Personad - 12 days ago

Well, I didn't think I would catch the attention of a pro such as yourself.
Thanks for the feedback. I was mainly going by my limited knowledge as well as reading the few other stories on here.

I will keep this in mind for when I write the sequel.

Anymore advice? If you want, please dm me.

ryanshowseason3 - 12 days ago

It's good but the logic around "This isn't an action against you" is highly flawed.

By that logic you could push someone over a cliff to "Get them far away from a threat" which could be yourself or your party. Of course the damage isn't immediate from the push so it doesn't count as an attack right? /sarcasm. A lot of players would walk away from the table. The threat of an action is never determined by the actor but the person being acted upon.

Sorry it just bugs me because I've had to educate people on why this is very wrong before. You can't frame your action in a different way to have it accepted by the pc or npc you're doing it to.

As an alternative could have used a silence spell to make the neko's yells from reaching a companion, or cast a sleep spell that would keep her from waking until damage was taken. Or it simply could have been a wisdom or stealth roll to go unnoticed.

Entity - 2 weeks ago

Yeah, it was a great read ^^

Personad - 2 weeks ago

Coming up with a way to really expose them for cheating was the most difficult part. (Not including writer's block).

So knowing that you liked it feels great.

Entity - 2 weeks ago

I loved the dice twist the most, it was unexpected but the pacing overall was excellent!

Personad - 3 weeks ago

Thank you.

Personad - 3 weeks ago

Ah, the real hero for us all.

theo12hero - 2 months ago

the girl in the pic - https://www.instagram.com/val.aroundtheworld/reels/?hl=en

theo12hero - 2 months ago

the girl in the pic - https://www.instagram.com/val.aroundtheworld/reels/?hl=en

HBAA - 3 months ago

Yet another masterpiece from this universe.

Personad - 2 weeks ago

I have a plan for her. ;)

HungerFan76 - 2 weeks ago

Was the daughter, Julie, ever going to get eaten? Or was the just the ending joke?

hdial002 - 7 months ago

What would you choose

Personad - 8 months ago

Glad I did

TootCore - 8 months ago

Glad you stuck with it.

Beigewall01 - 10 months ago

You know what would be a cool idea? A vore story based on prince lindworm but the titular Lindworm is actually a horny and voracious dragon girl while the princess protagonist is a pred who is also a prey but has to suppress her urges constantly, as it is a common fact that all princesses become massive preys around Lindworm girls.

drako117 - 10 months ago

Good thing r worth waiting for

Personad - 10 months ago

I know. But it sucks that I have over 30 prompts of different stories that I have outlined but cannot find the time to write!

I just... want to write lol.

Kenpachi300 - 10 months ago

Yo man just saying don't kill yourself writing at such an insane pace. We can wait lol

Personad - 10 months ago

If all goes to according to plan. Then yeah.
If not... may June be with me and my goal of uploading 12 stories in 1 month.

Personad - 10 months ago

Glad you enjoyed it!

SkeletonSteve - 10 months ago

I see the intent now, thank you!

Personad - 10 months ago

I tried to keep it as "opened ended" as possible.
From how casual to nonchalant everyone acts, reformation is definitely implied.

You also imagine that who gets vored just stays inside that body part for long periods of time before being let out.

SkeletonSteve - 10 months ago

This wording used in these stories seems to imply reformation is at play, is this true?

LemonBarb - 10 months ago

When that happens, I'll be motivated to write and release something special~

Personad - 1 year ago

That sounds like a good story to make.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Maybe there could be a myth that parallels the Egyptian myth about the journey of Ra, only in this version, the sun goddess is eaten by the sky goddess at night and has to travel through her to be reborn the next day, with the various creatures that inhabit the sky goddess’s stomach and womb either helping or hindering the sun goddess.

Personad - 1 year ago

You're onto something here.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

You know what’d be a fun idea? A story about a creation myth for a vore and kink based world that is about a pantheon of goddesses that are equally kinky and voracious. The cosmology could be kind of like Jainism wherein the universe is the body of a higher spiritual being, but in this case it’s an ultra horny goddess who holds the universe in her assets.

