Mechdragon1k - 1 year ago

There might be a recording somewhere. People who might inspect Sarah disappearance and know she arrived at the reformers but did not come back out, raising the question is there a critical flaw in the reformers, enough study into that might reveal she was a drone. Adeline Might stilll be able to play the no contact before nom card but her fate was revealed.

dcvfgb1234 - 4 years ago

How would it be possible, though? Nobody knows Sarah was misplaced and nobody, but Adeline, knows that she was in that drone and tried to communicate. Even if it was found out that she'd been in a drone Adeline disposed of, then Adeline just would say she had no idea and that Sarah hadn't managed to establish contact before teh nom.

As much as I'd like for Sarah to be avenged, then I just don't see any way it'd be possible to do in a way which isn't basically a deus ex machina.

Throku - 4 years ago

Not sure about avenged, but prehaps revenge.

You see Sarah was so rich and filled Adeline up to the point that some of it spilled over and Adeline accidentically put on a few pounds, to the point that her dress felt uncomfortable in places.

Not used to manage bodyfat as a source of energy she had to rummage her memmory and her laptop for the digital copy of her old notes back from when she was studying.
She still kept them around, eventhough as she found out that it had been over seven months since last she had a look in the folder they were in.

It took her nearly an hour to freshen up her skills, but after that there was still enough left of the day, and she such a high maintenaince woman, that she didn't even need to go and work out to burn off the few pounds of padding Sarah had given her.
Meaning Adeline was free of that the same day, in just a few hours even, where as Sarah would have to wait over a week before she was set free from her Adeline prison and by that time Adeline had burned off every single calori she'd gotten from Sarah, even whet her predator self had stored, that and much more, otherwise sarah wouldn't have gotten all that company she had as she finally disembarked.

Throku - 4 years ago

Thanks! I've been mulling over reformation in my head for years now without getting anything down, and I never liked it safe and neither willy nilly from anywhere anytime. :)

And I guess this was mostly a stab at the concept, hence no outfleshed setings. I'm pretty sure I'll reuse it in otehr more fullfledged scenarios.

Mechdragon1k - 4 years ago

I kind of hope she gets avenged and the world finds out in the sequal?

TW - 4 years ago

Yes, it happens, far too frequently. The good news is that your own work continues to give you ideas.

Throku - 4 years ago

Well in this case the main problem was that I had this story as it is, so all the ideas I had sort of sprung from it, meaning all ideas sort of started at the same place and time instead of one after one another. And since I didn't sort that mess out in time I ran in to my old nemesis the slippery slope. I take it you've dueled that beast too. Before you know it the hero of the initial story who saved the freaking universe if getting shat out of one of the dist mites left on the pillow of some random no one cares girl who just happened to be mentioned in the story and not even by name.

TW - 4 years ago

Sequals are always a problem, or even having large chapters. Nothing ever seems to want to flow the same after the initial idea gets on the page.

Throku - 4 years ago

Heh, thanks!
I sort of ran into trouble after this. I've started half a dozen sequels to this one but finished none of them and now it's a bit of a mess :P

TW - 4 years ago

Cute short. Nice to see some writing from you again.

LavaTours - 9 years ago

I loved when Kim pooped out the team. I wish there could've been a shot of her seated on the toilet.

TheWatcher10 - 11 years ago

Very nice indeed

voreadmirer - 12 years ago

shoot, she could eat all of those football players and come out skinny? she must have a very powerful metabolism

Throku - 12 years ago

It seems to be requested... I actually don't like fanfic material, I was suprised to findmyself drawing this one in the first place. :P
I guess it was the "I can do anything!"-motto I wanted to put a spin to. It's still good though, so perhaps. ;)

voreadmirer - 12 years ago

oh one more thing are you ever going to do a remake of the kim possible vore someday? :)

rugli - 5 years ago

You could always commison someone to draw the comic but that might be expensive.

Throku - 12 years ago

:P Strange, I haven't really written a stand alone story of stuff I really like, this one I suppose is the closest. Though it was really meant to be a comic, but I learned that I just couldn't draw it. I had the whole script in my head for several years before I gave up and wrote it as a story instead.

"Lazy" and "Happy Tummy" and what not have all been weird ideas that have invaded my brain a boring afternoon or other.

conix32 - 12 years ago

Correction, I meant to put this comment on "Lazy" >.< I fail....

conix32 - 12 years ago

Man, this was one of the first stories I ever read involving vore on writing.com, how the years have past...

