Slimshod - 2 days ago

My thoughts exactly

ryanshowseason3 - 2 months ago

They're probably served as some type of menu item. Especially if they are that mentally broken. Which kind of suggests our main heroine might not make it to college, heh.

JackNoName - 2 months ago

Thanks, it was a lot of fun to write for sure.
What do you think happens to them?

ryanshowseason3 - 2 months ago

I wonder what happens to "broken" shakers in the end once they are useless. That's the one loose end I'd have liked to see resolved. Otherwise fantastic job.

anonymousexperiment - 2 months ago

Just a matter of taste

JackNoName - 13 days ago

The 4th {final) chapter is still coming ^^

Konkak - 13 days ago

Did you forsake this project or you're still working on it? :P

Konkak - 2 months ago

I agree with you JackNoName. I prefer digestion much more, especially unwilling, but willing stuff is okay too imo - it makes vore stuff more about domination, which is really appealing. And it's even more appealing in the incestious type of this stuff, when there's some kind of "betreyal stuff" (I don't know how to call this) when predator is actually a really close person to the prey, but it's going to eat and digest its prey anyway. It's also about rejecting everything and throwing someone's life away which also makes this kind of stuff more interesting. Both prey and predator must pay the highest price for the game they are playing.

Vore without digestion doesn't have the domination feature and doesn't show the ultimate cost of this kind of "fun". It's kinda boring imo - it ends the same way it has began, everybody's alive, everybody's happy and nothing really changes. And I think that I'm not the only one who thinks that "bad endings" are usually more interesting than happy ones :)

As I said, that's just my opinion, but you may consider making alternative ending to satisfy all the people :)

TongueCuddlingLouse - 2 months ago

Great job man! :D

F1reDem0n - 2 months ago

I am well aware of what vore is to some. ;)
I like both types honestly. Both the kind when the prey is gone for good, and when there is bond between prey and pred and the prey survives(somehow). Still being able to love or be with the pred.

I think for me it's more because these two have depth, more then just another vore smut story. Plus you've established things that make me as the reader think would cause her not to kill off her son.

And depending on the writing I can definitely become invested in the story and characters. Notabot did this really well with their stories and thus I ended up rooting for some of the characters they wrote about.

Another idea if it's okay. Maybe her eating Billy but then vomiting him up after the camshow would end up convincing some of her viewer's to become willing meals. Proof of concept if you will. Food for thought. xD


And you are most welcome. A good writer can make a reader invested.

kain009 - 1 month ago

love this story! cant wait to read more of it if there is going to be a next chapter. :)

JackNoName - 2 months ago

There are other motives playing here ;) Its easy to make the wrong decisions when your perspective is skewed.

JackNoName - 2 months ago

Yeah I loved how it turned out myself too :) details like those make the world feel a lot more alive. The world is bigger than just the story we are following.

JackNoName - 2 months ago

Thanks for breaking it down. The question of why Sandra was there in the first place is a very good one ;) and I will leave it at that.

What I do want to talk about is the reason why things with Aly didn't work out as expected. Life is not made up of numbers, and people arn't made of rules. There is no exact rule book how to deal with people and definitely not Voresses. You just can't truly predict how something goes. This is what I wanted to show with Aly's scene.

This moment was important for Jake's future developments, which would have gone in a different direction if his approach would have worked...

Hope that answers a few of your questions.

SpokleArt - 2 months ago

Great addition to the series! Love the vivid details and the intimidation at play. One of the hottest things that caught me was that little bit where you let the reader fill in the scene. The bit where Aly Starr belched up the cat ears, and we have our own sexy foreboding ideas of the girl that was so sure she would be save getting devoured.

Love it, love everything about it. Keep up the great work!

cruddneck - 3 months ago

Excited for next one! Soon?

JackNoName - 3 months ago

I am so sorry. At this point I can't make any promises, but maybe I can put some work in this weekend and finally finish something. Knowing that people are waiting is often a motivator, so thanks :)

SpokleArt - 3 months ago

I eagerly await your next work, checking back every 3 days or so.

