Goldendevil21 - 1 year ago

Recommend you include an extra spacing between paragraphs to make the reading feel less cluttered.

Their were also a few grammar errors though that is mostly the fault of your beta reader.

MoonColva90 - 2 years ago

I hope you'll continue this.

MoonColva90 - 2 years ago

I hope you'll continue this.

MoonColva90 - 2 years ago

I hope you'll continue this.

patman35 - 2 years ago

The answer is.... yes....

TheCyberEmpire - 2 years ago

I wonder how much students is gonna fit inside Glynda's stomach. x3

MoonColva90 - 2 years ago

7 months, but I'm still holding out for more.

PrimeLvl37 - 1 year ago

I hope this series continues.

pridmore2 - 1 year ago

Are you gonna do more of this series

absolute - 2 years ago

But ignoring my *how will they change everything up* bit, i really believe that this can break the mold with vore.

absolute - 2 years ago

I have to say. This take on remnant is actually very cool. The world has been built beautifully, vore isnt just used as fap material but is ACTUALLY a plotpoint and world mechanic that has been fully explored. The protag isnt either stupid with how they go about surviving or incompetent. 10/10. But i am curious on how some of my characters could go about surviving here if they ended up here.

PrimeLvl37 - 2 years ago

Just noticed a few errors in this chapter. 1 of the big ones is when Ilia and Blake are having fun using Weiss.

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

Oh we're genderbending Roman too, cool!

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

Did you forget? She uses her scroll to "talk"

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

""Yes," Neo said"

Hey, she's mute, she can't say anything!

dragonvenom - 3 years ago

Its odd that Velvets name doesn't show up in this chapter despite the description.

patman35 - 3 years ago

Damn my bad

MoonColva90 - 3 years ago

Dont know if you noticed, but, the RWBY tag isnt on this.

MoonColva90 - 3 years ago

If it's already done, then will this series be a weekly thing?

patman35 - 3 years ago

Don't worry the second chapter is already done

MoonColva90 - 3 years ago

Kinda want this to be a series.

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

In the "original" universe, Ruby's "I don't know how much help they will be but I still have to save Yang! I won't stop untill I have saved my sister!" would've looked so rad with her holding her scythe and shit! And it probably would have activated her Silver Eyes (if there were any grimm any front of her

doomed - 3 years ago

I hope Jaune gets vore abilities.
I wanna watch him systematically kill all of them . And have neo eat ruby.

Flame14 - 3 years ago

Is there some sort of issue at the very end of the chapter?

Daniel14541 - 3 years ago

Looks like the last 100 or so words are a copy paste issue

doomed - 3 years ago

I hope jaune learns Vore. Then he can kill nora and the others

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

Pyrrha almost said the DIO line!
She said "well then approach all you like"

patman35 - 3 years ago

as long as the comissioner want's more it shall be done

Bobgodofallbobs - 3 years ago

Well there may be more to come

dragonvenom - 3 years ago

Geez i am hoping for a good ending to this

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

YES, FINALLY NEOPOLITAN SHOWS UP!!

doomed - 3 years ago

I give him a month before he breaks the antenna so they don’t reform him

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

Huntsman*

doomed - 3 years ago

It’s a great idea for him to have a teleporter .because then hed stay out of a tummy long enough to create a respawn that’s faster and available for everyone. Thus establishing himself as the greatest hunter in history

patman35 - 3 years ago

Don't make me have ideas.

Nextgen00 - 3 years ago

He'd somehow wind up teleporting either partially or fully into someone, or into a location where he would be immediately eaten.

