

Razure - 10 years ago

Better late than never, right?
And I'm happy you like what's been done so far.

Razure - 10 years ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it :3

Hoodoo - 10 years ago

I wish I had run into your stories a bit earlier than a year or so after you started writing them, it's an enjoyable series. Also you included Biyomon, in however minor of a role. +Props

BITTER'S WRITING METHODS, EPISODE 5: PROOFREADING
 
by Bitter
 
 
Greetings, dear reader, and welcome to the penultimate episode of Bitter's Writing Methods. In the episode prior, you took a gigantic step: after all the time spent in preliminary steps, you finally transformed your plans into action and wrote your story. I'm going to guess you're experiencing a heady mix of exhaustion and excitement: all that work has paid off, and your story is finished! Yes, well, about that...

Episode 5: Proofreading

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Bitter

Tags: writing

So you think your story is worth reading? Prove it. 

Bitter - 10 years ago

Ah, the pain of arbitrary word counts... one of the other things keeping me from the EPWG.

Rhewin - 10 years ago

Why yes, yes it is. I recently had a story that I felt was too long for the group, and the cutting definitely took away from my story. I just didn't have the heart to break this particular story into parts. Unfortunately I'm not sure if I made the right decision.

Bitter - 10 years ago

A story should be as long as it needs to be to accomplish its goals. If that requires 500 words or 500,000, so be it. Mismatching the actual and required length of a story is the error.

Now, if one of your goals is to create a story in a specific amount of words, then... I suppose you'd have to look for whole swaths of events that might be unnecessary. For instance, it might be possible to go from scene A to scene C, where they were previously connected by scene B, if you can make the important part of scene B fit within the confines of scenes A or C. Pull back, examine the chain of significant points in the story, and see which ones are really necessary.

Is this for the EPWG, perchance?

Rhewin - 10 years ago

Hmmm... So you'd say even if a story is 13,000 words, let it be unless there's an issue like you mentioned above?

Bitter - 10 years ago

In terms of writing errors related to length, I'd say a good 98% of errors are on the side of "too short" rather than "too long". But if you're really worried that what you've written is too long (thus either boring or tiresome), I would recommend the following:

1) Look for redundant statements. If you seem to be saying the same thing over and over (it might be separated by a span of several sentences), then consider rephrasing so you avoid the restatement.
2) Consider the level of detail you've employed. If you're describing things that you'd only pick up at 10x magnification, you're probably spending too much time on physical details. Find places where you're being overly specific and consider erasing a sentence here and there.
3) Look for spots where you've used too many words. For instance, there is a difference between saying something in a concise manner and saying something concisely. Question your phrasings and see if there's a way to jostle the same meaning into a smaller form.

Run and Hide



Run. It was everything Rodd could do at the moment. Paws of front going under him, paws of back going behind him. And again. And again. This repetitive movement was actually saving his life. Or maybe retarding the obvious? NO! It will save him! It has to!

Rodd looked behind him. He squirmed of terror. The gigantic Blue Neko was catching him up very fast!

A hide! Find a hide! Quickly! Up in trees? No bad idea; Nekos were good trees climber. Underground? He will never have

Run And Hide

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Krisexy

Tags: Micro Macro Soft Vore Male Predator F/M Giantess Sex Prey Neko Oral Invalid Tag

i hope nobody will be disapointed about this story :o its really short and yet um...well lets say a "very basic vore story" ^^"
so sorry for everyone who might not enjoy this one :o

please comment :D




F/M Giantess Macro Male Micro Oral Predator Prey Sex Sexy Soft Vore Neko 

Licko - 5 years ago

je suis Fan à 100%

Licko - 5 years ago

Moi j'adore !!! et d'ailleurs je prévois un premier récit pour me faire connaître. J'écris un peu dans le même style que toi.

Suikotsu_Wolffang - 10 years ago

I had an old one but it didn't work out so i started a new one from scratch rather than fix it.

Krisexy - 10 years ago

okay cool ;P

Suikotsu_Wolffang - 10 years ago

might be a little back story but not to in depth. Realy the main point of it is to intraduce one of my main charecters most dont know but he wont show up til near the end of the story.

Pussy-Wrapped


Many-Eyed Hydra


“You okay there?” Rich Borchers asked.


“Yeah,” Donald Wenk replied. He lifted his head back into the passenger seat. He'd left a small puddle of sick on the driveway. His stomach still felt greasy.


“Nerves?” Rich asked with a mischievous glint in his eyes.


“Yeah,” Donald replied. He wiped his mouth with a handkerchief. “Are you really sure this is a good idea?”