JackNoName - 5 months ago

You sure do keep me sharp ^^

JackNoName - 5 months ago

I see a lot of your concerns are with things you don't know (yet). ;) There were indeed some points that weren't so strong as I would have liked, mainly how Daphne feels about Jake, but it was getting too cluttered if I added in more, so I pushed it towards the second part. Basically up till now, we follow how Daphne sees Jake get more and more isolated, but she doens't exactly know why because she is always kept out of the loop by him. In the mean time we see Jake change through his girlfriends eyes. He is getting agitated more often, he talks less and he does things he would have never done before (like stop a gunman). The aftermath of the last scene is a conversation between the two and explains more, but again, I thought this would be the best spot to end it for this chapter. A lot more on Daphne later ^^

As of the story until the end. Most big plot points have been set out already. There are a few ways I can go about it, but it should all lead the same way. there is a lot more to come, this specific conflict is also not over yet.

The Daphne "fake-out" was more me playing with everyone that hadn't been reading well enough ;). Plus, there are some people who would rather see her in Sandra's gullet :O So it was a bit of fan-service from me ^^. Hehe, I knew I wouldn't be able to fool you with it ;)

cruddneck - 6 months ago

Really hope to see another chapter soon! Having jake and his thoughts back too. When do you think will be the next one?

Raesetsu - 7 months ago

Is there hope of an everlasting relationship between them? I'd really love to see what their kids would be like and how many people she has to eat to sustain her pregnancies :D

JackNoName - 7 months ago

A lot of people feel the same way as you ;)

Thanks for reading!

Raesetsu - 7 months ago

I actually hope they get together.

JackNoName - 7 months ago

Me too ;) Nowhere is safe, not even when you think you are. Especially not when you think you are. Thanks for the compliment ^^

anyany - 5 months ago

Cough Cough...Oh sorry don't mind me i'm just sitting here covered in dust ;-;

Bellyful - 1 year ago

Can't wait for the next part it's a great story

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Hard to say, within the next two months probably. I am working on many other projects. ATM writing a horror/vore story, which is quite different than i'm used to but interesting :)

anyany - 1 year ago

looking forward to it do you perhaps have an ETA? >.>

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Thanks for the compliment ^^ next chapter will be the final one and is going o be quite intense...

JackNoName - 2 months ago

Hehe ;)

Mettra - 2 months ago

What an "unlucky" guy lol

SpokleArt - 4 months ago

I can't promise anything, but its not out of the question. You paint a strong mental image with your stories!

JackNoName - 5 months ago

Thanks a bunch! Its always great to hear I can hit a few snares in people by my writing. Its a huge confidence boost and motivator.

I just checked your art on Deviant art and I have to say, I'm a big fan already. If my work inspires you, I'd love to see the result of that :D

SpokleArt - 5 months ago

Ok

OK

SO!

I've lurked here on Eka's off and on for a few years. I make fetish (giantess/size) art but only occassionally vore stuff so I never bothered making an account, only bookmarking a few people.

A little under a week ago I found your stuff while browsing thanks to the BigBig illustration hooking me in. My god, this voress AU concept (and particularly this chapter) made me realize I need to get off my ass, be a proper fan of artworks like I am elsewhere, and let the artists/writers know when I like their work.

This whole story is interesting, each Voress story has been a freaky pleasure, and this chapter in particular knocked me on my ass and filled my head with images. Good shit, hope you get as much out of it as I am getting out of it, and look to more good stuff in the future!

shortprey20 - 11 months ago

Lol well my research (grad school) kept me plenty busy. Sadly when (in the rare case) i had downtime i was lookong forward to playing skyrim for the 360 after lending it to a friend for a year, but she returned it in poor condition so in answer to your qiestion not really xD

And woot! I was hopong you were alive, hadnt heard from ya in a bit but happy to see ya live :p

JackNoName - 11 months ago

(4 months later with still no new chapter) Did you end up finding anything? xD

I am happy to say that the wait is not much loger. Chapter 4 will be a bit shorter but it will be ready in a week or 2 :) maybe sooner.

Potatomaximus - 7 months ago

great story. Although I wish the buttcrushing was portrayed in a smothering sense. As in emphasizing one being smothered between two soft, giant ass cheeks, rather than the crushing aspect if you know what i mean. Either way this is hot stuff.

JackNoName - 1 year ago

A bit :3 but for someone called "crushxtreame" it should fit right at home. ;)

crushxtreame - 1 year ago

Frikkin monster

JackNoName - 1 year ago

I took some of your feedback to heart and indeed realized the realism was kind of off. I changed some of the narrative around and think it's much better now.

Shannon simply made a mistake by thinking nothing had changed between the two, that she could still trust her friend. Obviously, grave mistake.