Personad - 1 year ago

Thanks. I will admit, I do have a soft spot for adults or aged predators willing to do EVERYTHING for the younger generation's growth.
Including being thick meals for them.

drako117 - 1 year ago

That 2

Personad - 1 year ago

That. Or wait until enough people ask for it.

drako117 - 1 year ago

Flip a coin all i can say

Personad - 1 year ago

I think so too.
Still debating if I should finish writing the alternative bad ending with Josephine getting digested.

drako117 - 1 year ago

Was worth the wait

Personad - 10 months ago

Up to my depression to decide that one.

jodiwest10 - 10 months ago

when will 8 be out

Personad - 10 months ago

Six is here: https://aryion.com/g4/view/896825

jodiwest10 - 10 months ago

will you upload 6 soon?

Personad - 1 year ago

6 is done. But I decided to finish the rest then post all parts.

Including a large file with everything from 1-8.

Personad - 1 year ago

Its up.

hdial002 - 1 year ago

When are you gonna make part 5

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

You know what I think would be a cool idea for a fnia vore story, a fnia 3 vore story where Springtrap aka Purple Girl is hunting down a night guard who’s a massive preyslut. Rather than poor ventilation being a danger, it would be the futa night guard’s massive boner diverting oxygen from her brain. This is for good reason, as due to the unique properties of remnant and ghost magic, springtrap, despite being a corpse in an advanced animatronic seems more fleshy than expected, with giant tits, a massive ass, bulging belly, and a giant cock and balls. In short, the perfect pred body. Thus, it falls to the spirits of Purple Girls victims (who are all of age in this version) to keep her safe from Springtraps horny hunting.

hdial002 - 1 year ago

When are you gonna make part 5

drako117 - 1 year ago

Worth the wait

LostOne - 1 year ago

Are you okay over there? Been a few days of quiet so just feel the need to ask. (If this is just writer's block, hope it passes peacefully. Its worth waiting on you, you make good stuff.)

drako117 - 1 year ago

We are only a three qnd so far so good

Personad - 1 year ago

Hopefully the streak continues.

TootCore - 1 year ago

These keep on being so fun ! I definitely wanna read them all.

Personad - 1 year ago

Damn. She has a lot of daughters then.
Interesting.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

I’m thinking it’s a mixture of feeling sorry for voring people who want to be eaten and general bashfulness about sex, even though it’s obvious she’s a total pervert. I was also thinking each of her daughters could specialize in a different type of vore, one for unbirth, one for oral, one for anal, two for breast vore (cleavage and nipple respectively), and one for cock vore (she would be a futa). The mother could perform all of the previously mentioned types of vore, and her daughters would compel her to do their favorite type of vore. Naturally, this leads to a lot of arguing between the daughters which the mother would try to stop.

Personad - 1 year ago

While I do love a predatory milf, this story calls for them to be prey.

Also can you tell me more about that idea. Cause I imagine the reason why the milf is reluctant is because of weight gain from eating people. Or because she feels sorry for devouring prey that want to be devoured.
So her daughters unbirth themselves into their mother to help convince her that there is nothing wrong with her doing this.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Gotta say, always a fan of milfs in vore- though I’m typically more into them as preds. By the way, any thoughts the idea of a milf who’s a reluctant pred unbirth her far more eager pred daughters who cause her to vore more and more people?

Personad - 1 year ago

Knowing your appetite, you definitely would.

Huhnkillme129 - 1 year ago

Awesome story

drako117 - 1 year ago

These sounds like its going to be good

Rgt - 1 year ago

Another excelent story!!

Personad - 1 year ago

Send the dm.

scar - 1 year ago

Well I have a few ideas

Personad - 1 year ago

More will be coming soon. And thanks!
If you got any ideas or just want to chat, you can just dm me.

scar - 1 year ago

Love the stories! Can't wait to see you do more! Also my favourite is the teacher vore!

Personad - 1 year ago

I got some ideas. Plus other suggestions.
Maybe soon I will be able to write them down.