“We'll be f

Pussy-Wrapped

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: ManyEyedHydra

Tags: Unbirth F/M Fatal Unwilling Story Vaginal vore

Two college drug dealers have a business proposition for the mysterious Mr Koontz. Why does the old mobster insist they be naked for the meeting and who or what are the girls he brings with him? Features some vaginal vore of a sort. 

f4k3n4m3is1234 - 8 years ago

Like the Milk maid one, and breast crush (on erotica)?

ManyEyedHydra - 8 years ago

A succubus variant. I like to vary from the standard succubus template every so often (sometimes way from the standard template if its a hell-space story). Some of them have different specialties and talents.

ManyEyedHydra - 8 years ago

Koontz is one of my regular characters. He'll crop up again. I have an idea how to follow up Donald's story as well, although I don't know when I'll get to writing it up.

f4k3n4m3is1234 - 8 years ago

i know this story was posted 2 years ago, but i have to know, what IS Diona? She doesn't match up with your traditional Succubus.

MrQuarantine - 8 years ago

Absolutely magnificent if I had a hat I'd tip it 2 u that was a 5 star story u just wrote with likable characters with a little mystery thrown in luved the bj and at the end where she said I can find u anywhere my mind is blown by ur skill the only thing that could possibly make it any better is a sequel ........PLEASE make a follow up this is fabulous it must be done I'm curious about what the backstory for the demons and koontz are and I need 2know what happens 2 Donald if like he becomes their leader or somethin please do what u do best and write

Spring '09 vore Project: The End of Slavery

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: thelastgasp

Tags: Snake Naga Fatal snuff Bondage Constriction Watersports Gazelle master/slave

Annette is a slave to a powerful naga, who decides to enjoy her pet fully on her first year anniversary... 

thelastgasp - 10 years ago

thanks

arkher - 10 years ago

So lovely. :3

divinedragoondragon: *nuzzles warmly*
lohfrum: *Smiles and nuzzles your nose* Hey Nii-san.
divinedragoondragon: mmmmmmrrrrr, heya
lohfrum: How are you doing today Haku-san?
divinedragoondragon: doing OK...burned my right arm in a dream though, how you doing?
lohfrum: In a dream?
lohfrum: My nose hurts, been sneezing all morning....
divinedragoondragon: yeah...my dreams have sound, touch and taste, light and coldness, and pain..
lohfrum: I get those occasionally. Not all the time, but som

Haku-san Soft Dismemberment Rp (CV)

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: gr8fzy1

Tags: Soft Vore Cock Vore Penis Dismemberment Haku Twin-cocks

A soft Dismemberment RP between me and DivineDragon. Includes CV, my favorite kind of Vore, and magically induced dismemberment. No Pain, no blood, no gore, just a few hungry cocks and a pull apart wolf. 

ouroborous - 10 years ago

Vore in itself is symbolic; a physical representation of something more visceral underneath.

This peice, freed from the "rules" of blood and pain, then becomes more effective as symbolic act. PM me.

gr8fzy1 - 10 years ago

A much more thought provoking response than I thought I was going to get! lol

What made this vore so symbolic for you? I just don't like blood or pain!

ouroborous - 10 years ago

There's so much in vore that is entirely symbolic. Too often we take these symbolic acts and ruin them by imposing our experience of how this world appears to work.

It's nice to see folks daring enough to let the symbolic vore speak for itself rather than through an imposed reality that lessens it.

gr8fzy1 - 10 years ago

Yeah, I know what you mean. I wasn't setting out to make this a novel, or I would have typed in 3rd person. But what did you think of the dismemberment? About having smooth flesh underneath the 'bitten' areas?

ouroborous - 10 years ago

Nice! My own RP style tends to more narrative and less "I said *I did*" But, uh, yow!

Our ApartmentIf you like my work and/or have a request of your own then please comment or PM me.

I'd been living with Gel for the past three months, we'd just got out of high school and bought an apartment together. Gel and I had been friends for a very long time and closer than we were with anyone else, she was the only one I'd ever shared my secret with. I was born with something that I like to call Voric's syndrome. One of the side effects that this was that while I sleep my penis grows to

Our Apartment

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: falsename

Tags: Digestion M/F Cock Vore Willing unwilling predator

Two long friends have moved in together, one acts on their feelings with consequences.
Sexual Materials
Cock Vore 

masterlevan1 - 7 years ago

:( that's not true, he could get her out....uhh too many CV stories kill people I hate it..

shwarzwald - 8 years ago

Pretty good.

dragon32078 - 9 years ago

I love this story, and I can not wait to hear about Ash.

deleteduser201 - 10 years ago

seconded

dragon32078 - 10 years ago

A very well done story. I look forward to reading about Ash.

BITTER'S WRITING METHODS, EPISODE 4: CREATION
 
by Bitter
 
 
Greetings, dear readers, and welcome to a pivotal episode of Bitter's Writing Methods. This is the one you've been waiting for! This is the point where you do what you thought you were going to be doing four episodes ago! This, dear readers, is the point where you put keys to text editor and write!
 