ThatGuy - 13 years ago

XD. Yeah, I love micro-vore, too - or is it macro-vore, these names always get me... In any case, tiny preds. Most people don't do it, but glad to see I'm not the only one. ;)

Throku - 2 years ago

Yepp, shame to have a prey fo to waste :P

Ultimax300 - 2 years ago

Damn that's an efficient digestive track, ingesting a whole human being but only having waste about the size of a golf ball.

Throku - 4 years ago

Yeah the way I prefer it, prey is food and shouldn't bother their predator ^^ And I perhaps wrongly assumed they were normal sized, but I guess that end lump could be 4 inches, but that's make them pretty tall to begin with. :P

htaed - 4 years ago

Gotta say, that's an astonishingly efficient digestive system. A full-size adult woman reduced to a perhaps a four inch turd.

TheFurryFeline - 11 years ago

Haha, true. =3

Throku - 17 years ago

;) yay! More Hap-haps for the people! Ehh... and possibly more people for the hap-haps, they tend to have a bit of an appetite :P

Frakass - 17 years ago

I had to post a comment for this story! Thank you, Throku, this one is wonderfull, and even if the geographic location is not totally right, as these events never take place on Earth, It's a really accurate sight of the situation on Elviana! You succeed to show a totally realistic vision of the Hap-Haps. I promise, I will do more Hap-Hap Art!

Throku - 18 years ago

:D well they are my favourite Frakass creation, I hope he draws more of them...which could mean I'd make another story, who knows?

Shyguy9 - 18 years ago

Very interesting. The Hap-Haps are amazingly clever! Great story as well, I enjoyed every bit of it. ^^

Throku - 18 years ago

Thanks ;) Yeah it sure does. I wondr if he'll do some more art? I haven't seen anything from him in a year or so.

Throku - 5 years ago

Well I'm in the process of trying to move across the country (back home), so that's what's keeping me, when that's done, I'm looking into rebooting the interactives onto CHYOA, an interactive site that looks quite promising and I've been in contact with the admin, so content wise there's no problems. Still quite the undertaking though and well I'll only be able to upload what I've done, the other contributors will have to re-upload their stuff if they feel like it.

As for the VRPG-stuff...been looking through the old threads here apparently the uploadlinks are not working anymore. Perhaps I should just upload the conversations.txt to the library? It's going to be akward reading as lines doesn't break and it's in code format and as such conversations and options are semi-randomly listed.

rugli - 5 years ago

Any way to access those by other ways?

Throku - 5 years ago

True enough ^^ A shame most of my writing is in strange formats, so I haven't been able to upload it here. I mean I wrote like 300 pages of conversations for Dumautef's VRPG for one and I think at least twice that for various interactive stories. Unfortunately writing.com has gone down the drain, so linking won't do much good since after the first four chapters of a story you run into their pay block wall. :/

rugli - 5 years ago

You,are welcome :) but I find this myself actually…often the best way to enjoy something properly if one's self has written something is leaving it for a long time. Also what I like about your gallery is even if you haven't done much or any writing since back then is that you have allowed this to stay online with easy access since we have seen it way to often when people feel they don't want contribute anything (stories or art) futher they tend to want delete everything they have done. So all that turn up when someone else

Throku - 5 years ago

Thanks :) Feels almost weird reading it now, like someone else did it. :P

Throku - 17 years ago

Unfortunatly I never finished this one because I couldn't compress the filesize anymore and the forum I was on at the time had a maximum avatar size of 15kB. Now it seems late to finish it, of course she was supposed to eat him like the ladies in my other avatars are eating or about to eat the guy in them.

DragonessLife - 17 years ago

She get mad with guy. I love that. Great job!

Throku - 17 years ago

Thank you! Luckily he isn't stuck for long, her stomach knows its business ^^

DragonessLife - 17 years ago

She looks beautiful. Poor guy stuch in her stomach. You did good job!

DragonessLife - 17 years ago

Guy will fall down her mouth or Maybe She will bite his. I love that.

Throku - 4 years ago

Bah now you make me feel bad that I never got around to making a large version of it... (this was the max size both in height and with and filesize that the forum allowed for at the time.)

HipHugger - 4 years ago

Oh, hi there HipHugger of the past! This is HipHugger of the future coming to let you know that I still love this pixel art ;) Stay groovy, girl.

DragonessLife - 17 years ago

Wow. She swallowing his. I like her belly. You are great work hard!

HipHugger - 17 years ago

*giggles* I still love it!

DragonessLife - 17 years ago

I love her mouth. Great job!

DragonessLife - 17 years ago

I love her mouth. Great job!