Personad - 1 year ago

No idea.
Just happy to see them again.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

I mean, considering Wolfette was the one that was knocked up in the comic, it’s reasonable to assume red’s the one who can grow a dick. Hmm and now I kinda wanna see how red and wolfette’s other two kids were conceived. Especially if it involves cock vore. Any theories on what lead to the circumstances in that flash forward comic?

Personad - 1 year ago

Agreed.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

I concur. Though, I wish ndnode would publish to EKA’s more. Have you read that flash forward red and Wolfette comic he posted a while back? I really want to know the context to that- especially considering Red and Wolfette had kids in it. Did one of them grow a cock or something?

Personad - 1 year ago

Absolutely love it.
One of my first artists that got me attracted to vore.

Plus love the whole dynamic of Red being able to stay within Wolfette's belly forever.

Would love to see more of them.

Personad - 1 year ago

That would be interesting.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Depends on whether this is normal or not I guess. Though, imagine if Vanessa realizes that the day shift workers will find Freddy with a huge belly, so she decides to help smuggle the protagonist out by fucking Freddy in her fat milf-y ass so she can discretely cock vore the protagonist and hide her in her balls.

Personad - 1 year ago

Can't wait to see how well the morning staff will take finding glamrock freddy with such a huge belly.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Personally, I like the idea of a genderbent Milf version of Glamrock Freddy unbirthing a teenage girl protagonist to keep her same from the other animatronics and Vanny.

Personad - 1 year ago

That is a good idea. One that is very tempting.

I actually had two ideas for a FNAF security breach story.

The first one plays into the theory of Vanessa and Vanny being two different people. Vanessa trying to save a couple of kids from being eaten and killed by the animatronics. Again all stacked, voracious, and milfed. With her unbirthing them.

The other was the animatronics voring teens who thought they could sneak and mess around with the pizzaplex.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Here’s hoping we can see how Red and Wolfette’s daughters were conceived- especially if the act involves them boning. Also, hopefully Red makes it out of Wolfette’s gut relatively unscathed.

Personad - 1 year ago

Same here

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Hey Personad, did you see the Red and Wolfette comics Ndnode posted to EKA’s a few hours ago. Super happy to see him posting again.

scar - 1 year ago

Also glade ya back, its good for the mind to take breaks.

scar - 1 year ago

This is so good! I can't wait for the next part! That's if there's a next part

Personad - 1 year ago

You're right about a follow up.

rugli - 1 year ago

I know this was commission but I cannot help but feel that this story could do with follow up where Mark finds out how its like to be Blu Slimegirl meal.

Personad - 1 year ago

1. I would be interested in seeing/ reading that trope.
2. Having certain animatronics specialize in different types of vore is one that I will hopefully write one day.

Beigewall01 - 1 year ago

Personally, I’m fond of having the animatronics- who obviously have busty figures- be possessed by the ghosts of extremely horny women and use weird ghost powers to do stuff the goes against their mechanical bodies, like growing dicks or lactating. Also, I’ve noticed that certain animatronics tend to specialize in certain types of vore. Any thoughts on that particular trope?

Personad - 1 year ago

Probably the common, give the animatronics busty figures and then digest others.

But I wanted it more to casual or at least fun spin like what I did and have the security guard be part of the animatronics swallowing antics.

Personad - 1 year ago

Thanks!
If you like this. Wait until the sequel.

dinoman514 - 1 year ago

Oh I totally understand my friend, I'm not to happy with it either. Anyways, I've finished it now and while it's not something I usually like you did it very well, I really loved Winter showing up at the end, she could really use more love from the vore community. Great work all around

Personad - 1 year ago

Glad you think so. I was just airing out my frustrations with what became of the show.

dinoman514 - 1 year ago

Ok, I haven't finished reading this yet but that opening has me rolling, too damn funny

Personad - 2 years ago

Yes. But I am a bit undecided on how they would react. Either very mad, or casual and expecting this.

SKYForest02 - 11 months ago

When are you posting the sequel?