Thanks :)

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Because Rochel is such a cutie herself :p? I'm inclined to agree ^^

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Haha, thanks man. It was somewhat different to write about these hyper sexualized characters, had to really write the world around it. It was a lot of fun but a sequal is up to Scion, which he was interested in.

Things are only going to ramp up from here :)

D3adZ3d - 1 year ago

That was great! BBW/Futa/mini GTS/Vore/Domination hit almost all of my favorites all in one! Looking forward to more of this.

anyany - 1 year ago

plans for a part 2?

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Hooolllyyy shiit, you made my day!

SpaceHump - 1 year ago

Getting a slight "Anal Dildo fun" from Nitro_Titan vibe.
https://aryion.com/g4/view/245057

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Me too, my friend, me too. :)

Scion - 1 year ago

This is awesome!


Just love women who are just huge lol!

StyxxianArmada - 1 year ago

I love this its an amazing kind of story i dont see much of where the narrator of this story (jake in this case) is telling a sotry about his life in a world with vore. Pretty awesome, like the way its going, pretty sure his girlfirend is going to end up in someone's gut if not sandras propably some other voress if you introduce any others. But i reall love it so far and love that you are doing a school life story

Urielzael2 - 1 year ago

Well, TBH I have more problem with narrating story than imagining. I've got plenty idea during game (saddly potato pc bans me from screen cap (by making fps rate imposible to whistand)), I keep noting some of them during the game and than I write. I wish I won't keep forgetting stuff like gramar sometimes though.

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Its a stupid paper for saying ''I'm bad at language'' but I am also bad at cooking and I don't get a paper for having Cooklexia, right? It's just labels, but definitely doesn't mean you can't get better, improve and even surpass other people who aren't labeled like that. Same with a lot of other labels like ADHD, ect. People are different, are a certain way and can do different things. Why people give such things a name and treat it like a disease or even using it as an excuse not to improve, I'll never understand.

Whatever, just a little rant about what I think about labeling skills and character traits.

Urielzael2 - 1 year ago

Nice to hear, that I'm not only writer with dyslexia although most of my family was thinking that my dyslexia papers and problems were just excuses for being lazy.

Urielzael2 - 1 year ago

Nice to hear that I;m not only one with dyslexia trying to write something although most of my family thinks my dyslexia was just nickname for being lazy.

Larkspurdiblock - 1 year ago

Daphne's totally gonna become a pred, isn't she?

D3adZ3d - 1 year ago

Great second chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

JackNoName - 1 year ago

It's both a gift and a curse I often think. It can sometimes get a little long-winded and have to cut and rephrase a lot. I'd like to believe I just cater to people who'd like a more elaborate piece, there is enough short stories to go around.

ironman362 - 1 year ago

brilliant work, super detailed :)

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Glad you liked it, keep your eyes out for the next chapter :)

EvangelineSkypaw - 6 months ago

Please tell me his girlfriend doesn't get eaten. ;w;

JackNoName - 11 months ago

I am sorry for my late comment, but thank you for your kind words. What you say is exactly the kind of response I am looking for from my readers.

Let me know if you do decide to continue, I am still working on the 4th chapter and it won't be too much longer for its release. ^^

EvangelineSkypaw - 1 year ago

....I-I don't know how to feel...

I really don't. Like, I love the relationship he has with his girlfriend, and the way the larger girl's personality shifted into something resembling kindness for a bit was relieving...

It's just... I kinda feel the same as the main character about those two girls... They seemed kinda cute, and...

...I want to keep reading, but I don't know if I should. >w<

JackNoName - 1 year ago

Thanks :) send it by pm ;)

Neznamy - 1 year ago

This was good. When I'm done with work today I'll review the next one for you.

Slayer3345 - 1 year ago

Very interesting. I feel a little bad for the mom, but I don't blame the dude. Would be interesting to see him maybe try to confront her again. Maybe she's gotten a better hold of it, maybe she went off the deep end and is like all the other voresses. The world may never know. :P

JackNoName - 2 years ago

Thanks, I am actually writing another multiple chapter story about just that within the same world. Keep your eyes peeled ;)

Ruler101 - 2 years ago

I'm glad the main character got out of that toxic as fuck relationship, at the very least.

I always enjoy stories that actually explore the trauma such actions would inflict.

Slimshod - 5 months ago

Controversy just means you struck the right cords yo :)

JackNoName - 5 months ago

Haha, thanks ^^ No worries, I know how messed up it is. It got a lot of controversy over on another site, but I am still really happy how it turned out.

