NamesAreIrrelevant - 1 year ago

Reading this now and I forgot how much I loved these stories

bellylov3rs - 4 years ago

Lovely story hope to see her get some more stories in the feature as Mii Gunner deserves more love.
My only critique would be to expand the vore scene another paragraph or two, give it and their interaction some more time to be shown so it's not just gulp and pass out instantly.

hentaiaiai - 5 years ago

Thank you!

SomeoneThatExists - 5 years ago

Nice!

hentaiaiai - 5 years ago

better yet,it was all spur of the moment and improvised. it was fun though

gtgod - 1 year ago

Great story!
Would like to see what they get up to

BatfinK16 - 4 years ago

This definitely needs a sequel.

BatfinK16 - 6 years ago

Agreed. Definitely continue. This was great.

Ozzymandias - 6 years ago

Holy shit that was great, please continue

Forstand - 6 years ago

Nice!

hentaiaiai - 6 years ago

i just wanted to see how far it would go lol

AndAnotherOne - 6 years ago

When a review turns into a chat so long that all it becomes in a mobile screen is an itty bitty sliver lol. I couldn't read any past you saying "meeeeep" xD

hentaiaiai - 6 years ago

hehehehehehehe

Kelly - 6 years ago

On mine neigther I dont even know what is happening anymore D: <3

hentaiaiai - 6 years ago

haha its squished against the side of my laptop screen now too lmao i love it

hentaiaiai - 8 years ago

i guess in a way

Stunlocked - 8 years ago

So tecnically, the new Lucina is the child of Lucina and Palutena.

Stunlocked - 8 years ago

Oh, I have read them all

hentaiaiai - 8 years ago

yes, and if you know anything about Awakening, Lucina came from a future of destruction and chaos and didnt have the best childhhod according to support conversations. so palutena decided to regress her and be her mother as she relived her life in sky world where time flows faster in comparison to everywhere else (for the purposes of my story at lest)

Yurilover - 8 years ago

Oh. So Chrom and Robin were Lucina's original parents before the "New Begining"?

Broniele97 - 4 years ago

Absolutely fantastic story! There is a sequel?

hentaiaiai - 7 years ago

hehe i might just do that, who knows, that sounds like a good idea that i had already done similarly with Palutena and Lucina in another story

DragonslayerFire55 - 7 years ago

Have you ever thought of making a sequel to this, like the "unbirthing" chapter?

Stunlocked - 8 years ago

Oh ok.

hentaiaiai - 8 years ago

if you look at the icon photo, im basing it off that artwork

Yurilover - 8 years ago

Oh. So Chrom and Robin were Lucina's original parents before the "New begining"?

hentaiaiai - 8 years ago

go to gelbooru and type palutena yuri into the search bar and it should be there, if not then it was removed

Yurilover - 8 years ago

Sexy yet cute little story.Can you give me a higher resolution of the thumbnail you've used? If you used someone else's art can you link it? Even if you can't do either of those, even a reply is appreciated.

hentaiaiai - 8 years ago

you made me cry not the bad way but because i did think of doing that with her growing up and regaining memories, but i just couldnt figure out how to convey it in the story, i was thinking that her first memory would be of Palutena telling her about her regaining her memories as she grew older

Uryx - 8 years ago

I liked it, the simplicity made it easy to read and easy to follow, and it had good focus on what was important to convey in the story.

That said, I found myself wanting more, not a continuation into later in their lives, but more detail, a greater exploration in the depth of their feelings for one another, a slower and more passionate love-making between the two full of sensuality and meaning, just more in general.

This isn't to discourage you at all, just a little bit of feedback that might help you become a better writer.

This isn't the critique part and it's probably best that you left it out, but I found my mind hooked on the idea of what it might have been like for Lucina to slowly, over time, regain the memories of a past life that, unlike her current presumably happy and comfortable life, was full of strife and heartbreak. Regaining somewhere in her teens the memory of battle after exhausting, heart-wrenching battle in which people died in the most gruesome of ways. Do you think she ever woke up crying, having dreamed about her past life, and went to Palutena's bed to sleep in the comfort of her "mother's" embrace?

Just something I was thinking almost the moment Palutena informed Lucina that she would regain her memories over time.

Karsap - 2 years ago

Will there be more?

Primal18 - 6 years ago

I hope you do

hentaiaiai - 6 years ago

was thinking about it heh

Primal18 - 6 years ago

This is pretty good you should do a story based on this pic.

Sharktooth - 7 years ago

I wish their was a p two

Adeleine123 - 5 years ago

What about a Story where Nana does some love whit Samus?

hentaiaiai - 5 years ago

maybe, i think she is a dominatrix incognito

Adeleine123 - 5 years ago

Hey i have an Idea of a history

Adeleine123 - 5 years ago

Isabelle?

hentaiaiai - 5 years ago

of course she is, who isnt~