Nextgen00 - 3 years ago

He'd somehow wind up teleporting either partially or fully into someone, or into a location where he would be immediately eaten.

doomed - 3 years ago

HMMM , perhaps the question i shouldve asked is , what are the depression rates and do people try to commit suicider. however you have somewhat answered those.

so its not that there are no suicide rates , but rather , they are too closley monitored to commit suicide. which leads me to believe that the depression rates must be extremely high. as if suicide is not an option, then that means that the people who are deemed prey or weak, dont even have an escape. so what is even the point for anyone.. its not even that the odds are stacked agaisnt them , it's that the entire world is stacked against them. so like what the point. it even seems that death by grimm is a better option than being eaten by a hunter/huntress. with the grimm you can at least attempt to get them to kill you first rather than eat you. or at least use the grimm as a distraction and then kill themselves. its pretty clear that its pointless. i would ask why they dont try and sacrifice themselves to people who care about them. however with how the majority of the people are , and with the mentality that the preds have, that would likely be a worse fate than death by grimm.

patman35 - 3 years ago

I mean... not really... the suicide rates for prey are almost non existent really. They get eaten before and are often constantly monitored so yeah it happens right? And Beacon is like... do you want to be eaten with or without learning to fight back. A one in a hundred chance of getting better but it's like better than nothing.

doomed - 3 years ago

oh i love what he did, its the semi perfect solution. taking advantage of preds not wanting to taste that is a wonderful idea. however that stil doesnt save him froma grimm , it doesnt save him from a huntress , and it wont save him from a random pred who doesnt care. all this did was extend his life.

and with the fact that people can take souls and keep them , there is even more reason for him to think suicide is a better option if he is cornered. think about it, he went through all that trouble to stay alive, if someone was to try and eat him regardless, he would feel hopeless.

what makes this more interesting is the fact that these preds can take souls . so you dont even get an afterlife. the prey should be constantly screaming , their families should be trying to get revenge but instead people are apathetic . which should further increase the rates of suicide.

C107galaxytachyon - 3 years ago

No comment on the arguable “reaslism” of Whitley’s conduct?

doomed - 3 years ago

: trigger warning :

I’m genuinely curious what are the suicide rates in this world .
Because I’m pretty sure most people would much rather kill themselves than be eaten by these preds . And since the society is based around devouring people and being cruel about it. I would think that a better option for people is poison rather than being burned alive and then trapped with the monster who killed you. Like it’s not even like they care about their prey either , so it’s like what’s the point of even trying if people already decided you can’t be useful . Especially for people who go to beacon . Also why do people even go to beacon , there’s no point in going there unless you are a highly skilled protégés , and even then , you still are in constant danger . I would think that the amount of students would decrease every year till no one is willing to take classes there ?

I’m sorry if these are dark and weird questions but they were the ones I’ve been thinking about since I started reading your story

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

This world's Yang is Joseph Joestar confirmed! (Plus she can vore people)

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

And (this isekai world's) Ruby being a super virgin also made me laugh

RasenGun37 - 2 years ago

Calling salt "white rocks" made me laugh

patman35 - 3 years ago

Soon.

Bobgodofallbobs - 3 years ago

Will we see coco in it

Arcanab - 3 years ago

Kinda want to see what happen next

Daniel14541 - 3 years ago

So did someone adopt this series?

VToons - 3 years ago

Awesome :)
Thank you ^^

TheBlindSalmon - 3 years ago

I think you accidentally posted this 3 times.

Daniel14541 - 3 years ago

Velvet suspects that Jaune is a part of Blake now but hasn't gotten confirmation.

Flame14 - 3 years ago

So wait, did Velvet really give Blake the go ahead to absorb Jaune, or is she just saying that and now Velvet is looking around for the boy without knowing he's already ass fat?

doomed - 3 years ago

Oooh that’s rough, I’m guessing she’s going to show all the times she ate people , even though they were nice people and did nothing wrong

Daniel14541 - 3 years ago

It appears that Blake is about to do something to Jaune that will cause him to change his opinion about her.

That something being showing Jaune every bad thing she has ever done.

doomed - 3 years ago

At the end , why was Blake sorry

Flame14 - 3 years ago

I’m personally just glad to see my favorite girl, Velvet be the predator I always knew she could be.

patman35 - 3 years ago

It's a com so you should see about two chapters a week!

mysteryman1626 - 3 years ago

I do hope to see more of this, its quite good.
Does anyone else feel likr Jaune is gonna "accedentally" eat velvet next ttime or is it just me?

patman35 - 3 years ago

It’s up in the air for now but maybe!

Daniel14541 - 3 years ago

Is this going to be co tinued normally or is the story ending here?

patman35 - 3 years ago

I am open for coms yes!

Bobgodofallbobs - 3 years ago

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