Personad - 1 year ago

I have the next part already planned. Just needs to write it out.

SKYForest02 - 1 year ago

Great story. I look forward to continuing)

drako117 - 2 years ago

Yea i can see that your stories just keep raising the bar it seems

Personad - 2 years ago

Yes.
Since I wanted to be consistent with the whole 5000ish word scheme, I broke Ch.2 into 2 parts. I have part 2 drafted, just need to write it out.

And as this ending alludes, there will be a part 3.

drako117 - 1 year ago

Love Paulinas stories

mazdab - 1 year ago

Nicee, can’t wait for whatever you’ll come up with

Personad - 1 year ago

I love when its the prey forcing their way into the pred to take over their mind after getting digested or absorbed.
I think I can come up with a story for it.

mazdab - 1 year ago

I love mind merger, it needs more love on this site

drako117 - 2 years ago

Was interesting how they mentally fused was a nice tuch

Skullhammer123 - 2 years ago

Awesome, can't wait!

Personad - 2 years ago

You may get your wish.

Personad - 2 years ago

Ideas always help.

bronzelara - 2 years ago

Would look forward to that very much and happy to help in any way I could

Personad - 2 years ago

I definitely want to write more of this type of story and world. May do one about off-grounds for a teacher, faculty member, or random thicc milf that ends in them being digested for the younger generation.

Personad - 2 years ago

Hopefully it will come soon.

JMTFS - 2 years ago

I'd be happy to read a sequel to this.

Beigewall01 - 2 years ago

Ooh, you know what would be a hot scenario? The freddles materializing in the protagonist’s bed to tease her with their huge tits and asses. Unfortunately, the protag gets greedy and decides to cock vore two of them. Freddy then appears in the bed to punish the protagonist by unbirthing her and the freddles and having foxy fuck Bonnie and Chica into her womb as cumified slime girls who proceed to tease the protagonist. All the while, Freddy is dirty talking to the protagonist, telling her how happy she’ll be as one of her daughters and to start calling her mommy. The dream ends when the protagonist finally floods Freddy’s womb with cum upon which she wakes up.

Personad - 2 years ago

This is technically your idea, so yeah they could be.

And if each specialized in different types, may break them down into different stories or do two dream sequences per each one.

Beigewall01 - 2 years ago

Maybe each of the animatronic could specialize in a different type of vore. Chica would be oral vore and would also drink prey that have been turned into milk or cum. Bonnie would focus on anal vore. Foxy would focus on cock vore with her frequently pumping the cum-ified form of her prey into another one of the animatronics. Freddy would specialize in unbirth with her Freddles being her “daughters” who look like short stack versions of herself- suffice it to say she has a huge mommy kink. Golden Freddy would do breast vore and also focus on smothering and breast feeding. Finally, Nightmare would do all types of vore and be a generalist. Also, I imagine, given that this is a dream, that the assets of the nightmare animatronics would be unrealistically large and exaggerated.

Personad - 10 months ago

Just need the time to write it.

hdial002 - 11 months ago

Are you gonna make a part 2

famergg - 2 years ago

Hi, I just recently read about zombie story and I really like it and wish there was a sequel.

JohnOfAllTrades - 2 years ago

I could maybe help review it and suggest stuff if you want. I'm not really a writer, but I've read probably every preg prey thing on here and I think I've picked up some general knowledge of what works in digestion for preg women. If you want help that is

Personad - 2 years ago

I can see what you mean, but it would be a first for me to go so detail into digestion.
I just hope I can write it and not make it sound awkward.