... and unfortunately, this is also the point where I will probably be the least help to you. Despite being the a

Episode 4: Creation

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Bitter

Tags: writing

This is the fun part. 

Bitter - 8 years ago

Absolutely. Adjectives are spices for sentences; if you go without 'em, your writing just seems bland. It's possible to go overboard, but there's certainly nothing wrong with refreshing the reader's memory now and again.

Bitter - 8 years ago

Oh, it's absolutely appropriate during first-person narration or when the character's voice demands it. In both of those cases, however, it's the *character* speaking, and the use of spoken idioms is appropriate. I'm more calling out the use of verbal filler where it's there for no reason-- I've seen writers throw it in in ostensibly third-person omniscient narration, and it has no place there.

Indighost - 8 years ago

I also really appreciate how you noted that in erotic stories, it's important to slow down time in order to describe the erotic moments. I agree and would add that in an erotic story, it's also OK to re-describe a character's appearance during normal action (ie, 'she bent over, and her meaty bosoms swung forward', or 'he stood straight up, his hard cock bouncing at the sudden movement').

Indighost - 8 years ago

I like this a lot, Bitter! 1. Um, Ah, Er: Yes, most of this is unnecessary. However, I feel it's sometimes a good way to show that a nervous or low-self-esteem character is so, without making it obvious, i.e. "He felt very nervous". 2. I agree with your execration of all-caps, take that, John Irving! (God, I hate that guy.)

STORY 33 - part 2



Previously


“This place…” Vuni hesitated. She was almost afraid to ask. But if she was ever to get home, she needed to know. She looked into Bajen's brown eyes, anxious. “Where am I?”


“This?” He swept his arm round, and she nodded. “Oh, this is Okhlee. It's quite a small village, but-”


“No, I mean… I mean, more generally,” she pressed. “What… Well, what world is this?&rdquo

Story 33 - part 2

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: French_snack

Tags: Felarya Slug Girl Vuni

The continuation of Vuni's story.

Part 1 is here:
http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=175952

Part 3 is here:
http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=178131
 

French_snack - 10 years ago

A priori, non... Je me rattraperai avec d'autres histoires. ;)

Krisexy - 10 years ago

donc pas de vore non plus dans la 3e partie? :O

French_snack - 10 years ago

Merci! :D Ca me fait très plaisir!

Heh, pas de vore cette fois-ci, désolé... Il y aura du vore quand je repasserai à Milly! :p

Krisexy - 10 years ago

je taime que je taime que je taime!! :D xoxooxx

cest trop booon!! comment tu fais pour etre aussi captivant! :OO!! chacune des tes histoires est unique^^

seulement que...XD eh bien..ou est le vore!? :O (jten veux pas cest normal ;P)

Slip and SlideIf you like my work and/or have request of your own then please comment or PM me.

I smiled as I woke up, the room around me was blurred. I could hear the draining of cars zooming past my outside window. I rubbed my eyes and picked myself up, looking outside the window above my bed I saw very light drops over the glass. Outside was grey, light mist of rain was sprinkling over the Earth. I climbed out of bed, opening the cupboard I pulled on a singlet and my favorite pair of jeans.

Slip and Slide- Seventh (Request)

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: falsename

Tags: F/M Sex Unwilling Anal Vore wet Seventh

Two friends discover the passion that they'd hid for a long time, and then learn of some of the dangers.
Sexual Materials
Anal Vore 

deleteduser201 - 10 years ago

well planned at that

falsename - 10 years ago

A fictional disorder made for more convenient story telling.

DT5459 - 10 years ago

Great story.
What is "Voric's syndrome" ?

The Real Walrus - 10 years ago

I am starting to like stories more than pictures now...

Show and Share
By Jag
Contains: M/M oral vore
Jag (c) myself
Aqua (c) his player
"Aaaaquaaaa....." whispered Jag a mere inch from the sleeping dragon's face. "You promised to show me something cool today..."
The large blue and black dragon groaned and rolled over onto his other side, moving his face away from the much smaller black jaguar. Jag perked his ears as he was ignored, making him mewl softly and leap onto Aqua's side. Jag stayed still for a few seconds as he listened to the dragon's hea

Show and Share

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Jag

Tags: Oral Vore M/M

Jag had gotten a promise earlier from Aqua to get shown something cool and interesting. Deciding to bother Aqua during his naptime Jag does his best to wake the dragon. While most of his attempts fail, his brilliant ‘tease Aqua with Skittles’ attempt pays off. Jag then gets up close and personal with the dragon’s insides.