Slimshod - 5 months ago

Holy fuck nuts that got dark, and I mean that in a good way. Good lord you wrote that mother really well and had a good amount of the main character's thoughts/feelings to play with. That was one helluva ride dude. Nice.

mallowsal - 1 year ago

please please add a part 4 where the son becomes like the mother? maybe using his sister to do so?

Koseki - 2 years ago

I like the story. A dominant futa mother that kills people? Count me in

Slimshod - 5 months ago

This was a really fun and exciting story. Very nice.

VoreLover9012 - 2 years ago

Very nice, the image of this was very erotic and I loved it.

Lition - 2 years ago

Yess! Damn fine work. I love casualness spread out into these life elements, such as making a hotdog like this. Great creativity :)

Kooshmeister - 2 years ago

Ooh, I'd love to eat at that hot dog stand!

SenpaiVore - 2 years ago

Please make more like this. This is awesome ^-^

DoctorLucy - 5 months ago

#Best universe.

Potatomaximus - 7 months ago

It's kinda hard to buy into a world where society excepts mass cannibalism, but fuck it it's vore :P

skoullar - 7 months ago

Couldn't get the messenger to work.... Ok, just read , "A Voress World: An introduction". I see a few flaws....So the Voress needs more calories. so eat people! Well, gulping 2 or 3 300 lbs market hogs......current going price $300 per hog.....The farmer would be happy selling stock at this price all day long. No human lives lost.... What about a human fighting back to save their life, resulting in the Voress injured or killed? Self Defense? What it someone comes to the rescue of someone who's being eaten? And they kill or maim the voress, saving the victim using a (insert weapon of choice)? THen the idea of I may be dead, by I'm taking you with me? Vests, belts, anything that locks on and can't be torn off....Poison, dissolves in stomach acid? A compound that when mixed with stomach acid reacts violently....explodes.... real explosive with a detonator that trips when acid dissolves the safety..... Say someone is so angry that their whole family had been eaten.....booby traps himself......lets himself get eaten and goes kamikaze Or super duty antacid....gives the eatee more time....hidden knives, time to set a shaped charge and blowing a hole out to freedom... Given time, word would spread and Voresses would start getting more careful.....then new traps would get thought up. Some people given stress and grief, wouldn't care what laws the Government dreamed up. Playing Dungeons and Dragons, and other role playing games make folks very creative in getting an objectives done.

Gendor - 2 years ago

I wouldn't trust this person with simple math if that's the logic they're going for......

JackNoName - 2 years ago

That's good, but a wise man once said:
http://aryion.com/g4/data/257913-1774.jpg/Art%24avage-257913-explain.jpg

Junogray - 2 years ago

The lurkers await this conclusion
good stuff so far

UBSquirting96 - 2 years ago

LOVE IT!!! That last sentence made me squeal in delight! :)

UBSquirting96 - 2 years ago

LOVE IT!!! That last sentence made me squeal in delight! :)

Lition - 2 years ago

This is seriously amazing, and hits all the right kinks for me. I really hope you make more parts!

DoctorLucy - 1 year ago

Oh my ggod you need to finish this! It's amazing! What happens next???!? Come on, all this build up and you leave me hanging on for the next day?! Please just one moar!

bigboy1992 - 2 years ago

Will you continue this story?

JackNoName - 4 months ago

No worries at all ;) I will definitely give it a read once I got the time. I bet its going to be a lot of fun!

The more people I can inspire the better!

anonymousexperiment - 4 months ago

I recently posted a story from an edited roleplay log of me as Miss Melanie, but edited the names, so it's sort of an homage or fanfiction to this story, my all-time favorite. Give it a read if you're interested! https://aryion.com/g4/view/458519
I know you didn't feel quite comfortable with fan-authored sequels, so I hope the differing names are enough to make it non-canonical

JackNoName - 6 months ago

That actually sounds pretty cool! I always wanted to continue with Melanie and had some great ideas too. Let me know in PM what you are planning.

anonymousexperiment - 6 months ago

I know your focus is on the School Assignment saga right now, but I've always loved Miss Melanie the most. How would you feel about someone else writing a non-canon sequel?

anonymousexperiment - 6 months ago

I know your focus is on the school assignment saga right now, but I've always loved Miss Melanie the most, how would you feel about someone else writing a non-canon sequel to it?