BatfinK16 - 1 year ago

Will this story be continued at any point? It's pretty cool.

drako117 - 2 years ago

B very sus

Puff6011 - 2 years ago

Vore Brown.
After voting go after Purple, if she goes with someone stay farther or just leave, but if she goes with 2 people then follow them. There are only 2 possible impregnators and we can take down one (assuming they will not be able to finish impregnating and help out before we can eat them) (Also I don't believe they know that we can 1v1 them yet).
If we can't follow Purple, try looking for either Blue or Green as they have the weirdest pathing and choices so far.
Also prioritize going for people who are in the direction of tasks that we have, meaning if we can follow either Purple into Med bay or Blue into Storage, we will follow Purple since we have a task there.

dpmage - 2 years ago

So if you don't mind "epic game store" "Among Us" base game is free this week, also (B) Vote Brown

Personad - 2 years ago

That's another for purple. After you, all voting ends.

algog8 - 3 years ago

Better take responsibility and balance it out with all the other colleges!

Personad - 3 years ago

I'm afraid of what the graduation rate for that college would be...

algog8 - 3 years ago

They should try this in a large college

elliotalien08 - 3 years ago

If it was me it would be reading and not paying attention XD

Personad - 3 years ago

https://aryion.com/g4/view/682013

Personad - 2 years ago

No you don't have to, just as long as you understand what is going on you should be fine.

BatfinK16 - 2 years ago

Do I have to play Among Us in order to enjoy this?

Personad - 3 years ago

Option A won, looks like we doing card swip first.

Personad - 3 years ago

Don't forget that Orange was also with Blue in Reactor.

Puff6011 - 3 years ago

Option A

Both Green and Blue seem sus at he moment due to them being do close to pink, with not enough vents in sight to travel far. Both seem equally as sus:
Blue: since there is a vent from upper engine that lead to reactor, and she was alone.
Green: Medbay is close enough to upper to run over, also Green seems to talk like someone with some experience. Doing scan, a visual task, alone at the very start is very suspicious

Greneral notes: After doing card and wiring, head back to admin and check cameras for a bit. Card swipe is a common task, meaning everybody has to do it, so if you see someone just run past, you can easily head to cafeteria to call a meeting (that is if we go by the game's task system, with long, short, common and visual tasks)

Personad - 3 years ago

Alright. You can expect another Voreception.

Rgt - 3 years ago

Just in general?

Personad - 3 years ago

Voreception is my second favorite tag, after unbirth so I do hope to do more with it.

But just a question, more like in this writing style or just in general?

Rgt - 3 years ago

Can you do more like this where there is one inside another inside another etc?

Personad - 3 years ago

Glad you enjoyed. I like this type of easy going writing as its meant to be fun and simple.

Personad - 3 years ago

That's the hope for an eventual sequel.

Apostolos - 3 years ago

Hmm it seems to end with room for a part two available

Personad - 3 years ago

Maybe.

Personad - 3 years ago

Thank you for that. I forgot her name.

RandomInjury - 3 years ago

If anyone was interested the girl in the Thumbnail was Anastasia Berthier.

Apostolos - 3 years ago

Dunno, maybe some cousins or a time skip till the next generation is there?

Personad - 3 years ago

Hopefully it will stay just a sequel unless someone gives me a reason to make a third in the series.

drako117 - 2 years ago

Paulina holiday vore series lol

Personad - 3 years ago

Well you are going to get an alternative endings soon. After that maybe a Christmas special before I start asking for ideas.

Torchwood4 - 3 years ago

Can we get more stories with Paulina? I like this one

Personad - 3 years ago

Hmmm...ever heard of a Christmas feast?

Firebird22 - 3 years ago

so... are you planning more stories with Paulina after the alternate endings? her last line sounds it'll go till she beats her mom

Personad - 3 years ago

We chat from time to time.

C107galaxytachyon - 3 years ago

Huh.

Could’ve sworn she’d fallen of the face of the earth as of late, but apparently I was wrong on that.

VioletNom - 1 year ago

*lets goooooo*

Personad - 1 year ago

*Writes Chapter 18 vigorously. *

VioletNom - 1 year ago

*waits patiently*

drako117 - 2 years ago

Cant wait for more

trapsaintgey - 3 years ago

Sounds good to me !

Personad - 2 years ago

Maybe.

Vaze - 2 years ago

I love this series and I love your stories, this series is very cute and I would like to ask would there be a part 4?

Vaze - 2 years ago

would there be a Part 4?