Contains m/m vore 

Nezumi - 10 years ago

Mmmm..... this story is awesome. Write more stuff with Aqua in it!^^

BITTER'S WRITING METHODS, EPISODE 3: OUTLINING
 
by Bitter
 
 
Greetings, dear readers, and welcome back to Bitter's Writing Methods. By now, you know everything there is to know about your fictional world-- or, at least, all the really important information. You are now faced with the daunting task of figuring out the best way to get all that information into your reader's head. This preliminary, structural phase is what I call "outlining". In the same way that a visu

Episode 3: Outlining

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: Bitter

Tags: writing

It's time to decide what you're going to say. 

Indighost - 8 years ago

Interesting what you said about careless writing. I actually find that to be what I like most about reading a new author: I get his or her view of the world, sense of humor, even political leanings in the fictional world they create. It's an unusua way of learning about someone.

Imrhys - 10 years ago

Well this is still an awesome piece of advice. Thanks for putting forth the time and effort.

Bitter - 10 years ago

Oh, absolutely. This whole series is simply a recounting of my typical methods. In fact, my outlines are usually uselessly broad (probably only the first level of bullet-point shown here), just because I know what they mean and I have all the sub-points in my head. This article series is about helping people who want to improve their writing but might not know exactly how; to that end, I went over my process with a fine-toothed comb and documented absolutely everything I do from start to finish. As people gain experience, they'll probably move away from these methods (if they choose to adopt them, that is!). That's fine! There isn't a One True Path.

Imrhys - 10 years ago

Hmmm...

Just to bring it up, there are several ways to get to the goal of pre-writing, correct? Some of us do better with outlines made intentionally; others brainstorm it out and hammer away until they are comfortable; and the ultimate "free for all'ers": those that just pound on the keys and somehow end up with good works with minimal "on paper" brainstorming/prewriting.

Just curious about an opinion on this... though a blog might not be the best place to ask this >_>

Jacquelope - 10 years ago

Much in the same way that 1+1=2 would be a cudgel. :)

The add in the paper said “men needed for vore girl party. Tel: xxx…”

It was a while since I had some exciting going out, and this one was looking unusual and exciting. I called.


“Hi, my name is Dan, I am calling about the add, it is still relevant?”

“Sure, I am Nancy, are you into the vore busyness?”

The question was weird, but it only triggered more my excitement “not really, but I'm adventurous and I am willing to try new stuff”

Girl Vore Party - men wanted

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: DT5459

Tags: Love Digestion Giantess

Dan sees this add in the paper inviting men to a girl vore party. He decides to go. 

huitcinquante - 9 years ago

Great story. There's everything i love in it

DT5459 - 10 years ago

Right. thanks a lot for enjoying and writing me about it. :)

Nancy was after all a pred in her nature so she could not resist it and definitely could not imagine Dan will fall in the mouth of someone else.

Krisexy - 10 years ago

oooh amazing story^^!!

just as i like them! :D

still, one little thing..XD i think that nancy agreed to easily about eating him. It was like..."eat me" "okay" XD strange but the story was very well done ;)

The Principal's Office- Sixth (Request)Gel & AshIf you like my work and/or have request of your own then please comment or PM me.


This was kind of strange, Ash was a little old to be called into the principal's office. Ash was eighteen, very well built and had short brown hair with a purple streak through it. Jas was Ash's mum, who wasn't much older than Ash herself, she also was well built with longer blonde hair. They were called into Ash's school after hours by the headmistress. It wa

The Principal's Office- Sixth (Request)

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: falsename

Tags: Human Unbirth Sex Unwilling Story Ash Masturbation gel Non-Consensual Implied Digestion ff/f

A Mother and Daughter are called into school after hours for a 'private' interview with the principal.
Sexual Materials.
Unbirth
Unwilling 

Throat_Wolf - 9 years ago

Nice little unbirth story, though it might have been nice if you'd explained what happened to the victims afterward. I usually favor absorption into body parts...

Tai223236 - 10 years ago

Hi. Good to see you finally got yourself an author's profile. :))

No Fun- Fourth (Request)A story based upon two fictional Nintendo characters.If you like my work and/or have request of your own then please comment or PM me.


The clouds in the sky were dark and menacing, the rain sprinkled down on the ground and made vision limited, as though there was a fog covering the entire area. Lilina was sitting under a tree not far from her enormous castle of a home. She was scribbling on a piece of paper, nothing special only the basic business that came with her j

No Fun- Fourth (Request)

Uploaded: 10 years ago

Owner: falsename

Tags: Oral Vore Nintendo F/F request Unwilling Fourth

A Short story based upon two fictional characters in a Nintendo game (one of which I've never played so please excuse any inaccuracies)
Unwilling
Oral Vore 

falsename - 10 years ago

Meh, this one was very rushed and not really my thing.....never heard of the game or the characters anyway :P

deleteduser201 - 10 years ago

great little story sorry that I have to be the first to comment.