Personad - 3 years ago

I suppose we can leave it up to the reader to decide how.

Apostolos - 3 years ago

Hmm so pregnancy transfer?

Personad - 3 years ago

You have a point. This was probably my least sexual story back in the early days, touching it up would be nice.

Whatisaname - 3 years ago

In my opinion it would be a shame to leave it as a short early work when with some touch ups and reworking it could be something that really shines amongst the crowd.

The concept is really interesting and pretty unique or at least very unusual for an unbirth story. Plus it's pretty fun and lighthearted versus a lot of the grim dark that usually makes the headlines for the genre. The little girls' actions are cute and the lack of regression makes for a harmless almost adorable sequence of events.

Personad - 3 years ago

I may just do that. This was one of the earlier stories that could definitely use some new tweaks

Whatisaname - 3 years ago

This was pretty good, even if it was a little lacking in detail.

I totally wouldn't be against a redo that expands upon the concept. Maybe spend more time describing Elizabeth slowly realizing and adjusting to her life with Ellen and friend living inside her.

Personad - 3 years ago

Glad you think so.

Personad - 3 years ago

Maybe aftermath stories are good.

nervousvampire - 3 years ago

If possible I'd love to see a follow up chapter on how the centaur and naga's relationship goes from here. Are they more mother/daughter, girlfriends, more like sisters or just friends. But I don't mean to mush if you had no plans to continue this

Personad - 3 years ago

Thanks!

nervousvampire - 3 years ago

well you did a fantastic job

Personad - 3 years ago

Yeah. First time doing this type of emotional writing. But I enjoyed it.

Personad - 1 year ago

Of course she is.

HBAA - 1 year ago

Sam is a gangsta

drako117 - 3 years ago

Is there a chance for a part 2

WillingWombPrey - 3 years ago

You know, you can edit the story a bit and add that statement of her, saying it after her eyes closed, at the end if you want. Or put it anywhere, I don't mind if you use it.

Personad - 3 years ago

God I wish I came up with that. Nice.

LemonBarb - 1 year ago

What's worse in hindsight, was just before she could have rebirthed them. She ended up unbirthing even more people. So by the time the next blue moon is over. They could be essentially trapped for six years. Or if persistent with fame, far longer, to potentially a lifetime.

Personad - 1 year ago

Tomorrow

scar - 1 year ago

How soon how we talking here?

Personad - 1 year ago

Soon.

scar - 1 year ago

Man I wanna see more like these

Personad - 3 years ago

Thanks. Though to be fair, I'm sure their are others who do have non-scat anal vore.

Rgt - 3 years ago

Loved it!!! Finally some anal vore that doesn't have scat!

Firebird22 - 3 years ago

It was a good set of possible endings.
Fun read

Personad - 3 years ago

Thanks! Glad to know you thought those outcomes were better.

To answer your questions:

1) Sorry about that, more or less wanted to leave it as an implied fate for Paulina.

2) No Richard won’t digest her since her thinks that’s his wife.

Firebird22 - 3 years ago

Great job! I think i like the first two alternate endings better than the original.

I do have a couple comments:
1) I’m a little sad we don’t get to see the parent sex in the ending where mom eats the babysitter.
2) will the dad digest paulina? He is drunk, but thinks its his wife, and they’ve done this before.

Personad - 3 years ago

Cool :)
Hope to create more for you to enjoy.

Robotdocter - 3 years ago

i personally liked the first one the most, specifically cause, unlike the last one, the baby was left alone, i also just prefer female preds but i liked all of them :))

Personad - 3 years ago

Thanks!

sunbeam21 - 3 years ago

Definitely babysitter stories were one of the first I have read when I started into vore. Nice nostalgic work!

UnknownPerson9876 - 3 years ago

Hey it was worth the wait! I can’t say enough about how awesome it is!

Personad - 3 years ago

Thanks. It helped that you were so patient to wait.

UnknownPerson9876 - 3 years ago

I loved it! You did an incredible job! It reminds me of some of the first babysitter vore stories I read! Once again, you did absolutely fantastic!

SenpaiVore - 3 years ago

Woo.

Personad - 3 years ago

Second part will be coming soon.

SenpaiVore - 3 years ago

Was Just checking. Always excited for Vore Fest

Personad - 3 years ago

Yup.
This is the morning section after all.

SenpaiVore - 3 years ago

Any chance for a sequel

Personad - 3 years ago

Found it.

Personad - 3 years ago

I have part 2 written down somewhere

bmo13254 - 3 years ago

R u ever going to finish the zombie apacolypse story?

Personad - 3 years ago

Thank you for the kind words!

Hopefully I will continue and it will still be as good.

trapsaintgey - 3 years ago

this is a really great story, I can tell how much your writing has improved over the years. I would love to see where this goes as a sequel or even a running series. keep up the amazing work!

Deviantfan16 - 3 years ago

I'll get to it once I have a few proper ideas

Personad - 3 years ago

Sounds interesting. Just as long as you pm.

Deviantfan16 - 3 years ago

Might involve Cathy unbirthing a few more people or some involvement from her fans

Personad - 3 years ago

Ok.

Deviantfan16 - 3 years ago

That's fair, I'll try and come up with something. I'm a patient guy so I can wait

Personad - 4 years ago

I'm just glad that I don't make those same mistakes anymore. And thanks, your writing is amazing.

ryanshowseason3 - 4 years ago

"Mines"
"Full proof"

Yeah... but if you recognize it and have improved that's a good thing. All of my terrible first writing was on writing.com and has been thankfully lost to deletion. But I promise it was just as bad. Keep at it.

UnknownPerson9876 - 4 years ago

It's not that bad, it's actually pretty good!

Personad - 4 years ago

Thanks. But I do feel a little embarrassed with how badly this was written when I was younger.

UnknownPerson9876 - 4 years ago

Best babysitting job if you ask me!

rugli - 3 years ago

If we ever see follow up to this wonderful story then I would love to see one where Penny eats Tyler. :)

Personad - 4 years ago

(I know this is very late)
Thank you for your comment.

NonBinaryFuta - 4 years ago

Brilliant!

Personad - 4 years ago

Thanks for your kind words.

In all honesty, if this story gets a lot of favorites, I will try to make a story not only about the protagonist's parents vacation, and if that does ok, then I'll add another for the new couple.

But still, thanks for liking it.

UnknownPerson9876 - 4 years ago

Very well done! Maybe we'll see more of Penny and Tyler in the future?

Personad - 4 years ago

Glad you enjoyed it.

AndAnotherOne - 4 years ago

not usually one for Mario girls, but this was very nice

Restrogenic - 4 years ago

This is an awesome concept. Think you might do sequels/variations?

C107galaxytachyon - 4 years ago

Well, In that case, care to tell me what your kink/fandom preferences are then?

Personad - 4 years ago

Yeah, in order to try and get back into writing again.
These last few were my attempts.

C107galaxytachyon - 4 years ago

So you’re taking writing requests now?

Personad - 4 years ago

Just some requests for people.

Personad - 1 year ago

Hmm...
Hammerspace pred getting outsmarted...
I can think of a couple ideas.

Mrinfo - 1 year ago

No problem. And if you ever feel like continuing this series, I think that would be pretty cool, since that ending was pretty fun. Love seeing a well thought trap.

Personad - 1 year ago

Glad you enjoyed it.
And thank you for commenting on it.
Because boy oh howdy, the sequels and series I planned for this came rushing back to me.

Mrinfo - 1 year ago

I love this. Someone who manages to turn the tables against a Hammerspace predator who was a bit too self-confident in their powers is certainly a story I have been looking for quite a while.

Personad - 4 years ago

That's always a possibilty.
Sequels from others is always nice

Personad - 3 years ago

Ask and you shall recieve.

VioletNom - 3 years ago

Is this going to continue?

Personad - 4 years ago

Happy noises will soon intensify.

Persona59523 - 4 years ago

* happy noises*

Personad - 4 years ago

Thank you very much for liking it.